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If you are just testing the format of your story, indicate so and no one will comment.

Unfortunatley, the password can no longer be posted here. If you want to play, please e-mail Shanola at duelquest@hotmail.com and ask for the password. Or, if you'd rather, ask her to delete whatever post it is and she'll be happy to oblige.

Remember, the point is to offer constructive, positive feedback, not flames.


  • Non LFN Story -- ~delle, 18:32:51 03/03/03 Mon
    This is the first part of an anticipated 4 part story. Lord of the Rings.

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  • Beta reader needed... -- Swatkat, 03:21:24 03/12/03 Wed
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  • My Adventures in ... What? (warning, language, etc) -- Madison, 19:30:06 01/27/03 Mon
    It would be most helpful if someone could go over the first part of my story. I need help identifing inconsistencies, areas that are not clear, and general proofreading. Thanks heaps!!

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  • Shooting the Moon, Part Two on Storyboard 1 -- Claire Gabriel, 15:56:57 09/21/02 Sat
    This is for those of you who read Part One there in January.

    "Protections," a prequel to Shooting the Moon, was posted here on the Beta Board about a year ago.

    Enjoy.

    Claire Gabriel

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  • SOS! -- Sky Samuelle, 10:58:10 09/17/02 Tue
    Subject: SOS!
    Posted By: Sky Samuelle - Friend
    Posted At: (9/16/02 11:23:35 am)
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    Hi to everyone,
    I'm actually writing the AU fic '' Signs Of Permanece'' :
    Michael Samuelle is a sceptic private detective, and a player.
    Nikita Wolfe is an ex-FBI agent, with ESP abilities.
    They are partner in business and the best of friends, so she is struggling to strifle her feelings toward him, all while their associate Seymor Birkhoff is trying to move on from his past...

    This is more or less the summary, but the story is a bit more complex. My problem is that I 'm again without a proof reader and my writing will be unpostable without someone to check the grammar.
    If anyone wants help me, (please do!) , I'm desperately there.

    Thank you
    Sky

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  • Need a Beta Reader.... The Copy-Cat Conspiracy. -- Deedra, 13:23:45 06/13/02 Thu
    The Copy-Cat Conspiracy.

    by Deedra Nikita
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    Referenced; U.S. MILITARY ABBREVIATION AND ACRONYM LIST
    http://www.2-sir.com/TwinFalls/acronym6.html#C
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    In the tower, a soft contemporary melody surrounds Paul and Madeline as they share a Hallmark moment. Slightly tipsy on champagne after dancing cheek to cheek and bedding, they intimately settle back on the bed to relax.

    Unexpectedly, there's a knock on the door. Paul sits up and yells, "Who is it? Damn!" Paul looks at Madeline shaking his head, "Why?"

    As Madeline hustles to find her robe, she tries to calm Paul with a smile. "Calm down, Paul. It could be important."

    "Sir?" Walter loudly clears his throat, "It.... Its Walter. Sorry to interrupt you. George is at COMM threatening to blow Section if you don't show up soon."

    Paul yells again, "What the hell! Where's Michael?" Lowering his voice, "I'll never put him in charge again."

    Paul and Madeline scurry to dress as Paul continues to flame at Walter through the door, "Walter! Find Michael! Tell him to put George in containment. I'll be right out!"

    As Walter takes off to find Michael, Madeline and Paul are finished dressing when suddenly the air vent cover falls to the floor and a sniper begins to assassinate them. Paul is hit first, and falls to the floor as his eyes connect with Madeline, who is reaching for a gun from a near by drawer. Shot in the back, she falls slowly to the floor next to the bed. Pausing for a moment, the sniper, looks at Paul and Madeline then runs out the door.

    Meanwhile, Walter has found Michael on a lower level around data central and proceeds to fill him in as they walk back to Michael's office. As Michael takes a seat at his desk, he glances at Nikita who is sitting on his desk flipping his lamp on and off. He can't help but notice the way her skirt is kinda hiked up on her leg. He sighs, looking back at Walter, "Go to Seymore and tell him to pull up a PC-34 on the west wing terminal."

    As Walter takes off to COMM, Michael notices a masked man with a gun in black pants and shirt descending from the tower stairs towards the exit terminal. Michael orders Nikita, "Call medical and have them meet us in the tower."

    As alarms go off, everyone in section is running around in chaos. Michael calmly gets a gun from his desk then embarks for the tower. Intercepting two operatives on his way, he instructs them to find a man in black shirt and pants around the exit terminal. Nikita calls the infirmary then heads for the tower.

