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Date Posted: 19:45:32 11/22/04 Mon
Author: Jen
Subject: I actually reviewed! Holy Crap!
In reply to: Patrick Lonergan 's message, "REVIEWS: Luke Wilson 11/20/04" on 11:42:42 11/20/04 Sat

CO –

It’s sketches like these that make me wonder if anyone at SNL has ever whisked by our little arena of comedy. And if they have they went “WTF? Where’s the porn?” or if they closed the window before anyone else could see. You know we were good to Luke two summers ago, that was the monologue with the talking body parts. One of the most fabulous monologues I’ve ever read – I still laugh when reading it. And SNL does cater to a rather young crowd (one that tunes into Lindsey Lohan and the Olsens) but what can you do? Pop culture is where the money’s at and that’s all people care about in the ‘biz. So I can feel your rant and the need for this site, as some might have, to fill the void in a hoaky, dumbed down SNL world – but I think what we need to cherish most of all the fact that there’s actually space enough for the both of us and it’s all good. Long live SNY and SNL.

Mono –

Good ol’ sibling rivalry. The pacing on this was really great, I wasn’t rolling out of my armed, twirly computer chair with laughter but I wasn’t bored thinking “When the hell is this going to get over?” like I was with the actual monologue. I enjoyed the tribute to the many comments as of late that SNL doesn’t seem to like/pick American hosts.

Saber advanced –

You onlisted 22 of the 37 things it does – 23 if you count the ability to identify commies. Either you cut the commercial off or this is false advertising. Someone is totally getting suited. You have some really nice characterization, allowing the characters to do things which make the scene interesting and allow this really “normal” dialogue amongst all characters to go on. It’s wonderful to let the b-action be the funny and the main action is totally benign; a joke behind someone’s back. I loved them when I was a two faced 7 year old and I still love them now.

Anita+hero

This features great visual descriptions right away, you have a tendency to put JP-language dialogue into your descriptions “Okay, nothing like the batcave.” Which can be nice but can also entirely unnecessary and pointless, so careful. Or a better example is “She's wearing glasses and as we know: Glasses = All business” which could all be deleted, we all know what all business means. This is great for things like commentaries! But you don’t really put them into the script, you just tell people over and over again as they read your script. Heh…. Anyway! Poor yellow…I love when he finds out he’s not bulletproof. You have wonderful goofy dialogue. I think you could bring back Anita if you wanted – she’s not quite Debbie Downer but she’s a party pooper – if the person holding the party is Yellow.

Celebrity Poker

I liked quite a bit of this. I really enjoyed the portrayal of Sharon Stone, but I think you could have taken it a bit further. Apparently she had a brain aneurism and now she’s really happy all the time, you did great with that. But she also really REALLY enjoys sex now. So she could talk about sex and how her brain blew up and now she’s in happy land. But overall, really good characterization. This sketch could become something of a celebrity jeopardy. I think this is the second time we’ve seen this premise, and I liked this one a lot better than the last. I would work on the characterization of the host, they should be a balance to the contestants. You have a moment:

Dave Foley: I believe a wise hooker once said, ”You’re wearing a condom…I don’t care who the hell you are!”

Phil Gordon: (with a blank stare towards Dave) I actually think that was down right…moronic. Let’s go to the next hand.

Basically you have Dave Foley making an odd offer and Phil Gordon immediately rebukes it. This makes their hosting team off balanced in comparison to the contestants who are all kind of crazy. Essentially you’re making everyone odd except Phil Gordon who isn’t a strong enough character to be the straight man. You need to make him a stronger identity or give him an ally.

WU

Overall I think we had some pretty good jokes. A few that were laugh out loudable, a couple groan and slap kneeable, one or small smirk and head nodable, a handful of shrugables, and one or two what were you thinkings?

Like this:

The manager of eastern German amusement park Dwarf-Park Trusetal reported that thieves have stolen scantily-clad garden gnomes from a gnome peepshow currently on display. The list of suspects so far includes scavengers and masturbating scarecrows.

Question: why this punchline? Why not the lolly pop guild? Why not a picture of Vern Troyer as he humps the lazer from Austin Powers? Why scavengers and masturbating scarecrows? I must be missing a very big connection because that was a dandy little lead in and a completely pointless punchline. Wow.

Tina’s rant on has-beens was kind of wordy in the beginning and lost the pacing and punch that the commentary needed; the flashback was a little quick and without action, just a picture, so it really didn’t support Tina’s claim about how bad has been WU hosts would be other than the fact that they’d be less attractive than Tina and Amy.

