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Subject: Fruitless

Author:
Jessica

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Date Posted: 11:17:04 01/23/08 Wed

The darkest hours of morning are sleepless.
Cold on the left side,
Fevered by you on the right.

I can only hear the silence of the snowfall
backing your breaths,
which I count,
Straining to hear the labor
creep in,
vigilant
to scare off the drown
filling to your lungs
from within,
while Death plays
at a crossword
in the corner.
�What�s a nine letter
synonym for �in vain�?�

You stir at his chuckle,
or my sob.

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[> Subject: Re: Fruitless

Author:
Sasha
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Date Posted: 18:19:36 01/23/08 Wed

Quote:
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while Death plays
at a crossword
in the corner.
�What�s a nine letter
synonym for �in vain�?�

You stir at his chuckle,
or my sob.
____________________________

~ wow...what a haunting visual this is, Jess...

what a fabulous capture of this moment...
loving this a lot!!!! you rock!!!

*hugs*

Sash xx

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[> Subject: Re: Fruitless
Author: Paul [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 16:27:58 01/24/08 Thu Wow, Images of the night and that surreal feel that lingers. You capture it well, peace and love, Paul. [ Post a Reply to This Message ]

[> Subject: Re: Fruitless
Author: Arunansu [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 00:46:48 01/25/08 Fri Jessica, the piece is moving to say the least. My favourite lines are : "The darkest hours of morning are sleepless. Cold on the left side, Fevered by you on the right." The feeling is very deep, intense. Read it, time and again. Cheers. [ Post a Reply to This Message ]

[> Subject: Re: Fruitless
Author: Paul [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 17:52:56 01/26/08 Sat Jess, I just had to come back to this, it was calling me! Lol Stunning work that holds the reader. You are terrific, Peace and love, Paul [ Post a Reply to This Message ]

[> Subject: Re: Fruitless
Author: Jess [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 19:39:33 01/26/08 Sat Paul, Arunansu, a repeat read is the highest praise. I'm glad I stuck with you. Sasha, you're too sweet to me. Luv, Jess [ Post a Reply to This Message ]

[> Subject: Re: Fruitless
Author: Janel [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 20:49:47 01/26/08 Sat Very powerful write Jess, your imagery is awesome. Much enjoyed this. [ Post a Reply to This Message ]

[> Subject: Re: Fruitless
Author: andy [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 08:27:55 01/28/08 Mon Vivid comes to mind! A walk into the darkness often brings great light. Nice to see you are writing again. Like to visit your poetry Jessica! smiles, andy [ Post a Reply to This Message ]