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keystyle........a piece i call.... *Positive words spoken in these times of Hardships*.....Enjoy....PEACE
-- Essence...........AM, 17:46:40 02/05/03 Wed
loved the wordplay...thought it was a bit long, but still skillful...one (NT) -- does it matter, 17:57:26 02/05/03 Wed
whoa two black eyes are better then giving in to Satans reach.. loved that line.. dawg we have to collab as well, I remember first peeping you out, even from the start you had a nice way with words- you've only elevated since then.. nice post man, peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 18:40:56 02/05/03 Wed
nice keystyle yo...."linguistics smother me as I erect the twenty six letters incredibly"...ill line right there...liked da concept...dope message...it's hard to see da positive sometimes..but it's always there waitin for us to find it...keep this up and stay up (NT) -- ...DiAtRiBe..., 18:46:16 02/05/03 Wed
Felt this one throughly. Liked the line about erecting 26 letters, flipped that one nicely. Flow was bananas.....Keep doin what you do (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 23:08:11 02/05/03 Wed
A VERY QUICK FREESTYLE PLEASE READ....ONE -- does it matter, 17:49:31 02/05/03 Wed
reality bites don't it.. but hey writers block does exist.. it's when your stressed and only spurts can rise from the mind.. mostly feelings of regret for me.. but I liked this it was simplistic in a good way! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 18:46:52 02/05/03 Wed
"if your a real emcee words dont exist.just emotion"....favorite line...like Path said it was kinda simple but done in a nice way...dope key...uno(N) -- DiAtRiBe, 18:51:31 02/05/03 Wed
nice keystyle.......like the blank faces of faith when you walk in church durring a sermon staring at the filled rows.....""truth well spoken." (NT) -- SickNen, 19:02:07 02/05/03 Wed
This was alright, I didn't like how some lines had such huge differentials in word usage though, it kind of threw the flow off for me. I felt you content wise though. (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 23:02:38 02/05/03 Wed
Real MC;s -- JBalla, 19:38:01 02/05/03 Wed
kinda played.. this sound real old it's time for some elevation. (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 20:15:47 02/05/03 Wed
This rhyme sceme would work if your lines were slicker. If you don't have anything to say at least make it sound nice. Throw in some metaphors and punchlines or something. (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 22:52:31 02/05/03 Wed
Freestyle, check it out and compare it to your own -- Kenny-D, 19:51:10 02/05/03 Wed
do you mean a keystyle? cause this is bad for a freestyle.. my freestyle has gotten rediculous over the last few years.. keep writing man this place will help you.. peace. (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 20:13:21 02/05/03 Wed
I thought you connected words alright but at the same time it seemed like it was done simply to rhyme instead of have emotion or substance behind it. Plus it was mad short. Keep at iy though (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 22:49:33 02/05/03 Wed
u wack -- matter, 20:11:30 02/05/03 Wed
delete. (NT) -- Path, 20:17:08 02/05/03 Wed
U said it (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 22:38:48 02/05/03 Wed
Anyone up for ah battle? -- SickNen, 18:56:49 02/05/03 Wed
heheh... naw man I'm not in the mood.. but don't waste space! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:30:35 02/05/03 Wed
hey -- u no, 20:14:37 02/05/03 Wed
O.K...let's try this again...G3N@$yD3 Collab.........For those who missed it ... -- Lyrikil & Ov@kil...G3N@$yD3 ...One Hun'ed, 00:55:34 02/05/03 Wed
read this earlier this mornin....pretty nice on both parts....think i liked OV@'s verse lil better though...just thought his flowed a lil better, and he switched up his rhyme scheme better....both verse were aight though....good metaphors and nice word usage on both parts....some nice multi's in each verse....ya'll got nice complimentin styles.....stay up, peace! (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 10:13:25 02/05/03 Wed
Very attentive indeed......I like it now, just as much as I did when I first peeped it last week....Keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 13:32:34 02/05/03 Wed
OV@'s shit was fresh as HELL, you came dope with your shit man.. this was a nice collab.. well up Gentlemen, peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 17:13:52 02/05/03 Wed
Word~Play...Iz mad science..."keystyle was type'd nice"..."thiz shit st8." (NT) -- SickNen, 19:10:41 02/05/03 Wed
i'll often speak of you but the you is always me..cuz when i speak of me it's me i ask of you..somethin straight from da heart...ain't concerned about da flow on this really..just thoughts i needed to get out..guess you can call it part one of an ongoing story.. -- DiAtRiBe.., 17:39:22 02/05/03 Wed
this was magnificent....i too hold that love deep inside of me...i too know how she breathes threw realizations of internal wants and needs, i too understand how powerfull she can be and how beatiful she can help us create...i wont say who she is, cause thall spoil it.....this was really dope man..imagery, flow-i caught very nicely, and just your useage of language were all very thought provoking...ill kid...one (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 17:53:03 02/05/03 Wed
loved the wordplay and message... from one to ten i rate this a nine and a half....one (NT) -- does it matter, 17:54:54 02/05/03 Wed
ahah... Nice! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 18:50:56 02/05/03 Wed
I'm the alpha and Omega, the Beginning and the End, the Dead and the Living, the Understand, the Truth... I am God!!! -- Warpath "The scorned soul of ELOHEIM!", 16:39:39 02/05/03 Wed
yo this was hot son, ive written a sequnence of bars along this thought process but never a full composition, very creative peice!1 (NT) -- slick vic low a.k.a. the lyrical leviathan, 16:57:18 02/05/03 Wed
yo man this was nice...i liked da concept and u brought some dope imagery with ur words...sick multi's in here...alot of cool lines...keep this shyt up yo..1ne (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 17:52:53 02/05/03 Wed
yea, this was superb...imagery and flow were way above par....you always surprise me with your posts Path..forrealz...glad to see you dropping a grip again....and about the muffled thing, i have no idea....maybe its your speakers??...i unno, but as for this, it was writing at its best..powerfull words laced this piece...nice job....keep dropping the realness...peace (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 18:02:57 02/05/03 Wed
The Ghost -- slick vic low a.k.a. the lyrical leviathan, 17:04:04 02/05/03 Wed
tight shyt....didn't like dat u put in a chorus since it is a text..but still this was a good post...thought da first two verses were just sick...this is some good ish....keep it up (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 17:15:31 02/05/03 Wed
this would be a nice as audio man.. I was reading and this beat was kicking in my head cause of the flow you had.. make this a audio.. good job kid, dope drop! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 17:18:59 02/05/03 Wed
very nice, imagery was down pat, and the flow was very smooth...this WOULD sound ill as fuk in audio..you should try and do it....nice showing man..stay up..piece (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 17:57:05 02/05/03 Wed
knowledge equals power..and right now your a powerful man... (NT) -- does it matter, 17:59:05 02/05/03 Wed
REPOST......."The Categorical Imperative" Part 1: Immanuel's Speaking......Warning: h £ k §-A-linguistics, Intensive Rhetoric, Vocabulary, And Intrinsic Metaphors May Cause Mind-Stops...BE ADVISED BEFORE ENTERING... -- h £ k §-A-g Ø ñ/|_ A \/ ¡ § h...aka tH£ ƒ l e § h øƒ |Ð e § § ¡ £| J©, 14:45:22 02/05/03 Wed
