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JOIN IN......CYPHER.....FREE LESSON.....Courtesy of tH� h � k �-A-c��t�......
-- h � k �-A-g � �/|_ A \/ � � h....aka tH� � l e � h �� |� e � � � �| J�, 16:50:07 01/31/03 Fri
...my turn.... -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 17:18:53 01/31/03 Fri
Lemme drop somethin -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 17:39:23 01/31/03 Fri
...my turn again.... -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 17:45:22 01/31/03 Fri
lol @ cyphering in the future.... lamer! -- PSYCH, 04:11:26 02/01/03 Sat
It's time for the 'bush'-tcher to stop choppin' the forgotten -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 09:06:11 02/01/03 Sat
My Turn... -- FLaTLyNe, 09:26:32 02/01/03 Sat
im bored....... -- Eh-Cents...AM, 20:14:20 02/02/03 Sun
Flow bout the "earth" my 3rd post -- GoNzO, 17:53:49 02/02/03 Sun
DELTE THIS (NT) -- GONZO, 18:00:21 02/02/03 Sun
Backwards... -- FLaTLyNe, 09:49:24 02/01/03 Sat
The content in the second part is nice with some good vocab and usage, although I couldn't catch the flow of the first verse at all and some lines just didn't ryhme in both parts...I wasn't feeling meter here...The "iris.." line was ill, Peace -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 11:46:32 02/01/03 Sat
You know exactly what you're doing when it comes to lyricism....I always enjoy your posts....even though the "length" in your bars (from my perspective) seems a little infantine, at times......other than that, keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 13:42:37 02/01/03 Sat
a very interesting piece...i found it to be more poetic than lyrical...i can dig it-oNe (NT) -- Know oNe, 14:18:49 02/01/03 Sat
tight -- isie, 19:37:08 02/01/03 Sat
this was iigh, didnt really do much for me... i couldnt really get into the begin for some reason, but the sencond part flowed a little better in my point of view.. well whatever.. keep doin you (NT) -- ��mz. m�j��麺�, 23:28:55 02/01/03 Sat
i think it flowed well all the way through..felt the content more in the gray area, umm....kinda wish the lines were a lil longer, but it work...drop some them audios shorty, how's the chilren (NT) -- Vision, 00:17:16 02/02/03 Sun
you need practice , elevate. (NT) -- nemisis, 07:55:32 02/02/03 Sun
lINES WERE SHORT DIG A LIL DEEPER AND PUT MORE STRUCTURE AND YOULL GET IT, CONTENT WAS REAL NICE THOUGH, I RECOMMEND YOU KEEP SPITTING TOO. DONT WORRY BOUT NEMISIS HES WACK ANYWAYS (NT) -- PAT D.A.W.G, 16:17:38 02/02/03 Sun
I didnt understande half of that, I like how it flowed, I can't even inagine writin like that (NT) -- CMOPAIN, 17:15:34 02/02/03 Sun
Repost-MikeDawg-Not Screwed - Welcome to Austin -- MikeDawg, 13:26:08 02/02/03 Sun
OK.........listening............thats better phew....I thought you were playing.....man that tripped me right out....that last one.........OK........this is aiight..........for a freestyle.........its good to just release some flows sometimes.....thats cool.....keep elevating and spitting......PeAcE (NT) -- Eternal Student (UK), 15:00:15 02/02/03 Sun
Having troubles downloading PEACE (NT) -- PAT D.A.W.G, 16:13:48 02/02/03 Sun
REPOST OF A CLASSIC......"The Last Words Of A Martyr: Polycarp's Speaking"....Warning: h � k �-A-linguistics, Intensive Rhetoric, Phantasmagorical Imagery, Church History, And Originality May Cause Mind-Stops...BE ADVISED BEFORE ENTERING... -- h � k �-A-g � �/|_ A \/ � � h....aka tH� � l e � h �� |� e � � � �| J�, 14:46:22 01/31/03 Fri
I really liked the top part that was tight. In the bottom part a few lines caught my eye but I didn't follow a lot of it. By that I mean I was lost. (NT) -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 16:58:41 01/31/03 Fri
Classic?? nah.. Wordplay nice as usual.. i cant usually get into your content.. too left-field for me.. bring it back down to earth.. Ooh, you should repost the collabo me and you did, shit was tiiight.. but like more than a year old heh.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 18:18:52 01/31/03 Fri
I didn't catch a lot of either and it wasn't because I didn't understand it like usual, I actually did understand that some of it was total gibberish ...some lines like the one about "Rome" and the "sparrow" that was a 'throw away' line to me along with others ...however the word connection was sick and the multis were nice even though some resulted in simplicity like "bitch ass" and "kick back" and "Nero" and "Zero"...Overall it was a good read but some was blah..content = very nice Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 12:20:47 02/01/03 Sat
Ummm....I was putting the martyrdom of Saint Polycarp in the form of a story......there's no "gibberish" in this at all......thanks for scanning through lines and trying to reply..... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 13:28:15 02/01/03 Sat
Some lines were pretty nice but couldnt follow too well man. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 16:06:45 02/02/03 Sun
MikeDawg - ((Audio)) Welcome to Austin -- MikeDawg, 23:22:43 02/01/03 Sat
sry... cant peep audios right now (NT) -- ��mz. m�j��麺�, 23:40:12 02/01/03 Sat
this CANT be you.....but maybe, who knows.....dont really like screwed music anyway (NT) -- Vision, 00:10:47 02/02/03 Sun
you know.. i think u would sound better without the screwed effects... do a normal audio... peace (NT) -- guTTy, 02:58:31 02/02/03 Sun
this is comical.......you slowed your voice down.......sorry I aint feeling (NT) -- Eternal Student (UK), 14:55:45 02/02/03 Sun
my life -- KaRma, 21:38:35 02/01/03 Sat
Some stuff I wrote earlier, flipped a few lines I have used before to improve. No real theme or topic, just what came out at the time -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 16:51:02 01/31/03 Fri
Very up to date with the U.N. line.......very nice, well-structured......You spelled "connotation" wrong though....HAHAHA, just playin'....Keep this up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 17:27:19 01/31/03 Fri
Dope shit for real.. didnt like that maternity ward part tho.. rest was tight tho..flow getting better.. peace.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 18:12:36 01/31/03 Fri
always nice readin ya stuff Brail...this was put together pretty nice...nice display of multi's in places...flow was smooth in here...nice word usage..yea liked the UN line...nice shit here...glad to see ya still reppin...hopefully i'll be droppin some more soon...been in a bad writer's block slump lately...but i should be back round shortly....stay up sonn, peace! (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 03:22:05 02/01/03 Sat
Flow was nice, I can see you've been onto that !...nice post here, I liked the "Yeah he got some potential,,," line shit made me laugh, nice read, Stay up Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 12:01:32 02/01/03 Sat
....YO..ONCE AGAIN THE DECORATED VETERAN DISPLAYS HIS WAR SKILLS POETICALLY..IN THIS LITTLE PEICE ENTITLED..."BLOOD DIRT" -- <<*****>>-----*---�L�k---�ARTH----*---<<*****>>, 14:32:12 01/30/03 Thu
erm... dunno, i kinda got the feelin you could do better cause ive seen better from you, dont let ya standards slip. peace dawg! (NT) -- nemisis, 14:42:12 01/30/03 Thu
naw, this shit was tight..forrealz..i was feeling the creativity and the flow was dope...keep dropping the illus shit...peace (NT) -- Essence....AM, 15:56:16 01/30/03 Thu
Up until the last few lines this was dope... (NT) -- Lyrikil...G3N@$yD3....The official sponsor of 211 for winos, 18:44:56 01/30/03 Thu
