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every day ontology -- Monochid, 11:09:29 03/02/03 Sun
- Some lines were long but this was dope. THe content was on point for ya subject of metaphysics and our state of being, i think this is the first post I've checked by you nice job stay up (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 11:45:19 03/02/03 Sun
- DAMN!!!!I'm glad I checked this shit out...In the beginning I wasn't really feeling it ..but after the fourth line..the shit just got erupted... (NT) -- Lyrikil..of..G3N@$yD3, 14:26:16 03/02/03 Sun
- This is the kinda stuff I like to see in here. On track, well said and interesting. One suggestion....I was having trouble finding out where to start and stop in spots. That doesn't mean anything need changed, but you'd be even more destructive with a, more, user-friendly format. Sweet post. Looking forward to the next. (NT) -- Blueprint, 14:38:43 03/02/03 Sun
- This was very hard to read due to the fact that the scheme is just not there.. Work more rhymes between the lines to help the reader move along..Or learn to convey your thoughts in a more graspable way, so that you dont hafta make these erratic verses.. After all, we are just trying to read it.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 03:39:12 03/03/03 Mon
MILL' N' MAC ON THE M-I-C -- MAC MI$TA, 19:41:13 03/01/03 Sat
- first dude..shyt was like boring 2 me..i hope dat was a freestyle..cuz if not..then wow...it flowed tight..just no like..intensity or emotion..it like dragged and shyt..it was like blah blah blah and shyt..mac's shyt was nicer ..flow was nice..lyrics werent my style and shit but it was iight..not too bad of a audio.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...christopher reeves is gully..., 22:50:25 03/01/03 Sat
- LET ME ASK YOU A QUESTION..WHAT ABOUT WHAT IM SPITTIN AINT YOU FEELIN'.....GIVE A REAL CRIT TRIC'...HOLLA...BE BLE$$ED (NT) -- MAC MI$TA, 05:34:51 03/02/03 Sun
- sorry....still can't peep audios ya'll. (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 06:27:19 03/02/03 Sun
- yo even if that first verse was afreestyle i'd be embarrassed. sounded like an adult with a mental structure of an ignorant street thug attempting to rap. Mac your verse was decent though not really into that southern shit. peace (NT) -- starks, 10:44:02 03/02/03 Sun
MIDWEST -- A.K., 13:02:42 03/01/03 Sat
there is something you need to learn if your white (are you) ya aint aloud to say "nigga" in a spit dawg but still good spit though (NT) -- nemesis, 13:21:30 03/01/03 Sat
NO I AINT WHITE -- A.K., 13:31:35 03/01/03 Sat
Ak is my big homie Midwest Boys dog (NT) -- Lil' Jay, 15:52:24 03/01/03 Sat
Shut da fuck up...yall niggaz aint runnin shit...CINCINATI nigga..hey..dont rep the midwest if you just gonna embarass us with those wack ass rymez...peace (NT) -- P.T OF GROUP THERAPY, 17:24:45 03/01/03 Sat
ive had some writers block and this shit popped into my head, probably not the best but peep anyways -- nemesis, 13:32:21 03/01/03 Sat
You do have writers block...........But I know what you mean about the battlin shit like its too hard to elevate like the other kats on this bitch..like i couldn't put up a lyrical fight against some of 'em (NT) -- Sinister, 13:57:19 03/01/03 Sat
nemisis keeps it g -- Lil' Jay, 15:49:52 03/01/03 Sat
Yea, I really can't stand "fine chicks with eight inch dicks" either. That's the worst. I think we can all agree. (NT) -- Blueprint, 19:50:43 03/01/03 Sat
Capitol Sin The Self Conflicting conspiracy theory tyranny's near me and barely can hear me..I see the Lounge benefited from my Metaswords stage..I'm The Mimic (HOPE YOU ENJOY) -- Sinister a.k.a. T.H.E.M. the Self-Contrasting Theorem(What up Verse,Hex,and Swoon)I been readin too much Nostradamus bullshit, 13:26:44 03/01/03 Sat
this was hard to read cause you wrote it in paragraphs so i didnt get it all , so ok (NT) -- nemesis, 13:43:02 03/01/03 Sat
NOPE..fix ur lines...break em up...HOW DOES YOU POSTING A RHYME ON A PUBLIC BOARD IN PARAGRAPH FORM "MAKE YOU FLOW BETTER?"...WHEN THE READERS HAVE TO READ IT?...thats retarded......so lets say i give u the benefit of the doubt....that still doesnt mean u cant break up into lines..."SO IT CAN FLOW FOR THE READER"....if it helps YOU flow....then it should only help WHILE UR IN THE PROCESS OF WRITING IT at that time...peace (NT) -- S.T.G.E. Š aka "DAVID DUNN aka ILLER THAN THOU" of O.M.N.I.˛, 13:57:40 03/01/03 Sat
Dunn,when is your album coming out? .....and this rhyme was horrible.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 14:09:44 03/01/03 Sat
dope shit -- Lil' Jay, 16:10:28 03/01/03 Sat
IS THIS IN PARAGRAFH FORM YOU FUCKING DUMBASS (NT) -- A.K., 16:35:25 03/01/03 Sat
**SOME REAL LYRICAL SHYT NOT NO FAKE THUG SHIT DATS BEEN POSTED HERE LATELY..**PLEASE ONLY CRITIQUE FLOW,LYRICS,&DELIVERY.I KNOW MY MIC IS WACK & MY SOUNDCARD IS BLAH..JUST LOOKING 4 CRITIQUES ON WHAT I MENTIONED..SINCE DATS SOMETHING I COULD CONTROL ON MY OWN...ENTITLED.."MENTAL VISIONS"..LYRICS INCLUDED INSIDE...KINDA RUSHED THIS FOR SOME REASON..WANTED TO WORK ON OTHER BEATS ALREADY LOL -- D-luSIoNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Fast and the Furious 3 will be based on wheelchair races.., 16:05:01 02/28/03 Fri
no offense... but this was horrible... never in a million years would this shit get any CEOs attention... I hope you intend on starting ya own record company and new form of music... probably named cRap... horrible (NT) -- Morbid Armor, 16:35:12 02/28/03 Fri
This computer won't allow me access...but from what I read in the lyrics...I would've enjoyed the accompaniment of a beat to it.....Keep this up.....Coming from me, your content seems somewhat "deep".....Don't take offense to that...I'm just stating my opinion....click the name for the e-mail you've been in want of lately.....Keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h Ł k §/|_ A \/Š......Do you have the new "Murs" album yet?......, 16:51:42 02/28/03 Fri
Forgive my stupidity.......now click.... (NT) -- h Ł k §/|_ A \/Š, 17:20:31 02/28/03 Fri
ill wordplay and style is hype, feeling the flow and content alot, not bad work at all!1 (NT) -- slick vic low a.k.a. the lyrical leviathan, 20:00:07 02/28/03 Fri
BEAT was sick man.. lyrics was dope man.. the flow was kinda slow starting in energy.. topic was dope fit the beat well.. kinda sound like a Young sunset with a knowledge base-strickly for the purpose.. I enjoyed this.. what audio program did you use.. my cool-edit was a trail version.. so I can't make audios till I get a new program any ideas? "ONE! GET AT ME!" (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 21:03:52 02/28/03 Fri
Nice approach, my audio is on the fritz but this is just real wit the content. The intro was real nice wit the first bars. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:21:08 02/28/03 Fri
Flow is much improved.. Still a few lines here and there that you gotta rush.. Some of the syllables arent as clear as others.. Lyrics were nice.. Beat was ill.. nice selection.. not much else to say.. Good improvement.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 00:12:13 03/01/03 Sat