JESUS man!! This was sick as fuck the wordplay was amazing .. peep! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 16:52:12 02/05/03 Wed
very ill display of verbal,and excellent wordplay and usage! the Jesus Jefferson line was crazy also, nice work son! (NT) -- slick vic low a.k.a. the lyrical leviathan, 17:01:15 02/05/03 Wed
damn...this was ill...sick multi's and wordplay..i liked da last 9 or 10 lines da most tho...when i peep ur shyt it reminds me of when i took psychology ..lol..nice drop man...keep bringin it..1ne(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 17:09:19 02/05/03 Wed
NEW STORY!!!!!just a lil somethin i sat down and wrote out real quick....."Sayin Goodbye".....hope ya'll enjoy!! -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 10:27:01 02/05/03 Wed
Yeah, it's not easy being a "momma's boy"(at least, that's the aspect that I derived from reading the rhyme)......Nice short story....Keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 13:28:34 02/05/03 Wed
This was nice......had a bit of everything.....good read....PeAcE (NT) -- Eternal Student (UK), 14:14:48 02/05/03 Wed
damn Hex you picked that out too, I liked it though "NEVER disrespect my women cause I LOVE my MOMMA!" This had a nice loving feel to it.. the heart is important don't lose touch of it.. tight drop man! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 17:08:48 02/05/03 Wed
HOW I GOT MY NAME........this has alot of thought put in it so i would appreciate everyones opinion..one -- does it matter., 11:12:52 02/05/03 Wed
I hear what you're saying about deadbeat teachers/parents, I tutor fourth graders in a poor area, their parents don't teach them anything, no multipication, words, nothing. I know what it's like to spend a lot of time on something and then get ripped up by people. So, your idea is deep, but try to say the same thing in less space, you can tighten it up. Thanks for the feedback. (NT) -- Blueprint, 12:38:38 02/05/03 Wed
Very interesting....although I would've preferred to read this in bar-form over paragraph...I'll make an exception this time.....This would've kept me more attentive if it was in figurative-form....But do you.....Keep this up and stay up... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 13:23:46 02/05/03 Wed
yea nice thoughts...more poetic....never really read anything like this in here....PeAcE (NT) -- Eternal Student (UK), 14:20:29 02/05/03 Wed
man.. I feel you but your trails and tribulations only make you stronger pointing at everyone including myself if you knew what I've been through you would be like "damn!" This post was informative.. I got to see how you feel not just how you think.. well up on expressing yourself.. pretty dope vent man, peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 17:03:50 02/05/03 Wed
PRE-WRITTEN...when you got 2 hr and 45 min classes....you tend to do things to keep your sanity...i been writing and this shit been coming out...here's a bit more length -- Vision...Thrice Optics Abzent Minded of O.M.N.I., 22:38:57 02/04/03 Tue
Man, I'm not sure exactly what your talking about, but I like it. "Undertow" is a good word. I'm going to steal that. Peace. (NT) -- Blueprint, 22:58:38 02/04/03 Tue
this was tight.. and longer.. lol.. keep it up man! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 23:14:53 02/04/03 Tue
Tight joint I likes...aye you know they starting open mic at the Y on I think 111th ...gotta ask Ov@ to be sure but yeah every friday....holla atcha boi if you going...so you can see how G3N@$yD3 really gets down (NT) -- Lyrikil..of..G3N@$yD3, 01:23:24 02/05/03 Wed
not certain what it is you're saying either, but I rolled with it anyhow and it was nice ! The word connection was dope and it complemented the flow powerfully...nicest sounding flow I've read here for a while...Nice post. Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 08:28:00 02/05/03 Wed
yo...nice shit Vis....gotta agree...i have no clue what it was really about...hahaha....but i was likin it for sure....flow was smooth as hell, nice balanced use of multi's, nice line connection like Mik said, excellent word usage...and nice way of flippin lines and switchin up rhyme scheme...i always like to see it when people remember to pay attention to those factors too.....keep this shit comin, peace! (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 10:21:56 02/05/03 Wed
thanks for the replies...this was one of those posts that i was just lettin my thoughts go, but i couldnt necessarily put em in words EVERYONE could understand......but i understand it perfectly cause it came from me....sometimes it be like that (NT) -- Vis, 14:44:50 02/05/03 Wed
My end is coming but I fear for my son he's so young and innocent.. I'm so scared of the truth that I wont always be here to protect him.. i'ts so scary to think we truly are in the last days of this system of things! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 21:43:41 02/04/03 Tue
Dope, I feel like an end iS coming toO man. I have these visions like I see whats really happening in the world but no one cares, so concerned with themselfs. Thats why I spit and feel so passionate for hip hop. Sorry ta bum you out, its just that I'am sorta of manic depressant and lifes been hard no matter what I do. Nice thoughts much love and respect in these last days we will flow forever after the world awakes. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 22:01:30 02/04/03 Tue
trust me man I feel you I got the same problem.. always down my kid makes me smile though but it keep getting harder peace thanks for reading! (NT) -- Path, 22:07:17 02/04/03 Tue
dope as hell....i found the flow EASY except at times i had to read a little faster to catch where it rhymed at parts like you switched to a whole other scheme and then suddenly fell back to the recent.....definately feelin you on the content, the world is going to shit....soon to be hell on earth for real and it wont be pretty (NT) -- Vis, 22:53:29 02/04/03 Tue
I can invision you sitting down, outside, spilling this out. It carries a consistent mood, everything falls into place nicely. I like the way you write too, thankx for the positive feedback. Peace. (NT) -- Blueprint, 22:55:35 02/04/03 Tue
Too be honest G.O.D I'm tired ass hell ...so I'ma have to wait til tommorrow to peep this...One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil..of..G3N@$yD3 Nation.....19 million strong but lost in the wilderness with the wicked, 01:25:54 02/05/03 Wed
I truely enjoyed this...especially for the deep meaning behind every intricate sentence there possibly was...strong images along these words that I pick up when I read this because of my religious beliefs...being a subject to the JW, this post here reminded me of "the last days of this system of things"...and I felt how you sort of spelled out your devotion to your son...it's emotional... (NT) -- WHYMSICKAL, 01:28:57 02/05/03 Wed
i cant relate to the love you feel for your child, because i havent felt that type of love seing that i dont haven't dropped a seed yet....but i have watched the youth over the years and it is sad to say that they aren't getting a fair chance in life..... but besides all the deep ish', let me say that the wordplay was wonderful. (NT) -- does it matter, 10:03:18 02/05/03 Wed
I know exactly what your stating. -- Lil Lucky, 12:53:02 02/05/03 Wed
Just some thoughts, Lifes a complete ride and at times I just wanna get off!! Nothing great or wonderful, its just been an ugly day again. PEACE -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:29:47 02/04/03 Tue
iight .. man your depressing me.. damn man it's your birthday get off the net and get some pussy.. I feel your thoughts just to depressing.. and I got depression.. so when I read shit like this I reflect on it hard.. keep writing cheer up man, peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 21:50:14 02/04/03 Tue