Wasnt feeling the red as much as the rest, but the rest was sick, like old lounge shit.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 03:10:15 01/31/03 Fri
This had me very attentive until the first line in the "yellow verse".....Nice way of conveying unconscious thoughts....Keep this up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 12:08:43 01/31/03 Fri
Damn...thats how a vet does it...really nice...it's good to come back and see this Blak...all three stances were nice ...'thats my radiant mega-ton- blast,, ask who ate- the- dust -last// about the impact..of my pull out the gauge and bust ass...'- Nice...the flow was really precise... (NT) -- FLaTLyNe, 09:41:27 02/01/03 Sat
(((AUDIO)))"THIS WEEK'S SPECIAL" Good ol Swords-excalibur-caliber storytelling..Peep it while it's still hot! -- ===||Swords--->, 03:17:27 01/31/03 Fri
Yo the second beat is straight fire, flow blends with this beat very nicely. The third part is pretty nice too. I had already listened this morning but didn't reply. Keep doin what you doin (NT) -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 17:20:13 01/31/03 Fri
All right lounge, been elevating a lill bit, searchiing for that level yall..Just soem thoughts.... PEACE -- Pat D.A.W.G, 04:38:37 01/31/03 Fri
Keep on elevating........You have grown in YOUR lyricism......a little.....What's this "level" that you're trying to reach anyway?..... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�......, 11:48:16 01/31/03 Fri
nice spit, lyrically well written, had a nice poetic feel throughout!1 (NT) -- slick vic low, 13:21:20 01/31/03 Fri
Your lyrics seem to be coming along nicer as time passes. I encourage you to keep doin it man. Peace (NT) -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 17:15:17 01/31/03 Fri
ALL NEW POST........FORGET TRYING TO REACH "LEVELS"......These Are Two Poems That Reflect A Certain Mood That I'm In....Yes, It's Abstruse...As Usual....Warning: h � k �-A-linguistics, Hebraisms, Intrinsic Metaphors, Connotated-Terminology, General References, And Originality May Cause Mind-Stops...BE ADVISED BEFORE ENTERING............ -- h � k �-A-g � �/|_ A \/ � � h....aka tH� � l e � h �� |� e � � � �| J�, 13:48:56 01/31/03 Fri
These are also my verses for the upcoming five-man collabo from Lyrikil........ (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 15:50:26 01/31/03 Fri
Man yo shit is complex but nice all together nice post. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 16:25:56 01/31/03 Fri
Nice to see something new from you. The first sonnet was blazing, word connection was crazy as usual. The second one didn't flow as well as the first in my opinion, but I liked the Vietcong line. Peace! (NT) -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 17:05:56 01/31/03 Fri
Just got off work tied as hell, but still can't sleep ...Quick key...Hope ya'll find this entertaining ..Dlusional and War should...I know your watching.... -- Lyrikil..of..G3N@$yD3..........I gotta dip out I'll be back to reply, 07:19:59 01/25/03 Sat
lol @ "pretend soap" haha..a good read and it will be interesting to peep the replies to this...I think you said what you wanted to here...good stuff and funny too. Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 09:37:00 01/25/03 Sat
haha, don't know the other guy, but this was funny.. -- Watt$on formerly from Vocab's Official, 12:07:38 01/25/03 Sat
I GOT LOST -- GoNzO, 12:31:11 01/25/03 Sat
??????? Maybe im not deep enough...but i dont get it (NT) -- Tactics, 12:49:11 01/25/03 Sat
wanna see u n Dlusional have a text battle lol da lounge has been dead da last couple of days..would be cool to have a battle...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe...da Robitussin fiend, 14:41:00 01/25/03 Sat
Lyrikilled -- Venum, 14:45:47 01/25/03 Sat
lol@those who dont get it....anyway, i thought it was aight....a couple funny lines.....but yo, Dlusional said he wont be on for a minute so dont bitch about him responding.....and he's not going to respond cause he thinks this was real wack and not worth a response.....stay up though (NT) -- Vision, 16:45:27 01/25/03 Sat
flow is REAL nice..can tell it would sound good in audio. lyrix up to par ..make it into one and ill def peep good post 1ne (NT) -- Lucian0, 13:43:54 01/26/03 Sun
Okay, now I see what goes on in the Lounge while I'm gone......"Narrator"?...... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 15:01:18 01/31/03 Fri
!!!!!!! ATTENTION LOUNGE NIGGAZ ITZ AUDIO TIME!!!!!!..SORRY IVE BEEN GONE FOR SO LONG WITHOUT DROPPIN SOMETHIN...A LIL SOMETHIN FOR YALL NIGGAZ RIGHT HERE....PEEP..."INFECTIOUS METHOD".....!!!!!!!(text included) -- <<*****>>-----*---�L�k---�ARTH----*---<<*****>>, 00:51:48 01/30/03 Thu
I don't know man, knda simple maybe I need ta hear the audio, Some words were alright though keep spittn. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 03:20:27 01/30/03 Thu
Ur mic sounds like some shti from windows 95.... horrible quality, is this ur first audio?... aigh umm.... ur voice seems forced i dunno u shoulda kept a constant flow.. like when u started.. u kno u started a lil fast.. dem u stopped... n went all slow.. dat didn't sounded dat rite.... i dunno maybe is just me.... loose da adlibs.. other than that this was nice.. i like da beat...didn't really liked da chorus.. it was like dat r.a.k.i.m ... I just think u should keep a constant flow.. u'll sound dope.... 1 (NT) -- psych, 04:51:10 01/30/03 Thu
I read the lyrics.....this was okay....it would probably sound better in audio....Then again, this sort of reminded of listening to college radio a little too much.....Not saying this was wack or anything of that nature....just my honest opinion....Keep up and stay up.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 14:56:07 01/31/03 Fri
just a quick spit , about school n hospitals so peep and be honest when yall reply -- nemisis, 15:00:28 01/30/03 Thu
If this really happened sorry bout your luck, reminded me of "Brain Damage " too much elevate PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 15:07:41 01/30/03 Thu
haha...you writing on how you get picked on...haha..naw, this was cool, just shot them next time, save yourself some anguish...pz (NT) -- Essence....AM, 15:50:52 01/30/03 Thu
Damn...Something like that happened to me when I was 16......We mobbed them for a week straight afterwards..but hey I still feel ya..nice rhyme...Keep building...One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil...G3N@$yD3....The official sponsor of 211 for winos, 18:35:38 01/30/03 Thu
Rhymes were a bit on the basic side, but you got your point across.. did this really happen? (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 03:07:47 01/31/03 Fri
I liked it.....it seemed to be well-structured throughout.....Whether or not this is based on an actual experience, it seemed decent...Keep this up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 14:51:58 01/31/03 Fri
All right just chill with this piece here man!!! -- Pat DA.W.G., 03:15:54 01/30/03 Thu
YES LET US KEEP TRUE HIP HOP ALIVE!!!!!..nice shit yo... (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~ UP VERY LATE WITH A SEVERE CASE OF STREP THROAT, 03:22:59 01/30/03 Thu
Nice...all of a sudden gettin deeper...like Yu-gi-oh's voice. HAHA...ahem...Elevation more than noted from this piece. (NT) -- SleepAH!, 04:45:12 01/30/03 Thu
nice flow on this one , good lyrics too i liked this one alot (NT) -- nemisis, 14:35:58 01/30/03 Thu
this was tight,,you elevating man..keep on...nice flow and content on this piece...stay up...peace (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 16:17:19 01/30/03 Thu
