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Date Posted: 15:25:19 06/03/04 Thu
Author: nobody
Subject: Re: Off With a Bang... More of a Whimper
In reply to: Jim Bevan 's message, "Off With a Bang... More of a Whimper" on 19:41:47 06/02/04 Wed

Keeping the CO short is great. I agree that the dialogue could be worked on. It comes off as trivial, as a reader there's not a reaction to want to be involved with and connect with the scene. And it is my liege...I hate when the spell check fails me. The canon has been done and while it is still a treasured item here it needs to be reprised in new fashions. Good work on your first skit, but there's definite room for improvement. Glad to have you here, I encourage you to keep writing.

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