ths was long.....i just couldnt read the whole thing.....the content.....i feel you for real, im going through the same shit....except the rich school and all that, but anyway...i see potential for flow, looks as if it really needs to be worked on, but iono...i dont know how you flow so it might be right for you, i just couldnt get into it....but caught the message well....from what i read (NT) -- Vis, 23:05:24 02/04/03 Tue
first i would like to say that this post was from the heart. many dont rap about the type of shit that realy matters to themselves anymore.. you did, and you did it well...second i would like to say that in a critical point of view, i thought it was a bit to long... clean post.. one (NT) -- does it matter, 09:57:51 02/05/03 Wed
Our Situation -- Blueprint, 21:04:06 02/04/03 Tue
I can feel u man, I don't have allot of faith in the system. I just don't want 2 become its next victim. Short and not allot of flow, but u had some nice thoughts in here. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:37:17 02/04/03 Tue
naw I cuaght the flow morst kids in here got see chew food new and groove to catch a flow, but I felt this I like how you write man peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 21:54:05 02/04/03 Tue
yea it flowed pretty nice, but im in one of them stages that reading ish like this really dont interest me anymore cause this country will never changed....it dont matter how hard people strive to make it better...someone even told me that they set up who will and wont be president and votes dont really mean shit from the people...its the electoral votes from some faction...i dont remember i stopped paying attention to politics a LONG time ago...i was kinda skeptic, but in this country who knows (NT) -- Vis, 23:20:38 02/04/03 Tue
i realy felt this post.....wish it were longer but all in all it was not only the truth but the truth written with skill.. one (NT) -- does it matter, 09:52:05 02/05/03 Wed
(}~{A couple keystyles}~{)FeedBack Please -- Souliberty, 07:26:23 02/03/03 Mon
What's this Supermarket 'shop while you listen' ?...lol maybe you were just spitting really quietly...These lines looked way too long and I wanted to hear you spit it, but instead I got 'Musak' ...The flow definately improved on the second verse though and it has to be said that the vocab was pretty ill...Nicely written in parts (you could of spit it over that beat and proved me wrong about the long lines) ...Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 11:06:37 02/03/03 Mon
I couldn't hear the audio, but the lyrics seem decent....You just have to continue "doing you"....there's nothing wrong with long lines...it's just that a lot of people are use to sounding like everybody else......Keep this up and stay up.....and work on spelling...... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©....., 11:58:02 02/03/03 Mon
HAHAHA@muzak.. woulda been way better making it audio.. I know you're a hell of a spitter, so why didnt you make it audio? (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 14:25:50 02/03/03 Mon
lmao at the music I felt like I was in a hip hop elevator with Talib as the door man "which floor kid?" the text was pretty dope man why didn't you make a audio..? get to it before I STEAL YOUR BEAT.. joke.. hmmm.. maybe not.. naw playing.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 14:39:54 02/03/03 Mon
good ish.. madd props -- INS, 14:54:01 02/03/03 Mon
Couldn't download but lyrics had decent contENt but cut down ya lines cus It's tireing ta interpret at times keep posting htough def. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 15:39:13 02/03/03 Mon
couldnt peep, audio......text was fullfillin.....a good read....tight lines in there....the last two bars of the second verse stood out...not believin he gave us the freedom to think cuz he needed to make sure we'd achieve and be greatness}"""". (NT) -- styliztik....aka....quote, 17:02:05 02/03/03 Mon
Thx Fer all the feed back, I didn't make this an audio because the beat isn't mine and I just keyed these up at a different site and figured ya'll'd like em... sry about only postin the Hi-fi version tho, It's the only one I can find...lol at it bein elevator music, sounded alot to me like some covert ops shit...anyway, thnx again...piece... (NT) -- Souliberty, 04:31:31 02/05/03 Wed
Its my 21 B-Day today and I just feel bumed out so heres a little slash hardcore slash vision. I call it "Overthrowing The Word"PEACE -- Pat D.A.W.G, 15:54:11 02/04/03 Tue
nice post man i liked alot of this one. Happy Birthday bro.No lie mines is tommorrow i'll be 23.were getting old son....stay up peace. (NT) -- STARKS, 16:57:28 02/04/03 Tue
It was alright.....not as good as the one I peeped by you yesterday.....But anyways, HAPPY BIRTHDAY.......Have a good 21st......Try Smirnoff Ice.....you'll like it.....HAHA....Keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 17:27:04 02/04/03 Tue
Read this earlier but I didn't get a chance to reply.......liked this one, had some nice lines in there. Hope you enjoy the rest of your B-day.....peace (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 19:00:02 02/04/03 Tue
I thought I peeped this out.. I guess my critique didn't come out.. I thought it was tight.. keep doing it man peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 22:13:36 02/04/03 Tue
SHORT KEYSTYLE TO REMIND EVERYONE I’M STILL BREATHIN…bored in my PowerPoint class so I felt like postin this….Peep yall….I call this piece, -=Keystyle in PowerPoint Class=-….**ALL FEEDBACK AND CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM IS APPRECIATED** -- N.a.K.I.X.e.M. of Abzent Minded Ink of O.M.N.I., 14:36:14 02/04/03 Tue
flow was sik....very nice for a quik lil drop, i spit it to this rjd2 beat called *the proxy*, ish flowed like water...nice to see ya 'round...pz (NT) -- Essence....Abzent Minded, 14:52:58 02/04/03 Tue
tight, better than all that dark evil shit yo be droppin.....to me anyway (NT) -- Vis, 14:57:58 02/04/03 Tue
Nice keystyle, hope you get more time for the next post I'll peep it PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 16:04:57 02/04/03 Tue
Str8....well spoken (NT) -- SickNen, 16:10:11 02/04/03 Tue
Dope.....it was sort of what I expected from you......Semi-abstract ideals mixed phantasmagoria....Keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 17:34:27 02/04/03 Tue
This was real nice man.......my favorite lines were the first 2, they flowed real nice. Keep doin what you doin (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 19:10:04 02/04/03 Tue
this was a dope key..alot of nice imagery..last line was cool...uno (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 19:14:56 02/04/03 Tue
dope man.. pretty vivid for how short it was.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 22:10:38 02/04/03 Tue
PRE-WRITTEN....not near my best...but it was just what came out as i wrote....i been on this tip lately -- Vision...Thrice Optics of Abzent Minded w/ OMNI, 14:36:00 02/04/03 Tue
this gave me the thought of six degress of seperation...seemed kinda what you were getting at..i unno.. it was dope though...flow was coo, and the content was nice...nice to see ya dropping some text.....stay up Vis....peace (NT) -- Essence....Abzent Minded, 14:56:45 02/04/03 Tue
Kinda short but content was nice, I see possabilities if it was longer PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 16:08:48 02/04/03 Tue
Yeah, it was short.....But sometimes, you have to realize that your BEST ideas come out when you just let your mind take over your fingertips and type....This is an example of that...Keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 17:38:34 02/04/03 Tue
Although it was brief, the content really spoke to me. Keep doin what you doin (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 19:43:14 02/04/03 Tue
damn man this was short as Human mis-conception of time.. but I liked it. (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 22:03:54 02/04/03 Tue
