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Date Posted: 16:23:31 01/06/05 Thu
Author: Mary
Subject: Nell....(r)
In reply to: Nell 's message, "Valentine Challenge Story 1/1" on 09:13:43 01/06/05 Thu


I am certainly no beta reader. I'll make some suggestions after I look at this some more. But, my first impression:

Wow!!! And I love this in the opening paragraph:

The goal is to worm your way into the mark’s mind and rearrange enough so that they fuck themselves.

That is just great.



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[> [> [> The only thing that makes you a beta reader is willingness to beta! -- Nell, 05:28:31 01/07/05 Fri

In my experience - which isn't all that huge, btw - every beta spots something different. Some (like me) tend to concentrate on plot and characterization, pointing out only the truly gruesome and distracting style problems. Others are absolutely terrific at spottiing - and suggesting fixes - for irritating style tics of all sorts. My weakness for over long, cumbersome sentences for eample, or my penchant for providing adjectives in groups of three.

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