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New comer -- Candy Co the Kidd, 23:04:04 02/23/03 Sun
STYLIZTIK, LETS GET IT ON DAWG, i KICKED THE FIRST VERSE -- Pat D.A.W.G, 18:14:06 02/03/03 Mon
- not bad but not to good either. your earlier post was alot better. i know this is a battle verse but what the fuck for.....keep it real,peace (NT) -- starks, 20:12:11 02/03/03 Mon
  - STARKS read the post below genuis!!!! (NT) -- Pat D.A.WG., 21:06:47 02/03/03 Mon
    - yeah i see that now thanks for the heads up touch hole......... (NT) -- starks, 21:21:22 02/03/03 Mon
    - how about YOU learn how to spell genius first...and before you say something stupid back, if you wanna battle me just let me know (NT) -- ///Trojohn\\\, 21:21:43 02/03/03 Mon
      - BITCH IF I WANTED YOUR INSIGHT I WOULD ASK, HOLY SHIT I'AM THE FIRST PERSON TO MISSPELL IN THE LOUNGE, STARKS ASKED WHY BATTLE? HUM... COULD IT BE THAT STYLIZTIK ASKED FOR ONE, DAMN!!! GET A CLUE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:32:02 02/03/03 Mon
- damn this was way to simple man especially for a battle.. keep at it.. though you'll begin to grow.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 12:19:47 02/04/03 Tue
- I'am bout ta snatch the mic out ya hand with ya arm still attached/........"that almost soundz like some Canibus shit! -- SickNen, 16:26:14 02/04/03 Tue
Hey lounge it's good to be back even if some don't know the GOD.. lol, hey this is text for a audio I'm bout to drop.. but I had some questions when I record there's terrible feed back that echos almost through-out the recording plot.. so if you have any ideas on how to change this terrible problem get at me.. coming soon.. "Cunning Is worth A Picture In A Thousand Words!"
--
Pathologist
"The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:50:13 02/04/03 Tue
this was proper. nothing that really shined but i'm sure in audio you could take it there. peace (NT) -- starks, 13:23:48 02/04/03 Tue
I guess this would be those type of tracks where you just brag on and on and say what you would to a wack emcee....this had no real solid content but I felt the rhymes....would be a dope track if delivered well....keep shit up Path...... (NT) -- Nakixem AM/OMNI, 14:29:24 02/04/03 Tue
hmmm....im thinkin it will sound better in audio....i can never really follow your flow real well in text since i dont hear you much, but the content was tight...that Superman scenario was caught me the most.... (NT) -- Vis, 14:48:38 02/04/03 Tue
yea, the content is always ill from you...i really enjoyed reading this, i bet it would sound ill as fuk in audio...cant wait to peep that shit....you always shining with the text though, no doubt...stay up Path....peace (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 15:38:01 02/04/03 Tue
New Post!!!.....a lil piece i'm workin on entitled..."Reachin"...just lookin for some feedback and critique....oooh, and this isn't long like usual hahaha....ENJOY!!!! -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 01:04:00 02/04/03 Tue
this was a treat to see so late in the morning..or early.. whatever I'm just having a slight case of imsomnia..kids screaming.. long.. day .. well back to this nice post man..! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 04:15:05 02/04/03 Tue
fuking ill kid....kinda depressing but rays of hope shined threw...this was a very nice read, im glad to see you dropping ish like this...its really dope..stay up J...peace~ (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 04:23:42 02/04/03 Tue
damn...deep shyt man...alot of ill lines.."it's like i'm reachin for stars,but they're too far, and it's just too hard, to grab ahold of the heavens wit human arms"....dope....good shyt for me to start da day with..makes me wanna post..stay up yo...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 06:32:49 02/04/03 Tue
the "human arms.." part was my favourite too, flow was on point and the word usage is expanding nicely...I liked the deepness of this most of all. Nice drop, Peace sonn (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 09:53:06 02/04/03 Tue
definitly got some good word play here.nice read overall (NT) -- starks, 13:52:21 02/04/03 Tue
