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just some shit i need an opinion on -- 'The Vet', 06:10:19 03/15/03 Sat
- yo i like the poetry bit that shits tight (NT) -- . Extas C, 06:16:55 03/15/03 Sat
Let's rewind time for a second.......REPOST from...10:03:49 02/26/02 Tue ...and CIPHER VERSE from...14:44:51 02/27/02 Wed...Holla
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Lyrikil...of...G3N@$yD3, 06:08:05 03/15/03 Sat
- run with the wolves like kevin costner?? wasn't it dances wit wolves fukk way back in 90 or somethin? this rhyme must ah been old (NT) -- BlaK VirtuE, 02:11:41 03/17/03 Mon
- I dont know this was iight.. kinda bland for my taste.. ONE! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 02:43:17 03/17/03 Mon
iiight?! LOOK! I just killed the board, I mean dropped some shattering shit.. straight up.. I was sick of play'n anyways- I'm gonna do this one more time.. just chill and understand I do this for the love! "REAL AUDIO!!" 2 X as dope as last time!
-- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!" Feat. "SELF!" BITCHES...., 03:05:14 03/15/03 Sat
Gotta peep later....Matter fact I'm falling asleep ...MODS if ya'll see this I'll do my replies later...If ya'll ddont see this fukkit I'lll repost it (NT) -- Lyrikil, 06:10:09 03/15/03 Sat
Large-Ass Cypher.. This might be your style.. Read it all, or just skip to my parts hehe -- ===||Swords--->, 20:39:44 03/14/03 Fri
I read most of this and I was impressed to say the least very nice word-play, great emotion in them bars almost jump out at you, nice word-connection also, made perfectly straight forward thats good at some-times then get it just gets boring.. ones brain must stay focused on inventing and advancing, thats perfectly clear and straight forward! Keep developing at this angle very right for you. ONE! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 03:11:32 03/15/03 Sat
Draw The Line.. Audio Some Day.. -- ===||Swords--->, 20:15:47 03/14/03 Fri
I really liked this one man... some of the shit doesnt seem to have continuity but i think i just need to read it a few more times. Other parts hit hard though, good shit...keep it comin. Peace (NT) -- Psilocybe, 21:24:33 03/14/03 Fri
like what parts? id really like to know (NT) -- swords, 22:28:30 03/14/03 Fri
great... your really elevating man.. tightest flow I read on here in a while.. hopefully cats will really see behind the lines .. you gonna have to real understand the tones and timing to make this a classic.. go for it and crush what ever beat you choose.. speed is not always the formula. ONE! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 03:16:38 03/15/03 Sat
educAtion clAss for thAt Azz-just my thoughts let me know if u feel me -- Khaos-Da lyrical Immauel, 20:12:02 03/14/03 Fri
This was decent, but that columbus line really bothered me cuz of how innacurate it was.. Columbus had nothing to do with proving the earth was flat OR round.. Copernicus was the one that proved the earth was round.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 20:22:12 03/14/03 Fri
The topic was generic in some way.. just felt played as I read it.. try to be more clever dont just write down the first thought that pops up, challenge that very first thought.. writing is all about conveying a message and having that message be appealing to the reader.. in more ways then one.. dont limit your self to a program.. release your self in your text let your words breathe and take life. ONE! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 03:21:53 03/15/03 Sat
just some shit i wrote for fun, some of it was put in just as lyrics so exuse anything entirely degrading read this let me know what uthink peace -- lyrikal mindz, 19:34:31 03/14/03 Fri