This was a pretty tight audio...when you compare this to your first, MUCH improvement on the flow...I think you still have to pronounce some words better, but other than that...I just think you've elevated overall...I like the instrumental...some smooth shit...and you rode it pretty well...but what am I to say???..lol...can't wait for the new shit...keep on gradually improving and you'll prove to be up there real quick...dope shit..peace (NT) -- WHYMSICKAL, 01:11:51 03/01/03 Sat
YOUR FUCKIN DUMB -- A.K., 16:03:12 03/01/03 Sat
REAL NOT FAKE(ONLY HAD A COUPLE MIN) -- A.K., 13:29:46 03/01/03 Sat
kinda tight post not ya best (NT) -- nemesis, 13:37:33 03/01/03 Sat
AK keeps it g -- Lil' Jay, 15:51:00 03/01/03 Sat
What a world we live in yall. thoughts for the lounge PEACE -- Pat D.A.W.G., 21:10:35 02/28/03 Fri
I really tried to get past the first 5 lines but the timing was off.. a little to long I guess with the completion of the sentence long-winded with liitle focus.. keep spittin' though.. (NT) -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 21:29:45 02/28/03 Fri
I agree with Eminent it didn't strike me hard like some other shit posted...think about yours compared up with theirs..you sounded bored (NT) -- Sinister aka T.H.E.M. The Herald of Extreme Metaphors, 13:43:03 03/01/03 Sat
to jay the hustler and the rest of ya fags that want some of this... -- the dark spitter, 15:14:34 02/28/03 Fri
why even waste ur time yo? dont give them attention like they deserve a battle rhyme or something..u know u nicer den dem..just leave it at dat..only bad thing...try and use spellchecker next time..::pats ya on the back and walks away:: (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I..wheelchair kids are nicer then lil kids on carriages.., 16:12:51 02/28/03 Fri
***Listening to "Callarama Gala" by Sonic Sum***..........yeah, I agree with D-Lusional on this....It was alright, which is to say that the rhyme was more than enough ammo for the cats you were aiming the pistol of lyricism at.....Sway yourself from perverse sayings of "wack emcees" and continue your journey on the rocky roads of elevating.....Keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h Ł k §/|_ A \/Š...., 17:02:27 02/28/03 Fri
Ehh dont say wack so much a lil time on ya thoughts it will come much clearer PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:25:41 02/28/03 Fri
you do have sum talent that needs developing. elevate! (NT) -- nemesis, 13:18:22 03/01/03 Sat
God please forgive me .. DON'T LEAVE ME! I need your light to see.. I LOVE YOU, DON'T FORSAKE ME! Please walk with me and HOLD your IMAGE. -- Raishawn - the ENIGMA of ELOHEIM I lead the pack!, 21:55:50 02/28/03 Fri
you and hex should start a game show called "can u understand me?" ..and just have dudes like u 2 say some shyt and make everyone figure out wat the fuk they saying..lmaoo..cuz damn!..some of the lines i'm like "dope shyt!" then another one i'm like "wtf this fool just say??"..this was..a ...interesting piece?..dont know how to explain it..lol...::shaking head in confusion::..i hope u find an audio program soon..to do audios rather den these LONG as fuk post lol...stay up yo.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL...Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...wheelchair kids who say they can walk the talk..is dat shyt confusing too?, 23:05:53 02/28/03 Fri
::If God is for us, then who could be against us::: don't look the other way anymore. peace. (NT) -- ThE INTroVERT of Abzent Minded Inc., 00:00:35 03/01/03 Sat
Yo, I liked that illuminating thresholds of resistance line I Can relate to to that in a sense (NT) -- Sinister aka T.H.E.M., 12:45:11 03/01/03 Sat
good job -- Lil' Jay, 12:46:09 03/01/03 Sat
CONFUSSING AS HELL -- A.K., 12:50:17 03/01/03 Sat
Trying ta stay up and regain movement to this pen PEACE -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:50:30 02/27/03 Thu
STILL lmao ... ahahahahhahahahhahahah! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 21:08:53 02/27/03 Thu
why haven't you killed yourself yet? I must not have tried hard enough last night... (NT) -- INTOX, 22:09:58 02/27/03 Thu
I don't know what these two up here are talking about but, about this post, I thought it was creative as hell. Keep up. You've been prolific lately. (NT) -- Blueprint, 22:51:35 02/27/03 Thu
This was alright. I couldnt tell if the lines were too long or not long enough, you kind of jumped around a bit with that. If you gonna use Bimbo in a rhyme you got to flip that better. Keep doin what you doin though (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 23:46:40 02/27/03 Thu
NOT BAD -- A.K., 12:41:24 03/01/03 Sat
(((AUDIO))) "VALKYRIE" REpost, yeah, but thoroughly slept on.... I think its my best yet... -- ===||Swords--->, 19:30:58 02/26/03 Wed
got to peep this early today from the original post..my bad for not replying...kinda da same shyt again..hard to hear anything ..lol..had to put headphones on and shyt..the beat was pretty coo...not something i'd spit 2 but yea lol..lyrics were nice as usual..u mos def put emotion when u spit..guess i needa work on dat myself cuz i dont bwha..anywayz..nice post as usual u ass sketch artist.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I..Do Wheel Chair Kids Just lower their head and move in a fire? ..like they suppose to drop and roll??.., 19:59:12 02/26/03 Wed
main loop? like a used condom...lol...... (NT) -- droopy bitch, who you think?!, 21:46:50 02/26/03 Wed
cannot peep audios at this time (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 22:05:33 02/26/03 Wed
I recognize that lil theme in the backround of the beat, I can't place it though. Nevermind I remember it was Real Live Shit..........anyway your vocals were a lot clearer than some of the ones I've heard from you. Lyricallly yor delivery was sound. This was nice overall.....peace (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 22:58:55 02/26/03 Wed
swords this bullshit is making me board your putting me to sleep (NT) -- Dlaster, 15:07:53 02/27/03 Thu
to dark spitter -- Jay Tha Hustla, 14:17:56 02/28/03 Fri
nice -- a.k., 14:48:39 02/28/03 Fri
dont waste your breath there buddy... your just a hater like the rest of you wacks.. QUIT WASTIN THRED PUNk.... THE HELL OUTTA HERE>> (NT) -- the dark spitter, 14:57:30 02/28/03 Fri
This has got ta be the GAYEST BEEF in here, why dont u two kiss and make up do go create a stupid ass post together, its like the ambiguosly gay duo meats Scratch and Burn LOL (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:41:24 02/28/03 Fri
spittaz a sippa -- c-dawg, 15:24:46 02/28/03 Fri
wtf is this? ur wack as fuk kid...go jump off ur moms head with a parachate u midget tosser...fuk was this?..get a hobby..go fishing or something..stop rhyming.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...want a new hobby?..try and put some chrome rims on ghetto kids wheelchairs.., 16:08:41 02/28/03 Fri
WHORE-ABLE... damn... this was weak (NT) -- Morbid Armor, 16:41:36 02/28/03 Fri
Please...do not disrespect the honorable art of lyricism with tripe rhymes such as this......Bring something intelligent, if not original, to the table.....Play around with word placement, word usage, wordplay, end-rhyme, internal rhyme, etc....There's many different ways to make yourself stand out besides "picking fights" with cats on a website...unless you're up to par with your "opponent"....Keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h Ł k §/|_ A \/Š...., 16:57:02 02/28/03 Fri