damn, i dont even know what to say about it.....cant call it ill or dope or SOMETHING of the norm, i do think you should cut the lines length...content was pretty good though....depressing, way more than what mine was...stay up though (NT) -- Vis, 14:55:02 02/04/03 Tue
yo i spit to tha beat SOuliberty wrote to this aint no audio i jsut liked the beat and wrote to it...feel it tho -- styliztik...aka...quote, 18:50:06 02/03/03 Mon
LET ME KNOW IF THIS IS YOUR REPLY BF i DESTROY YOU KID (NT) -- PAT D.A.W.G, 20:03:43 02/03/03 Mon
yeah i here you, you got a sort of fast style to ya too ,ha............word keep em coming. bless one (NT) -- starks(the mouth of madness), 20:08:48 02/03/03 Mon
do what u do....spit a better verse (NT) -- styliztik....aka...quote, 20:35:30 02/03/03 Mon
hotness -- the fish, 20:43:02 02/03/03 Mon
i cant hear audio.. but the text was iigh.. nothin else for me to really to say, kinda wish i could hear you spit this tho... well wuteva, keep doin you (NT) -- 犖榦z. m螴戭禩暻犖, 20:43:05 02/03/03 Mon
aLL right bitch -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:57:01 02/03/03 Mon
iF U AINT GONNA REPLY FUCK YOU MAN, THIS IS A BATTLE. NOT I KICK A VERSE AND GO RIGHT ANOTHER ONE. MY VERSES WEREN'T EVEN THAT GOOD KEEP IT REAL NEXT TIME peace (NT) -- PAT D.A.W.G, 23:52:58 02/03/03 Mon
I liked the flow of this it was nice.. keep up! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 12:15:38 02/04/03 Tue
Straight Spittin'. The Reason for alarm. Pure Fire here. ENJOY! -- STARKS (the mouth of madnes), 20:03:02 02/03/03 Mon
this was kinda simple in the begining.. i wasnt really feelin it there.. but it picced up towards the end.. iono, it wasnt that bad... keep uppin (NT) -- 犖榦z. m螴戭禩暻犖, 20:38:23 02/03/03 Mon
yeah -- the fish, 20:40:47 02/03/03 Mon
umm...don't know....borin ass subject really......i think this is some more 'misdirected talent'...cuz it seems ya got it in ya to do somethin nice, cuz it was some aight rhymin in here and some fairly decent word usage......just....i don't know, a bunch of people these days seem to be rappin wit no inspiration...no motive....and that's how this appears to me....just rhymin for the sake of it.....find somethin to inspire you and motivate ya, then write somethin wit meanin....peace! (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 00:57:03 02/04/03 Tue
^take notice of this advice...he's just give you ten critiques for the price of one and it's the best you could heed...Do you. You have what it takes without question...Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 10:26:51 02/04/03 Tue
word.. it was boring but the flow made me keep reading it flowed so water-based.. bulk up your subject matter and and keep your flow and you'll be nice.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 12:07:05 02/04/03 Tue
just messin -- the fish, 20:36:59 02/03/03 Mon
this seemed kind of poetic to me... none the less, this was iigh for what was there... cant really expect to get a real crit off somthin this short... (NT) -- 犖榦z. m螴戭禩暻犖, 20:47:27 02/03/03 Mon
Man get some help if ya really suicidal and spend some time in the lab sorting shit out there is sunrise and a next day everyday son PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:01:42 02/03/03 Mon
yea i can see the poetic feel to it...it was aight.....played out subject for reals...but ya didn't come completely wack wit it...i can tell ya got at least some talent...just learn to focus it...find different things to write about.....stay up, peace! (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 00:51:34 02/04/03 Tue
fuk what niggaz sayin,...critique everything......ha....i liked, felt it....u got something dawg...just one question...u really feel this way, i mean u do coke, and think about death like this?....if so.....weep a lil, cry aloud, shake yo arms, but dont pay fo tha farm....lay down tha arms, pray and lay out yo arms, heres a blessin (NT) -- styliztik....aka...quote, 02:26:03 02/04/03 Tue
damn...try some Robitussin..shyt makes ya fuzzy inside..(NT) (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 07:00:56 02/04/03 Tue
Where are you all looking? WTF ? ...Is there a hidden link i don't know about...where's the poetic stuff...this kid said "I don't give a fuck about fuck" !?!?!...this was total ass, get the fuck outa here 'poetic' lol (he's not the only one snortin') haha (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 10:17:58 02/04/03 Tue