YO SOMEBODY READ THIS SHIT N TELL ME WHAT U THINK I GOTTA GET SOME OPINIONS (NT) -- lyrikal mindz, 19:57:22 03/14/03 Fri
That'z some ill comedy shit kinda remind me of Em' when he 1st camed out with' "Hi my name is.."...lol..if that's ur style keep it up (NT) -- Khaos-Da lyrical Immauel, 20:17:23 03/14/03 Fri
thanks dog (NT) -- lyrikal mindz, 20:24:15 03/14/03 Fri
Umm this was ok, that whole Hitler part, i couldnt get into.. Whole structure was kinda basic.. Developing your style, it might come out nice, but right now there's a lot of work to be done.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 20:25:20 03/14/03 Fri
First off you cant expect to really rock Em's style? Can you? I mean that was carbon copy shit, I mean nothing at all about this was original.. you got talent why not use it on yourself not a well known established style.. that would just be dumb and corny.. that word in itself is scary when its used to describe your actions and mannerisms.. "Chess is like a sword fight.. you must think before you move.." and chess has massive correlations with life. ONE! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 03:30:40 03/15/03 Sat
umm shit just for fun -- lyrikalblows7, 01:41:28 03/17/03 Mon
3rd effort -- Psilocybe, 15:20:37 03/14/03 Fri
hey this was really nice.... keep at it (NT) -- the dark spitter, 16:43:21 03/14/03 Fri
3rd effort -- lyrikal mindz, 19:35:59 03/14/03 Fri
This was pretty nice.. content was hittin.. Flow, well, i couldnt find it.. It sucks when a post has good content but its hard to follow cuz it lacks multis or an easy to follow scheme.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 20:28:54 03/14/03 Fri
hmmm.. interesting approach, very different.. It's off yet on at the same time sorta like how my style moves but much more simple.. I can say this if you keep writing and developing you style you can bring some interesting things to the table.. the whole thing about this talent is.. polishing it so it can be called a talent. ONE! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 03:35:44 03/15/03 Sat
was this round 3 ha. I'll eat you when I have some time and then it will be all over. I don't want to hear any more of this shit about how you ripped cause you didn't so stop braging about how you did. I'm over you. You have some skill but your wacked average jack. (NT) -- Dlaster, 15:46:24 03/16/03 Sun
BaTTL3~!!!!!!!!!!! -- [SBc]w|HIGH|Te Mc, 14:06:16 03/14/03 Fri
yea man... I up to battle ya homie... getting tired of battlin agianst that dlastar fag... I ripped his ass any way... -- the dark spitter, 15:29:44 03/14/03 Fri
wad up.... -- [SBc]w|HIGH|Te Mc, 15:51:31 03/14/03 Fri
aiight dog... and yo try to post somthing ill aiight? peace (NT) -- the spitter, 16:38:15 03/14/03 Fri
Shut the f**k up I've got a knew name for ya Darky bitch bitch, Your boyfriend probably Ripped you up the ass last night, and thats the only thing that you know about rippin you little bitch, Now shut up boy. (NT) -- White Knight, 00:53:46 03/17/03 Mon
no (NT) -- ===||swords--->, 20:31:27 03/14/03 Fri
.... ONLY ON STAGE KIDDO.... "and then you wouldn't want to battle, so this was a waste of time for my pupils to see. I hate when people make time exist when it doesn't" all we have is now... the present, the past is gone it can't be changed the future is the future it's not the present.. it can't be in your cycle as of yet.. therefor the now is all.. in affect time is not there.. it's a myth to pass the days. hahahahahahahahahah! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 03:43:47 03/15/03 Sat
