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Date Posted: 12:34:35 07/30/05 Sat
Author: Justin Kaplowitz
Subject: Stuck on a sketch, need help...

OK, folks. I've never asked for help before, but Most writers need help from other writers, and this is no exception. It's one of those "It sounded great at the time" kind of ideas.

I have a story of a Detective and his Rookie cop attempting to book a perp for killing a hooker. But in the middle of the thing, the Rookie screwed up the Miranda Warning--I.e. The part where "Anything you say can and will be used against you in a court of law"--The perp blurts out that He did it, but the rookie lets the guy go because he thinks the "Used against you..." Part means to listen to the opposite of what the Perp says. That much-- plus some back-and-forth between the cop and the Detective--is all I have, I can only strech out the idea for so many lines. and I have sort of an ending, but without anything in the middle, it's all but worthless.

Can anyone help me from turning this sketch into a one-joke wonder? I'm open to any suggestions, please refer to the e-mail address if you have anything to pitch (I'll give co-credit to the best idea/s.). Or if you think there's nothing to salvage. Either way, I could use a hand.

Just be sure the subject of your pitch says "Line Pitch", 'cause I have a lot of junk mail, and I want to tell the writers apart from the ads for Penis Pills, LOL.

J.K.---

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