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Subject: Re: so she goes...

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Moonchild

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Date Posted: 17:21:50 09/02/01 Sun
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In reply to: AngelOfire 's message, "so she goes..." on 15:08:15 09/01/01 Sat

So full of emotion and I loved the imagery. Well written.

>so she goes
>
>alone she sits
>in her whirlpool of apprehension
>ripples of hopelessness slice her thoughts
>into shreds of anguish
>his face drowning beneath her
>
>with paralyzed limbs
>she can�t save the apparition he has become
>his dark eyes swirl into oblivion
>her curdling screams
>detonate her desolation
>
>the gloom that she wore
>smothers her
>muffles her whimpers
>anxious eyes searching, searching
>for a remnant of him
>a mere relic in her despondency
>
>clawing her own flesh
>gouging rivers into her soul
>begging him to be absorbed into her once again
>murky red waters
>vision blurred as she submerges
>inhaling memories of dejection
>
>filling her lungs with his discarded unholy water
>final immersion
>exhaling final words
>and he hears her
>and he reaches
>and she sees
>and she knows
>
>that she loved him only out of desperation
>so she goes�
>
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