the dark spitter vs dlarstar... you know what to do.... no bullshit aiight? -- the dark spitter, 13:29:02 03/14/03 Fri
wad up..... -- [SBc]w|HIGH|Te Mc, 14:10:07 03/14/03 Fri
battle -- lyrikal mindz, 19:40:40 03/14/03 Fri
Was kinda boring.. I wouldnt be able to read 2 paragraphs of it... Dont use "so many quotes" we're not that "stupid" that we need "them".. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 20:33:28 03/14/03 Fri
word.. nuff said! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 03:46:24 03/15/03 Sat
yo i just spit this shit last night and i never conformed it, but here.. its somethin a lil introspective -- INS, 09:32:22 03/14/03 Fri
wad up... -- [SBc]w|HIGH|Te Mc, 14:13:06 03/14/03 Fri
I like this shit. Feels good, especially the beginning. You could have deffinetley takin it to another level though. Peace (NT) -- Psilocybe, 15:06:32 03/14/03 Fri
Yo man, tight shit. I see you lookin for a battle or collab. I guess, ill try against you. But no beef. (NT) -- Lil' Lucky, 17:00:11 03/14/03 Fri
Main Loop Presents - Attack of the 50 Ft. Beats pt. 8: "Stand Up" -- ===||Swords--->, 04:46:10 03/14/03 Fri
wad up.... -- [SBc]w|HIGH|Te Mc, 14:14:32 03/14/03 Fri
ANOTHER BATTLE....im winning this one 1-0 right now...tried to post it but i guess it aint go through peep and critique and let me know what i can do better -- Vision...Thrice Optics of Abzent Minded of O.M.N.I., 22:49:00 03/13/03 Thu
...I think this verse had more metaphors than the previous one....or maybe they jus stood out more...I dunno....the flow is obviously there...just needs to be heard.... this was tight man.....that blah blah blah blah blah blah blah line WAS SO FUCKING DOPE....lol.....keep doin your thing man.....like I said....keep rippin.....p'Z (NT) -- ��N.a.K.I.X.e.M.�� aka �amien Christ, 23:58:21 03/13/03 Thu
oh yeah.....you get the vote....peace (NT) -- El Mexicano..., 00:17:26 03/14/03 Fri
looks like you changed your style a bit, i likes i likes, you a rough sketch i erase you like Micheal Jacksons skin pigment......i liked that man...nice shit, seems like you've elevated yo, good to see you still at it, you ate this cat man, and yea i agree with Mr. NaKIXem, the flow was there man, good battle, vote=Viz (NT) -- MC RHYMES a.k.a. SOUL COLLECTOR O.M.N.I., 00:09:46 03/14/03 Fri
very nice ish....man..ur more of a graphic battler which is cool...the back imprints and kick ur arms while u do a handstand was tight....keep battling....ull get better at it...peace (NT) -- S.T.G.E. � aka "DAVID DUNN aka ILLER THAN THOU" of O.M.N.I.�, 00:11:20 03/14/03 Fri
phatt, dope, u got my vote! i can�t really say that u would need any improvement.....keep spittin, let it be heard, word! BLAH BLAH BAH, etc. yours is the illah verses, on this battle u da killah (NT) -- chromenine, 03:21:10 03/14/03 Fri
Other dude's verse was tight, itd sound nice live... Yours was better written tho, better flow and everything else.. a couple lines made me smile..u get my vote.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 04:49:50 03/14/03 Fri
Come on now Vision....Do you really need us to tell you who won...I'm voting for the other guy..Just because someone needs to and to teach you a lesson about picking on inferior emcees...now either play fair or put your nose in the corner..lol...One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil..of..G3N@$yD3, 09:29:39 03/14/03 Fri
I dunno blackcloud u shit was good, but i dunno it didn't feel like u really put any heart into urs, kinda like u were just rappin to rap, which is ok, but Vision I felt like he was rappin from his soul, and i dunno i just felt his shit more, maybe it wasn't as lyrical, but it felt like he wanted it more, so I pick Vision -- INS, 09:38:27 03/14/03 Fri