Me and my Boy made this comic, it's happens to have a fish in it so I couldn't take a fish in a bowl with white residue flaking-up on his upper-lip serious.. I just started laughing.. pretty good flow though.. The Fish..lmao I use to talk about fish-bitches and crab-cakes and tad-pole heads.. it's just funny my bad.. change you name in jail you would be somebodies bitch.. "fish, fish, fish, fish!" "my highs wearing off.." from Half baked.. lmao! peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 12:03:03 02/04/03 Tue
iigh, i replied to 3 posts.. so this shouldnt get deleted, i've posted here a while bacc.. its been a while since the last time i dropped anything... but heres one of my attempts at this story line shit... "Gauntlets of a King" ... peep an give honest crits... all feedbacc is much appreciated -- 犖榦z. m螴戭禩暻犖, 21:01:06 02/03/03 Mon
yo this was aight right here....nothin that really stood out, but nice imagery and illustration....pretty good word usage and some aight rhymin in here....i only have two 'complaints' about this: for one, ya gotta switch up that rhyme scheme some more...got old real quick just the same thing pretty much line after line...and for the second, this just seemed a bit unnatural to me, but that could just be me, who knows...any ways, this was cool...keep doin ya thang, peace! (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 00:48:27 02/04/03 Tue
do you cyber sex? (NT) -- Psych, 09:44:58 02/04/03 Tue
I agree with J for the most part, however I thought your imagery and vocab was excellent and the I kinda liked the flow too...The content could use a concept or a story or something...but as far as spittin' fire goes, shit was hot...Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 10:06:35 02/04/03 Tue
I really tried to get through it.. that paragraph form just aint getting it.. what I read was in-depth.. so let me try again... well it's iight.. just not much concept or look I don't know I just aint feeling it.. I've seen you come way iller then this! peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:55:33 02/04/03 Tue
Keystyle for yall, Just got some time and dropping some thoughts I call it "Distant plains" PEACE -- Pat D.A.W.G, 15:23:49 02/03/03 Mon
You're getting better with just about every post you post.....Keep this up.....this is way better than the first time I peeped a post by you....I'm proud.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 15:31:40 02/03/03 Mon
I dont think I ever peeped before.. but this was pretty good.. I see potential evident.. keep elevating.. peace! (NT) -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 15:42:07 02/03/03 Mon
yeah dawg u got potential....work that shit.....good post....overall....5.5 (NT) -- styliztik.....aka...quote, 16:00:47 02/03/03 Mon
nice showing Pat....keep dropping, you are elevating rapidly...dope, youll get to where you want to be eventually, whereeva that may be?....but as for this, it was a good read...sty up man...peace~~ (NT) -- Essence ->AM, 17:43:58 02/03/03 Mon
this was nice....like Essence said,ur elevatin rapidly...a lot of cool lines in here...keep it up...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 06:50:27 02/04/03 Tue
QUIK KEY....no real direction, just thoughts and images that my brain wanted to evict....,PEACE~~~ -- Essence...........AM, 17:34:13 02/03/03 Mon
uhhh...i didnt really catch the flow....but there were some bright spots, if i remember correct...ur effer?....u used to have a wicked flow...multis and snaps...but this was about a 5.2 (NT) -- styliztik....aka..quote, 18:03:41 02/03/03 Mon
dope shyt for a key...nice imagery...multi's were nice...1ne(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 06:41:27 02/04/03 Tue
ok this is called CHEMICAL-WAR.. it's got alot of pops but just bare with me.. till I get a new computer.. shit sucks, the mic.. sucks.. I don't know and I dont post up album songs due to biters.. so enjoy.. over look the damn pops you babies.. lol.. peace!! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 16:33:28 02/03/03 Mon
