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Date Posted: 21:31:15 05/05/02 Sun
Author: Patrick Lonergan
Subject: Patrick's Thoughts
In reply to: Patrick Lonergan 's message, "05/11/02 Sketch Submissions - input and suggestions requested" on 22:21:00 05/02/02 Thu

Celebrity Heaven - clearly not random celebrity name-dropping. Well written.

The Dogs - Not a bad premise, but doesn't quite get off the ground. Leaves me wanting more because I didn't achieve satisfaction in the first place. Could be resubmitted after a rewrite.

Shoplifting - Idea is good, but text is too incoherent for my taste.

Celebritol - Actually not bad, though it could use an Announcer tag line at the end.

Falwell's Follies - goes on kind of long. The Showtime mention was slightly funny, but the rest seems fairly cliched.

Merchandise - This drags on a bit, though it does get funny near the end when Tom Bosley starts to unravel. I think this could benefit from being shortened up somewhere in the middle.

Eminem - Funny treatment of Eminem, lots of enjoyment in that alone. Blake Edwards cameo may be unneeded, I think John wants to let people know where he's coming from with this parody.

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