I think the first battler got this one... dont like visions verse at all... but both did a fine job... piece (NT) -- the dark spitter, 14:57:34 03/14/03 Fri
to the battle -- lyrikal mindz, 19:30:45 03/14/03 Fri
Extra extra read all about it Dlaster ripped Dark spitter and ain�t no doubt about it. You best be ready for 3rd round knock out mommies boy. I typed this up keystyle in my lunch break just to piss you off cause I know it took you a couple of days to write that crap you posted jack! -- Dlaster, 18:44:41 03/13/03 Thu
round three I guess it is fag.. (NT) -- the dark spitter, 18:53:43 03/13/03 Thu
Dark spitter I�m not doing this for you its all for me. Your not real dude I wouldn�t feel you if you were the titties of Pamela Anderson Lee. <<< the best qoute in the whole thing...keep at it...your getting better, (NT) -- Vision...Thrice Optics, 23:03:11 03/13/03 Thu
i read this earlier too and didnt have time, seems like your uppin your skills with each post, you show some potential man, this was pretty coo, couldve been better but we all could be better, youre elevatin keep at it, peace (NT) -- MC RHYMES a.k.a. SOUL COLLECTOR O.M.N.I., 00:25:09 03/14/03 Fri
Yo man. I dont care what anyone else thinks about you. Obviously the only one who sees through u is Dark Spitter. Hey, I respect Dark Spitter. But we aint friends. And from Emcee to Emcee, You need to get off. I read your not from america. Quit rappin then bitch, cause with out america, you wouldnt be on this board, Pam Anderson= American, George Bush= American, 2pac= american. Dlas= American WANNA BE. (NT) -- Lil' Lucky, 00:48:38 03/14/03 Fri
Blahh.....battles aint supposed to last 3 rounds.. find somethign else to write about already... (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 04:51:13 03/14/03 Fri
nice flow, keep at it. I see improvement, gettin there. Oh, and Lil�Lucky: I like yo shit, fa real, but i ain�t from the states either.. U can�t dis someone for that. ALL Nationalities are just a WACK, seperatin people for the most pathetic reasons .It don�t matter where u from...: Shit is real or not.., and if u doubt it, listen to french rap, they kick ass. And I could live in the fuckin desert, for example, and write the dopest shit u ever heard of, so whats the deal!?! PEACE, man think about that!... why u think the world is as fucked up as it is...! -- chromenine, 07:01:25 03/14/03 Fri
how comes we write the same kinda shit, use the same kinda rhyme schemes and content but everyone rides ur dick, and i usually just get hated on -- INS, 09:43:08 03/14/03 Fri
yo i ain't hatin this shits madd nice i felt the fire, liked the lines bout l and pac, madd props, once u finish whoever off, i'd like to step in the arena so to speak -- INS, 09:45:56 03/14/03 Fri
text for an upcoming audio collabo..simpler than the rest of my ish, sacrificed vocab fior flow, but oh well....just felt like posting it..peace -- Essence.....AM, 16:49:32 03/13/03 Thu
flow is sick....only a couple lines need to be worked on and worded better...but flow was sick, moreso towads the middle.....cant wait to peep the audio (NT) -- Vision...Thrice Optics of Abzent Minded of O.M.N.I., 17:39:20 03/13/03 Thu
yea man, flow was very sick...i enjoyed this piece, had some nice lines in there, but this was a good read man, seems like you've stepped your game up as well, great flow, audio should be equally as good if not better, stay building, peace (NT) -- MC RHYMES a.k.a. SOUL COLLECTOR O.M.N.I., 00:17:31 03/14/03 Fri