This was damn good......even though you're caught up between being a "straightforward and semi-abstract" emcee like Common...Keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 14:32:30 01/31/03 Fri
THE LOUNGE OF LYRICISM RIGHT?�Well I�m expanding my horizons in lyricism, beyond plain ole rhymes�this is a poem I wrote the morning after I performed some poetry at an Open Mic at this little club�I call this piece, �I listen�� this doesn�t rhyme at all, but I hope the content and the actual essence of the piece will grab you�***PEEP WITH OPENMINDEDNESS AND PACED LIKE IF YOU WERE TO HEAR IT�DON�T SPEED READ�SLOWLY CONSUME THE MESSAGE�.ALL CRITIQUE IS APPRECIATED*** -- N.a.K.I.X.e.M. of Abzent Minded Ink of O.M.N.I., 12:24:05 01/27/03 Mon
this was dope... started off a little bit weak, but you made your point with the "extreme degree of racism" shit... then you started off graphic as FUCK on the second part... almost stopped reading... but i'm glad i kept on... shit was powerful... good work man. pz (NT) -- INTOX, 12:45:12 01/27/03 Mon
this was fuking dope man..i could almost hear you speaking it while i read it...this is some def-poetry ish at its best..i could picture you on stage speaking this very hyped....very nice display of poetical essence by ya..stay up and keep shining...peace (NT) -- Essence....AM, 12:52:43 01/27/03 Mon
astounding work...amazing display of talent in poetics, graphic and yet beautiful in its own right, very good work, seriously one of those type things that, unlike alot of rhymes, gets under your skin and sticks with you, almost giving you the chills....or maybe thats just the flu i got talking...very outstanding piece Nax... (NT) -- XitiZeN, 13:00:53 01/27/03 Mon
fuck this was deep!!!! (NT) -- rusty, 14:24:52 01/27/03 Mon
very nice...more on the inside if you care, just some shit off my chest inspired by your post -- Vision...Thrice Optics of Abzent Minded and O.M.N.I., 16:05:32 01/27/03 Mon
hmmm.. I thought this was real.. dope aint the word.. neither is nice or ill.. it was deeply real.. vivid with a harsh feel.. the end was a nice twist.. well thought out.. props on your thoughts in here.. stay up! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 18:28:47 01/27/03 Mon
This first stanza was wack because you obviously don't know the reason behind "extreme degrees of racism".....the second stanza was good...wasn't really graphic at all....and the third stanza was the best to me, stood out more.....Pretty nice....you just need to stop watching too much TV and pick up a few books....read on Marcus Garvey and Malcolm X....then you'll understand the standpoint from which I'M coming from..... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�....., 12:17:06 01/31/03 Fri
ILL lil keystyle.....just dropping some thoughts.....PEACE~ -- Essence...Abzent Minded..., 15:44:06 01/30/03 Thu
"pen play never stalls when I scribed this embedded etiquette"...this line did it for me ...Good shit...this thou "I submarine like a ham sandwich " ...please don't say that again..lol...One Hun'ed. (NT) -- Lyrikil....G3N@$yD3.....The official sponsors of marijuana for tikes....., 18:28:02 01/30/03 Thu
DOPE! schem was ill.. much more focused than usual.. just let the words flow on this one, and man did they flow.. nice lyrics except for, ya know, that one line.. (NT) -- ===||Swords-->, 03:05:47 01/31/03 Fri
DOPE ASS SPIT!! Very nice lyrics on this it flowed like the ocean kid PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 04:48:05 01/31/03 Fri
"im the Moses of hip hop cause of how I just make way"....<<<<<<..No you're not!!!!....This was good though....Keep on keystyling.....stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 12:04:51 01/31/03 Fri
Keyed Mentalz Collab...edysan3g..."..dEEZE nICCUH'S dONE sNAPPED....lITERAL____lIKE bi-pOLAR CAT'S WHO TAKE lITHIUM IN lOW INTERVALS" -- G3n@$yDe...One Hun'ed, 18:46:31 01/30/03 Thu
Yea this shit defiantly was hott.... Both had nice multi's and vocab..... keep postin, i enjoy reading this kinda shit....overall: 9/10 (NT) -- Thakin, 19:21:40 01/30/03 Thu
This was def. a tight read.. Nice lyrics kept me interested.. the main point of a text post.. good work. (NT) -- ===||Swords-->, 03:03:16 01/31/03 Fri
Not bat at all! Lyriics were ood in allot of places keep posting!! PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 04:44:06 01/31/03 Fri
Now that you have multi-syllabic structure down packed......try the next level......okay?.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 12:00:58 01/31/03 Fri
Repost...That Seven Man Collab that I mentioned below... -- Emcees in order of appearance: Lyrikil of G3N@$yD3, Swords of ENEMIES, Iron Monk of ENEMIES, Gutty of Absent Minded, Pathologist of Eloheim, Dlusional Of O.M.N.I, and Versatyle of Absent Minded�, 01:19:49 01/24/03 Fri
let me guess..u wanted people to be like "yea..d-lusional's was the worse"..lmaoooooooooooooooooo...u got me rollin on this...thanx for the laugh... (NT) -- LANOISUL-D.....i spelled my name backwards..i'm cool like you now.., 01:25:11 01/24/03 Fri
ohhhhh the longevity of this...illness knuckleheadz...show these niggaz how it should be done...!!!!! yeah..this is "too hard to understand" for jiggy ass niggaz..fuck em ..aint our fault we be smarter hahahaha...yall done it with this shit...peeez out!! (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:44:56 01/24/03 Fri
I remember this one. Shit like this should show yall what happens when people put heads together. Why don't you two battle, and at least get something artistic out of it? Yall both got more talent than the majority of people here. Put it to good use. (NT) -- §leepý: The ∑pic of Κa†a¢lÿzm...oh...and what happened to the DISS THREADS? Those were funny shit., 05:08:28 01/24/03 Fri
I'm glad you decided to leave out MY VERSE..........FUCKIN' IDIOT!!!! (NT) -- h � k �-A-g � �/|_ A \/ � � h�......., 17:48:06 01/30/03 Thu
FORMS OF A WASTED YOUTH! -- Warpath "The scorned soul of ELOHEIM!", 19:00:35 01/27/03 Mon
SIK...this was fresh, just what i needed to peep after a hard days work...nice drop..glad to see you 'round again...pz (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 01:04:17 01/28/03 Tue
WHAT THE FUCK YAL NIGGAZ SLEEPIN ON THIS FOR!!!?? I HATE THE FACT THAILL ASS POSTS LIKE THIS GET SLEPT ON BY A BUNH OF NO TALENT NUTLICKING BASTARDS SUCH AS THE ONES ON THIS SITE...THIS WAS PURE FUCKING ILLNESS....!!!! (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 10:42:17 01/30/03 Thu
Attention Attention Calling All Wack Ass Amateurs Beat Off To That Smut Mag of Yours With Your Own Blood Repost... was slept on -- G R O T E S Q U, 13:46:55 01/29/03 Wed
i liked this spit (even though a repost) still feelin it aswell i normally forget a bout rhymes in about 20 mins but this onw stuck wimme for sum reason....................... (NT) -- nemisis, 14:45:20 01/29/03 Wed
This was cool for a battle spit. Had some nice multis. Some parts you just threw to much in one line though. Overall it was pretty good. For future refernce, you my want to wait a lil longer than a day to repost, and I'm pretty sure it was Aretha who sang respect. peace (NT) -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 15:29:27 01/29/03 Wed
yo... this post right here was nicly done... ill multi's and dope structure... keep postin! (NT) -- the dark spitter a.k.a SuPrEmE VOcaB, 16:24:59 01/29/03 Wed