oh my gosh this was a waste of time to read.. plus it seems you used somone elses lines... WHAT BITCH YOU REALLY WANNA BATLLE ? (NT) -- the dark spitter, 17:14:28 02/28/03 Fri
pretty weak flow, wack content, lack of insperation it seems, or in lame terms, blah! (NT) -- slick vic low a.k.a. the lyrical leviathan, 20:02:38 02/28/03 Fri
Dont waste threads man if u serious about being a lyricist, hit the lab PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:23:09 02/28/03 Fri
a dark spitter early morning post... a key to sharpen the ill skills... -- the dark spitter... sorry if the post is mad short... ya'll know I'm capable of postin more, 13:10:32 02/28/03 Fri
better den the previous post i've read..some lines looked like u tried too hard..this wasnt bad..but nothing special either..keep droppin though..maybe those other newbies will leave once they see a somewhat of a newbie like urself actually has potential and they dont.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I..wheelchair kids have no potential climbing up stairs.., 14:03:17 02/28/03 Fri
ur a piece of shit -- Jay Tha Hustla, 14:19:30 02/28/03 Fri
not bad but your still a bitch -- a.k., 14:21:06 02/28/03 Fri
bitch -- c-dawg, 15:01:21 02/28/03 Fri
wrtie your own shit -- c-dawg, 15:07:00 02/28/03 Fri
How the days seem to slowly fade as the thoughts and intentions of men seem to evade a right or just phase.. let us birth a thought in reasoning and overstanding! -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 23:12:14 02/27/03 Thu
god damn kid...shyt was crazy..some parts i was confused as reading a hex post..but others were fukin sick..kobe line was hott..alot of niceness up in this piece..ur style mos def like on another level den most cats i've ever peeped..u on some shyt for real..like u sniff clue and smoke a blunt the size of a broom stick before u lace rhymes and shyt lol..ur mind is whoa! lol..nice drop though yo..yo..u have AIM or yahoo messenger? ...gotta holla at ya bout something.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Professor X is proof dat some wheelchair people have dope minds.., 23:18:31 02/27/03 Thu
I'm gon be honest, I found this really hard to follow. Your word association was nice and your vocab was intense, to the point where I just got lost. You seem to have a different type of style where you rhyme words that end sentances with words in the middle lines and such of the next. I'd love to hear it spit cause it would sound hot with this style.......Rembrandt/Gillette line was killin it...Keep doin you fella. Peace (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 23:40:31 02/27/03 Thu
yo dunn felt the last line of ya piece... nice vocab and ill format (NT) -- the dark spitter, 12:53:14 02/28/03 Fri
just a free written I wrote... to sharpen skills... peep and critisize -- the dark spitter, 13:30:16 02/27/03 Thu
not bad -- Begotten child, 14:59:16 02/27/03 Thu
Great free -- Lil' Lucky, 16:45:45 02/27/03 Thu
This was aiight...2 things thou...1..this is a keystyle not a freestyle...you don't write freestyle...2. a M-16 is a rifle not a gun..big difference...like I said this was aiight.. (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 18:47:46 02/27/03 Thu
naw man this was pretty dope man.. keep spitttin' peace! -- ELaSTiCs "The Loose canon of ELOHEIM!", 20:22:11 02/27/03 Thu
Not bad, i liked the first few bars but u said it was just ta sharpen up so stay up big manPEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:58:37 02/27/03 Thu
I was expecting a little more in terms of your lines cause this was pretty slim. It seems like you were writing something to spit outload. It was cool but short thats all. Peace (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 23:54:22 02/27/03 Thu
fag -- c-dawg, 15:11:07 02/28/03 Fri
Gangsta -- Chock, 08:29:23 02/28/03 Fri
uhh..it flowed? dats about it...as far as this being entertaining..i seen more excitement in old people's faces when their lunch comes out in a nursery home..i dont know yo..with lyrics like this..i'm suresure it would sound cool rhyming out loud.but reading da text is kinda wack..get a mic...cool edit..and record the damn shit..until then..please refrain from posting every again..thank u.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I..Wheelchair kids playing tag is more entertaning ...., 10:37:40 02/28/03 Fri
decent -- k masta, 10:46:19 02/28/03 Fri
pimp shit -- Jay Tha Hustla, 14:22:33 02/28/03 Fri
not bad -- a.k., 14:34:47 02/28/03 Fri
3-strong -- k masta, 11:16:24 02/28/03 Fri
pretty good -- a.k., 11:19:23 02/28/03 Fri
orgasm -- bubbly cum, 12:39:59 02/28/03 Fri
dingle -- berry, 12:41:16 02/28/03 Fri
another wasted piece of text... damn like I'm sick of these wack asses comin in here dropin nonsense... FUCK OUTTA HERE FAGS!!!!!!!!! (NT) -- the dark spitter, 12:49:11 02/28/03 Fri
another wasted piece of text... damn like I'm sick of these wack asses comin in here dropin nonsense... FUCK OUTTA HERE FAGS!!!!!!!!! (NT) -- the dark spitter, 12:50:28 02/28/03 Fri
this is good dark spitter eats dick email me pussy if u wanna say sumthin come to my house i dont give a fuck u stupid bastard -- Jay tha Hustla, 14:09:04 02/28/03 Fri
to dark spitters faggot ass -- Jay Tha Hustla, 14:11:13 02/28/03 Fri
Diss -- D-Formed, 22:20:15 02/27/03 Thu
"IM gona take on dlaster and that lil lucky;tear you both up, like a rubber ducky;"..ROTFLMFAOOOO!!!! (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.i...wheelchair kids are "too big" for rubber duckiez.., 23:01:23 02/27/03 Thu
damn.......yeah..........just damn.... ='( ......(NT) -- DiAtRiBe...feels sorry 4 u, 23:17:24 02/27/03 Thu
Ray Blaster? Who the fuck are you Marvin the Martian (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 23:41:56 02/27/03 Thu
lmao.. ahahha... omg I can't stop laughing.. ahahhaha! (NT) -- ELaSTiCs "The Loose canon of ELOHEIM!", 00:13:26 02/28/03 Fri
pimp -- k masta, 10:53:26 02/28/03 Fri
good -- c-dawg, 10:54:32 02/28/03 Fri
Fine -- Lil' Lucky, 11:21:34 02/28/03 Fri
D-Formed.. cblmdm65-221-33-25.buckeye-express.com / 65.221.33.25..Lil Lucky..cblmdm65-221-33-25.buckeye-express.com / 65.221.33.25..ya dumb fuckin' herb..u forgot about da IP Addresses..u throwin battle verses at urself..lmfaoo..fuk outta here wit dat..and since i'm havin fun exposin u..those two fags dat replied to this piece of shyt post.."k masta" and "c-dawg"..they got da same IP too.is dat ur gay lover u got to reply to ur posts to make urself feel better? u r officially da biggest loser on this lounge(NT) (NT) -- DiAtRiBe..feels sorry 4 u..., 12:37:23 02/28/03 Fri
Oh -- D-Formed, 13:15:28 02/28/03 Fri
HAHA -- D-Formed, 13:23:40 02/28/03 Fri
I had to do it Pt 2. (Once again it's on) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 13:06:32 02/27/03 Thu
yo this was the best drop I've seen from you ever... real good! (NT) -- ThE DaRk SpItTeR of the ReAlMs, 14:44:00 02/27/03 Thu
ONE the creative tip, Its one of the best Ive seen -- Begotten child, 15:03:56 02/27/03 Thu