cant peep audio from this comp, but ill definetly try later from another computer....peace (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 17:36:20 02/03/03 Mon
damn first time hearin u on audio.....u sound like blak thought......hahah fish bitches screamin clam chowder......this was nice.....like yo flow.....liquid.....on beat....tight (NT) -- styliztik....aka....quote, 18:09:30 02/03/03 Mon
word. this was hot. best audio i've heard on here in a while .........one (NT) -- starks, 20:16:23 02/03/03 Mon
Word Path...This is real nice! I haven't peeped you before and this is definately hot, You sound like Myalanski from Wu Syndicate to me. Real slick delivery and nice flow, hold up I'm gonna peep it again...Glad you back up in here...Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 05:24:54 02/04/03 Tue
(((AUDIO)))Brand New Audio.. Blowin up this kid's spot.. This sounds-like-a-seven-year-old fag dissed me, but what he didnt know is that i found the beat he said he made.. But I found the isntrumental and used it back against him!"ICEKAPICKLEPHILLAMICDIZZLEKILLA - The Truth Comes Out" I posted it at his site blowin up his spot hahah -- ===||Swords--->, 14:22:00 02/03/03 Mon
I forgot about you voice man.. lol.. you sound playful.. you make me smile when I hear you man.. thats a good thing.. this was pretty dope... you got way more comfortable.. the samples was nice too.. hahah.. ice kapone ...lmao! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 14:34:18 02/03/03 Mon
This computer won't hook up the link....sorry.....Keep up and stay up.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 14:44:31 02/03/03 Mon
yeah you seem at ease with the mic and mischeivous when you come at it,...samples were cool, nice flow liked the "John Conner" line...nice drop Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 05:16:55 02/04/03 Tue
ight..... im interested in a battle,...but this aint no battle verse....so someone hit me up.....but first peep... -- styliztik.,...aka..quote, 17:45:11 02/03/03 Mon
... wuteva, ill battle you (NT) -- 犖榦z. m螴戭禩暻犖, 19:24:32 02/03/03 Mon
this was coo, ill battle you, no im not effer, i used to be swoon U N I t...pz (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 21:18:18 02/03/03 Mon
The GOD had returned with the gates open .. let the truth flood the lounge THREADS!!!! -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 15:37:18 02/03/03 Mon
HAHAHAHAHA......So, you're "The Father" and I'm "The Son"......Yo, where the fuck have you been!!??....DAMN, thank you for posting this!!...HAHAHAHA,.....eh, I got something to ask.....Do you think the Lounge is ready for a Path/h � k � collabo yet?.......E-mail me.....and let me know.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�....., 15:51:36 02/03/03 Mon
yea, you two should collabo, this was sik though..you always bring the dope content, some i dont get but hey, thats you, do you, peace~ (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 17:40:48 02/03/03 Mon
too graphic for my tastes (NT) -- the fish, 20:46:30 02/03/03 Mon
AN ALL NEW POST.....A PETRARCHAN........"One Man's Spirit" Part 2....Warning: h � k �-A-linguistics, Intrinsic Metaphors, and Phantasmagorical Rhetoric May Cause Mind-Stops....BE ADVISED BEFORE ENTERING... -- h � k �-A-g � �/|_ A \/ � � h....aka tH� � l e � h � |� e � � � ㄍ J�, 14:50:14 02/03/03 Mon
Man you feel it deep but at times you wander off on me in ya post not bad but I've seen u come better PEACE (NT) -- PAT D.A.W.G, 15:29:37 02/03/03 Mon
So you use his Hebrew name in the full I see.. good to see you know.. but I didn't doubt it.. although I doubt you follow Jehovah's Witnesses.. but back to the post.. Hex shit.. what more can I say? peep! -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 15:49:35 02/03/03 Mon
this was rockin.....i dont usually like spits drowned wit multisyllable words.......but this shit was nice.....i felt the flow, message, overall 7 (NT) -- styliztik...aka...quote, 15:52:14 02/03/03 Mon
Sometimes I cant really get into your posts......but you caught me at a time where I was feeling this......more poetic in places but still pretty tight for a text drop..........some nice word play and...and ....and..... WORDS !!!!.....PeAcE (NT) -- Eternal Student (UK), 18:09:31 02/03/03 Mon