since when is "wack"italian for kill..."wack" is a "mafia" term for kill..people in italy dont be sayin im gonna wack you!....the first line was ass in my opinion..the rest of it was okay not that ill but it had its moments all in all it was a good peice...so peace (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:35:18 01/30/03 Thu
Nice and decent for a battle flow lost me very little but was a dope spit in all. Oh it was Aretha Frankling dawg its cool though PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 03:51:12 01/30/03 Thu
Key-style for the masses.. welcome the God back.. peace lounge! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 18:59:17 01/28/03 Tue
WoW now this was a dope ass key, content was ill, structured with muscle, damn, to many ill lines to bring to attention, well worth the optic splatter, keep on (NT) -- Grotesque, 19:10:47 01/28/03 Tue
wow this is long and red and i'm high so i don't know if I can really read it but i peeped it i know, i cheated but please don't feel decieted i'm not conceited just deleted...pz from archie and Edith... (NT) -- Peter Lynch...make some more money if your so hungry..., 23:04:37 01/28/03 Tue
This was a nice ass key. I found some parts a lil hard to follow though. Think it would be real hot in audio. Keep doin what you do (NT) -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 15:49:30 01/29/03 Wed
ayo... this post is kinda like a wu-tang/ killarmy 1997 style... very dope ish here... like how ya started off.... peace (NT) -- the dark spitter, 16:30:06 01/29/03 Wed
what up PATH????....still droppin that shit thats waaay over niggaz headz i see!...coo ...glad to see you still around..peace ! (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:40:58 01/30/03 Thu
Hot piece yo, sound better in audio got lost here and there Nice though PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G., 03:47:41 01/30/03 Thu
Just a lil bit of a song I'm writing about my relationship with Herb , Just lookin for some feedback -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 13:34:00 01/28/03 Tue
I remember when Aesop was talkin about weed in that collab I did in my first weeks here. I forget. I think me, J and Lyrikil were in that shit, too. (note: if any of yall find that post, lemme know) Anyways, I think this was flipped a -little- better. Keep it up. (NT) -- Sleepy D'Wulf, the EPIC of KATACLYZM, 13:46:53 01/28/03 Tue
word i'm feeling this.i to have married the tree's.i started at about thirteen and smoked everday since. it's been 10 long forgetful years.peace (NT) -- starks, 15:32:07 01/28/03 Tue
WoW that shit was ill, content was tight, flowed a river, I loved the lines from twice as mean to the Van Gogh, shit was crazy, keep on (NT) -- Grotesque, 16:21:49 01/28/03 Tue
pretty dope man.. I seen it done way better.. but still pretty dope.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:20:31 01/28/03 Tue
Pot is a beautiful thing aint it nice yall PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 03:42:45 01/30/03 Thu
A few more rough verses for the song I'm writing. First verse was posted yesterday if you want to check it first. -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 15:21:58 01/29/03 Wed
fuck that was some deep shit and i was feelin it, this is by far the best post ive read by you so far. (NT) -- nemisis, 15:27:32 01/29/03 Wed
nice. for real that'll be a hot track. good luck with the audio. Fire for sure (NT) -- starks, 15:59:21 01/29/03 Wed
ehhh..this wasnt the hottest shit i ever read..but it was str8..some lines were a little too simple..but all in all this was pretty coo..peace (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:05:16 01/30/03 Thu
I like love joints Brail, and this is nice real nice work yo, cant wait till the audio PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 03:34:30 01/30/03 Thu
Underground Nightmare. PEEP -- STARKS (the mouth of madness), 16:07:21 01/29/03 Wed
hmm, i read through this pretty slowly to get the feel of it but some of it i just didnt get like the beginning but the rest was cool not the best ive seen from you but . cool (NT) -- nemisis, 16:22:27 01/29/03 Wed
this was booty...nah im playin it was tight yo..coulda been more in depth.....peace (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 00:59:52 01/30/03 Thu
Beginging lines got me thinkning and I liked allot of the lines in here yo, nice one Starks.PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 03:29:57 01/30/03 Thu
a battle rhyme to lil lucky or lil d i dunno (kinda short though, like lil-luckys penis) -- nemisis, 15:11:11 01/29/03 Wed
Better luck next time (NT) -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 15:24:01 01/29/03 Wed
This was shit..it sucked ...it was horrible..and thats putting it nicley.. (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:23:29 01/30/03 Thu
god DAMN...U SUCK...like...for real...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 01:29:55 01/30/03 Thu
Man, you got a lot work in the lab to do, post when u put more thought into a rhyme Elevate SON!! (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G., 01:53:12 01/30/03 Thu
EMINENTS DANCE .. REAL AUDIO! -- Eminent "The Science of ELOHEIM!", 19:09:49 01/27/03 Mon
you sound like Black Thought kinda.....dont know if you heard that before....the quality was real good considering i had to turn up the volume all the way to hear it....beat is ill i like the pianos...or is that a xylophone, maybe a xitar but i doubt that....probably a guitar...dont know some string instrument cant tell its too low, but i like the mellody, ya flow fit the beat nicely...lyrics intense at parts depending on the emotion....ill audio here, where that joint you did wit words? (NT) -- Vis, 19:36:07 01/27/03 Mon
nice work... sounds like this was done on a cheap mic tho... dope content and flow tho... good work.. peace (NT) -- GuTTy JaCoBz- AM, 21:48:08 01/27/03 Mon
peep -- TOX, 22:49:56 01/27/03 Mon
This beat is real nice.......delivery is ill......... lyrics and vocab both felt.....sounds like a dodgy mic.....but apart from that this is tight....I wanna hear more of this (NT) -- Eternal the Student, 13:11:50 01/28/03 Tue
delivery is dope, mic kinda has that puuhhh sound on some parts, but overall this was real nice...lyrics and beat was ill...nice drop man..good luck on whateva ya do...pz (NT) -- Essence....AM, 14:23:27 01/28/03 Tue
the quality wasnt that bad..i really liked the voice and the flow the lyriks...this is the very first audio i ever heard from you...illness..one (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:51:27 01/30/03 Thu
KEYSTYLE........just got offa work, felt like dropping some shit.....peace~~ -- Essence...........AM, 01:02:06 01/28/03 Tue
no doubt a quality read. great word play. peace (NT) -- starks, 10:44:17 01/28/03 Tue
damn.. this text grabs me.. the vividness was evident from the very first words.. good job man, this was nice! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:35:36 01/28/03 Tue
i read this few times it was that good, word play was compelling dawg (NT) -- rusty, 13:23:30 01/28/03 Tue
I read this shit yesterday and didn't respond cause I got kicked off, but all I got to say is this was well worth the read, content was ill, wordplay was phat, all I can say is stay in space cause you at no one is at, keep on (NT) -- G R O T E S Q U, 14:47:31 01/29/03 Wed
This was a nice piece for real. Your words spoke volume. Keep doin what you doin (NT) -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 15:57:28 01/29/03 Wed
was kind of short... nice wordplay and usage of words... dope post kid. (NT) -- the dark spitter, 16:34:28 01/29/03 Wed