phat shit I really liked it (NT) -- Dlaster, 17:51:26 02/27/03 Thu
One of the best iv ever seen -- Lil' Lucky, 18:03:14 02/27/03 Thu
Now this is what I'm talking bout...drop some knowledge on these cats...and that Adolf Hitler quote...that's bout the only truthful thing he ever said...One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 18:56:38 02/27/03 Thu
wow .. very impressive man.. very nice.. imformative.. great drop man! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 20:39:04 02/27/03 Thu
Knowledge is power and this spit makes u a very powerful man, I was wondering why I aint seen u in a minute. The crowd questions was a nice twist, the last verse was dope (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G., 21:01:32 02/27/03 Thu
Just the fact that you've organized all of this information, and brought it full circle is impressive. This is excellent. This is what I would like to do someday. With your ablility to relate facts you could apply yourself to bigger projects?????? Looking forward to the next. (NT) -- Blueprint, 22:58:37 02/27/03 Thu
tight ass ryhme -- k masta, 10:59:29 02/28/03 Fri
Elastics the rubber-band luva man has returned.. get ready for the curtain! -- ELaSTiCs "The Loose canon of ELOHEIM!", 20:18:08 02/27/03 Thu
u suck do u know how to rhyme (NT) -- white knight, 20:48:57 02/27/03 Thu
There is potential if u switch up the rhyme scheme and elevate, maybe ya trying too hard nothing really caught my eye stay up (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G., 20:55:28 02/27/03 Thu
God just shut up already, you get one comment and you run all over the lounge saying shit like a bitch in high school little girl (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:19:58 02/27/03 Thu
Hahahaha If you ain't put your name I would swear this was Kool Keith. Kind of reminded me of him on his Black Elvis/Lost in Space joint. It was different but I liked it......Just for the record how many different names do you go by? (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 23:51:44 02/27/03 Thu
real -- c-dawg, 10:57:14 02/28/03 Fri
Perfected ASSULTS winding winds cycling lifts global in SENSE, 6 men gist- 144,000 ascend marrow behind- angelic at times I sign the TRUTH, documented for the YOUTH.. I angle the TROOPS roots strong timberland BOOTS tied to the words of this poem peep the SONG! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 16:20:37 02/26/03 Wed
I almost had it....but lost it...JUST PLAYIN'.....You used slant-rhyme and other schemes in this post.....I enjoy it when you do that!!!....Keep this up....and....stay up..... (NT) -- h Ł k §/|_ A \/Š...., 16:33:36 02/26/03 Wed
Peace be unto you to god......whoaa ness (NT) -- OV@KIL...Yo long time no peep...as since before ya my fav lounge reppa...very vivid with thoughts...very deep in thought...Very Ill...Ht ya boy a Ovakil2k..on yahoo..holla, 17:16:22 02/26/03 Wed
Nice wordplay and vocab, I liked the POE referance and the 5 bars below that allot, the other parts were dope too NICE. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 18:19:04 02/26/03 Wed
P.E.A.C.E....G.O.D...This was tight...although everytime I read your work I can't help but wonder where do you get your weed from ...One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 19:41:57 02/26/03 Wed
paththologist... your word usage in ya rhyme was amazing... the vocab was one of my favorites... maybe in the future I can do a ill ass colab with ya... peace (NT) -- The dark spitter, 12:53:36 02/27/03 Thu
so its like that fam??.....lol...just kiddin man,..heard you were up at the HEAT battle last tuesday...I was up in Pontiac at the O Type show.....once again man...HOLLA at ya boy.....(wordy48214@yahoo.com)...peace (NT) -- WORDS, 16:49:34 02/27/03 Thu
20 bars......This don't really stay on topic, I haven't wrote in a while so it's more like an exercise gettin me back in routine -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 22:43:37 02/26/03 Wed
just a reply -- chromenine, 08:14:17 02/27/03 Thu
nice flow man.. peace! (NT) -- ELaSTiCs "The Loose canon of ELOHEIM!", 20:42:17 02/27/03 Thu
Nice exercise wit the wordplay, I feel ya PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G., 21:03:42 02/27/03 Thu
This is nice too. (NT) -- Blueprint, 23:03:14 02/27/03 Thu
Keyed mentalZ...entitled Wh@t If????????? -- Ov@kil.....PropaGanDuh.....g3n@$yDe....one Hunned, 17:17:38 02/26/03 Wed
Aye...so uhmm what happened to coming to smoke a blunt...huh???...Aye I think I found out what's wrong with the whip..holla atcha boi...One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3.....Oh yeah tight key, 17:44:04 02/26/03 Wed
This was okay.....I've seen better......I see a sort of different rhyme scheme in this one....The "What If" was kind of "iffy" to me....but that's just from my perspective.....Stay up.... (NT) -- h Ł k §/|_ A \/Š...., 17:48:10 02/26/03 Wed
Random thoughts, cool u gotta get it off some how, seen you come better though PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 18:15:50 02/26/03 Wed
LOL dlusional had me crackin up, so i wasnt in the right mood to read this, i dont think.. i know youve come way better though.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 19:52:37 02/26/03 Wed
different style and mood.. well up on the change.. keep your mind open sun.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 21:53:22 02/27/03 Thu
AN ALL-NEW POST....."One Man's Spirit" Part 5....Warning: h Ł k §-A-linguistics, Intensive Rhetoric, Intrinsic Metaphors, and Hebraisms May Cause Mind-Stops...BE ADVISED BEFORE ENTERING... -- h Ł k §-A-g Ř ń/|_ A \/ Ą § h....aka tHŁ l e § h ř |Đ e § § Ą Ł| JŠ, 17:46:46 02/26/03 Wed
Okay, i'am not up as you are on religion but I dig this. i was pissed cus there was no sonnet, i couldn't feel a flow but ya vocab definetly makes up for it.The beginning bars were cool for us laymen good post PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 18:12:07 02/26/03 Wed
Lyrics lost me.. and it didnt help that i did not catch the flow at all.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 19:37:31 02/26/03 Wed
No Comment....... (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 19:44:38 02/26/03 Wed
i read this before replyin to swords..yo..seriously..i need like some footnotes when reading ur shyt..i cant even like pronounce some of the words u use and shyt..most of us dont understand wat the hell u writing..TRY and break it down for us or something cuz whoa...shyt is crazy..and yea..no flow in here at all..but then again i doubt u care..at least put like a lil paragraph in like 2003 terms so we know wzup lol...u still havent answered my question if u have AIM or Yahoo messenger.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I..KIds In 2003 have better wheelchairs then the ones in 1637 A.D., 20:03:24 02/26/03 Wed
that paragraph up top was fire... even though i have ABSOLUTELY no idea what you're talking about half the time... the rhyme scheme kept me interested... then, I dunno... kinda... stopped rhyming. My favorite bar was the one that started out like "You dont have to tell me Satan hates me" and ended with "speak so innately" or something like that... I'm a fan of intelligence in rhymes. why dont you do audios? (NT) -- INTOX, 21:01:15 02/26/03 Wed