Ooh.. that figure 8 line and the one after was beautiful.. flow was flawless to me.. knock em dead in that collabo.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 04:53:53 03/14/03 Fri
"I could still remember when being and emcee wasn't part of my life"...Ovakil....Free-shitt...Repost due to lack of feedback....with revision....ENJOY!!! -- OV@kil....the M@gniPhi$en+....of G3n@$ydE....one-Hun'ned, 16:43:31 03/13/03 Thu
this was tight, flow was sick, i peeped this b4, just never got around to responding, but its dope....you got a nice style thats easy to follow, whichs makes it enjoyable to read....stay up OV@....pz (NT) -- essence...AM, 16:52:45 03/13/03 Thu
what up OV@?!.....ayo you should start droppin audios with lyrikil now that everything cool for you...nice flow, drop more frequent (NT) -- Vision...Thrice Optics, 17:29:02 03/13/03 Thu
yea man im mos def feelin the flow and i like the vibe to this man, seems very real (probably cuz it is haha) but i enjoyed this post man, also peeped this earlier when i was at skool but had ta jet...nice shit man, good to see you still round too, stay up, one (NT) -- MC RHYMES a.k.a. SOUL COLLECTOR O.M.N.I., 00:12:42 03/14/03 Fri
Big Brother (revised in bar format) -- Cu-jo, 15:18:04 03/13/03 Thu
Real heart felt/..maybe coulda been expressed a lil better...though/.... (NT) -- OV@..acn't really critique for this was rEal...and kinda heartfelt, 16:52:29 03/13/03 Thu
Real heart felt/..maybe coulda been expressed a lil better...though/.... (NT) -- OV@..acn't really critique for this was rEal...and kinda heartfelt, 16:53:35 03/13/03 Thu
very heartfelt, nice way of portraying emotions...stay up..pz (NT) -- Essence...AM, 17:01:08 03/13/03 Thu
thiw was extremely long....i did catch th flow better, good job putting it in bars this time...flow was still a little bit choppy...even ya bars a little (NT) -- Vision...Thrice Optics, 17:24:04 03/13/03 Thu
this was hella long, but its cool man...i could tell that this was straight from your heart, there was emotion pouring out of your words man, this was a very nice way of putting your emotions out man, like Vision said flow was a lil choppy but i dont think you really went for flow in this one...stay up and building peace (NT) -- MC RHYMES a.k.a. SOUL COLLECTOR "you know the crew", 00:31:42 03/14/03 Fri
We alike. -- Lil' Lucky, 00:54:38 03/14/03 Fri
Its cool man, its important to feel the words you write (NT) -- Psilocybe, 15:09:17 03/14/03 Fri
BATTLE BATTLE...this one from another board, im trying to learn how to do this so peep, vote, and tell me what i can do to get better -- Vision...Thrice Optics of Abzent Minded of O.M.N.I., 14:32:37 03/13/03 Thu
id say you got this Vis...you came with more heat in my opinion....other dude was tight though, dont get me wrong, jus i think you outshined him a lil with ya lines....you had alot of nice quotables...stay up...Peace (NT) -- Essence...AM, 16:56:30 03/13/03 Thu
....tight verse Vis....didn't bother readin BMW's verse....you know what you need to work on....keep rippin....p'Z (NT) -- ��N.a.K.I.X.e.M.�� aka �amien Christ, 22:25:35 03/13/03 Thu
this was a pretty nice battle verse as well, i think i liked the one up top more, but this was pretty nice, had some nice lines in there, flow was pretty straight....u ate that BMM cat.....good drop..stay up man, vote=Viz (NT) -- MC RHYMES a.k.a. SOUL COLLECTOR O.M.N.I., 00:21:30 03/14/03 Fri
Big Brotha -- Cu-jo, 13:15:38 03/13/03 Thu
yo this was nice and all but the paragaph form gots to go man... aiight? (NT) -- the dark spitter aka vocabulario supremo, 13:23:47 03/13/03 Thu