    The tower door is slightly open when Michael arrives. Without expression, he slowly pushes the door open the rest of the way with the end of the gun which reveals Operation's bleeding body at the foot of the bed. Checking the room for hostiles first, Michael calmly moves to Operation's side then kneels to take his vital signs. Before he can determine whether Paul is alive, the med-techs arrive and Michael moves aside.

    As Nikita enters the door way, her eyes meet with Michael's. Michael walks to the intercom to buzz Seymore, "Seymore here!"

    Michael replies, "Seymore, turn the alarms off then have George put in detainment." Seymore reluctantly replies, "Ah.., he is right here." George takes the COMM., "What the hell are you...." George is cut short as his two body guards fall to the floor.

    "Seymore have the ops take George to containment." Michael leaves the room with Nikita trailing his heals.

    As Michael and Nikita arrive at containment, George is already strapped in the chair. Michael walks around the room a couple of times as Nikita stands in support.

    Nikita addresses George first, "George, I thought Operations disposed of you?"

    George replies, "What? Obviously naut!" Nikita looks and Michael.

    Michael supports Nikita's inquiry, "The question is, what to do with you now? You are a Red Cell trader."

    George defends himself, "What are you talking about? Seriously. Where is Operations?"

    As Michael continues to interrogate George, Nikita slips out to check on Operations and Madeline. When Nikita enters the infirmary, she sees both Operations and Madeline being fussed over. She interjects, "How are they?"

    The chief physician replies, "Their wounds are clean. I think they'll live."

    Nikita is joined by Walter then Seymore as the chief physician steps away. "What's the prognosis?" Walter asks visibly concerned.

    "It's not good, she replies staring into the infirmary, but the doctor thinks they'll live."

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  • um... I think we need to clarify "Beta Reader" -- ~delle, 19:09:40 06/19/02 Wed
    Beta Readers read your rough draft and make suggestions. But it's YOUR story, your voice, your vision. I certainly wouldn't want to "take over" your story by rewriting it. Not to mention that with the kind of convoluted plot you're hinting at, it's (frankly) impossible to rewrite something when one doesn't know where the plot is going!

    But writing is very individual. One of my good friends writes in a strictly linear form. She really doesn't rewrite because she goes over and over a section until it's perfect before moving on. Me, I write in chunks, jumping all over the projected plot line and then try to put it all together. Obviously neither one of is "right" and neither is "wrong". It's all a matter of what works for YOU as a writer.

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  • Where is the POV or Personal Character Profile reference page? -- Deedra, 13:58:30 06/17/02 Mon
    Hello,

    Where is the POV or Personal Character Profile reference page for all operatives? And/Or the operatives psych profiles.

    You know like;
    Nikita likes sunglasses, protects the innocent and has a strong will to live...
    Mickael doesn't talk much and plays a musical instrument...
    Birkoff plays video games...
    Jason is cocky, a wolf...
    Madeline likes flowers...
    Paul drinks alot of coffee...

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  • To the Beta Reader.... -- Deedra, 12:54:58 06/17/02 Mon
    Hello,

    Do the Beta Readers charge money?

    Who here is a BR's?
    Or is there software that works as well as a person?

    Where is the best reference page for writing styles?
    Or which style is most preferable?

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  • Ummm ... was the LFN 'zine ever published this last winter? I missed seeing it somehow ... -- Cygnet, 22:16:20 05/08/02 Wed
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  • this is just a test -- sk, 11:46:58 04/22/02 Mon
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  • Post-508 fanfic novel -- Claire Gabriel, 22:13:45 12/08/01 Sat
    Last summer, I posted a story here about Nikita's father. I've just posted its sequel--a novel-length story about Nikita and Michael--on my web page. SHOOTING THE MOON is way too long for a detailed critique from the Beta Board; nobody would have the time. So I asked a few friends to beta it privately, and then posted it for recreational reading. I thought you folks might like to take a look. If so, go to

    http://ourworld.compuserve.com/homepages/cgadziko/StM01.html

    Some comments from beta readers and listsibs:

    "What a tale.... Reveled in the total knowing, the small intimate touches (I mean touches you put in, not the physical touching they did) which had nothing to do with sex, just deep certain knowing of the other."

    "All I can say, folks, is that it's a wonderful way to spend an
    afternoon. Eases my addict's cravings for new LFN, both emotionally and intellectually."

    "Two days later and I can't get this story out of my head. I haven't wanted to read post-508 fics for fear that they wouldn't live up to the expectations I had for a series-wrap up fic, but yours was excellent. :)"


    Enjoy.