REPOST.........ANOTHER PETRARCHAN SONNET......"One Man's Spirit" Part 1.......Warning: h £ k §-A-linguistics, Phantasmagorical Rhetoric, Hebraisms, And Intrinsic Metaphors May Cause Mind-Stops....BE ADVISED BEFORE ENTERING.... -- h £ k §-A-g Ø ñ/|_ A \/ ¡ § h...aka tH£ ƒ l e § h øƒ |Ð e § § ¡ £| J©, 17:28:13 02/04/03 Tue
Again that is a nice read.........last line was pretty true and clever......some of the names you choose from the Old testament are funny to read......be very hard to spit.....man I'm wondering if you can speak Greek or Hebrew......PeAcE (NT) -- Eternal Student (UK), 17:59:06 02/04/03 Tue
Wow. Looks like you spent some time on this. Full-credit for originality. (NT) -- Blueprint, 20:52:58 02/04/03 Tue
now jesus comes from hebrew original text nice I like that you have this knowledge down.. did you get my e-mail? this was nice man better then the second one to me.. just more substance to me.. more to chew on, peace brother! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 20:59:33 02/04/03 Tue
I would expect nothing less of you, another fine post. I feel u, I tried college but I felt like I was in a cage. Maybe I'll go back for music production who knows nice post ya knowledge is stunning yo pEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:54:57 02/04/03 Tue
THIS IS KIND OF SLOPPY COMPARED TO SOME OF THE STUFF I HAVE READ ON THIS BOARD. ITS ALSO JUST SOME THOUGHTS OF MINE....PLEASE READ......AND TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK. MY FIRST TIME TO THE BOARD -- does it even matter????????, 19:27:56 02/04/03 Tue
I liked it.. The rhyme scheme doesn't always line up, but I dont' think you were concerned about that. Good topic, there's some truth in there. (NT) -- Blueprint, 20:46:51 02/04/03 Tue
very well thought out man.. I feel the same way.. I hate the fact of all the ignorance that goes on underneath the governments cloak.. I actually wrote a song about it on my 2000 album called "United Snakes Of America!" (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 21:02:38 02/04/03 Tue
Very nice thoughts in here man, check blueprints post, hes feeling it. (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:41:24 02/04/03 Tue
20 bars that I wrote this morning -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 16:06:40 02/04/03 Tue
haha..this was dope Brail...i really enjoy your posts..you got a nice style, and flow is impecable...keep dropping brotha...stay up...peace~ (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 16:10:48 02/04/03 Tue
Nice bars brail, the last lines were funny about nappy heads and hairbrushes. Not used ta seeing ya post short but still dope content like the rest of them> PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 16:13:14 02/04/03 Tue
iight...thiz was......str8 (NT) -- SickNen, 16:20:26 02/04/03 Tue
cool little flow. keep em comin. always a pleasure. one (NT) -- starks, 17:02:02 02/04/03 Tue
Good writing......keep up with the multisyllables....it'll help you grow into polysyllabic real quick....Keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 17:23:12 02/04/03 Tue
Man.....this was heat.....some of tha lines were pretty vivid and tha flow was smooth......nice work.....PeAcE (NT) -- Eternal Student (UK), 17:53:40 02/04/03 Tue
dope flow man.. real smooth... audio? (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 21:08:56 02/04/03 Tue
I'm jealous. That had to be fun to write. Keep it up. (NT) -- Blueprint, 21:27:15 02/04/03 Tue
keystyle....I call this piece.....Exercising the Senses......reality is tanited by so many different things....i simply try to medium with them....peace -- Essence...........AM, 15:24:13 02/04/03 Tue
Yo nice spit, i'am feeling this, nice imagry in here essence!! Real dope post keep it up yo. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 15:59:17 02/04/03 Tue
Thiz shit iz nice....tha truth iz within each bar U type "kid." -- SickNen, 16:02:48 02/04/03 Tue
HOTT.....this was cool. definitly feeling you on this. stay up.peace (NT) -- starks, 17:11:34 02/04/03 Tue
Basically, you were describing the basic life of the "everyday men".....HAHA, Keep this up and stay up..... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 17:31:23 02/04/03 Tue
I liked this cause you focused on a lot of little things that don't usually get noticed.......nice post.......keep doin what you doin (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 19:04:59 02/04/03 Tue
this was nice as hell but Moses never decided.. he was choose by his creator.. I won't say his name as to bring about Controversy.. real nice post though I felt this to my core.. keep at it... and see if you can answer my question since nobody attempted on my thread.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 21:17:30 02/04/03 Tue
HipHop! the now and then and what could have been.PEEP -- STARKS (THE MOUTH OF MADNESS), 17:06:52 02/04/03 Tue
Very good.......indeed......Thanks for bringing back memories of Black Sheep......You've improved since the last time I peeped one of your verses....Keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 17:19:43 02/04/03 Tue
This was a real nice read ...and you touched on some important factors...just felt the last lline let down the finish..... but apart from that... this was solid.......PeAcE (NT) -- Eternal Student (UK), 17:48:01 02/04/03 Tue
I liked the direction of this. Nothing wrong with payin tribute to the old school. You forgot Rakim though. It's cool though, keep doin what you do (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 19:23:29 02/04/03 Tue
This flows together really nice in a lot of spots...That "cord" line was cool.....Throw one more line at the end for a strong ending. (NT) -- Blueprint, 20:59:39 02/04/03 Tue
very nice man this was heart-warming.. foreal.. nice tribute.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 21:05:21 02/04/03 Tue
RePoST...............AUDIO battle..........Just wanted a bit of feedback........Its only 1-30....PeAcE -- Eternal Student, 18:03:22 02/04/03 Tue
it's hilarious what happened to my audio I asked a question and got not a answer.. real clear audio.. I think this was coo' real playful and fluid.. tight audio man! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 20:55:39 02/04/03 Tue
THE GAME OF LIFE....yo,i made it short 2 see what u think ....if itz cool i'll post a whole song but this just a sample 4 mouths to taste test -- THa LOST 1, 13:31:37 02/04/03 Tue
THE GAME OF LIFE??...son you done lost...haha...on the real....find a solid rhyme scheme and follow it....work on your content and write more yo....p'z (NT) -- Nakixem of AM/OMNI, 14:23:48 02/04/03 Tue
Nah, don't even post the rest. matter of fact just elevate till you got something ta post. some words were all right maybe, be u need ta put more thought in a rhyme PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 14:30:25 02/04/03 Tue
flow was there...but it was mad short...add more, that opening line was ill to me though (NT) -- Vis, 14:39:58 02/04/03 Tue
wat Vision said, my thoughts exactly...... (NT) -- Essence....AM, 15:45:55 02/04/03 Tue
I agree.. but don't give up from diss-apointment.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 20:52:09 02/04/03 Tue
Who wanna battle? -- SickNen, 15:56:14 02/04/03 Tue
Dman! Iz there not ah head on site that can take me on? (NT) -- SickNen, 16:06:17 02/04/03 Tue
........... (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 16:08:32 02/04/03 Tue
So.......U battle'n or what? (NT) -- SickNen, 16:12:57 02/04/03 Tue
If so.....then post....... -- SickNen, 16:16:37 02/04/03 Tue
UMMMMMM.....So...There aint ah head in here willin' da battle... (NT) -- SickNen, 16:30:12 02/04/03 Tue
STYLIZTIK, LETS GET IT ON DAWG, i KICKED THE FIRST VERSE -- Pat D.A.W.G, 18:14:06 02/03/03 Mon
not bad but not to good either. your earlier post was alot better. i know this is a battle verse but what the fuck for.....keep it real,peace (NT) -- starks, 20:12:11 02/03/03 Mon
