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Date Posted: 02:27:44 06/12/01 Tue
Author: jess-lane
Subject: i thought i was taking a new approach, but then i split my long lines into seperate stanzas- oh well... i think its different for my style - "slant rhyme"

I'm sitting barefoot
and bare souled
stringing myself out for you
letting my scent linger over your head
trying to somehow infuse my image in your mind
without stimulating your eyes.

All the hours I took
setting up poles
jumping over just a few
to make the right impression til its red-
i should try to treat my apprehensions without rhyme
without stimulating use of lies.

Silly me, the fool
overshot my goal
i've been strung out to lose
can't make my face fit your mold til i'm dead
rubbing my features away till i'm gone- i won't find
strength for another try.

and all i'm looking for right now are the opportunities to have problems with you later

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"trying to somehow infuse my image in your mind without stimulating your eyes"..love that "Silly me, the fool." .. and the last line. Nice work (NT) -- Hobbes, 03:04:17 06/12/01 Tue
love all the above parts and also "rubbing my features away till I'm gone- i won't find/strength for another try"....inspirational (NT) -- ~~Lauren, 00:27:53 06/13/01 Wed
jesus christmas, i just wrote this whole long great response, and then the idiot i am hit clear instead of send. go fig. well, click me anyway. -- Jessica!, 21:53:51 06/13/01 Wed

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