i love this shit, it takes time and energy to deciper everything, but this is my kind a ryme (NT) -- da mad hermit, 22:41:53 02/26/03 Wed
I really enjoy reading your shit. Your word-connection is fuckin crazy and you usually do have something to say in each post despite how confusing it comes off. This was basically what I expect to see from you........Oh yeah that line about the sold souls/ticket stubs was sharp too. Stay Up (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 09:37:38 02/27/03 Thu
that crazy unbelievable rhymes -- Lil Jay, 12:51:40 02/27/03 Thu
damn I don't know why peeps find it so hard to understand you.. nice shit.. different stance I see.. man thanks for the wishful thinking foreal.. I never said so.. be safe and keep kicking the truth from Gods of men.. or men of GOD's it's whatever really.. get at me.. my shit's been down, wanted to holla at you about another theory! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 21:48:31 02/27/03 Thu
LET ME PUT IT LIKE THIS....... -- droop, 21:33:28 02/26/03 Wed
Is this your first rhyme ever written? I'll base my reply on your answer... (NT) -- INTOX, 22:02:29 02/26/03 Wed
not my steez, but do you, stay up..peace (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 22:02:46 02/26/03 Wed
let me put it like this...your fukin horrible..go build a house with toothpicks or something..these rhymes are fukin horrible..i could sound iller saying my shyt backwards...and wat da fuk u doin sayin some shyt bout a condom name on swords post? like he stupid or something?..ur fukin name is DROOP...wtf?!?....yea..u really are "shit"..pat dawgs friends gave u dat nickname when u took a shyt on urself or something?? (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Wheelchair kids could still droop on u.., 22:09:54 02/26/03 Wed
I think I'll keep my comments to myself about this..ummm..what ever it is (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 22:37:46 02/26/03 Wed
What you need to do is put in some work with the pen and paper. Forget about guns you don't have and crimes you'll never commit. (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 22:53:47 02/26/03 Wed
Droopy DLAS what's the difference..and HAHAHAHAHAHHA @ this rhyme.. Im sure 50 cent would be ashamed that you bought his album.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 01:49:01 02/27/03 Thu
No way man, rhymes like this dont mix wit hip hop like 2 dicks, elevate in the lab son PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G., 21:06:13 02/27/03 Thu
Fuck, fuck!!!! what about skills tired of getting slammed life aint always perfect and I'am trying ta get it staright keystyle ta ease my chest.PEACE -- Pat D.AW.G, 18:06:51 02/26/03 Wed
I liked the beginning.. HAd soem nice expression of feelings, flow was aight.. different.. BUT, startin shit wiht INTOX is not good for your health.. just warning ya.. (NT) -- ===||Swords-->, 19:34:14 02/26/03 Wed
this wasnt dat bad til u started dissing intox..its like u were rhyming the way u do...den went into a lame as fuk battle spit to someone who is like a thousand times better den u..should have just posted like two seperate things..not like mix a diss with a reg. verse feel me??..so yea..hopefully intox ignores this or ur gonna be embarrassed again.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I..Imagine a wheelchair kid intoxicated...just rollin around in circles.., 20:09:51 02/26/03 Wed
sorry... I don't battle illiterates. And change your name. Adding "Dawg" to your first name doesn't make you real. (NT) -- INTOX, 20:52:39 02/26/03 Wed
this was OKAY...BUT...it wasnt much of a battle stance and it sounded like it was a generic "insert name here" verse...your friends called you "DAWG?" pretty original...people have called me dawg, man, dude, guy, kid, homey, bro, g, buddy, pal,..but i wouldnt call them "nicknames" and what exactly is an "amplified word" is that when you lOWER cASE tHE fIRST leTTER and cAPITALIZE tHE rEST D.A.W.G? do an audio... (NT) -- INTROVERT -abzent minded-, 21:35:41 02/26/03 Wed
damn, ive been gone but yo you elevated your shit big time. well done (NT) -- da mad hermit, 21:45:40 02/26/03 Wed
Sword your rhymes are about as sharp as the end of my dick reading your shit makes me sick. DAWG way out west is where Knight and DLAR dominate reading your shit is going to make us incriminate your lyrics with those of sword as reading your guys shit is making us sick. (NT) -- White Knight, 22:14:15 02/26/03 Wed
This was aiight...could've been better..The part where you dissed Intox started out funny to me ..but then got boring...I'm not a big fan of Intox's posts but from what I have read of his and what I've read of yours I agree with everyone else..you are not ready...aand sorry but I also agree with them on the name but hey do you (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 22:22:59 02/26/03 Wed
Well I thought the rhyme itself was alright. Had some nice one liners in there and shit. As far as the Tox thing goes well you gotta learn to walk before you run, I'll leave it at that. Peace (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 09:41:04 02/27/03 Thu
straight -- Lil Jay, 12:49:25 02/27/03 Thu
the dark spitter presents... diabolical formations.... peep this... -- the dark spitter aka vocab supreme, 15:39:12 02/26/03 Wed
Ummm.....I felt parts in this.....the overall layout of the rhyme isn't that much of an "attention-getter"....I'm not knockin' your rhyme at all, I'm just stating the facts from my perspective....In my PERSONAL opinion, whenever it comes down to rhyming about the devil...be sure to bring a different aspect out....Everyone may not believe that a "Devil" exist, but a lot do...Some just don't know the many disguises he can utilize....keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h Ł k §/|_ A \/Š...., 16:21:21 02/26/03 Wed
hmm.. where you saying YOUR the devils advocate? -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 16:28:18 02/26/03 Wed
Shutt up Heks...critique the rhyme....review it from diff aspects... (NT) -- OV@KIL.....feel ya duhn.....I agree with heks about layout..but it's more than that, 17:26:36 02/26/03 Wed
Diabolical formations (ruined) -- Lil Lucky, 17:44:10 02/26/03 Wed
Diabolical formations (ruined) -- Lil Lucky, 17:45:58 02/26/03 Wed
Some sick shit (biting is forbiden) -- Dlaster aka the Fugitive from New Zealand, 16:24:16 02/25/03 Tue
This is your boss speaking what are you doing I pay you to work not go on some half pie web sites -- SIR, 17:12:44 02/25/03 Tue
This is your boss speaking what are you doing I pay you to work not go on some half pie web sites -- SIR, 17:12:46 02/25/03 Tue
not bad. had some repetativeness to it but overall a decent post keep showing. peace one! (NT) -- starks, 17:28:55 02/25/03 Tue
This was....so-so....not knockin' your post or anything remotely related to that....I just wasn't "moved" by your use of end-rhyme with this post....I liked the post below better.....Keep up and stay up though.... (NT) -- h Ł k §/|_ A \/Š...., 17:32:05 02/25/03 Tue