ouch...too much to read in paragraph...i read the first paragraph..sounds like you got some deep shit on ya chest, structure this in bars and i'll mos def come back and read it (NT) -- Vision...Thrice Optics, 14:35:20 03/13/03 Thu
"SECOND ROUND DISS"... 48BARS OF PURE BATTLE TYPE SHIT... PEEP -- the dark spitter, 13:15:34 03/13/03 Thu
this was wack all the way through....it seems like you're trying mad hard, you're putting qoutations on words that dont need qouting AND you're doing it sometimes when words dont even correlate with each other...take ya time and think about lines instead of just putting the first thing that comes to your mind unless its a keystyle...anyway, keep workin at it...use your imagination and be uhhh....clever like....uh.um yea...that, peace (NT) -- Vision...Thrice Optics, 14:46:47 03/13/03 Thu
darky spit spit this was wacked shit i cant be fucked posting back if your lucky ill post a keystyle whats up with round two you already lost read your other message even vision knows your flows wacked at least you tryed (NT) -- Dlaster, 16:19:45 03/13/03 Thu
Stop biting Big L with the Butt head and Beavis shit. Wack. (NT) -- OriginILL, 16:36:20 03/13/03 Thu
nightmares that surfaced from a shallow sleep... FUCK YOU. -- PACIFIC TRIALS, 12:39:29 03/13/03 Thu
are you new man cuz I dig your style kidd... stay up (NT) -- the dark spitter, 12:45:01 03/13/03 Thu
sounds like some shit warchild would right, but flowed better...some nice lines, feelin the wordplay and multi's (NT) -- Vision...Thrice Optics, 14:50:35 03/13/03 Thu
nice shit keep posting (NT) -- Dlaster, 20:31:43 03/13/03 Thu
yo man i love this type of shit, creative man, different from how others would attack this type of topic, gets the mind moving into different directions, gets us thinking and shit, but ne wayz, i really enjoyed this piece, like i sed i love stuff like this, very hott man, are u a poet? seems to me like you're a poet....ne wayz, very nice drop, stay building, peace (NT) -- MC RHYMES a.k.a. BACK AGAIN? reppin that crew you all love, O.M.N.I., 00:38:08 03/14/03 Fri
At school... just ridin the vibe -- INS, 11:33:59 03/13/03 Thu
subsequently your vocab failed to catch my attention, however the continuity flowed well... with the vocab, escavate. (NT) -- pacific trails., 12:02:08 03/13/03 Thu
at least it some wordplay... (NT) -- the dark spitter, 12:43:03 03/13/03 Thu
At school... just ridin the vibe -- INS, 11:33:04 03/13/03 Thu
YO MAH BAD, i DOUBLE CLICKED PLEASE DISREGARD -- INS, 12:56:13 03/13/03 Thu
Damn its been a minute since i've been in here..... good to see some familiar names.... IMAGINATION GONE WILD: OPEN TO INTERPRETATION damn its been a MINUTE since ive been here haha... -- MC RHYMES a.k.a. SOUL COLLECTOR THE ENLIGHT N ONE O.M.N.I., 02:05:22 03/13/03 Thu
oh, FYI, this isnt really meant to flow too well, it was supposed to be a poem type piece but ended up soundin like a "rhyme" so decided to share with yall...peace (NT) -- RHYMES O.M.N.I., 02:18:58 03/13/03 Thu
real nice poem, fillin that piece; also did things like that(poem ending up as rhyme) (NT) -- chromenine, 03:31:50 03/13/03 Thu
bout time you dropped something...but school's first, i didnt really feel it was a poem...sounded more like a rhyme throughout...didnt really have a poem like structure or sound, but your words are your words...nice post...a few qoutables, stay around (NT) -- Vision...Thrice Optics of Abzent Minded of O.M.N.I., 10:42:34 03/13/03 Thu
nice, madd nice sounded like u put ur heart into it -- INS, 12:26:12 03/13/03 Thu
i'd like to hear this audio... flow was nice, lyrics were straight forward and to the point... i like reads like this... good way to start the day (NT) -- pacific trails, 13:03:33 03/13/03 Thu