I did like the Chris Parnell commentary, the Jingle all the Way plug was nice. However, my Bond vote would go to either Ewan McGreggor or Jude Law. Mmm, shaken then stirred.

What…was that dirty? I didn’t mean it – like a coffee, ya’ know? Forget it. Sicko.

oh it wasn't dirty? Huh...it was supposed to be....




shh...go to sleep crazy lady.



ONWARD!

Radford James –

Rule of the trade I don’t review my own sketches. However, a itty bit of backstory: I love and hate actors. Because for some reason a good portion of actors feel the need to talk in this over elevated ridiculous manner. And in actuality they’re very humdrum people; Radford James has this over elevated names (which I really proud of) and talks with elaborate word choice but all he’s ever done are crappy commercials. I also wasn’t originally going to have Radford and the writer pair up, it was going to be Radford continually interrupting the writer’s attempt to order a drink and in his final monologue he would order a drink for the writer. But then what you see is what came out by the end of writing time. Eh, moving on.

Ray and Belle Rob a Bank

This was a very odd sketch of interactive TV and stupid criminals. The stupid criminals are fairly lovely, and the TV banter is simple and fun. Yeah! My favorite lines (maybe)
I don’t know anyone who does. Do you?

Belle: You know you don’t let me speak to no one you don’t know.

Ray: I just love to hear you say it, babe.

And then the grow boobies thing…they can grow, btw, but you gotta get fat and somehow I just don’t think Ray will be really receptive to that concept.

Late show auditions

In an interview this week, Nick Lachey and Jessica Simpson said that if they have a child that want their child to be just like President Bush. Asked to explain, Nick Lachey said, “Our child will have my good looks and Jessica’s intelligence.”

In a recent issue of “US Weekly”, Jessica Simpson said that she has the secret to keeping her husband, singer Nick Lachey, happy. She said, “It involves a strap-on. That’s all I can tell you.”

Michael Jackson said this week that he is planning a concert tour of Africa, because he wants to return to his roots. To which Joe Jackson commented, “Michael, your roots! Your roots! You grew up in Gary, Indiana!”

Okay, you must have pitched all these in chat because I could have sworn I’d seen them before. I went searching through old WUs to find them but didn’t so …it’s all good. Seriously, don’t recycle jokes- and here you didn’t but ya’ know- keep not doing it.

As with the last installment, have different jokes does offer some separation of characters but I would really rather see the joke be in the characterization of who is trying out. You did pretty well with Jimmy, he probably would have broken out in an impression and got up and danced at some point though…he’s not one for attention spans.

I don’t think you really captured Owen Wilson- maybe he’s harder to do. But I didn’t feel like he as a character brought something that was funny. All of a sudden he just goes “Eh, I suck time to do another movie” and that’s not really showing how he sucks. In stead of saying “wow, the audience is quiet” maybe have a random old lady walk across the stage with crickets chirping in the background. Show how something is not funny or quirky don’t just say that it is and expect that to be enough.

An Advanced Copy

One little thing:

(Cut to a skinny man with glasses and slick hair. This is Willy James and he is standing in front of a black screen)

This is a nice description but you cast Kenan Thompson as Willy James – Kenan isn’t a skinny man so it’d be hard for him to play a “skinny” or really thin character.

This is an odd quirky sketch which is good. I kind of would have liked to see it escalate in steps. Sort of start with this intro of them and then haha they’re not dead. Cut back to Sam writing it off “That’s nothing, we shot a lot of different endings, depending on what film rating we were going to get” or something like that. Then go back and show Spider man’s black, cut back to Sam freaking out a little. Then go to the musical and by now Sam’s completely lost it, as he does in your version.

I would cut this line:

Willy James: How was this alternate ending made?

Let Sam go right into his “We had a party, I got wasted, history was made” speech. Assume Willy knows already, maybe he paid off the production assistant.


SUMARY!
I really enjoyed this episode! Fantastic job you guys, it’s always fun to write with such incredibly wonderful and talented people. Eat lots of turkey unless you think meat in murder in which case…I’m a murderer.

Here’s the cast list:

Kenan Thompson: 3 appearances
Will Forte: 4 appearances
Amy Poehler: 4 appearances (including WU)
Darrell Hammond: 5 appearances (Man of the Evening)
Horatio Sanz: 3 appearances
Finesse Mitchell: 1 appearance
Seth Meyers: 3 appearances
Fred Armisen: 3 appearances
Rob Riggle: 4 appearances
Tina Fey: 2 appearances (including WU)
Rachel Dratch: 2 appearances
Chris Parnell: 2 appearances (Including WU)
Maya Rudolph: 1 appearance
Special appearances by: Lorne Michaels and Owen Wilson

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