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Subject: Beginning of a story


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C.C.
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Date Posted: 22:04:11 02/25/03 Tue

OOC: I got an idea for a story a while ago, and I'd like to know if it's any good at all. Could you guys appraise this for me? I'm rather new at serious stories...

"Hello? Can I come in, I think it's going to storm soon!"
Nightbloom looked up from her sobs with a start. She had thought no one knew of her hiding place. "Depends on who you are," came her half-choked voice. "If you're anyone I know, then no. Go away before I have to kill you."
The otter outside the door winced, and spoke again with a nervous tone. "Well, I don't think we know each other but I've seen you coming and going from the banks here occasionaly. You looked very lonely."
"Tell me who you are!" Nightbloom demanded.
"Er...I'm called Sarzha. I'm from the village across the stream...and it's going to start raining any second now!"
Well, he doesn't sound dangerous. I may as well. He's seen me before he says...and how did he know this tree was hollow? Curiosity overcame the maiden, and she wiped away her forgotten tears to let the stranger in. Thunder rolled in the distance and water began to fall from the sky.

Questions about the characters ans such and suggestions for plotline are welcome, I'm still trying to develope the story. Criticism is welcome, and thanks!

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I think thats very good! (NT)Rylee00:56:56 02/26/03 Wed
Thank you! But now I keep reading it and don't like it very much...such seems to always be the way with my "serious" stories! *sigh* LOL (NT)C.C.18:35:40 02/27/03 Thu
I like it!!! (NT)SP05:23:42 03/01/03 Sat
*pumps arm* Woohoo! Maybe I'm not such a bad writer after all...now I'll go write some more! I'll post another portion when I polish it off. (NT)C.C.19:36:27 03/02/03 Sun


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