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Date Posted: 16:36:40 03/23/03 Sun
Author: Tilly
Subject: Re: A writing critique
In reply to: Miss Cam 's message, "A writing critique" on 15:48:18 03/23/03 Sun

>Pverall effort - weak.

But funny as hell, though. Come on, you know that it's fun to watch her try. :)

>And really, I should never have adviced her to get a
>thesarus. Double shame on me. Ugh.

O_O Totally not. In fact I'd have to say that the thesaurus is possibly the worst thing someone can do to their writing.

On the other hand, Miss Cam, I'm so glad you did. I get ever so much more of a giggle from her when she talks about how something irates her. ^_^ I'm glad you told her to get one. Higher entertainment value, and all.


>But what our writer here still doesn't get about good
>writing is this - pace.

Oh, dude. Pace is the least of her problems. Lack of any kind of communication skills is the real biggie. ;)


>And she really need to lay off the commas and
>adjectives and drop the drama.

Never. Gonna. Happen.

>Then we can start
>talking about writing improvements and start on
>characterisation (it's quite weak. The villain looks
>much too comical and not all real, unless Tilly really
>is a cartoon. Are you, Tilly?

O_o Absolutely. I guess I figured that everyone knew that already. ;) I do have a black cape, and all.

LQ / Jenna / Inu / Kitiara / Stone Dragon / Yami Dragon / Wolfka / Felicity / (add any of her hundreds of stupid names here) is beyond help. She will never improve, and she will never learn. She's unteachable and unreachable.

Sad, when you look at it that way.

Tilly, living in fear of being "dipped." ^_~

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