STARKS read the post below genuis!!!! (NT) -- Pat D.A.WG., 21:06:47 02/03/03 Mon
yeah i see that now thanks for the heads up touch hole......... (NT) -- starks, 21:21:22 02/03/03 Mon
how about YOU learn how to spell genius first...and before you say something stupid back, if you wanna battle me just let me know (NT) -- ///Trojohn\\\, 21:21:43 02/03/03 Mon
BITCH IF I WANTED YOUR INSIGHT I WOULD ASK, HOLY SHIT I'AM THE FIRST PERSON TO MISSPELL IN THE LOUNGE, STARKS ASKED WHY BATTLE? HUM... COULD IT BE THAT STYLIZTIK ASKED FOR ONE, DAMN!!! GET A CLUE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:32:02 02/03/03 Mon
damn this was way to simple man especially for a battle.. keep at it.. though you'll begin to grow.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 12:19:47 02/04/03 Tue
I'am bout ta snatch the mic out ya hand with ya arm still attached/........"that almost soundz like some Canibus shit! -- SickNen, 16:26:14 02/04/03 Tue
Hey lounge it's good to be back even if some don't know the GOD.. lol, hey this is text for a audio I'm bout to drop.. but I had some questions when I record there's terrible feed back that echos almost through-out the recording plot.. so if you have any ideas on how to change this terrible problem get at me.. coming soon.. "Cunning Is worth A Picture In A Thousand Words!" -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:50:13 02/04/03 Tue
this was proper. nothing that really shined but i'm sure in audio you could take it there. peace (NT) -- starks, 13:23:48 02/04/03 Tue
I guess this would be those type of tracks where you just brag on and on and say what you would to a wack emcee....this had no real solid content but I felt the rhymes....would be a dope track if delivered well....keep shit up Path...... (NT) -- Nakixem AM/OMNI, 14:29:24 02/04/03 Tue
hmmm....im thinkin it will sound better in audio....i can never really follow your flow real well in text since i dont hear you much, but the content was tight...that Superman scenario was caught me the most.... (NT) -- Vis, 14:48:38 02/04/03 Tue
yea, the content is always ill from you...i really enjoyed reading this, i bet it would sound ill as fuk in audio...cant wait to peep that shit....you always shining with the text though, no doubt...stay up Path....peace (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 15:38:01 02/04/03 Tue
New Post!!!.....a lil piece i'm workin on entitled..."Reachin"...just lookin for some feedback and critique....oooh, and this isn't long like usual hahaha....ENJOY!!!! -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 01:04:00 02/04/03 Tue
this was a treat to see so late in the morning..or early.. whatever I'm just having a slight case of imsomnia..kids screaming.. long.. day .. well back to this nice post man..! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 04:15:05 02/04/03 Tue
fuking ill kid....kinda depressing but rays of hope shined threw...this was a very nice read, im glad to see you dropping ish like this...its really dope..stay up J...peace~ (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 04:23:42 02/04/03 Tue
damn...deep shyt man...alot of ill lines.."it's like i'm reachin for stars,but they're too far, and it's just too hard, to grab ahold of the heavens wit human arms"....dope....good shyt for me to start da day with..makes me wanna post..stay up yo...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 06:32:49 02/04/03 Tue
the "human arms.." part was my favourite too, flow was on point and the word usage is expanding nicely...I liked the deepness of this most of all. Nice drop, Peace sonn (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 09:53:06 02/04/03 Tue
definitly got some good word play here.nice read overall (NT) -- starks, 13:52:21 02/04/03 Tue
damn, i dont even know what to say about it.....cant call it ill or dope or SOMETHING of the norm, i do think you should cut the lines length...content was pretty good though....depressing, way more than what mine was...stay up though (NT) -- Vis, 14:55:02 02/04/03 Tue
yo i spit to tha beat SOuliberty wrote to this aint no audio i jsut liked the beat and wrote to it...feel it tho -- styliztik...aka...quote, 18:50:06 02/03/03 Mon
LET ME KNOW IF THIS IS YOUR REPLY BF i DESTROY YOU KID (NT) -- PAT D.A.W.G, 20:03:43 02/03/03 Mon
yeah i here you, you got a sort of fast style to ya too ,ha............word keep em coming. bless one (NT) -- starks(the mouth of madness), 20:08:48 02/03/03 Mon
do what u do....spit a better verse (NT) -- styliztik....aka...quote, 20:35:30 02/03/03 Mon
hotness -- the fish, 20:43:02 02/03/03 Mon
i cant hear audio.. but the text was iigh.. nothin else for me to really to say, kinda wish i could hear you spit this tho... well wuteva, keep doin you (NT) -- ºººmz. mîjå¬þøéººº, 20:43:05 02/03/03 Mon
aLL right bitch -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:57:01 02/03/03 Mon
iF U AINT GONNA REPLY FUCK YOU MAN, THIS IS A BATTLE. NOT I KICK A VERSE AND GO RIGHT ANOTHER ONE. MY VERSES WEREN'T EVEN THAT GOOD KEEP IT REAL NEXT TIME peace (NT) -- PAT D.A.W.G, 23:52:58 02/03/03 Mon
I liked the flow of this it was nice.. keep up! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 12:15:38 02/04/03 Tue
Straight Spittin'. The Reason for alarm. Pure Fire here. ENJOY! -- STARKS (the mouth of madnes), 20:03:02 02/03/03 Mon
this was kinda simple in the begining.. i wasnt really feelin it there.. but it picced up towards the end.. iono, it wasnt that bad... keep uppin (NT) -- ºººmz. mîjå¬þøéººº, 20:38:23 02/03/03 Mon
yeah -- the fish, 20:40:47 02/03/03 Mon
umm...don't know....borin ass subject really......i think this is some more 'misdirected talent'...cuz it seems ya got it in ya to do somethin nice, cuz it was some aight rhymin in here and some fairly decent word usage......just....i don't know, a bunch of people these days seem to be rappin wit no inspiration...no motive....and that's how this appears to me....just rhymin for the sake of it.....find somethin to inspire you and motivate ya, then write somethin wit meanin....peace! (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 00:57:03 02/04/03 Tue
^take notice of this advice...he's just give you ten critiques for the price of one and it's the best you could heed...Do you. You have what it takes without question...Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 10:26:51 02/04/03 Tue
word.. it was boring but the flow made me keep reading it flowed so water-based.. bulk up your subject matter and and keep your flow and you'll be nice.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 12:07:05 02/04/03 Tue
just messin -- the fish, 20:36:59 02/03/03 Mon
this seemed kind of poetic to me... none the less, this was iigh for what was there... cant really expect to get a real crit off somthin this short... (NT) -- ºººmz. mîjå¬þøéººº, 20:47:27 02/03/03 Mon
Man get some help if ya really suicidal and spend some time in the lab sorting shit out there is sunrise and a next day everyday son PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:01:42 02/03/03 Mon
yea i can see the poetic feel to it...it was aight.....played out subject for reals...but ya didn't come completely wack wit it...i can tell ya got at least some talent...just learn to focus it...find different things to write about.....stay up, peace! (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 00:51:34 02/04/03 Tue
fuk what niggaz sayin,...critique everything......ha....i liked, felt it....u got something dawg...just one question...u really feel this way, i mean u do coke, and think about death like this?....if so.....weep a lil, cry aloud, shake yo arms, but dont pay fo tha farm....lay down tha arms, pray and lay out yo arms, heres a blessin (NT) -- styliztik....aka...quote, 02:26:03 02/04/03 Tue
damn...try some Robitussin..shyt makes ya fuzzy inside..(NT) (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 07:00:56 02/04/03 Tue