    Claire Gabriel

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  • Looking for a Beat reader -- MichelleF, 20:47:12 03/01/02 Fri
    Hi,

    As you can see I'm looking for a Beta reader. Rita use to be mines but do to personal reasons she could longer do the job. At her reqest she asked me to finish my story. The story that I'm currently working on is the sequel to 'To Have And To Hold.' If anyone is interested please e-mail me. If there are any questions please feel free to ask. I would suggest you ask Rita as well, but I don't want to bother her with that. I'll have to ask her to see if its okay. My only request is if you hadn't read 'To Have And To Hold' to please do so. I feel that it will give you an idea at where I'm heading once you start reading my ruff drafts of the sequel. Rita and I were editing the Prologue, before she told me that she could no longer be my Beta reader. Other than that I'm still working on what I have now.

    Thanks to the person who decides to take on this project. I hope we develop a genuine working relationship as I did with Rita. I learned a lot from her and I'm looking forward to continuing with this story.

    MichellF

    Here's the addy to my story: http://www.thesplitpersonality.net/lfn/writers/stories/michelleF.htm

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  • Resources for new writers? -- JayBee, 13:12:31 01/17/02 Thu
    Hello everyone! I've recently taken up the fanfic writing hobby and have found it thoroughly enjoyable. But now that I'm hooked on it, I would actually like to work on improving my skills to the point where I'm more satisfied with what I come up with. I know that a major part of that will come from simply continuing to write and from listening to (and learning from) feedback. However, I would also like to explore other sources of information. I was wondering if any of you more experienced authors might have recommendations for good books on writing technique -- not just on grammar and usage, but on how to craft a good story. I would love to read something like that, but have no clue as to the quality of what's out there.

    Thanks in advance--
    JayBee

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  • Need a beta reader here please -- lafemme, 13:32:31 11/02/01 Fri
    Ok, here goes . . .

    I used to have a site at ACMECity and well now it's gone. This is luckily one of my stories that didn't get lost. So, I need two things:

    someone to polite find ALL the typos,grammar and such (don't think there are too many but you never know)

    and someone to bounce ideas off of to make the story go forward

    and someone to keep the character of Nat from being invaded by the spirit of Mary Sue

    thanks and happy reading

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  • Fanfic -- Selena, 04:54:15 11/02/01 Fri
    Hello! I wrote a fic, but I'm not sure that I translated right. I'm Russian, so I translated from Russia into English. And I wanna ask you to help me with that.
    But I don't completely understand what I shall do. I should post my fic here or do something else? Help me, please.

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  • Seeing the Invisible -- Shanola, 22:40:28 09/23/01 Sun
    Announcing that Seeing the Invisible, the zine for La Femme Nikita fanfiction, is now accepting story submissions.

    But what IS a zine, you may ask? In the years before the Internet, and long before storyboards, fanfiction was collected at fan conventions and through the mail, then printed in a 'magazine' format and sent out to those interested in reading it. Zine's have been in fandoms since fandoms were created and they are still going strong.

    Seeing the Invisible is looking to create a zine of well-written, slightly twisted stories set in the La Femme Nikita universe. Submission deadline is January 31, 2002. Please visit our site, Seeing the Invisible for more information on how to submit. We are also looking for La Femme Nikita Art. So if you have a pencil drawing, or a collage, or banner you'd like to submit, we'd like to see it.

    Now, get out there and get writing!*g*

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  • AU Untitled 1 -- Esme, 15:40:44 08/22/01 Wed
    Okay here is the revised first part. RL is back with a vengence. Thank you for taking the time out to help a girl out. =)

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  • Briefing in Five Minutes: Update -- Nestra, 14:02:48 08/06/01 Mon
    Yes, it's true. An actual update at Briefing in Five Minutes. The current column is "Commas, Possessives, and Plurals, Oh, My!". Drop on by and give us a read.

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  • On the Drawing Board..... -- codename: Tabitha, 18:09:15 08/12/01 Sun
    Hi,

    I really need your take on this guys. Is this worth working on???? Thanks for your help.

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  • House pictures for story -- Schnee, 16:46:16 07/29/01 Sun
    Just posting some pics in reply as I try to figure out which is the appropriate house. LOL. Just ignore...hehehehe. *g*

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  • Searching for a Beta -- codename: Tabitha, 00:50:27 08/02/01 Thu
    Hi all I am searching for someone that would be willing to act as a beta for me. I would post it here and i still might except I don't like to post raw material period.

    Thanks for the help.

    codename: Tabitha

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  • Okay... -- Esme, 22:21:07 07/31/01 Tue
    I'm going to post my new story here because I desperatly need some feed back. =) I'm totally new at this writing thing and all comments are so welcome. i will be osting it in parts because I am rewriting some of it and working on the ending. I hope I am in the right place if not how embarassing 8)

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