DEVELOP A WINNING INVESTMENT STRATEGY-WITH EXPERT ADVICE FROM "THE NATION'S #1 MONEY MANAGER" ***this you can't follow unless you can*** -- sincerely, Peter Lynch, 22:51:57 01/28/03 Tue
and PLEASE NOTE: the link inside is for an html color page in case theres kids in here who either can't change their font colors yet or only know codes for the basics... (NT) -- Peter Lynch without the money, 22:55:26 01/28/03 Tue
wdf was all this shit? lmaoo @ cock slosher... this was odd... what kinda drugs u on? "money see, monkey do i'll fuck with me to you fuck with you..." lmaooo (NT) -- Psych, 00:01:51 01/29/03 Wed
lay off da extacy yo (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 00:25:58 01/29/03 Wed
What are you talking about Psych? This looks like your style.. (NT) -- ===||Swords-->, 00:41:28 01/29/03 Wed
Lay off the coke, are u on crack too man? (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 03:06:05 01/29/03 Wed
Oh ya I forgot to respond, I was so qwick to take the colors, anyways this was really weird, this post had me like huh, I didn't know where you were going, I just didn't get it if there was anything to get but I did get the colors thanx (NT) -- G R O T E S Q U, 14:43:41 01/29/03 Wed
At this rate you could replace Bizarre from D12 anyday.........that works two ways though, ill let you figure that one out (NT) -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 15:43:48 01/29/03 Wed
BEEN WORKING Hard ta find time ta write 3rd shifts a bitch WHAT UP LOUNGE QIUCK KEYSTYLE FOR YALL. PEACE -- Pat D.A.W.G, 02:09:53 01/29/03 Wed
Damn it...there goes WARCHILD again... (NT) -- WHYMSICKAL, 03:44:36 01/29/03 Wed
nice post man. i personally think this is the best of your posts that i've read keep it up. peace (NT) -- starks, 12:23:53 01/29/03 Wed
WoW pat dawg, I thought this shit flowed fluent, content was ill, rhymed like an A.D.D kid, perfect if you ask me, I liked that line fuck it I liked alot of lines, shit was a real nice post, keep on (NT) -- G R O T E S Q U, 14:01:04 01/29/03 Wed
i didnt feel this for some reason ??? (NT) -- nemisis, 14:49:31 01/29/03 Wed
No it's not Warchild just Pat D.A.W.G. == Despencing Amplified Words Geographically (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 15:09:14 01/29/03 Wed
I gotta agree with starks man this is some of the tightest shit I've seen from you ever. The first half hit the hardest I though. Keep this up (NT) -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 15:35:48 01/29/03 Wed
Attention Attention Calling all Wack Ass Amateurs Beat off to that Sticky Smut Mag Of Yours With Your Own Blood...My First Battle Post -- G R O T e S Q U E reppin himSelf, 16:06:04 01/28/03 Tue
this was dope man.. I like the way you connected your sentences.. some of the lines I was not feeling.. but all in all this was dope.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:09:36 01/28/03 Tue
Religion will lead to the demise of all. A little something the keep my mind going -- starks(the mouth of madness), 10:32:48 01/28/03 Tue
ummm.. pretty nice flow man.. should've added more content on different scales though.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:32:16 01/28/03 Tue
i like this (NT) -- rusty, 13:20:48 01/28/03 Tue
This was alright, but like son said up top you could have went more indepth. Keep doin ya thing though (NT) -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 13:40:26 01/28/03 Tue
flow was their, scheam was aight, pretty discriptive, nice post, keep on....peep mines above (NT) -- Grotesque, 17:23:33 01/28/03 Tue
*Repost* My understandings of Overstandings and creations of creating.. Just be, the truth is always present why spend time searching for the obvious..? -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:44:25 01/28/03 Tue
the rhyming was pretty cool on this one, though some lines were pretty choppy i though, a pretty good try (NT) -- rusty, 13:27:09 01/28/03 Tue
I was feelin this, you had some real nice word connection and gave some good imagry. liked the buzzards sequence. Keep doin what you doin (NT) -- �r�il:The√�s��η�rψ of Κa�a�l�zm, 13:45:23 01/28/03 Tue
This was some weird ass shit, very nice content though, flow to me was ill, i wouldn't say choppy, very creative shit, nice post, keep on...peep mines above (NT) -- Grotesque, 16:56:24 01/28/03 Tue
my lyrics -- crackco, 16:52:02 01/27/03 Mon
well uh........hmm.........post in bars (NT) -- Vision, 18:06:45 01/27/03 Mon
not bad... sounded like a free-style! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 18:19:37 01/27/03 Mon
it was ok...just post in bars next time like Vis said....peace (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 01:09:02 01/28/03 Tue
lil key-style.. for the heads to pick up! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 18:17:42 01/27/03 Mon
this was also very dope..you got a very unique style, that takes a couple of reads for me to figure out what ya really saying....i like it a lot....ish that makes the reader think....thas what im talking about...keep dropping ill shit like this..stay up man...piece (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 01:07:47 01/28/03 Tue
jus a quick spit -- scoobie-smokin-doobies, 01:15:27 01/27/03 Mon
lol....come on dogg...you serious? (NT) -- Nakixem of AM/OMNI, 12:11:45 01/27/03 Mon
this is worse than my first spit (NT) -- rusty, 14:29:04 01/27/03 Mon
whack -- Nicky Nick, 17:11:44 01/27/03 Mon
lmao... ahahahah.. lol! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:11:28 01/27/03 Mon
u like steppin on rabbit shit?...lmao..dat's wut i understood...and another thing...i like my eggs scrambled but i don't rhyme about it...haha...back to da lab for u homie...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe...mournin for Oakland, 00:06:22 01/28/03 Tue
What is the Problem? -- Watt$on formerly from Vocab's Official, 12:24:26 01/25/03 Sat
it started nice but then ya lost me...some of the lines were eh? ..hooks are wack in text but the flow was cool...keep on (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 12:34:51 01/25/03 Sat
its good......But i dont know.. its missing something (NT) -- Tactics, 12:46:46 01/25/03 Sat
could have done without the chorus, wasnt pullin nothin... expecially in text. anyways, this was alright.. some shit i didnt know why you added it, but overall it was iigh.. nothin eye catchin.. keep elevatin (NT) -- ��mz. m�J�p�麺, 13:31:41 01/25/03 Sat
um the host is mean.... this flow was aiight im cant say anything cuz um im not good as other niggas/./.. -- GONZo, 14:06:46 01/25/03 Sat
scratch the hook......verse was straight....pretty decent flow and vocab here and there....yo you posted on da underground huh? you should bring more of them cats here (NT) -- Vision, 17:16:18 01/25/03 Sat
i actully like the beginning and then you fizzled out. but overall a proper post........lose the chorus. (NT) -- starks, 12:09:39 01/26/03 Sun
this was iight.. it started iight and kinda got worse.. but not to much.. stay up! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:38:07 01/27/03 Mon
Quick keypad...Might look kinda simple, but it sounds good with the beat i used -- Tactics, 12:27:25 01/25/03 Sat
uhm...you need to progress some kid, this was weak, look at some other posts and you'll see what I mean. It looks 'simple' because it is...just elevate your thoughts and you'll find your style..keep writing! Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 12:42:20 01/25/03 Sat