Where are you all looking? WTF ? ...Is there a hidden link i don't know about...where's the poetic stuff...this kid said "I don't give a fuck about fuck" !?!?!...this was total ass, get the fuck outa here 'poetic' lol (he's not the only one snortin') haha (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 10:17:58 02/04/03 Tue
Me and my Boy made this comic, it's happens to have a fish in it so I couldn't take a fish in a bowl with white residue flaking-up on his upper-lip serious.. I just started laughing.. pretty good flow though.. The Fish..lmao I use to talk about fish-bitches and crab-cakes and tad-pole heads.. it's just funny my bad.. change you name in jail you would be somebodies bitch.. "fish, fish, fish, fish!" "my highs wearing off.." from Half baked.. lmao! peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 12:03:03 02/04/03 Tue
iigh, i replied to 3 posts.. so this shouldnt get deleted, i've posted here a while bacc.. its been a while since the last time i dropped anything... but heres one of my attempts at this story line shit... "Gauntlets of a King" ... peep an give honest crits... all feedbacc is much appreciated -- ºººmz. mîjå¬þøéººº, 21:01:06 02/03/03 Mon
yo this was aight right here....nothin that really stood out, but nice imagery and illustration....pretty good word usage and some aight rhymin in here....i only have two 'complaints' about this: for one, ya gotta switch up that rhyme scheme some more...got old real quick just the same thing pretty much line after line...and for the second, this just seemed a bit unnatural to me, but that could just be me, who knows...any ways, this was cool...keep doin ya thang, peace! (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 00:48:27 02/04/03 Tue
do you cyber sex? (NT) -- Psych, 09:44:58 02/04/03 Tue
I agree with J for the most part, however I thought your imagery and vocab was excellent and the I kinda liked the flow too...The content could use a concept or a story or something...but as far as spittin' fire goes, shit was hot...Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 10:06:35 02/04/03 Tue
I really tried to get through it.. that paragraph form just aint getting it.. what I read was in-depth.. so let me try again... well it's iight.. just not much concept or look I don't know I just aint feeling it.. I've seen you come way iller then this! peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:55:33 02/04/03 Tue
Keystyle for yall, Just got some time and dropping some thoughts I call it "Distant plains" PEACE -- Pat D.A.W.G, 15:23:49 02/03/03 Mon
You're getting better with just about every post you post.....Keep this up.....this is way better than the first time I peeped a post by you....I'm proud.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 15:31:40 02/03/03 Mon
I dont think I ever peeped before.. but this was pretty good.. I see potential evident.. keep elevating.. peace! (NT) -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 15:42:07 02/03/03 Mon
yeah dawg u got potential....work that shit.....good post....overall....5.5 (NT) -- styliztik.....aka...quote, 16:00:47 02/03/03 Mon
nice showing Pat....keep dropping, you are elevating rapidly...dope, youll get to where you want to be eventually, whereeva that may be?....but as for this, it was a good read...sty up man...peace~~ (NT) -- Essence ->AM, 17:43:58 02/03/03 Mon
this was nice....like Essence said,ur elevatin rapidly...a lot of cool lines in here...keep it up...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 06:50:27 02/04/03 Tue
QUIK KEY....no real direction, just thoughts and images that my brain wanted to evict....,PEACE~~~ -- Essence...........AM, 17:34:13 02/03/03 Mon
uhhh...i didnt really catch the flow....but there were some bright spots, if i remember correct...ur effer?....u used to have a wicked flow...multis and snaps...but this was about a 5.2 (NT) -- styliztik....aka..quote, 18:03:41 02/03/03 Mon
dope shyt for a key...nice imagery...multi's were nice...1ne(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 06:41:27 02/04/03 Tue
ok this is called CHEMICAL-WAR.. it's got alot of pops but just bare with me.. till I get a new computer.. shit sucks, the mic.. sucks.. I don't know and I dont post up album songs due to biters.. so enjoy.. over look the damn pops you babies.. lol.. peace!! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 16:33:28 02/03/03 Mon
cant peep audio from this comp, but ill definetly try later from another computer....peace (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 17:36:20 02/03/03 Mon
damn first time hearin u on audio.....u sound like blak thought......hahah fish bitches screamin clam chowder......this was nice.....like yo flow.....liquid.....on beat....tight (NT) -- styliztik....aka....quote, 18:09:30 02/03/03 Mon
word. this was hot. best audio i've heard on here in a while .........one (NT) -- starks, 20:16:23 02/03/03 Mon
Word Path...This is real nice! I haven't peeped you before and this is definately hot, You sound like Myalanski from Wu Syndicate to me. Real slick delivery and nice flow, hold up I'm gonna peep it again...Glad you back up in here...Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 05:24:54 02/04/03 Tue
(((AUDIO)))Brand New Audio.. Blowin up this kid's spot.. This sounds-like-a-seven-year-old fag dissed me, but what he didnt know is that i found the beat he said he made.. But I found the isntrumental and used it back against him!"ICEKAPICKLEPHILLAMICDIZZLEKILLA - The Truth Comes Out" I posted it at his site blowin up his spot hahah -- ===||Swords--->, 14:22:00 02/03/03 Mon
I forgot about you voice man.. lol.. you sound playful.. you make me smile when I hear you man.. thats a good thing.. this was pretty dope... you got way more comfortable.. the samples was nice too.. hahah.. ice kapone ...lmao! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 14:34:18 02/03/03 Mon
This computer won't hook up the link....sorry.....Keep up and stay up.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 14:44:31 02/03/03 Mon
yeah you seem at ease with the mic and mischeivous when you come at it,...samples were cool, nice flow liked the "John Conner" line...nice drop Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 05:16:55 02/04/03 Tue
ight..... im interested in a battle,...but this aint no battle verse....so someone hit me up.....but first peep... -- styliztik.,...aka..quote, 17:45:11 02/03/03 Mon
... wuteva, ill battle you (NT) -- ºººmz. mîjå¬þøéººº, 19:24:32 02/03/03 Mon
this was coo, ill battle you, no im not effer, i used to be swoon U N I t...pz (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 21:18:18 02/03/03 Mon
The GOD had returned with the gates open .. let the truth flood the lounge THREADS!!!! -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 15:37:18 02/03/03 Mon
HAHAHAHAHA......So, you're "The Father" and I'm "The Son"......Yo, where the fuck have you been!!??....DAMN, thank you for posting this!!...HAHAHAHA,.....eh, I got something to ask.....Do you think the Lounge is ready for a Path/h £ k § collabo yet?.......E-mail me.....and let me know.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©....., 15:51:36 02/03/03 Mon
yea, you two should collabo, this was sik though..you always bring the dope content, some i dont get but hey, thats you, do you, peace~ (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 17:40:48 02/03/03 Mon
too graphic for my tastes (NT) -- the fish, 20:46:30 02/03/03 Mon
AN ALL NEW POST.....A PETRARCHAN........"One Man's Spirit" Part 2....Warning: h £ k §-A-linguistics, Intrinsic Metaphors, and Phantasmagorical Rhetoric May Cause Mind-Stops....BE ADVISED BEFORE ENTERING... -- h £ k §-A-g Ø ñ/|_ A \/ ¡ § h....aka tH£ ƒ l e § h øƒ |Ð e § § ¡ £| J©, 14:50:14 02/03/03 Mon
Man you feel it deep but at times you wander off on me in ya post not bad but I've seen u come better PEACE (NT) -- PAT D.A.W.G, 15:29:37 02/03/03 Mon
