I like it; the subject is good, and lately, I haven't been able to think of any good ones. x_x A bit on constructive criticsm. If you don't like it, don't look inside the message. **text** -- The Fire Side

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Subject: I like it; the subject is good, and lately, I haven't been able to think of any good ones. x_x A bit on constructive criticsm. If you don't like it, don't look inside the message. **text**

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Date Posted: 18:53:00 11/19/02 Tue
In reply to: Willow 's message, "I wrote this a fortnight ago. I guess i've kinda broke the laws but I AM soory." on 19:56:39 11/18/02 Mon

1. One or two of your stanzas have lines that don't exactly flow. Your words are great, but the length varity of some of your lines make it a bit harder to flow with the rhythm.
2. This one's a bit more of an opinion, but personally, I think the last stanza is a bit of a stereotype. Some goodbeasts are ruthless murderers, too. But of course, this is purely editorial, so you can ignore this one. ^^;;

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