| Subject: Re: shortened press release. v. 2 like garbage@ |
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Date Posted: 03:14:08 07/29/01 Sun
In reply to:
audrey
's message, "Re: shortened press release. v. 2 like garbage@" on 02:29:39 07/29/01 Sun
i took out all but one quote because i think it has to do with the personal, like relating thing. getting a real face, not just a little blurb even if it does just turn into a blurb. and, it gives them a little sound bite. just a niblet! the editor can cut out what they want, and they can add facts and statistics as they want with the addition sources to quote that you give them (note to editors. the thing i dont like about boston is the format. the our event highlights this: because to me, its trying to separate itself from the pack of parties and with our local papers, we dont really have to separate ourselves from them.
as far as the acronym, that parts questionable, yes. but i was afraid people wouldnt get it. :x
>what i liked about the boston press release is how it
>gives more background on RAINN in general and how it
>lists the highlights on the event in an actual list,
>which i think will grabs peoples attention. and that
>is also how it makes it unique to our event.
>i like this version, but i don't know if we need to
>include the part about the acronym. lol, i like my
>little quote, but do we need quotes? i think the most
>important part of this press release you wrote is the
>band part. i agree we should have more info about the
>bands, esp. joe 90's connections and fatm's only show
>in the US. yes. i like that. okay.. what else. i
>dunno. boston's and this one is actually pretty 'cept
>for the part about our background. is that really
>important to have? being a press release, i don't
>think the people reading it will care that much about
>US. you know? lol. i'm rambling, i'm sorry! i
>can't hold a thought.
>
>>the reason i dont like the boston one is because i
>>think it focuses too much on the general idea of the
>>parties and not enough about the specific one. the
>>reason why i care about the specific ones, besides the
>>fact that its ours, is thats what i think will
>>interest local papers, like the daily breeze. mo!
>>
>>
>>
>>In a message dated 07/23/2001 1:53:40 PM Pacific
>>Daylight Time, BeEnough writes:
>>
>><< SO CAL RAINN Event: Awareness and Hope
>> For Immediate Release
>>
>>
>> On August 24th, 2001, In Santa Monica's Quest Studio,
>>will be the first annual undertaking of the So Cal
>>RAINN Event Fundraiser. World and community conscious
>>people alike will gather to help raise money for
>>RAINN, the nation's only confidential, toll-free,
>>twenty-four hour hotline for survivors of rape, abuse
>>an incest (hence the R, A, and I in the acronym
>>RAINN.)
>>
>> The event will include such music acts as Joe 90 (as
>>heard on tour with the Counting Crows, Jethro Tull,
>>and on blah blah soundtrack) and Faith and the Muse in
>>their only U.S performance for the year. Guests will
>>be provided with dinner supplied by local catering
>>companies such as Sugar and Spice and 3 Brothers
>>Catering among local restaurants. Each gift will also
>>receive a gift bag and be automatically entered into a
>>raffle supplied br products ranging from SkinMarket to
>>Bumble and Bumble.
>>
>>
>> This event has been organized and shall be maintained
>>yearly by six ywenty-something individuals working for
>>a cause. Says Audrey Nieh, also an organizer of the
>>event, "We're hoping to garner some public attention
>>towards this cause. With crime going down, it's a
>>shame that there's still a woman out there being
>>assaulted once every two minutes." With over sixty
>>parties in thirty-four states and six countries, the
>>So Cal RAINN event is looking to be one of the
>biggest.
>>
>>
>> To help get involved, tickets can be purchased for
>>$50.00. Larger donations can be made by contacting the
>>coordinators at: SoCal RAINNEvent@aol.com or by
>>accessing them online at:
>>http://members.aol.com/socalrainnevent/ Those who
>>cannot attend the event are encouraged to donate
>>separately, or enter their raffle, concluding with a
>>grand prize of a donated Bumble and Bumble full-line
>>gift box, retailing at over $200.00, as well as other
>>prizes.
>>
>>
>> -END- note: the rest of this text is just info for
>>editors, its not part of the length of the pr.
>>
>> Note to editors
>>
>> Statistics on RAINN can be gathered from their site:
>>http://www.rainn.org or by contacting Valerie
>>Patterson, head of So Cal RAINN marketing at: (310)
>>308-8994. Photographs orfthe organizers can be
>>requested from Erin Russell at (310) 301-4285. >>
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