So you use his Hebrew name in the full I see.. good to see you know.. but I didn't doubt it.. although I doubt you follow Jehovah's Witnesses.. but back to the post.. Hex shit.. what more can I say? peep! -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 15:49:35 02/03/03 Mon
this was rockin.....i dont usually like spits drowned wit multisyllable words.......but this shit was nice.....i felt the flow, message, overall 7 (NT) -- styliztik...aka...quote, 15:52:14 02/03/03 Mon
Sometimes I cant really get into your posts......but you caught me at a time where I was feeling this......more poetic in places but still pretty tight for a text drop..........some nice word play and...and ....and..... WORDS !!!!.....PeAcE (NT) -- Eternal Student (UK), 18:09:31 02/03/03 Mon
i was flowing over the L.O.X- All fo rthe love from there first joint -- INS da Don, 14:39:26 02/03/03 Mon
I'm sorry, but the content made me skim through this with lightning speed.....Bring something new to the table...and stop trying to be like everyone else..... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 14:48:43 02/03/03 Mon
how about? u actually read -- INS, 14:58:54 02/03/03 Mon
Good for you.....but MY reply was MY opinion....."Oh yea... Oh yea.. Listen closely... I am the greatest/Realest/ Grimeiest/ Slimest/Motherfucking hustlin addict/Thats why I carry a semi automatic/".....Do you.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 15:11:38 02/03/03 Mon
Man elevate, u sound like every other bullshit, I sell drugs tote guns wanna be thug. This aint hip hop at all man, if u sit on a mill then hire someone ta write your shit PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 15:33:51 02/03/03 Mon
pROBABBLY SOME 16 YR OLD KID TRYING TA WRITE LIKE HE'S A HARD g BUT HE'S LOWERCASED STATUS (NT) -- PAT D.A.W.G, 15:43:16 02/03/03 Mon
not much to say about this.. kiddo.. peace! (NT) -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 15:52:32 02/03/03 Mon
all i know is yall cats are jabbin at this nigga like he aint in the fam...instead of tryin to be funny yall should give...CONSTRUCTIVE criticism....YALL MUIthafukas are destructive.....YO DAWG....just work on metaphors....actually i see u got potential in yo punch lines....that im real big on bein ready to die...was tight.....i feel u dawg...dont let no one break ur spirit (NT) -- styliztik...aka...quote, 16:03:57 02/03/03 Mon
You're right about that.....my bad on my part... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 16:08:44 02/03/03 Mon
thank you.... I appreciate the words of wisdom (NT) -- INS, 17:56:19 02/03/03 Mon
MORBID ARMOR returns for his second instillment of supremacy.. ENJOY!!!!!... Feedback appreciated -- MORBID ARMOR, 01:39:48 02/03/03 Mon
damn man...this was ill...very nice post...i wanna highlight da dope lines but there's too many...this was just sick overall...keep droppin shyt like this...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 03:35:37 02/03/03 Mon
too complex.....not sayin i dont understand it, but less is more in rap these days, i know this is tha lyricist lounge but, whateva,,,,do yo thang (NT) -- styliztik,....aka...quote, 04:02:27 02/03/03 Mon
Too many sylibles in some lines made it unflowable, and it wasn't very coherent because you used words you prolly couldn't use in a sentance...But the vocab, sis add a very abstract element to this, so it was okay except for flow and illiteracy... (NT) -- Souliberty, 08:40:13 02/03/03 Mon
this was alright ...not great, some lines were nice but your flow off kilter like a bitch and I agree about parts being incoherent because you put words where the shouldn't be...anyways not bad, keep on. Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 11:29:12 02/03/03 Mon
I'm a big fan of poetic-flow.......Plus, your "hints" of being a "Living Legend" had me wondering......"¿¿¿¿¿¿.....Is he for real...¿¿¿¿¿¿"....But, yeah....it was dope in some parts.....and I was diggin' the polysyllabic-structure in this.....Some people think being "abstract" means that you don't have to make any sense.....THAT'S A LIE!!!!.....Keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©......<<<<<<...Hopefully, the soon-to-be sixth member of The Orphanage....., 12:08:43 02/03/03 Mon
I dug all the west coast underground references.. tiiight.. but i didnt like the flow.. i got the meaning of this pretty well, vocab dont throw me off, but the flow just wasnt there too well work on developing your scheme and rhythm.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 14:40:52 02/03/03 Mon
I like it -- INS, 15:53:41 02/03/03 Mon
swords hit it one the nail.. (NT) -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 17:13:37 02/03/03 Mon
Ight..... I m BACCCCK TO FORM>.....water like....bitch -- styliztik...aka..quote, 05:07:15 02/03/03 Mon
"i caught a lark from tha skies, cuz my heart was disguised, to take a part of its life," "cuz hhis homies SLy eyes devised a plan designed to bring back his PRIde." "i used gloves so they couldnt prove mine were the same set that threw them,slugs that chewed skin," DAMN!!! Ill concepts and imagery... haha... Do you do audio's? (NT) -- Souliberty aka IN{O}VADER, 08:00:14 02/03/03 Mon
"loose your soul faster than amputated legs..." haha nice wordplay ...but yo "mackdaddy" you about as much a pimp as I am a Jedi Knight, you need to elevate your subject matter because it' s more played than backwards Kangols. You have a good flow and you wordplay is ill...find something to write about, Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm *slognaK*, 11:17:04 02/03/03 Mon
I couldn't get with the content....I'm not into disrespecting women in lyrics....but the scheme seemed dope.....Try another subject matter or something....Keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 12:00:46 02/03/03 Mon
Hex musta not even read it, and got confused by the first two lines.. but yeah you should got rid of them, cuz the rest was dope, but those lines had nothing to do with anything and just looked wierd there.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 14:35:01 02/03/03 Mon
^^^^^^I said the "scheme seemed dope".....yeah, I was thrown off by the first few lines, my bad.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 14:41:26 02/03/03 Mon
Dope -- INS, 15:16:25 02/03/03 Mon
iight.. iight.. this had a nice lil flow to it.. kinda vivid in some parts.. keep at it, peace! (NT) -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 16:10:37 02/03/03 Mon
Flow bout the "earth" my 3rd post -- GoNzO, 17:59:06 02/02/03 Sun
pretty decent post... got kinda annoying with the repetition but I understand that was your intention... I read the first portion word for word but browsed through the later.... keep building.. overall.. a 6.5 outta 10... peace (NT) -- MORBID ARMOR, 01:42:22 02/03/03 Mon
ha....this was simple n concise...u said ur points, kept ur flow and wouldve been able to put this to beat....nice... (NT) -- styliztik...aka...quote, 04:05:50 02/03/03 Mon
nice drop man...liked da flow...good message to it...seems a lil simple but it doesn't take away from it at all i think...put this into audio and you'll be onto something dope...keep it up (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 04:38:49 02/03/03 Mon
it started out nice and kinda fell off...I lke the simplicity in which your lines connect, it's powerfull because it doesn't decieve...just a few weak lines and obvious ryhmes kinda watered it down to much for me and you might wanna check your flow on the fifith line...keep writing in this style. I like it, Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 11:41:59 02/03/03 Mon
This is good indeed.....I liked this.....Now, this post reminded me of a poetic-feel....Keep this up and stay up.....and continue to learn about the current events circulating our world..... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 15:17:18 02/03/03 Mon
KILLA VERSE -- CMOPAIN tha 10 year-old brother of Grotesque..Go easy on Me, 16:26:06 02/02/03 Sun