Uhm...well...I flowed this to a beat and it actually sounds good. The only thing though is that you called yourself "synthetic"....filler word I guess cuz in your title you said "bitin is forbidden"....then you came back and said you rhyme "authentic" ...I mean pick one already. Other than that..I like this post, just need to branch a bit on word selection....keep postin yo...Peace (NT) -- Flymizess * 1st Lady of O.M.N.I. -- The Accent of Tundra and Camelions', 18:50:11 02/25/03 Tue
The flow was there but I didn't like the way u connected words, i could understand if it was a true freestyle, some content was nice though keep up peace (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:42:53 02/25/03 Tue
LOL i think that youre not as ill as you think.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 02:55:13 02/26/03 Wed
that was ok... but uhmm... you've got some anger in you (this is about your replies)... you need professional help guy... (NT) -- Darknodin is Comin, 10:09:39 02/26/03 Wed
This site is mean but it needs some real MCs -- dlaster, 00:30:15 02/26/03 Wed
LOL ok sailor.. This sure is a battlefield when some ass-soldiers come posting bullshit.. Who gives a fuck if you're in New Zealand.. Does that make you better? Did go platinum in the "Koala" market? Here, have some pop rocks and soda.. itll make you feel better.. (NT) -- ===||Swords---> count to 10 and breatttthhheee.., 02:46:01 02/26/03 Wed
whut tha hell is this????? new zealand "invading" the lounge???? (NT) -- Darknodin..., 09:51:13 02/26/03 Wed
your ignorance is aw inspiring (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:19:00 02/26/03 Wed
Why waste a thread running ya mouth, do it in a post jackass (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 18:25:53 02/26/03 Wed
''Stark Love'' PEEP just a verse i wrote to this girl i've been kickin it with. Let me know what yall think. -- starks 9the mouth of madness), 14:54:22 02/26/03 Wed
very nice piece... very emotional... "a softer side to a jagged edge" dope line man (NT) -- dark spitter, 15:11:37 02/26/03 Wed
I totaly feel it -- Lil Lucky, 15:31:01 02/26/03 Wed
word.. don't fall to deep though.. pain comes from love.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 16:34:55 02/26/03 Wed
This reminded me of my old posts from 2001 where I had a couple of posts dedicated Alicia Keys and Angelle Brooks...HAHAHAHA.....but this was nice....keep Love in check though.....Keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h Ł k §/|_ A \/Š...., 16:45:19 02/26/03 Wed
Yah, i agree wit PATH, there is allot of pain wit love. I feel this yo, i love love joints, cant point out 1 thing but I will say that there is nothing in here i didn't like. (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 18:23:01 02/26/03 Wed
Life 1 -- Lil Lucky, 15:26:16 02/26/03 Wed
Yall dont have to say, i messed it up bad -- Lil Lucky, 15:32:45 02/26/03 Wed
Yeah, listen to Path.....You'll elevate in time....just make sure that you tell yourself to "Bring my ideas to the table cloaked under the arms of originality!"....Then you'll see improvement....Keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h Ł k §/|_ A \/Š...., 16:39:08 02/26/03 Wed
Agree ...just be ya-self..regardless off others thoughts...yet take critical info into mind...peace (NT) -- OV@.....one Hunn'ed, 17:33:57 02/26/03 Wed
The Present..... -- Darknodin!, 09:40:04 02/26/03 Wed
War is a tool of the devil, those who feel it's grips as in themselves are condemned to its folly. keep writting, peace! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:13:13 02/26/03 Wed
yo flow was kinda mixed up in places. not feeling your content on dissin canadians. which i happen to be. although i live in massachusetts i got fam up there. peace (NT) -- starks, 12:47:03 02/26/03 Wed
allright piece... typical war stuff I here every time... (NT) -- the dark spitter aka vocab supreme, 15:19:51 02/26/03 Wed
Where is it that I can go to find peace? I need to release these feelings of grief, Jehovah please hold your Witness, until the suns burn out. Give me guidence when I'm in the mist of the drought, show me your love.. remove the fear from my heart, LOVE AS I LOVE YOU AND NEVER LEAVE ME STRANDED IN THE DARK! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:09:09 02/26/03 Wed
this had alot of creative figurative speech in it. almost heard you speaking first person. hard to catch a flow to it if there really was meant to be one. but proper thoughts. peace (NT) -- starks, 11:53:02 02/26/03 Wed
ayo path... this piece was the most spritually gifted rhymes I ever seen from the lounge ever... peeps might think this dident have flow but I'm sure the blood of christ flows withen us... keep droppin (NT) -- the dark spitter aka vocab supreme, 15:16:15 02/26/03 Wed
**Walkin Wheel Chair Man Is Back For A Quick Drop**..DAMN..THE LOUNGE SEEMS DEAD LIKE WARCHILD'S FANBASE..ANYWAYZ,PEEP NEW AUDIO FOOLS..PEEP WAT I WROTE UP TOP OF LINKS BEFORE YOU PEEP&REPLY..LYRICS INSIDE FOR THOSE WHO HAVE LIKE 14.4 K PC'S AND CANT PEEP AUDIOS... -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Makin Speeches For Wheel Chair Associations To Make Dem "Stand Up" for Themselves.., 12:53:54 02/25/03 Tue
ahhh damn... this beat is dopeness...your vocals are kinda loud... overshadows beat a lil bit.... not bad tho... like the saddam line... an improvement definetly.... stay droppin (NT) -- GuTTy, 15:08:53 02/25/03 Tue
gutty ur a fukkin ass fireman, did u read the top critique on flow and delivery....so...ur delivery was late so i want my pizza for free, and ur flow was cement kid! stay pouring!! naw on the really realz ur delivery is much improved and ur flow as well...ur hitting the beat way more nicely than u use to....so yeah stay on the up and upperz and tell me how i can get an application so i can be one of ur abzent minded colleagues...what do i gotta do to be in?...sacrifice a family member?..tell gutty hes a fukkin clown?..hey gutty..."youre a fukkin ass raping clown" haha uno.. (NT) -- 7 Bolivares (venezuelan currency), 15:32:58 02/25/03 Tue
nice ass beat...i think i woulda liked to murder this...like i said on aim i when i read it i didnt know how you were going to flow it or how it would sound...but you pulled it off pretty well...flow is getting better, you're riding the beat better than you have before....and quality doesnt really sound as bad as you say...sounds pretty good on this comp, just vocals a little loud thats all...good drop yo (NT) -- Vision, 15:35:31 02/25/03 Tue
Damn I like this beat....lyrics nice...work on delivery...make it flow better...even if you gotta rewrite the whole thing...you need to be more hype with lyrics like yours...I can't talk I can't get hyped for shit with out a live audience or a real studio...you have improved like vision said...keep working on it (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 16:22:14 02/25/03 Tue
Well you want honesty so peep inside...let me break it down to you... -- Flymizess * 1st Lady of O.M.N.I. -- The Accent of Tundra and Camelions', 17:30:26 02/25/03 Tue