for a key i didnt expect much commin into this, so i cant say that im too supprised... flow was just real simple, mother goose type shit... work on your vocab, everything else will follow (NT) -- ��mz. m�J�p�麺, 13:27:50 01/25/03 Sat
NAH MEAN I DIDN't NAH WHAT U MEAN NAH MEAN (NT) -- GONZO, 14:04:23 01/25/03 Sat
yo' it's definitly not the greatest rhyme scheme you got going but it wasn't that bad. simple but i could see it spit over a beat and possibly being allright (NT) -- starks, 12:01:25 01/26/03 Sun
just nothing with worth.. iight at best, keep writing man.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:35:51 01/27/03 Mon
Heartbroken but moving on -- GoNzO, 12:27:30 01/25/03 Sat
Its good to see something diffrent on the forum but to me the rhyme is just not interesting.After i was done i was like.........ok.....yep...now what.. (NT) -- Tactics, 12:41:53 01/25/03 Sat
oh that's it ...I'm out...elevate and make the shit ryhme, I stopped after the second line sonn...damn (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 12:47:00 01/25/03 Sat
im gonna have to agree, i wasnt feelin this at all... the 'rhyme' and everything was off to me... keep elevatin (NT) -- ��mz. m�J�p�麺, 13:22:36 01/25/03 Sat
sound like some Cam'ron shyt...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 00:40:47 01/26/03 Sun
not feeling this at all. i gave it until the third or fourth line and almost threw up. (NT) -- STARKS, 12:04:53 01/26/03 Sun
yo, i think you would do better writing songs with vanilla ice, got the hint!!!!!!!!!! -- rusty, 12:48:44 01/26/03 Sun
this was better then the one up-top.. keep trying man! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:26:18 01/27/03 Mon
I dont know if yall now bout this shit but hear a flow about B-Boying...maybe i need to elevate...but this.is a part time thing (NAH MEAN)...mayb i should stick to breaking.... -- GoNzo (Imma try cuz i need to), 13:42:42 01/25/03 Sat
shorten your bars....elevate (NT) -- Vision, 18:07:48 01/25/03 Sat
*Looks down at Gonzo's replies*...NAH MEAN...YOU NEED TO ELEVATE.."NAH MEAN"... (NT) -- WHYMSICKAL, 03:23:04 01/26/03 Sun
so "Dick"...u got potential...just elevate and in no time you'll be writin some ill shyt....and oh yeah...LMAO@ u postin ur age n hobbiez n shyt..ain't tryin to diss u but that was mad gay yo lol..(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 04:15:12 01/26/03 Sun
stick to breaking sonn "NAH MEAN"...and stop clowning yourself there's plenty of others who will assist (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 09:16:40 01/26/03 Sun
i feel like you could definitely elevate to where you spit fire. so keep writing and growing.but the key is elevation. peace (NT) -- starks, 11:57:06 01/26/03 Sun
i think ya lines were too long, i stopped readin after the first three lines -- rusty, 12:54:46 01/26/03 Sun
that dick line made me stop reading.. keep writing and elevating! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:22:23 01/27/03 Mon
First part of something i hope to make into an audio soon. PEEP.........It's Called ''Mind Wanderer'' -- Starks (the mind drifter) aka the mouth of madness, 11:50:11 01/26/03 Sun
this was cool...the vocab was nice and I like the content but you say it's gonna be an audio and some of the lines look a lil long y'know ? like I don't see them fitting into the flow as much as others...but on paper it's nice... short but a real good read...peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 12:18:20 01/26/03 Sun
i liked reading this, though some lines i think just didnt flow but keep it up -- rusty, 12:45:30 01/26/03 Sun
I thought this was cool...if you'll be able to serve these long lines well in audio, then that is what's commendable...El-p has done it, but that's a different story...to ME, I've seen more glorification of your rhyming ability than mere mind staggering quotes which interests us more...but I won't hold you to that...good luck with the audio.. (NT) -- WHYMSICKAL, 19:00:08 01/26/03 Sun
this was aight...flow was cool, but ya lines was mad long had to read em faster than what they sounded to make em fit....well maybe thats just my flow, it might work for you...content was enjoyable enough, it kept my attention, good drop (NT) -- Vision, 16:17:50 01/27/03 Mon
Vision hit it on the nail.. I agree! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:18:55 01/27/03 Mon
just a spit, tell me if you like or if you dont -- rusty, 13:23:39 01/26/03 Sun
the only line i seen with any potential was the second line. the rest was no good. keep postin and rhyming and your flow will come to you. USE THE FORCE MY SON AND ELEVATE (NT) -- STARKS, 15:22:23 01/26/03 Sun
Son your wack... -- Tizz the Successor, 17:07:23 01/26/03 Sun
You had to bite & reword two bars from EMINEM...used it horribly too...what a loser...lol (NT) -- WHYMSICKAL, 18:46:17 01/26/03 Sun
is that your name or your excuse? (NT) -- INTOX, 23:54:27 01/26/03 Sun
WHY DIDNT YOU JUST GO AHEAD AND STEAL THE OTHER NOTABLE FROM THAT ALBUM..."you couldnt make the fans throw up their hands if they swallowed their fingers..." man Infinite is dope in its own way but you ripped off and reworded two of the best "lines" on there...SAD like "Da Raiders" (NT) -- intro, 01:12:03 01/27/03 Mon
-=shakes head=-.....damn....Originality is so easy to grab, yet impossible to some.....keep writing dogg...and buy other cd's other than Eminem's.... (NT) -- Nakixem of AM/OMNI, 12:20:43 01/27/03 Mon
hmmm... this was kinda wack man.. you said the same thing through out it.. (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:16:04 01/27/03 Mon
my second spit(i dont give a shit) -- rusty, 14:38:18 01/27/03 Mon
dont matter if you white....should have learned that by now, but you still need to learn to rhyme...like you went from "feel me" to "best mc' to 'stop me' to 'corny' to 'ignore me'....see that all woulda been cool if you left that line with stop me out or switched the words stop me with something that rhymed, cause then that messed ya flow up...try not to sound so.....uhh......'angry', that only works for a few people, be yaself and spit (NT) -- Vision, 16:10:56 01/27/03 Mon
um iight.. I was not really feeling this.. just sounded like you was .. well I dont know.. I just aint feel it.. keep writing though, peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 18:22:50 01/27/03 Mon
::::Quik battle verse...no need to really say his name..from anotha board peep and crit;;;;;;;; -- Lucian0, 19:38:55 01/24/03 Fri
some parts coo, others sucked...flow was pretty consistant (NT) -- Vision, 22:29:36 01/24/03 Fri
I agree with vision completely........ (NT) -- Lyrikil..of..G3N@$yD3, 08:45:35 01/25/03 Sat
you didn't have any decent punches here, who were battling? Frank Bruno? ...other than the line about "reconnect yah jaw" there wasn't a lot here...but 'I should see the other guy' right? ...stay up (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 09:57:01 01/25/03 Sat
flow was hot, content was a little iffy.. Punches were there, but not very strong...ruff and rugged..would like to see other battle verse.. one -- Watt$on formerly from Vocab's Official, 12:14:00 01/25/03 Sat
um it was allright -- GoNzo, 12:34:26 01/25/03 Sat
Hot Shit -- Venum, 14:55:30 01/25/03 Sat
Keyed piece Entitled..." OV@ Disrupt shit...like Comp. Viruses...and ENRON Paper Shredder's".....Keep it Moving... -- OV@KIL....What else can I say...One Hun'ed///G3n@$yDe...Over 1 and 1/2 sold!!!, 16:59:55 01/23/03 Thu
YOU DO KNOW that putting you're shit a different color does NOT make it better hahahahaha...just playing...nice drop! (NT) -- Pro-Log, 17:11:01 01/23/03 Thu
