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Date Posted: 03:15:17 02/10/05 Thu
Author: CCS
Subject: The Lost Art of Writing a Review (2)

OK, I figured out what was messing up my table for "Something's Different All Right...", so here's the correct version, and reviews for the sketches on up to WU.

<center>Something's Different All Right...
by Jeremy Barr</center>

<center><TABLE WIDTH="600" BORDER="3" CELLSPACING="0" CELLPADDING="2" BGCOLOR="A0B0A0" BORDERCOLOR="4D4D88">
<TH colspan="2">Difficulty</TH><TH colspan="2">Humiliation</TH><TR><TD WIDTH="15" BGCOLOR="4D4D88"><center>5</center></td><td width="285" BGCOLOR="B0B0D0"> .</td><TD WIDTH="30" BGCOLOR="4D4D88"><center>10</center></td><td width="270" BGCOLOR="B0B0D0"> .</td></tr></table></center>

<center>English Class
by Wes Zack and Scott Rowan</center>

Oh the irony, Paris Hilton as a school teacher. I gotta ask, who stares at Paris Hilton's breasts? She's not really endowed there... she's built more for the eyes of the leg men. There were two main themes here, the racial and the sexual. At first glance, the sexual doesn't really add too much to this sketch; it's presence is more like a padded bra, helping fill the piece out. It's kind of silly in a way because if things go well, that bra will be coming off, and the deception exposed. I'm mixing my metaphors again. By a person experienced in saying things funny, this could be a good basis for a sketch, but.... Paris is cast as the school teacher and I think moreso than the previous sketches, she would be completely outclasses by this material. It's short so she won't get lost, but she just won't be able to pull off the accents to make the dogs funny. Also, she learns her lesson in the end, making this slightly less humiliating of a sketch for her.

<center><TABLE WIDTH="600" BORDER="3" CELLSPACING="0" CELLPADDING="2" BGCOLOR="A0B0A0" BORDERCOLOR="4D4D88">
<TH colspan="2">Difficulty</TH><TH colspan="2">Humiliation</TH><TR><TD WIDTH="165" BGCOLOR="4D4D88"><center>55</center></td><td width="135" BGCOLOR="B0B0D0"> .</td><TD WIDTH="60" BGCOLOR="4D4D88"><center>20</center></td><td BGCOLOR="B0B0D0"> .</td></tr></table></center>

<center>Be Careful What You "Wish" For
by DRG4</center>

Another quick sketch, this centers on the universal pasttime of conning stuff from last wish charities. The sketch flows and moves along quickly. If there's one thing I'd change about the sketch, it's Paris's willingness to do pretty much anything. I think it would enhance the comic release of her finally understanding the offer of sex and leaping at that if earlier G-rated activities were balked at, in a haughty bitch way. For example, instead of "You want to jump on the bed together?" perhaps something like "Jump on the bed? Not on that cheap mattress." The sketch ends quite well, delivering its comic punch rapidly. This sketch does the best on my meters so far, as it's a simple role and fairly offensive to Paris.

<center><TABLE WIDTH="600" BORDER="3" CELLSPACING="0" CELLPADDING="2" BGCOLOR="A0B0A0" BORDERCOLOR="4D4D88">
<TH colspan="2">Difficulty</TH><TH colspan="2">Humiliation</TH><TR><TD WIDTH="30" BGCOLOR="4D4D88"><center>10</center></td><td width="270" BGCOLOR="B0B0D0"> .</td><TD WIDTH="225" BGCOLOR="4D4D88"><center>75</center></td><td BGCOLOR="B0B0D0"> .</td></tr></table></center>

<center>Moon Time Show
by Cash Car Star</center>

This sketch was mine own, so there's not too much I can say about it that I didn't already post in "Quick and to the Pointless." There's no Paris involved so we would get to enjoy a sketch without her while she would get to enjoy a pineapple martini or whatever kind of alcohol it is that she drinks.

<center><TABLE WIDTH="600" BORDER="3" CELLSPACING="0" CELLPADDING="2" BGCOLOR="A0B0A0" BORDERCOLOR="4D4D88">
<TH colspan="2">Difficulty</TH><TH colspan="2">Humiliation</TH><TR><TD WIDTH="0" BGCOLOR="4D4D88"><center></center></td><td width="300" BGCOLOR="B0B0D0"><center>Wooo, no Paris!</center></td><TD WIDTH="0" BGCOLOR="4D4D88"><center></center></td><td width="300" BGCOLOR="B0B0D0"><center>Wooo, no Paris!</center></td></tr></table></center>

<center>Good Cop Bad Cop
by Jason Dignard</center>

Two sketches in a row with no Paris! I bet she's knocking them pineapple martinis back like crazy. This is a classicly styled sketch here. It takes one character basis: Lenny's too nice a guy to play bad cop, and runs with it the whole sketch. This has its advantages and its drawbacks. The dialogue's good enough so that when it doesn't carry as a comedy piece, it carries as a slightly interesting drama. Unfortunately, there's no real laughs until Lenny slams the phone book the first time, the mitigating advantage here is that it holds off the reveal of what's funny about this scene while tension builds. The tone is good, I think you just need to thread in a few more sources of humor. Perhaps some stronger straight man lines for Chris would fit the bill. The sketch closes well, although I think the ending would be funnier if the closing comment were something other than a simple scream.

<center><TABLE WIDTH="600" BORDER="3" CELLSPACING="0" CELLPADDING="2" BGCOLOR="A0B0A0" BORDERCOLOR="4D4D88">
<TH colspan="2">Difficulty</TH><TH colspan="2">Humiliation</TH><TR><TD WIDTH="0" BGCOLOR="4D4D88"><center></center></td><td width="300" BGCOLOR="B0B0D0"><center>Wooo, no Paris!</center></td><TD WIDTH="0" BGCOLOR="4D4D88"><center></center></td><td width="300" BGCOLOR="B0B0D0"><center>Wooo, no Paris!</center></td></tr></table></center>

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Re: The Lost Art of Writing a Review (3) -- CCS, 03:39:00 02/11/05 Fri