beat is mad tight, u allways pick sick beats....ya delivery is mad improved....u have too many run on sentences which makes the flow a lil off at soem points....this is much improved yo....flow was good..but like i said, it fell off sometimes....lyrics was sick as usual....if u spit wit a lil more emotion it would be even nicer....good drop (NT) -- Ť´¨`ˇ...ˇ´¨`Đialec of A.M.´¨`ˇ...ˇ´¨`ť, 12:22:51 02/26/03 Wed
What up lounge been falling off a lil keystyle to the K.I.M -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:33:03 02/25/03 Tue
it wasn't a freestyle u don't write freestyles what I was saying was I expect high tech intellect 4 my freestyles (NT) -- dlaster, 21:15:03 02/25/03 Tue
after your first album?? have you even dropped AN audio yet, let alone MANY audios, which most albums list as their key ingredients? Other than that... your rhymes have all been used before, as has your topic. Speaking of your topic, that little paragraph you wrote on top confirmed my beliefs on lots of ... well, I'll just stop there. Peep inside for some feedback on lines... -- INTOX, 22:12:42 02/25/03 Tue
dont piss me off bitch -- dlaster, 22:13:29 02/25/03 Tue
yo son i honestly don't see anything wrong with this shit. i actually thought this flowed aiight. some ups and downs but yo son keep your head up. shit ain't over till it's over and it's only over when you say it is . stay up peace (NT) -- STARKS (the mouth of madnes), 23:08:20 02/25/03 Tue
This was aight.. but LMAOOOOO @ INTOX.. Damn, kid, he's about to kill himself (so he says) and you just cut him down.. Dont you know this is where he comes to make friends? (NT) -- ===||Swords---> LOL aitn that hard to make friends.. hit up your local YMCA or something.. Join the swim team.. haha.., 02:52:33 02/26/03 Wed
I Liked it... (it's tha first actual verse i read today... it feels good...) (NT) -- Darknodin, 09:57:58 02/26/03 Wed
titanium pens bend.. that line was pretty dope all in all not bad.. pretty tight! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:23:49 02/26/03 Wed
Main Loop Presents: Attack of the 50 ft. Beats pt. 3: "Jekyll and Hyde" -- ===||Swords--->, 02:42:53 02/26/03 Wed
Hardcore shit! yea!.... i lprefer the melody at the beginning (NT) -- Darknodin, 09:45:42 02/26/03 Wed
well the beat is HOT, good job on that.. hey what do you use to make your audio's track wise and vocal wise? get at me! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:15:57 02/26/03 Wed
Two new audios ...The Joint and J.F.A. -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 15:48:58 02/25/03 Tue
listened to the joint before you posted this....your flow is getting better but it still needs a bit of work....like parts was just ehhh, and you need a lil more emotion unless you just one them laid back time a spittas (NT) -- Vision, 15:54:20 02/25/03 Tue
ok i dont mean 2 hate but WTF was dat beat on da J.F.A. joint? lmfaooo!.wow.sounded like some shit from the movie "breakin" .like some 1985 beat ..wanted 2 get out my neon orange pants&do some pop and lock routines or something lolol..ur voice didnt go wit dat at all even though lyrics were pretty coo..wtf r u sayin in the beginnin of the other one?..vocals sound super low.lyrics were like decent..i dont know.not my style so its like kinda wrong in me in some ways for me to critique u know? but keep doin u though ..no hate.just being real..hope u understand the difference.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL.Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Is Christopher Reeves a Bum for Sittin Down All Day?, 16:06:05 02/25/03 Tue
Peep Inside yo... -- Flymizess * 1st Lady of O.M.N.I. -- The Accent of Tundra and Camelions', 17:09:02 02/25/03 Tue
can't peep from here but i'll definitely hit it up at home peace (NT) -- starks, 17:41:40 02/25/03 Tue
yo that first beats from BoneThugs right''Take me Home'' or some shit. that was cool yo. your flows almost perfect. there were a couple off moments but overall both dope posts. (NT) -- STARKS (the mouth of madness), 18:16:42 02/25/03 Tue
AYO!! 49 Cent!!! Stop deepthroating the mic on that first joint so I can understand you... all I could make out was "when I enter the room... something something something Temple of Doom". That, and the occasionaly "dont fuck with me"... "I kill people"....."mmmm... 64 slices of American cheese". That the only mic you have? (NT) -- INTOX, 22:27:12 02/25/03 Tue
that was coo... wasn't diggin the beats that much..except tha JFA thing! (NT) -- Darknodin, 10:15:47 02/26/03 Wed
''infinite rhyme patterns'' just some quick shit i enlisted with the help of my quick wit. -- starks (the mouth of fuckin madness), 17:38:02 02/25/03 Tue
Nice word connections kid, flow was fluid too...I mean what more can I say? I like what I like....keep up the good work. You into doing audio? Think this would sound nice if you did. Aiight....until next post....Peace (NT) -- Flymizess * 1st Lady of O.M.N.I. -- The Accent of Tundra and Camelions', 18:43:23 02/25/03 Tue
the word play really stood out here... solid all the way through. i liked how you came strong from the first bar, all the way to last one... nice (NT) -- ACHRILIDIES, 19:10:35 02/25/03 Tue
Allot of nice wordplay in here yo, flowed well, i really dig bars 3 and 4 (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:36:58 02/25/03 Tue
Yo this was dope.. nice lyrics and flow.. good shit.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 02:54:07 02/26/03 Wed
WOOOOO... nice nice nice shit dawg! (NT) -- Darknodin, 10:05:15 02/26/03 Wed
weal -- safe side, 22:54:13 02/25/03 Tue
Im your biggest challenge -- dlaster from New Zealand, 00:19:24 02/26/03 Wed
HAHA.. Look at this bi-polar emcee here.. Talkin bout "ima take yall to war" then goes LOVE ALWAYS.. make up your mind fool.. How about you battle koala boy up there.. he'll meet you behind the big eucalyptus tree after hes done playing Froto from LOTR...I like yall.. makes putting in my 3 replies so easy.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 02:49:06 02/26/03 Wed
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!! -- Darknodin.., 09:49:01 02/26/03 Wed
the dark spitter presents... "scatterd thoughts"... just some piece I wrote a while back... peep this! -- the dark spitter, 13:10:11 02/25/03 Tue
Some parts was nice others I didnt really like you getting better...keep working on it (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 16:08:18 02/25/03 Tue
yo this looks familiar in rhyme skeme. hmmmmmmm. not bad stay up. (NT) -- starks, 17:35:04 02/25/03 Tue
Some parts were nice others I wasnt feeling. bars 11,12,13 were really nice (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:58:33 02/25/03 Tue
JUst sum shit yall need to peep -- In$aiN, 14:33:47 02/25/03 Tue
too short...actually its good dat its short cuz this wasnt too impressive..more middle school rhymes."jump a sucka like a matress"..wtf is dat?..elevate ..shit was simplistic and just like..wack??... (NT) -- D-luSioNaL Abzent Minded/O.M.N.i...Just Bought Christopher Reeves Some New Wheels..(for the wheelchair..not a new car), 14:45:37 02/25/03 Tue
I don't know which one I disliked more this or the one above...you really need to practice... (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 15:56:16 02/25/03 Tue
Jump a sucka like a matress, makes no since unless u wanted say jumping on emcees like a matress maybe I dont know man elevate or find a new outlet (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:53:01 02/25/03 Tue
