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Date Posted: Tue, Apr 20 2004, 18:37:07
Author: Ayezur
Subject: Re: Godawful Nightmare Before Christmas
In reply to: Godgifu 's message, "Godawful Nightmare Before Christmas" on Tue, Apr 20 2004, 6:25:11

>Forgive me if I've already posted this -- I
>"rediscovered" this story by accident today and though
>I don't think I've shown it off here, I might be wrong.
>
>http://www.angelfire.com/biz2/nightmare1/death.html
>
>Short version: Part of a series in which Jack and
>Sally are married and have a son named Ezra, and have
>adopted Lock, Shock and Barrel. Shock looks like she
>might have been turned into a Sue. The story is that
>for little Ezra's second birthday, Jack gives him a
>sword as a present. Ezra ends up accidently getting
>killed by it. Sadness all around. Jack tries to kill
>himself with deadly nightshade. Sally gets mad and
>threatens to divorce him. Shock tries to set
>everything right. Sally goes back to live with Dr.
>Finklestein. The ghost of Jack's father makes several
>appearances. The story has a "happy" ending; not too
>happy, though, or the series wouldn't be able to
>continue.
>
>Here are some snippets:
>
>"Here you go, my boy," he said as he placed it in
>front of Ezra. "This family heirloom has been passed
>down through generation after generation of
>Skellingtons, each recieving it on their second
>birthday. The youngest child is to recieve it, so I
>guess that would be you. This used to be my most
>prized possession, but I must keep the tradition
>alive. I hope you like it."
>The lad ripped of the paper, revealing a large brown
>box. He opened it up, and was immediatley struck by
>sheer awe as soon as he saw what it was. His father
>pulled it out for him, showing them all what it was. A
>small sword, the perfect size for a child. He placed
>it in Ezra's open hands. "Take good care of it now. It
>means a lot to me that you do."
>The youngster nodded. "Me will, daddy. Me pwomise."
>
>Shock sat upon the curly hill with Malik, nervously
>drumming her fingers upon the ground. Her boyfirend
>had an arm around her shoulders, humming to her. He
>always did that whenever he knew that she was upset
>over something. And right now, it was pretty obvious
>what the matter was. He knew all about her fight with
>Jack, Ezra's death, and her squabble with Sally only
>last night. He stopped his humming, looking at her
>face. It was covered with a look of sadness, heavy
>black rings under her eyes. She hadn't slept too well
>lately. Taking his arm off her shoulders he moved so
>that he was knelt in front of her, holding her both
>her hands in his own. After a minute or two of simply
>staring at her he finally spoke. "Do you want to talk,
>my dear? Because I know there's something you're not
>telling me here."
>
>"Then we can pretend it never happened. Bye the way, I
>did take the throne after. Sally had to occupy it
>first but then we talked about it and I changed my
>mind. That's unless you want it back cause if you do
>I'll surely hand it over without a hassle." He was
>silent for a minute while he thought this over. "I
>really don't know if I should or not. At this point I
>really don't want to, but if I ever want to prove to
>Sally that I've changed I must."
>"You can't prove that you've changed unless you
>actually have, Jack," she reminded him. "Take things
>at your own pace. You know, eventually become the
>Pumpkin King again but set goals for yourself prior to
>reaching that level. Because we both know you're not
>in such great condition to do such a task right now,
>you need a bit of a break. It probably played a role
>in this whole suicide thing, eh?"
>"Yep," was his reply.
>
>Deep in her thinkings she never noticed a strange
>shadow approach her, nor hear the slight mechanical
>hum that went with it. She only turned around when her
>strange visitor spoke to her. "My my my, Sally.
>Whatever are you doing alone out in the cold like this
>without a jacket?"
>She lept up and spun to face the person, startled.
>"It's you," she said. "Dr. Finklestein!"
>"In the flesh." The evil scientist sat in his electric
>wheelchair, which he had created himself.
>"How are you, my dear?"
>By now she was just freaked out. This had been the
>first time he had really bothered with her for three
>years, since she had run away from him. "Okay, what
>the heck is going on here? Why don't you seem angry at
>me?"
>"It's Jewel, my wife. She taught me not to have any
>harsh feelings against you, and it's working."
>
>"Listen to me. Don't go doing this to yourself because
>I know the kind of things it will do to you. Don't
>ever give up, no matter what the problem is. Never."
>She shoved his hand away. "Why can't I? You've after
>attempted suicide for goodness sakes! Why shouldn't I
>go ahead and do the exact same thing?"
>"Oh, my darling. Never say anything like that again.
>If there's someone you shouldn't take as a role model,
>then that's me. Killing yourself won't do any good, I
>know that now. If anything ever happened to you,
>Sally, I don't know what what would happen to me. I'd
>simply be a lonely old skeleton, waiting for Death to
>come and knock upon his door. You keep me going, give
>me a reason to continue living in this wretched world.
>If it wasn't for you, my dear, I probably wouldn't
>even be here today."
>She sniffed. "You're right. What was I thinking? Here
>I am trying to help you and I'm having a nervous
>breakdown myself."
>
>_____
>
>Anyway... yeah. This is probably some of the worst
>characterizations I've seen with this cast -- Jack in
>particular is normally quite versatile and you can get
>away with a lot, but here... I don't know what she
>did, but it's not working.
>If I'm correct that Shock is a Sue, then the author is
>probably about 13 or 14, so this would be a bit more
>forgivable.

Iiiiiii remember this. It hurt me. On the inside.

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