havent peeped any of ur shyt in a minute...was a nice read..nothing was like WHOA...but nice drop nonetheless..only thing i wasnt feelin was dat george foreman line and the pink font! lol..piece fool.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL ..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I., 17:15:59 01/23/03 Thu
NIce shit...Genasyde!!!!!!!!! (NT) -- Lyrikil..of..G3N2$yD3, 00:44:45 01/24/03 Fri
this was fucking tight...i liked the morse code line....nice drrrrrrrrrop!! peace (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:37:37 01/24/03 Fri
i like pink (lol) kewl (NT) -- Gonzo, 14:09:57 01/25/03 Sat
Some shit that I've been thinking about lately. It hasn't happened yet, but it happens to every writer worth his/her salt in this world...Read on... -- §leepý: The ∑pic of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 04:58:36 01/24/03 Fri
haha.....very nice and creative....nice read kid...keep them comin (NT) -- ��`�...��`Dialec� of A.M.��`�...��`�, 09:29:51 01/24/03 Fri
real nice commentary here sonn...I also like how you set it out , it read nicely and I could relate to the emotions and imagery you painted...nice drop peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ, 12:42:09 01/24/03 Fri
mos def a nice read yo..shyt was lovely how u put shit together...lyrics truly brought out the imagery on wat was going on..caught a lil flow in there 2 lol..good usage of words ..nice drop..keep em comin.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I., 16:24:41 01/24/03 Fri
good ish... LMAO @ to be continued! Already a novel hea, this was tight tho, real esoteric, but backed up with a nice flow and great imagery. Good ish fo real. One -- Watt$on formerly from Vocab's Official, 12:19:46 01/25/03 Sat
**~~DAMN IT..I DID ANOTHER AUDIO~~**...THIS ONE IS ENTITLED..."MENTAL STRENGTH"...THIS IS NOT A PUNCHLINE AUDIO..MORE OR SOMETHING TO VENT A LIL..FLOW IS A LIL FAST BUT MORE ON BEAT THEN PREVIOUS AUDIOS IN MY OPINION..I STILL NEED TO FLOW DOWN A LIL MORE...I'M GETTING THERE..I TRIED CHANGING A FEW THINGS TO IMPROVE QUALITY..HOPEFULLY IT WORKED..LYRICS INCLUDED IN INSIDE FOR THOSE WHO CANT PEEP AUDIOS.. -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.i....Proud Sposor of Da Dlusional Walk For Fun With All Proceeds Going To Wheel Chair People.., 17:08:52 01/24/03 Fri
honestly shyt is ight...i think if u make ya lyrix more simple and basic and shorten ya bars a lil ya flow will be more smooth stay up 1ne (NT) -- Luciano, 19:50:10 01/24/03 Fri
it was aight....i dont think you need to make your lyrics more simple and basic at all....OR shorten ya bars....just slow ya flow down. take ya time and enjoy the beat...just have fun with it, when you spit fast you sound too tongue tied and not clear enough...just take ya time with it, trust me you'll be aight and might be better off (NT) -- Vision, 21:38:44 01/24/03 Fri
Yeah work on fitting the beat better.. i wonder if when you write the lyrics if you have the beat going, and you're spittin it as you go along.. That's the best way to make sure the flow is right.. Cuz right now it just sounds like you're thorwing some lyrics over a beat with no regards to how the beat works at all, just cramming it all in there.. This beat is pretty nice tho.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 04:50:09 01/25/03 Sat
Now the beat I like...delivery still shakey...speak clearer...almost on beat ...get ya timing right...caught the part where you fucked up...keep practicing (NT) -- Lyrikil..of..G3N@$yD3, 08:48:33 01/25/03 Sat
as a keystyle it is dope, I wasn't realy feeling the audio because the lyrics where hella nice but maybe too contrived for an audio (without them I dunno what you are saying)...but nice flow at the beginning of the second verse and the lyrics were sick...peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 09:47:41 01/25/03 Sat
KEYED CYPHER JUST FLOWIN ON EM..........OFF THA DOME-PIECE HOMEPIECE! WHAT UP... -- ===||Swords--->, 04:13:44 01/24/03 Fri
Damn. That's pure shit. I can picture this as I read, and that means it's something good. Never rest. (NT) -- §leepý: The ∑pic of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 05:03:17 01/24/03 Fri
i could almost hear swords voice rhyming this as i was reading lol..some sick lyrics through this piece..both of ya'll definitely came nice...felt weird reading a text from swords lol..but nonetheless this worth the sorta long read lol..what i wanna know is..why didnt u put blak earth in ur title? or along wit ur name? lololol..fuked up..::shakes head::...lol@da message u left for me..wat a fool.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL ..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.i., 16:40:15 01/24/03 Fri
yeah, this was a collab right? Whatever, both came nice I liked the part about the "tanantula" and the part about "God passing out brains"...shit was nice and the last verse in red was slick as hell ...nice post peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 06:28:42 01/25/03 Sat
@------{ A U D I O }------@ OK.....second audio........NEEDs SOME FEEDBACK............something I wrote a little while ago.........Show some love on this one Lounge!!!!...........This one is called......'the STUDENTS' Testimony'...........PeAcE -- Eternal Student (UK), 16:37:00 01/21/03 Tue
at least i understood you..cuz i couldnt understand the other dude from UK lol..the flow was tight..beat was ill obviously lol...lyrics were coo..not really my type of shyt..but it was nice...good audio..keep droppin.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL ..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I. Proud Sponsor Of Da Dlusional Walk For Fun With Proceeds Going To Wheel Chair People.., 17:14:52 01/21/03 Tue
sorry duke.. I can't peep audio right now.. thanks for the look out tho! peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 18:11:58 01/21/03 Tue
beat is dope... i forgot where its from... first dude comes nice... accent aint too bad... hmmm 2nd guy aint bad.. accent is a lil stronger... but not a bad audio.. good work.. (NT) -- GuTTy, 18:21:36 01/21/03 Tue
Damn, beat was tight.. flow on first dude was pretty nice, was RZA-ish, Sunz of Man-ish.. here comes next dude.. his acccent aint ttoo bad.. ive heard some uk rappers with huge-ass accents hehe.. Lyrics were tight, went well with the beat.. Shit was a pretty damn nice audio.. Who's this beat from? (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 00:52:51 01/22/03 Wed
sick ...I love this and it was a lot better than the last one, I hope I can come like this when I start touching mics. The lyrics very nice and I felt the first part the most but a def nice audio with a sick beat...peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 11:43:29 01/24/03 Fri
**~~Another DluSioNaL Audio..**~~..SEEMS LIKE NO ONE ELSE WANTS TO POST IN HERE..WHEN THE FUK IS AN ABZENT MINDED CAT GONNA POST AN AUDIO BESIDES ME? LOL..YA'LL DISAPPEARED AND SHYT..ANYWAYZ..THIS ONE IS ENTITLED.."Various Moods"..if anyone could give me advice on how to fix the quality..let me know within ur reply.not on the subject line..like post inside the thread..TEXT INCLUDED FOR THOSE WHO CANT PEEP AUDIOS!! -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Proud Sponsor of Da D-luSioNaL Walk For Fun With Proceeds Going To Wheel Chair People.., 17:23:15 01/23/03 Thu
was a decent audio....quality..hmm, cant help you on that one besides get a better mic....didnt like either beat....parts of ya flow was good and others werent sounded better when your bars were more even or around the same length....keep at em yo (NT) -- Vision...i got cha back son...new AM audios in the process, 19:44:24 01/23/03 Thu