Short poem But reall ass lyrics -- In$aiN, 14:40:28 02/25/03 Tue
the only thing REAL about this..is how you REALLY need to elevate haha..way too short..mispelling everywhere..and for something like this..u gotta write more and be more descriptive so we could get a feel/understanding on what you tryin to say..its like you leave readers hanging..anywayz..keep elevatin.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.i...Let My Wheel Chair People Roll.., 14:50:48 02/25/03 Tue
HUH??????This was too short...too simple...at least try to put forth an effort (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 15:53:34 02/25/03 Tue
WHAT, THIS WAS NOT AS REAL AS U WERE SAYING AND ITS FUCKING SHORT AS HELL. IF U WANT TA BE A LYRICIST I SUGGEST U HIT THE LAB (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:50:24 02/25/03 Tue
Alright lets see if this shits "wack" -- Serial, 18:33:43 02/23/03 Sun
U R WACKED -- DLASTER, 18:44:35 02/23/03 Sun
LOL, that was hilarious. "so you left her thinking you'd be a good dad, couple years later your son's calling you a fag", Ahhh, I'm still dyin'. Anything that makes me laugh gets the stamp of approval. It would have been cool if you coupled up that Chevron line though ("handgun" is alright but you could probably do better). and that "believe it then I should do it" line sounds a lot like Eminem. (NT) -- Blueprint, 18:45:24 02/23/03 Sun
you trying to pull a EMINEM a kid whos dad left and gets famous and calls him a fag..bwahhaah (NT) -- NOFLOW..guess whos back...and here to stay...half this lounge...is real gay, 19:28:16 02/23/03 Sun
damn white boy!! -- droop, 21:29:00 02/23/03 Sun
U SUCK -- DLASTER, 22:24:55 02/23/03 Sun
it does sound like mnm stuff but it was funny!!! stay up (NT) -- Young Aviator, 00:35:31 02/24/03 Mon
YUK DOWN TO THE DUMPS WITH DAT YO!!! BOOOOTHIS MAN...BOOOOOOOOO (NT) -- R.U.C, 04:53:56 02/24/03 Mon
FO ENY OF YALL WEAK MC'S TO EN-V.....HAHAHAHA -- R.U.C.......YA THINK ITS TO SHORT SUC ON DEES...ITS SPOS TA BE, 04:38:39 02/24/03 Mon
umm...fuck outta here...ur wak...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe..feels sorry for u, 05:01:18 02/24/03 Mon
u r wack...ur a gay azz rapper...go design some drapes or something...take up a new hobby...try and get a fish drunk or something..ur wack..please stop TRYIN to be an emcee...damn back up dancer for richard simmon tapes.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Rollz With WheelChair Thugz..., 13:12:13 02/24/03 Mon
puahahahahahahahahahah -- eliooooooot, 15:05:30 02/24/03 Mon
U SUCK GIVE UP -- DLASTER, 15:24:17 02/24/03 Mon
Ummm....it's better to bring something original to the table...instead of disrespecting the art of lyricism with frangible concepts of subtle end-rhyme.....Try focusing on what you're actually trying to get across...make sure it's in a way that presents it differently than anyone else....Keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h Ł k §/|_ A \/Š...˝ ř HyŢ-Ř-tHétĄca|/|_ u m i n a r i e .....Hey Path, where are you?, 16:17:59 02/24/03 Mon
LMAO.. He rhymed "back" liek 3 times.. in a verse that was only like 10 lines long.. lol.. Better finish that plumbing school application.. (NT) -- ====||Swords--->, 17:47:20 02/24/03 Mon
Hey this may be the first time it really don't rhyme, but hey I'm just telling my last story.. goodnight! -- Warpath "The scorned soul of ELOHEIM!", 19:27:13 02/24/03 Mon
WTF...be going on in your head..G.O.D...I don't know if this is a spit, a story, or a poem but I like it..One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil, 19:54:56 02/24/03 Mon
i dig ya shit fo-real loc! to explain for those illiterate asses, those bars my man jus produced are called "sicc made" a mans mind can only take so much.UNTIL HE SNAPS!!!! (NT) -- droop(tha prodicle son), 21:37:29 02/24/03 Mon
Ill shit black....I kept gettin a vivid image of each line as I kept readin, stay up (NT) -- Novakane, 16:18:30 02/25/03 Tue
I'm glad I read this......How's everything going on at home?....I know you miss your son....but you know where he is now......Keep that emotive-complex up....Still have problems with the "misses"?....Anyways, the rhyme scheme was mixed between a broken-rhyme scheme and a slant (or half) rhyme scheme...Looked very interesting though.....I guess I'm one that's aware of what's going on because of the e-mails from a couple of weeks ago.....still, keep that emotive-complex up....and stay up.... (NT) -- h Ł k §/|_ A \/Š....You know.....the other half of HyŢ-o-tHetĄcal/|_ u m i n a r Ą Ł ....right?....HAHAHA..., 17:10:45 02/25/03 Tue
foul word connections like curse words in cursive, observe this whether or not you believe you view a subversive blah blah and some more blah -- Vision...Thrice Optics of Abzent Minded of O.M.N.I., 10:39:51 02/25/03 Tue
btw, happy birthday to me (NT) -- ., 10:45:41 02/25/03 Tue
This was ill...and happy birthday ..21 right? you hitting the 50 tonite?? ....hit me one my email ...I want to holla atcha bout something...oh yeah scroll down and check the audio you gotta use the link inside the post cause it's not on the page above (NT) -- Lyrikil, 11:02:09 02/25/03 Tue
longer den ur usual short post..caught me off guard lol..nice drop...good lines..good flow..drop more often though fuka..lol.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Wat Would You Give A Wheel Chair Person On Der Bday??, 11:24:53 02/25/03 Tue
This was pretty good. Had a nice way of associating words with an unbalenced flow (NT) -- Spector, 12:25:58 02/25/03 Tue
umm...a good bday present..a new pair of timbs..at least ill know it was a good investvent and theyll take care of them.. (NT) -- 8 coconuts (gotta be used as money somewhere), 15:42:26 02/25/03 Tue
Downward Spiral -- Spector, 12:22:22 02/25/03 Tue
pretty nice piece but it was too short... make it longer and stay up (NT) -- the dark spitter, 12:43:18 02/25/03 Tue
this wasnt too bad..nice lines..it could be a lil longer but its tight the way it is..keep doin you though..pretty nice drop right here yo...piece kid.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Do Wheel Chair People Get On Roller Coasterz? Or They Cant Cuz Dey Aint Tall Enough?, 12:59:52 02/25/03 Tue
spector?..isnt he a mortal combat character?..haha ur gay (NT) -- 3 Dollars, 15:36:33 02/25/03 Tue
keystyle -- profaci_aka_kazz_tha_untouchable, 23:25:40 02/24/03 Mon
Man im sick of kids thinking they get hated on cuz they white.. Most everyone in here is white.. Umm i wont read more cuz its in paragraph form.. Fix that and repost.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 02:56:39 02/25/03 Tue
keep it up -- black 4 poun, 10:34:12 02/25/03 Tue
post in bars...keep workin at it...all your best lines are mad cliche (NT) -- Vision, 10:55:58 02/25/03 Tue
Slug, vest, chest, I heard it all before sorry not feelin it (NT) -- Spector, 12:30:19 02/25/03 Tue
ummm... to simple... elevate this or you wont survive in here (NT) -- the dark spitter, 12:46:01 02/25/03 Tue
Thats weak they don't hate you cause your white they hate you cause you suck -- dlaster, 15:12:02 02/25/03 Tue

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