i was flowing over the L.O.X- All fo rthe love from there first joint -- INS da Don, 14:39:26 02/03/03 Mon
I'm sorry, but the content made me skim through this with lightning speed.....Bring something new to the table...and stop trying to be like everyone else..... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 14:48:43 02/03/03 Mon
how about? u actually read -- INS, 14:58:54 02/03/03 Mon
Good for you.....but MY reply was MY opinion....."Oh yea... Oh yea.. Listen closely... I am the greatest/Realest/ Grimeiest/ Slimest/Motherfucking hustlin addict/Thats why I carry a semi automatic/".....Do you.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 15:11:38 02/03/03 Mon
Man elevate, u sound like every other bullshit, I sell drugs tote guns wanna be thug. This aint hip hop at all man, if u sit on a mill then hire someone ta write your shit PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 15:33:51 02/03/03 Mon
pROBABBLY SOME 16 YR OLD KID TRYING TA WRITE LIKE HE'S A HARD g BUT HE'S LOWERCASED STATUS (NT) -- PAT D.A.W.G, 15:43:16 02/03/03 Mon
not much to say about this.. kiddo.. peace! (NT) -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 15:52:32 02/03/03 Mon
all i know is yall cats are jabbin at this nigga like he aint in the fam...instead of tryin to be funny yall should give...CONSTRUCTIVE criticism....YALL MUIthafukas are destructive.....YO DAWG....just work on metaphors....actually i see u got potential in yo punch lines....that im real big on bein ready to die...was tight.....i feel u dawg...dont let no one break ur spirit (NT) -- styliztik...aka...quote, 16:03:57 02/03/03 Mon
You're right about that.....my bad on my part... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 16:08:44 02/03/03 Mon
thank you.... I appreciate the words of wisdom (NT) -- INS, 17:56:19 02/03/03 Mon
MORBID ARMOR returns for his second instillment of supremacy.. ENJOY!!!!!... Feedback appreciated -- MORBID ARMOR, 01:39:48 02/03/03 Mon
damn man...this was ill...very nice post...i wanna highlight da dope lines but there's too many...this was just sick overall...keep droppin shyt like this...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 03:35:37 02/03/03 Mon
too complex.....not sayin i dont understand it, but less is more in rap these days, i know this is tha lyricist lounge but, whateva,,,,do yo thang (NT) -- styliztik,....aka...quote, 04:02:27 02/03/03 Mon
Too many sylibles in some lines made it unflowable, and it wasn't very coherent because you used words you prolly couldn't use in a sentance...But the vocab, sis add a very abstract element to this, so it was okay except for flow and illiteracy... (NT) -- Souliberty, 08:40:13 02/03/03 Mon
this was alright ...not great, some lines were nice but your flow off kilter like a bitch and I agree about parts being incoherent because you put words where the shouldn't be...anyways not bad, keep on. Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 11:29:12 02/03/03 Mon
I'm a big fan of poetic-flow.......Plus, your "hints" of being a "Living Legend" had me wondering......"蕞蕞蕞.....Is he for real...蕞蕞蕞"....But, yeah....it was dope in some parts.....and I was diggin' the polysyllabic-structure in this.....Some people think being "abstract" means that you don't have to make any sense.....THAT'S A LIE!!!!.....Keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�......<<<<<<...Hopefully, the soon-to-be sixth member of The Orphanage....., 12:08:43 02/03/03 Mon
I dug all the west coast underground references.. tiiight.. but i didnt like the flow.. i got the meaning of this pretty well, vocab dont throw me off, but the flow just wasnt there too well work on developing your scheme and rhythm.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 14:40:52 02/03/03 Mon
I like it -- INS, 15:53:41 02/03/03 Mon
swords hit it one the nail.. (NT) -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 17:13:37 02/03/03 Mon
Ight..... I m BACCCCK TO FORM>.....water like....bitch -- styliztik...aka..quote, 05:07:15 02/03/03 Mon
