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Subject: Cologne

Author:
Arunansu

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Date Posted: 04:07:36 01/29/08 Tue

Cluster of roses
on the windowsill,

draped with a babyish morning.

Murky sky,
curtains of downpour,
added to their sweet languor.

Caressing a canvas,
brushes uttered softly,
feed them in the gentle spray

I kept my windows stretched out,

little ones
slept unperturbed;
velvety lips
curved in bliss.

Dreamy odor painted
fresh colours.

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[> Subject: Re: Cologne
Author: darkerside of light [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 07:42:48 01/29/08 Tue Brilliant JUST BRIILIANT DSL [ Post a Reply to This Message ]

[> Subject: Re: Cologne
Author: andy [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 14:05:48 01/29/08 Tue I enjoy how you take a subject and peel it open slowly. One other thing I would like to mention is that a real nice thing for any poet to work on is to introduce senses into their poetry. Here you use the sense of smell wonderfully. It layers poetry and invites the reader into the poem. Enjoyed Much! thanks, andy [ Post a Reply to This Message ]

[> Subject: Re: Cologne

Author:
Sasha
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Date Posted: 14:37:32 01/29/08 Tue

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little ones
slept unperturbed;
velvety lips
curved in bliss.

Dreamy odor painted
fresh colours.
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~ Arun, I have to say that you are a joy to read, my friend

this poem is just gorgeous, I love the way you capture
ordinary things in the most extraordinary way....loving this!!!

*hugs*

Sash xx

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[> Subject: Re: Cologne
Author: Arunansu [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 20:58:33 01/29/08 Tue Dear All, I just love your praises! In fact, it is partly true that I write to get such praises! Cheers. [ Post a Reply to This Message ]

[> Subject: Re: Cologne
Author: Max Hardy [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 00:27:22 01/30/08 Wed Hello Arunansu A whistful glimpse into a moment painted with emotive hues. Love the gentleness of the petals, the rainfall, infact all of your wonderful words. Max [ Post a Reply to This Message ]