yeah, u might need a new mic... flow was a lil better... ad libs were real bad..lol way too loud and akward sounding...just try going a lil slower... take ya time.. its like ya rushing threw ya lines... (NT) -- GuTTy... vision, i hope those audios ur refering to are for the cd..lol, 22:42:55 01/23/03 Thu
Since you hate my honest opinion ..I'ma keep shoving it down you throat....Not feeling the beat....Delivery needs work...slow down and ride the beat...stop saying it fast and flow it...second beats better...the rest is the same...bottom line ride the beat...stop saying it fast and flow it... (NT) -- Lyrikil....Having ill lines and being an ill emcee are two totally different things...Remember that ...G3N@$yD3..., 00:54:07 01/24/03 Fri
quality was a little crappy but the audio was off the chain yo...i liked this..peace (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:17:25 01/24/03 Fri
first beat sounded like da barnum & bailey circus was on acid haha...most peepz didn't like da beat i see but i thought it was dope...shyt was crazy...1st verse had alot better flow to it than da 2nd one...but lyrically-wise,i don't think u could have come sicker,alot of good lines in here...keep elevatin and keep droppin audio's...1ne (NT) (NT) -- DiAtRiBe...da Robitussin fiend, 02:15:42 01/24/03 Fri
yeah i agree adlibs were very bad lol.. way too loud.. flow is getting a bit better.. try to see if you can find a beat with some louder hi-hats and try to ride them.. i bet it'll make your flow better.. (NT) -- ===||Swords-->, 03:32:04 01/24/03 Fri
Can't peep audios for the moment, but I love the lyrics. You obviously yearn to improve, and that's commendable in itself. (NT) -- §leepý: The ∑pic of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 05:11:32 01/24/03 Fri
iight...both beats was iight..second was better though....ya flow on both fell off at some points....but still u came good at alot of parts...lyrics was sick...work on delivery .....keep em comin (NT) -- ��`�...��`Dialec� of A.M.��`�...��`�, 09:26:30 01/24/03 Fri
my mind -- Rekless, 00:13:07 01/23/03 Thu
very short -- ????, 13:22:59 01/23/03 Thu
Nice...post in Bar formmm...Get a schemem going..??? (NT) -- OV@..took me a while just flow with what best suit's yu..., 17:02:16 01/23/03 Thu
didnt i peep this already??..is this the second time u post this?..ehh..anywayz..make it longer..put it into bar form and expand ur thoughts more and make it longer to get the feel for it.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I., 17:18:56 01/23/03 Thu
ITTS IGGHT (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:49:29 01/24/03 Fri
**~~A D-luSioNaL Walk Sponsored Audio**~~Entitled "Severe Sanity"..I THINK I FINALLY RIPPED THE BEAT ON THIS ONE..IF NOT..CLOSE TO IT I THINK..LYRICS INCLUDED FOR THOSE WHO SAY I SPIT TOO FAST..GUARANTEED ELEVATION FROM LAST AUDIOS I'VE POSTED..JUST PEEP!!! -- D-luSioNaL...Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I..Proud Sponsor of Da D-luSioNaL Walk For Fun With Proceeds Going To Wheel Chair People.., 15:35:04 01/22/03 Wed
yea, this was tight....beat was dope, and you came pretty damn hyped on this...good shit D....some words sounded rushed, but for the most part you came real nice...elevation is definetly evident.....nice to see you dropping nothing but audios now...keep rising.....peace mafaka...oh, and the conetent was dope as fuk.... (NT) -- Essence....AM, 15:52:09 01/22/03 Wed
ok, this was better... ur vocal quality is still kinda doo doo... but the rest of it was an improvement... peace (NT) -- GuTTy, 16:42:49 01/22/03 Wed
I can't peep the audio right now...not at the crib...but the text wasn't what I expected from you...I 'lll have to peep later might be better in audio (NT) -- Lyrikil, 17:18:54 01/22/03 Wed
wow, it actually played the whole way through without buffering...but emotion, but still sounds forced.....you started out pretty good with the flow then it fell off a little then it picked back up when the bars shortened up....you gettin better keep bangin em out (NT) -- Vision, 22:37:15 01/22/03 Wed
D'l...you doin good by doin these yo...for real...some kids aint got the balls to do it...thas cool in itself...i got respect for that...i think you should slow down. just in general. say things slower and more delibrately...use beats you feel...like i mean literally...some shit you can feel go through you and then just rip it...pz mofo -- N-troh, 00:22:47 01/23/03 Thu
sounded like a horror flick beat...which was cool...flow is improvin...like Essence said,u sounded hyped for this one...fav line was the straight jacket line...Robitussin line too haha..nice audio yo...best one i've heard from u so far...peeez out fool....wun(NT) -- DiAtRiBe...da Robitussin fiend, 01:51:37 01/23/03 Thu
sounded like a horror flick beat...which was cool...flow is improvin...like Essence said,u sounded hyped for this one...fav line was the straight jacket line...Robitussin line too haha..nice audio yo...best one i've heard from u so far...peeez out fool....wun(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 01:53:14 01/23/03 Thu
I like this beat, went well with the lyrics.. Flow is getting better, for these fast ones.. Kinda reminds me of sunset's first audios, except his flow was still better.. Lyrics were tight as hell to me.. I dunno what lyrikil was talkin about.. Fuck it, keep doin them.. you'll get better and better.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 02:02:58 01/23/03 Thu
very nice elevation kid......mos def u earn props....i like ur emotion on this..some words were rushed ....but still...u came nice kid....keep em comin... (NT) -- ��`�...��`Dialec� of A.M.��`�...��`�, 08:54:50 01/23/03 Thu
can't peep audio.......Text was cool...just shorten your bars up when you key your shit....I used to have long ass lines too till I had to key to beats when I did audios...even though my last verse with SET and Intro was ass, my bars were too long...Don't make that same mistake...from what everybody said, just pace your breathin and key to beats more accurately with shorter lines...should get rid of that speedin up shit...damn@you trippin on Lyrikil...I personally wouldn't of thought his reply was an insult....anyway...text was cool and all....p'Z (NT) -- N.a.K.I.X.e.M. aka Damien Christ of Abzent Minded Ink of O.M.N.I., 12:30:55 01/23/03 Thu
Ha ha ...Wheel chair Boy...Long time no Peep....i must peep the AUDIO...Text was blazin.. (NT) -- OV@..Yo this gotta sound good in audio,...Punches were like aight suhn....peep later,...Holl@, 17:06:16 01/23/03 Thu
umm...yeah.....i couldnt feel it....honestly.....punches were forced, as well as delivery, work on style, u sounded a lil monotonous, no real flow pattern, work on that...the game aint just about tight words and metaphors, its beats rhymes and construction....study NAS (NT) -- styliztik.,...aka....quote, 18:52:55 01/23/03 Thu
Heroine -- Native Brute, 09:43:42 01/22/03 Wed
New topic as far as I've seen. Read some bout drugs but u focused on ONE type. Language was very nice good figurative language in most parts too. Haven't read anyhting by u b4, nice post PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 17:07:37 01/22/03 Wed
Heroine -- Converse, 08:13:48 01/23/03 Thu
I dunno what pat dwag is talking bout..this is the WORST POST EVER READ...This is garbage... (NT) -- OV@..Stopped reading after first two-lines, 17:12:11 01/23/03 Thu

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