"i caught a lark from tha skies, cuz my heart was disguised, to take a part of its life," "cuz hhis homies SLy eyes devised a plan designed to bring back his PRIde." "i used gloves so they couldnt prove mine were the same set that threw them,slugs that chewed skin," DAMN!!! Ill concepts and imagery... haha... Do you do audio's? (NT) -- Souliberty aka IN{O}VADER, 08:00:14 02/03/03 Mon
"loose your soul faster than amputated legs..." haha nice wordplay ...but yo "mackdaddy" you about as much a pimp as I am a Jedi Knight, you need to elevate your subject matter because it' s more played than backwards Kangols. You have a good flow and you wordplay is ill...find something to write about, Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm *slognaK*, 11:17:04 02/03/03 Mon
I couldn't get with the content....I'm not into disrespecting women in lyrics....but the scheme seemed dope.....Try another subject matter or something....Keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 12:00:46 02/03/03 Mon
Hex musta not even read it, and got confused by the first two lines.. but yeah you should got rid of them, cuz the rest was dope, but those lines had nothing to do with anything and just looked wierd there.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 14:35:01 02/03/03 Mon
^^^^^^I said the "scheme seemed dope".....yeah, I was thrown off by the first few lines, my bad.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 14:41:26 02/03/03 Mon
Dope -- INS, 15:16:25 02/03/03 Mon
iight.. iight.. this had a nice lil flow to it.. kinda vivid in some parts.. keep at it, peace! (NT) -- EMINENT "THE SCIENCE OF ELOHEIM!", 16:10:37 02/03/03 Mon
Flow bout the "earth" my 3rd post -- GoNzO, 17:59:06 02/02/03 Sun
pretty decent post... got kinda annoying with the repetition but I understand that was your intention... I read the first portion word for word but browsed through the later.... keep building.. overall.. a 6.5 outta 10... peace (NT) -- MORBID ARMOR, 01:42:22 02/03/03 Mon
ha....this was simple n concise...u said ur points, kept ur flow and wouldve been able to put this to beat....nice... (NT) -- styliztik...aka...quote, 04:05:50 02/03/03 Mon
nice drop man...liked da flow...good message to it...seems a lil simple but it doesn't take away from it at all i think...put this into audio and you'll be onto something dope...keep it up (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 04:38:49 02/03/03 Mon
it started out nice and kinda fell off...I lke the simplicity in which your lines connect, it's powerfull because it doesn't decieve...just a few weak lines and obvious ryhmes kinda watered it down to much for me and you might wanna check your flow on the fifith line...keep writing in this style. I like it, Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 11:41:59 02/03/03 Mon
This is good indeed.....I liked this.....Now, this post reminded me of a poetic-feel....Keep this up and stay up.....and continue to learn about the current events circulating our world..... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 15:17:18 02/03/03 Mon
KILLA VERSE -- CMOPAIN tha 10 year-old brother of Grotesque..Go easy on Me, 16:26:06 02/02/03 Sun
All right, look, I know ya 10, first line was going allright then it feel apart. r u really bout shooting some in the ehad wit an ozzie lil man, that aint keeping it real look deep in ya self, it won't come fast but with time and practice, stay up big man PEACE oH YEAH, MY CURRENT PIECED WAS AIMED AT YOU INTERPRET IT MAN. (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 16:47:28 02/02/03 Sun
he good for 10 but seem so fake bout all that other shit -- GONZO, 18:04:39 02/02/03 Sun
lol... I guess after you use up every excuse you can give for being wack, the only logical next step is to pose as a ten-year old kid... you keep posting and by this time next year you'll be an embryo (NT) -- INTOX, 21:09:27 02/02/03 Sun
hahaha.....yeah dawg i dont believe a ten year old would write about anything but pokemon....plus isnt V-ICE's heyday TEN YEARS and some change ago....like 1990...u cant be ten.....ha thisis funny (NT) -- styliztik....aka...quote, 23:13:29 02/02/03 Sun
(in Dr Evil voice) riiiggghhht....(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 00:18:15 02/03/03 Mon
read this before I keyed my shit above.. I dont know kid... the age isnt believable and if it is you need to enlighten ya ears with something besides the gangsta persona thats pretty much dead in hiphop... keep building.. peace (NT) -- MORBID ARMOR, 01:44:00 02/03/03 Mon
