>*a/n* just to give u a past check, Hermione and Draco
>were dating, but Hermione breaks up with Draco after
>he says cruel things to Hermione when he’s mad. She
>thinks hes back to mean old Draco.
<insert scream of pain here> I hate it when authors do that! That's what prologues are for, to set the scene! Gah! (come to think of it, if the prologue is also a songfic, I don't want to read it)
More *s and ~s up for adoption.
> “No Draco!! Its over! You’re just like
A snotty little self-obsessed brat? Then why did she date him? Oh wait, I forgot, some authors don't know what canon is.
>Its over! Don’t you get it? What do u
>want with a stupid mudblood like me anyways!”
Maybe he insulted her because she says "u" and "anyways". ;-p
>A silver chain layed in her musix box
*snerk* so few words, so many mistakes.
>“‘Mione I know your mad.
He knows her mad? does he know my mad? ;-p
(I know, this is an old joke - this was a long tiring day where I've been supposed to summarise a thing containing words such as "phallogocentry", "le sémiotique" and more, will shut up now, brain starting to shut down)
>But you’re my reason I changed. From mean old
>Draco, to me now.
Why do people always have to "convert" characters into good guys. Can't they just be mean guys and stay that way? Or at least keep a *bit* of snark?
> Hermione’s heart pounded as Draco got off the
>bed and got down on one knee. “Hermione will you marry
>me?” Hermione passed out on the bed.
*retches* how old are they supposed to be, anyway?
>[sighs] It's actually pretty hard to get that much
>Canon violation and OOC into so few words.
I doubt it very much. That's pretty much the standard for Draco-fangirl fic. I've seen several like this already. But then the author probably isn't very experienced, and she says it's her first.
For another frighteningly bad fic, look at her other story (and it's rated R). My eyes are already watering at the first 3 lines... <shudder>