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Date Posted: 15:00:51 06/18/02 Tue
Author: Deedra
Subject: The Copy-Cat Conspiracy. Part 5
In reply to: Deedra 's message, "Need a Beta Reader.... The Copy-Cat Conspiracy." on 13:23:45 06/13/02 Thu

Part 5

Meanwhile, Michael is arguing with Paul in the infirmary.

"Michael, take me to George. "

"No! You're not well enough."

"The physician said it was okay." Paul huffs.

Michael turns to the chief physician for confirmation. Who nods his head and waves them on. Michael and Paul arrive at George's cell to find George enraged for the way he has been treated.

"Paul, you let me out of the this damn chair; right now!"

"I thought I canceled you? George."

"What are you talking about? I been in deep cover for the last 9 months."

Paul moves towards the door.

"I'm not convinced you are who you say you are, just yet. You will stay here for a while until I get some answers."

As Paul exits, he glances back to see George ranting and raving. Then door shuts and locks. Paul pauses as George continues boasting and smiles then he continues on to the infirmary to speak to Madeline.

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[> [> Comments (r) -- Nestra, 08:29:10 06/20/02 Thu

"The physician said it was okay." Paul huffs.

Given that Operations is very strong-willed, I don't think that he'd resort to this kind of argument with Michael. It sort of turns him into a petulant child. At least that's the impression that I get.

Michael turns to the chief physician for confirmation. Who nods his head and waves them on.

This should be one sentence.

"What are you talking about? I been in deep cover for the last 9 months."

I've been in deep cover...

Then door shuts and locks.

The door shuts and locks itself?

Paul pauses as George continues boasting and smiles

George boasts and smiles? I know that's not what you mean, but without the correct punctuation, it's unclear.

then he continues on to the infirmary to speak to Madeline.

Wasn't Operations wounded worse than Madeline? Why is she still confined to the infirmary?

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[> [> [> Re: Comments (r) / Just wonderful. Working on it. Thanks again. -- Deedra, 13:50:04 06/20/02 Thu

Hello,

It's coming right alone.:-]

God bless,
Deedra

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