damn... Mature a bit then come back to us, hmmm...Realy realy basic but my first rhyme was about robbin a bank and gettin killed, called it "hell in a handbasket..." realy REALY try and elevate for the sake of yer future self... (NT) -- Souliberty, 08:44:48 02/03/03 Mon
.:: A U D I O ::..........OK this is just a battle verse.....Im not really a battle cat......BUT I thought I'd challenge this fooL...Well anyway have a listen...its only 1 minute 30 secs...............PeAcE -- Eternal Student (UK), 15:05:23 02/02/03 Sun
Not bad, the opening was kind of fresh some nices punches PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 16:12:16 02/02/03 Sun
this was coo....i liked.....loved tha accent.....haha (NT) -- styliztik....aka...quote, 23:47:29 02/02/03 Sun
lol at the colgate line and I liked the sick multis before it, uppercut type punches...a real good battle verse. You should do this kind of thing more often...Nice drop Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 07:27:33 02/03/03 Mon
Repost!......"The Lessons of Failure"......enjoy this ya'll! -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 03:12:33 02/01/03 Sat
Enter... -- FLaTLyNe, 09:33:14 02/01/03 Sat
Overall, this was an excellent read.......You're starting to have a similarity to my old posts.....Keep that up and I'll be hitting you up for a collabo sometime in the future.....Stay up.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 13:38:58 02/01/03 Sat
pimp post- and that quote was very appropriate-oNe (NT) -- Know oNe, 14:23:51 02/01/03 Sat
phat -- isie, 19:38:28 02/01/03 Sat
jesus.. this was long as hell, but worth the read.. very nice.. flow was on point for the most part... im feelin this fa'sho (NT) -- 犖榦z. m螴戭禩暻犖, 23:32:25 02/01/03 Sat
kinda long , but from the lines i read, a pretty good piece of writing , good (NT) -- nemisis, 07:58:09 02/02/03 Sun
i luv when u post man but DAMN ur shyt is always long as hell lol...this was mad dope yo...think u've gotten to dat point where anythin u drop on da lounge will get recognition...stay up man...uno (NT) -- ...DiAtRiBe..., 05:45:10 02/03/03 Mon
Spur-of-the-moment inspiration spurns golden spits I lace quick.. Quick key, call it------The sun dont shine everywhere -- ===||Swords--->, 17:51:45 01/31/03 Fri
yo this was pretty nice swordz...some nice multi's in it and nice flow to it...seemed more on a poetry tip to me, but nonetheless..it was nice piece...stay up, peace! (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 03:16:35 02/01/03 Sat
'look at your mother, fights for shelter, raising kids who raise hell for, the love of it, got the roof, when yall are under it,' - I liked this..I felt some others words could've been substituted for words used more than once...overall short and brings forth thoughts to the mind...Peace (NT) -- FLaTLyNe, 09:36:00 02/01/03 Sat
To be honest it did flow but it didn't ryhme I keep reading the first few lines wondering how this flows,,,maybe it's the multis but some lines just look awkward...nice subject matter, Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 11:53:39 02/01/03 Sat
I didn't catch a "poetic" feel to this at all.....This seemed to be more fit for a cypher or somewhat.....It was good though, don't get me wrong.....Keep up and stay up.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 13:30:57 02/01/03 Sat
your word structure is on point yo- i'd have to say the rhyme scheme was what caught me-keep doin it yo-oNe (NT) -- Know oNe, 14:28:44 02/01/03 Sat
why? -- isie, 19:40:15 02/01/03 Sat
LOL cable tv made me violent.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 00:46:07 02/02/03 Sun
LMFAO @ "why are you so violent" (NT) (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 05:32:58 02/03/03 Mon
as usual..this is wut i expected from u..dope shyt...nice poetry...not much to comment on cuz it was short as hell but it was good...keep droppin 'em...1ne(NT) (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 05:38:05 02/03/03 Mon
Lyrical Diplomacy -- isie, 19:35:05 02/01/03 Sat
