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Date Posted: 19:22:37 06/23/05 Thu
Author: Shanola
Subject: Re: Rewrite of Chapter 3
In reply to: Diane 's message, "Rewrite of Chapter 3" on 12:27:47 06/04/05 Sat

This looks okay.

One small thing: You may want to replace the word Pepsi with something more generic, like soda.

As for rewriting Chapter 5 and having trouble because you don't know what you can sacrifice...be brave and chop it all to heck! Sometimes, when we chop the things we *think* we need, the story becomes stronger.

It's hard. Geez, don't I know it!LOL Recently, I chopped the entire ending off a piece and rewrote it. In the end, I only used about two lines from the original. But the story worked much, much better.

Besides, there is always the paste button! Paste the pieces in a Save file for security if you need to, but don't be afraid to chop!

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[> [> [> Re: Rewrite of Chapter 3 -- Diane, 17:48:35 07/01/05 Fri

I'll take yet ANOTHER look at Ch 5; it's been awhile since I've read it--maybe a new angle will mysteriously appear.

As to the Pepsi thing, I'm a confirmed Pepsiholic, and Pepsi is kind of my 'mark' in all my stories, both archived and outlined. I have Michael and Adam visit Dairy Queen simply because they serve Pepsi there!

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