All right, look, I know ya 10, first line was going allright then it feel apart. r u really bout shooting some in the ehad wit an ozzie lil man, that aint keeping it real look deep in ya self, it won't come fast but with time and practice, stay up big man PEACE oH YEAH, MY CURRENT PIECED WAS AIMED AT YOU INTERPRET IT MAN. (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 16:47:28 02/02/03 Sun
he good for 10 but seem so fake bout all that other shit -- GONZO, 18:04:39 02/02/03 Sun
lol... I guess after you use up every excuse you can give for being wack, the only logical next step is to pose as a ten-year old kid... you keep posting and by this time next year you'll be an embryo (NT) -- INTOX, 21:09:27 02/02/03 Sun
hahaha.....yeah dawg i dont believe a ten year old would write about anything but pokemon....plus isnt V-ICE's heyday TEN YEARS and some change ago....like 1990...u cant be ten.....ha thisis funny (NT) -- styliztik....aka...quote, 23:13:29 02/02/03 Sun
(in Dr Evil voice) riiiggghhht....(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 00:18:15 02/03/03 Mon
read this before I keyed my shit above.. I dont know kid... the age isnt believable and if it is you need to enlighten ya ears with something besides the gangsta persona thats pretty much dead in hiphop... keep building.. peace (NT) -- MORBID ARMOR, 01:44:00 02/03/03 Mon
damn... Mature a bit then come back to us, hmmm...Realy realy basic but my first rhyme was about robbin a bank and gettin killed, called it "hell in a handbasket..." realy REALY try and elevate for the sake of yer future self... (NT) -- Souliberty, 08:44:48 02/03/03 Mon
.:: A U D I O ::..........OK this is just a battle verse.....Im not really a battle cat......BUT I thought I'd challenge this fooL...Well anyway have a listen...its only 1 minute 30 secs...............PeAcE -- Eternal Student (UK), 15:05:23 02/02/03 Sun
Not bad, the opening was kind of fresh some nices punches PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 16:12:16 02/02/03 Sun
this was coo....i liked.....loved tha accent.....haha (NT) -- styliztik....aka...quote, 23:47:29 02/02/03 Sun
lol at the colgate line and I liked the sick multis before it, uppercut type punches...a real good battle verse. You should do this kind of thing more often...Nice drop Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 07:27:33 02/03/03 Mon
Repost!......"The Lessons of Failure"......enjoy this ya'll! -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 03:12:33 02/01/03 Sat
Enter... -- FLaTLyNe, 09:33:14 02/01/03 Sat
Overall, this was an excellent read.......You're starting to have a similarity to my old posts.....Keep that up and I'll be hitting you up for a collabo sometime in the future.....Stay up.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 13:38:58 02/01/03 Sat
pimp post- and that quote was very appropriate-oNe (NT) -- Know oNe, 14:23:51 02/01/03 Sat
phat -- isie, 19:38:28 02/01/03 Sat
jesus.. this was long as hell, but worth the read.. very nice.. flow was on point for the most part... im feelin this fa'sho (NT) -- ºººmz. mîjå¬þøéººº, 23:32:25 02/01/03 Sat
kinda long , but from the lines i read, a pretty good piece of writing , good (NT) -- nemisis, 07:58:09 02/02/03 Sun
i luv when u post man but DAMN ur shyt is always long as hell lol...this was mad dope yo...think u've gotten to dat point where anythin u drop on da lounge will get recognition...stay up man...uno (NT) -- ...DiAtRiBe..., 05:45:10 02/03/03 Mon
Spur-of-the-moment inspiration spurns golden spits I lace quick.. Quick key, call it------The sun dont shine everywhere -- ===||Swords--->, 17:51:45 01/31/03 Fri
yo this was pretty nice swordz...some nice multi's in it and nice flow to it...seemed more on a poetry tip to me, but nonetheless..it was nice piece...stay up, peace! (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 03:16:35 02/01/03 Sat
'look at your mother, fights for shelter, raising kids who raise hell for, the love of it, got the roof, when yall are under it,' - I liked this..I felt some others words could've been substituted for words used more than once...overall short and brings forth thoughts to the mind...Peace (NT) -- FLaTLyNe, 09:36:00 02/01/03 Sat
To be honest it did flow but it didn't ryhme I keep reading the first few lines wondering how this flows,,,maybe it's the multis but some lines just look awkward...nice subject matter, Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 11:53:39 02/01/03 Sat
I didn't catch a "poetic" feel to this at all.....This seemed to be more fit for a cypher or somewhat.....It was good though, don't get me wrong.....Keep up and stay up.... (NT) -- h £ k §/|_ A \/©...., 13:30:57 02/01/03 Sat
your word structure is on point yo- i'd have to say the rhyme scheme was what caught me-keep doin it yo-oNe (NT) -- Know oNe, 14:28:44 02/01/03 Sat
why? -- isie, 19:40:15 02/01/03 Sat
LOL cable tv made me violent.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 00:46:07 02/02/03 Sun
LMFAO @ "why are you so violent" (NT) (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 05:32:58 02/03/03 Mon
as usual..this is wut i expected from u..dope shyt...nice poetry...not much to comment on cuz it was short as hell but it was good...keep droppin 'em...1ne(NT) (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 05:38:05 02/03/03 Mon
Lyrical Diplomacy -- isie, 19:35:05 02/01/03 Sat
hmm... intrestin, im a lil sicc of readin posts like this.. but wuteva, it was iigh i guess... i wasnt feelin the beginin at all, bout 16 bars later it got a lil better.. iono, guess i was expectin a lil more.. i felt you could put more into this an made it more intrestin.. or for that matter, kept my intrest.. (NT) -- ºººmz. mîjå¬þøéººº, 23:37:42 02/01/03 Sat
i liked this rhyme, it brought back memories but i dont like being reminded about it though, good spit. (NT) -- nemisis, 07:50:06 02/02/03 Sun
this was ok.....you stayed on topic and had some good lines in there....some were a bit simplistic but its coo tho......pEaCe (NT) -- Eternal Student (UK), 14:52:12 02/02/03 Sun
I'am not real patriotic but I really digged the passion and emotion you seemed ta compose this with nice post PEACE (NT) -- PAt D.A.W.G, 16:02:16 02/02/03 Sun
this was cool,lloonnnggg not hardcore like I like the messag was felt (NT) -- CMOPAIN, 17:09:02 02/02/03 Sun
i feel this cuz i write real shit like this... daym almost most the same (NT) -- GoNzO, 18:14:04 02/02/03 Sun
peeped when u first posted and i promised myself i'd read da whole thing later...well i did...thought this was cool...nothing that took my breath away but it was cool for what it was...thought da line about the two planes was dope...keep droppin shyt yo and stay up...peez (NT) (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 05:30:44 02/03/03 Mon
What up lounge quick spit coming at yall been quiet this weekened. Thinking about our youth and had ta do a quick spit I wanna redo it more when I set up my studio though, anyways I call this piece"Padlocks block ryhme shares" -- Pat D.A.W.G, 15:59:05 02/02/03 Sun
this shit was ill, Im far from that level (NT) -- CMOPAIN, 16:36:14 02/02/03 Sun
well.... I give this a 7 outta 10... still needs work on ya overall weight with words and emotions... a pretty decent post... nice thoughts... just need a lil more elaboration... a good message with a little blurred pisces state here and there... nice post.. peace (NT) -- MORBID ARMOR, 01:46:53 02/03/03 Mon
"Numbers and figures displayed conceal certain truths/lies and thick thighs can confuse our precious youth"....loved dat line...gotta admit i've only peeped ur shyt once or twice before but after reading this i'll definitely peep all ur posts from now on...flow fell off a couple of times...but still...nice shyt yo...keep 'em droppin...1ne (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 04:45:59 02/03/03 Mon

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