Whoooaa.. this is a smart muhfucka haha.. how you been? Yeah im still here holdin it down... This actually flowed pretty well cuz of how i read it.. i had Virtuoso in mind.. It all makes sense to me, but the elvated thoughts may lose some.. fuck em. they need to catch up hehe.. peace.. (NT) -- ===||Swords---> Now we need Mikail to stop by for a few, 13:58:54 03/13/03 Thu
NEW TEXT COLLAB: "Out Of The Lion's Den: Blood Storms" featuring Prince Of Terror -- Novakane, 02:01:32 03/13/03 Thu
damn....this was crazy....fukkin tight man....yall kinda scarin me tho haha..forreal tho i loved the way yall meshed together...i really liked it, Novakane you had some good imagery in your last verse, very nice, and Prince of Terror, very very nice last verse from you (my favorite from the whole collab) very good word usage, infact good word usage throughout the whole piece....very good collabo indeed....kinda reminds me of a Nightstalkers type piece except different...haha weird....very very nice collaboration tho, big ups, ~oNe~ (NT) -- MC RHYMES a.k.a. SOUL COLLECTOR O.M.N.I. 3 years and counting....., 02:12:13 03/13/03 Thu
damn u�goin off crazy fa real, dats a tight joint`! i liked both ya�ll word usage throughout this whole collab and it is mad... TRipple thumbs Up if i had one extra...resepect;WORD (NT) -- chromenine, 03:39:01 03/13/03 Thu
novakane, ur shits nice, prince ur aiight but ur rhymes seemed to lack continuity.. dope tho stay up -- INS, 12:48:04 03/13/03 Thu
yo... this piece kind of reminds me of a gravediggaz type style...very ill from both emcees and stay up... (NT) -- the dark spitter, 12:48:10 03/13/03 Thu
very imaginative. i liked this alot.... vocab was on point as well as fomat (NT) -- PACIFIC TRAILS, 12:57:09 03/13/03 Thu
wad up.... -- [SBc]w|HIGH|Te Mc, 13:53:50 03/13/03 Thu
Death Bed Rap (text) -- Cu-jo, 01:56:22 03/13/03 Thu
I think it is tight tho i�m not all too shure about yo flow, but i think u can spit dat piece betta then i can read it, kinda farout perspective....not bad...not bad, yo... (NT) -- chromenine, 03:43:39 03/13/03 Thu
nice yo.. i like the song format, like te content alot... could expand ur rhymes a bit, but on the other hand that could fuck up the flow, so just do u -- INS, 12:53:55 03/13/03 Thu
thanx for da feedback -- Cu-jo, 13:07:41 03/13/03 Thu
PEEP ~~ A U D I O ~~ Illest 50 cent beat with the underground verses...aint nothing better than that hahaha...GET YOU'RE WEBSTERS OUT AND LISTEN! -- MIDEVAL, 01:23:35 03/13/03 Thu
hella tight couldnt fault it but it would be better if the beat was fade out slightly peace nice drop (NT) -- treyz1, 01:47:54 03/13/03 Thu
honestly, even though you have been gay in the past, this was your best work... keep building... and dont drop anything on me cuz i dont rap anymore (NT) -- GuTTy, 01:48:01 03/13/03 Thu
can't peep audio right now...ill peep it later tho, peace (NT) -- RHYMES O.M.N.I., 01:53:59 03/13/03 Thu
....this was ok...the beat is a little too loud and you don't seem to ride it too well...the flow and lyrics are good though, overall this was a nice drop..just work on the quality a bit..peace out kid (NT) -- Trojohn, 15:09:57 03/13/03 Thu
treyz-wan fka novice -- a battle type key just tryin to sharpen up, 00:46:13 03/13/03 Thu
Nice spit kid...I liked "Ill leave the average lyricist like a winter Olympian wit a down hill career " hahaha good shit for the length (NT) -- MIDEVAL, 01:24:58 03/13/03 Thu
Maaannn....this could have been longer...much longer....at least 16 bars...at least you sound like a kid with promise unlike all the 50 Cent wannabes roaming around here...1 (NT) -- Novakane, 01:48:42 03/13/03 Thu
