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Subject: The Crystal of Maronie Author: Jadestar Iceblade [ Next Thread | Previous Thread | Next Message | Previous Message ] Date Posted: 20:25:20 10/01/03 Wed A wolf howls. I shudder and pull my chair closer to the fire. My attention returns to my embroidery- which is almost as frightening as the howl. It is a picture of the sikuri- the Wolfmoon spirits. The howl comes again. My chair inches forwards. "Oh, for heavens sakes, girl!" My father stands up and shouts. "Stop cringing over a wolf!" His face is red, and I know he's disappointed in me. I'm such a coward. Like him and the rest of the village. I know my mother wasn't. Father stomps off. He wants me to be more like her, not like the rest. I wish I could. My face burns. I look down at my embroidery. A black siku snarls against a background of dirty white. His red mouth is open. I look away, around the cozy common room. Stuffed armchairs, small tables, doilies, bright colors. Safety. The bleak winter world is shut out. The fire crackles. I fall asleep, the heat comfortable on my face and arms. I dream. A raging inferno is all about me. I dream. I wake. Am I still dreaming? I scream. The fire swirls around me. Orange and white heat. I whirl seeking escape desperately. To be continued... but only if you want it. I promise it gets better later. [ Next Thread | Previous Thread | Next Message | Previous Message ]

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Subject Author Date It's good so far. I'd like to see what you do with the rest of the story. (NT) Freeda 17:50:26 10/03/03 Fri I'll try to do more on Monday. (NT) JI 14:42:57 10/04/03 Sat bump (NT) The Strange Bumpoof 12:41:44 10/05/03 Sun i like your tory, but whatz up wit mister Bump beaztea? (NT) Dusty the confused? 12:50:35 10/05/03 Sun PART TWO and please don't feel shy about comments. They're very nice, yes indeed, precioussssssssssss *launches into a horrible imitation of Gollum* Jadestar Iceblade 18:48:05 10/07/03 Tue Uggg...Let's try a little cheerier, shall we? It's well written tho (NT) -- Whiteye, 21:58:40 10/07/03 Tue I never meant it to be too cheerful. It's supposed to be kind of like LOTR, The Two Princesses of Bamarre, and something else I can't remember right now. But if you and anyone else really don't like it, I will allow it to go to the archives and endeavor to think of a more cheerful theme. (NT) Jadestar Iceblade 19:07:31 10/08/03 Wed It's very well written, but I think you could easily develope it into something a little less dark, if you know what I mean. You have talent, Jadestar! Use it. (NT) -- Whiteye, 19:27:41 10/08/03 Wed I think what you should concentrate more in is trying to make the storyline a bit clearer it is very well written but I don't really understand it very well. Also try and bring a bit of humour and happiness into it. (NT) Freeda 12:24:21 10/11/03 Sat *gasps suddenly* Me just weawized, me is joined as a dibbun, not as a gwowedbeast so me guesses me is a dibbun. Me is witin' dis stowy fow school, so me can't weawy change it now because me is aweady weawy faw awong at school. But me thinks me will stawt a new stowy sometime. (NT) Jade da likkle dibbun 13:39:42 10/11/03 Sat