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Subject: Re: Yo yo not a hobo


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Tracy Houghton
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Date Posted: 22:53:21 04/08/04 Thu
In reply to: Joey mankes 's message, "Yo yo not a hobo" on 15:33:30 04/07/04 Wed

(1) The story proposed centers around an insomniac college student and his life as he drifts in and out of reality. This is one of the most interesting and creative ideas I have heard for a television show. If it was on FOX right now, I would totally watch it.
(2) The general idea caught my attention from the beginning. It is creative, interesting and seems to have the potential to be both dramatic and funny. I love the details about each of his friends. More specific details about the realities of each characters personality, in contrast with the delusions Tristan has of them, would add more to the proposal.
(3) I was confused about the alternate reality that Tristan experiences. More detail would help this. Also, explaining how there will be a connection between what is happening in reality and what is happening in Tristan’s alternate reality will help clear things up.
(4) There were places where commas were used instead of periods.

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Re: Yo yo not a hobobrenda bloodsworth14:23:48 04/09/04 Fri


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