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Date Posted: 18:28:39 04/20/05 Wed
Author: Shanola
Subject: Re: Chapter 5 - Read this one intead, please
In reply to: Diane 's message, "Chapter 5 - Read this one intead, please" on 18:10:59 04/16/05 Sat

Okay, I still have issues with the fact that Michael is being so open with a six year old, son or not. Obviously, you are holding firm to that scene and unwilling to change the basic premise.

We shall have to agree to disagree on this.

I think I need to read a few more chapters before I can comment further. I need to see more of the story structure. I'm not sure where you are going with this and I think I need to.

If that's a problem, let me know and I'll back away and let someone else beta for you. =P

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[> [> [> [> Re: Chapter 5 - Read this one intead, please -- Diane, 18:48:48 04/22/05 Fri

I know you don't like it, but it means a lot to me. I did some major rewrites to both chapters 3 and 5 (mostly 5); cutting a lot out and trying to let Adam lead some of the conversation. Is Ch 3 at least a bit more palatable than it was?
I'll post the next four chapters. BTW, I *loathe* ch 6, but I don't how to fix it. It sucks, so feel free to slice and dice.:)

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[> [> [> [> [> Okay. Please give me a few days, as the weekends are rather busy for me. -- Shanola, 07:22:11 04/23/05 Sat

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