this was iight man...like man above me said it does show promise...thought it could've been longer as well, but it was coo...keep expandin ya mind, peace (NT) -- MC RHYMES a.k.a. SOUL COLLECTOR THE ENLIGHT N ONE O.M.N.I., 01:52:35 03/13/03 Thu
feelin dis too and i also agree wit dem 2 peepz above, was too short but good! keep it up....novakane: i hope wasn�t aimin that shit at me, callin me 50 cent wanna be?! no front jus aksin.... (NT) -- chromenine, 03:48:53 03/13/03 Thu
twenty4 bars.... key to sharpen skills.... nothing else -- the dark spitter, 13:23:54 03/12/03 Wed
yo, you got the full package on this one, you got flow, style and word play too. (NT) -- nemesis, 15:01:42 03/12/03 Wed
Yo this was tyte..but to me seems a bit scripted after a fellow lounger (NT) -- OV@...maybe it's just me seems like a copy-cat...maybe not on purpose,...sound lovely flowed nicely..vocab and all!!!, 16:59:45 03/12/03 Wed
yo darky spit spit I liked it but you still writing about the same shit at least this one made sense. (NT) -- Dlaster, 18:54:43 03/12/03 Wed
to dlar star... fuck you.. (NT) -- the dark spitter, 13:31:27 03/13/03 Thu
its not my fault your crazy its your moms cause she dropped you when you was a baby (NT) -- Dlaster, 20:53:46 03/13/03 Thu
Gotz some crazy shi, wrote it while i had a headache.... peep and critique i think its a little unstreight but also the flow ain�t easy to figure out sometimes -- chromenine, 05:35:27 03/12/03 Wed
yeah not bad subject matter was kinda chopy but flowed kinda cooo (NT) -- treyz1, 10:45:51 03/12/03 Wed
nice man I enjoyed this (NT) -- the dark spitter, 13:26:58 03/12/03 Wed
good i like it, it was raw, not as unreal as alot of posts -- INS, 13:37:25 03/12/03 Wed
This was aiight...work on rhyming words..content and your word usage...some words just didn't fit (NT) -- Lyrikil, 14:56:03 03/12/03 Wed
I ain�t tryn to holla at u, and i can understand yo point, but wait for the audio post of this, and THEN tell me what didn�t rhyme. No hate, No front, as i said don�t take this wrong. I�m not trying to degrade your critique.... (NT) -- chromenine@gmx.net, 03:56:19 03/13/03 Thu
key...trying out some new things, no real topic but if i had to call it something, i would call it, Dying to Exsist......peace -- essence.....Abzent Minded, 21:03:11 03/09/03 Sun
That bird part was nice the high-light to me.. nice post! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 21:15:47 03/09/03 Sun
nice I liked it big props for the story telling alround good post able to read without getting bored (NT) -- dlaster, 22:38:59 03/09/03 Sun
holy peigons preaching with broken beaks sptting falacies...that line stuck way out to me..just different..very nice lyrics...damn shit feels weird reading text and seeing some different ish..nice post man..peace (NT) -- S.T.G.E. � aka "DAVID DUNN aka ILLER THAN THOU" of O.M.N.I.�, 00:20:11 03/10/03 Mon
Fo real, thats some nice! Enjoyed readin it. Real nice rhyme scemes and flow, respect! (NT) -- chromenine, 03:36:54 03/10/03 Mon
super ill man.... that line with the bird and shit was really abstract... neva heard that before... (NT) -- the dark spitter, 12:52:06 03/10/03 Mon
"i underline thought patterns with highlighted ink streched across" the holy piegons line and "kissing the essence of fate to demostrate the beatuy of death" were the lines that stuck out to me...this was poetical in a sense of mood, tone of the rhyme....this was a very nice piece tho man, i really enjoyed this, seems like you've elevated nicely...stay up, peace (NT) -- MC RHYMES a.k.a. SOUL COLLECTOR O.M.N.I., 02:31:16 03/13/03 Thu

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