Secretive Review II -- Saturday Night You Bull Sessions

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Date Posted: 18:16:51 05/15/05 Sun
Author: Those who know me...
Subject: Secretive Review II
In reply to: Patrick Lonergan 's message, "REVIEWS: WILL FERRELL 05/14/05" on 17:39:34 05/14/05 Sat

Rod Sizzler - At times, it feels like you just rushed through this sketch, as if you were so ready to get it over with, you forgot that you're supposed to be writing comedy. However, there were a lot of jokes that played really well. I figure, though, that with carte blanche over what Sizzler could have them do, or what Sizzler would be able to know, you could have gotten a lot crazier, especially at the end. It just doesn't feel that this piece builds to anything. I think a stronger ending would have solved a lot of your problems.

Shades - The premise of your piece is golden, or er...white, but my biggest criticism would be that you don't start riding it until the middle of the sketch. I would have made all my jokes center around the fact that colors besides white are terrible, and left it at that. Otherwise, though, you brought the funny, no doubt. I'd like to see this played out live.

The Way It Should Be - This is a lot like "Angry Boss", in that you have Ferrell trying to recruit a new worker, only for the so-called worker to discover that his boss is nuts. I guess I should have expected many folks to bring out their "angriest" material for Ferrell...but if you're going to do this, I'd seriously suggest you go original, and execute your jokes with precision. With respect to the latter, it seems like too many times, you don't do this...usually because the wording is awkward or the outbursts are pedestrian. I've seen better from this writer.

The Unstable and 'Pull Out the Bolt' - JP has always been one of my favorite writers on this site, and he does not disappoint with this sketch, which is oftentimes funny, sharp, and totally "JP". Several of Willhelm's insults are gold, and the responses from his students are excellent. I'd maybe change the ending a bit, though...I don't want to feel sorry for Ferrell's character at all.

The Brick - In this piece, which is reminiscent of "Badger in your Butt" from Walken a while back (too lazy to look it up), the jokes are executed well, and the writing itself is crisp and clear. The physical comedy would be wonderful to see, especially with Ferrell at the helm. The ending was fitting and funny. Nice work!

Boris Baxter - There were a lot of egregious grammatical and spelling errors, not to mention some highly confusing wording, which all contributed to how difficult it was to follow this piece. Many of the jokes were hurried at best, and the overall direction of the sketch was poorly executed. I like the idea of bringing back original SNY characters, but not in such a forced manner.

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Awesome review, I miss ya man (NT) -- CCS, 03:08:15 05/18/05 Wed