hmm... intrestin, im a lil sicc of readin posts like this.. but wuteva, it was iigh i guess... i wasnt feelin the beginin at all, bout 16 bars later it got a lil better.. iono, guess i was expectin a lil more.. i felt you could put more into this an made it more intrestin.. or for that matter, kept my intrest.. (NT) -- 犖榦z. m螴戭禩暻犖, 23:37:42 02/01/03 Sat
i liked this rhyme, it brought back memories but i dont like being reminded about it though, good spit. (NT) -- nemisis, 07:50:06 02/02/03 Sun
this was ok.....you stayed on topic and had some good lines in there....some were a bit simplistic but its coo tho......pEaCe (NT) -- Eternal Student (UK), 14:52:12 02/02/03 Sun
I'am not real patriotic but I really digged the passion and emotion you seemed ta compose this with nice post PEACE (NT) -- PAt D.A.W.G, 16:02:16 02/02/03 Sun
this was cool,lloonnnggg not hardcore like I like the messag was felt (NT) -- CMOPAIN, 17:09:02 02/02/03 Sun
i feel this cuz i write real shit like this... daym almost most the same (NT) -- GoNzO, 18:14:04 02/02/03 Sun
peeped when u first posted and i promised myself i'd read da whole thing later...well i did...thought this was cool...nothing that took my breath away but it was cool for what it was...thought da line about the two planes was dope...keep droppin shyt yo and stay up...peez (NT) (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 05:30:44 02/03/03 Mon
What up lounge quick spit coming at yall been quiet this weekened. Thinking about our youth and had ta do a quick spit I wanna redo it more when I set up my studio though, anyways I call this piece"Padlocks block ryhme shares" -- Pat D.A.W.G, 15:59:05 02/02/03 Sun
this shit was ill, Im far from that level (NT) -- CMOPAIN, 16:36:14 02/02/03 Sun
well.... I give this a 7 outta 10... still needs work on ya overall weight with words and emotions... a pretty decent post... nice thoughts... just need a lil more elaboration... a good message with a little blurred pisces state here and there... nice post.. peace (NT) -- MORBID ARMOR, 01:46:53 02/03/03 Mon
"Numbers and figures displayed conceal certain truths/lies and thick thighs can confuse our precious youth"....loved dat line...gotta admit i've only peeped ur shyt once or twice before but after reading this i'll definitely peep all ur posts from now on...flow fell off a couple of times...but still...nice shyt yo...keep 'em droppin...1ne (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 04:45:59 02/03/03 Mon
JOIN IN......CYPHER.....FREE LESSON.....Courtesy of tH� h � k �-A-c�t�...... -- h � k �-A-g � �/|_ A \/ � � h....aka tH� � l e � h � |� e � � � ㄍ J�, 16:50:07 01/31/03 Fri
...my turn.... -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 17:18:53 01/31/03 Fri
Lemme drop somethin -- 腤嶠l:The√疄薃η嫫ψ of Κa�a▍�zm, 17:39:23 01/31/03 Fri
...my turn again.... -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 17:45:22 01/31/03 Fri
lol @ cyphering in the future.... lamer! -- PSYCH, 04:11:26 02/01/03 Sat
It's time for the 'bush'-tcher to stop choppin' the forgotten -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 09:06:11 02/01/03 Sat
My Turn... -- FLaTLyNe, 09:26:32 02/01/03 Sat
im bored....... -- Eh-Cents...AM, 20:14:20 02/02/03 Sun
Flow bout the "earth" my 3rd post -- GoNzO, 17:53:49 02/02/03 Sun
DELTE THIS (NT) -- GONZO, 18:00:21 02/02/03 Sun
Backwards... -- FLaTLyNe, 09:49:24 02/01/03 Sat
The content in the second part is nice with some good vocab and usage, although I couldn't catch the flow of the first verse at all and some lines just didn't ryhme in both parts...I wasn't feeling meter here...The "iris.." line was ill, Peace -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 11:46:32 02/01/03 Sat
You know exactly what you're doing when it comes to lyricism....I always enjoy your posts....even though the "length" in your bars (from my perspective) seems a little infantine, at times......other than that, keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 13:42:37 02/01/03 Sat
a very interesting piece...i found it to be more poetic than lyrical...i can dig it-oNe (NT) -- Know oNe, 14:18:49 02/01/03 Sat
tight -- isie, 19:37:08 02/01/03 Sat
this was iigh, didnt really do much for me... i couldnt really get into the begin for some reason, but the sencond part flowed a little better in my point of view.. well whatever.. keep doin you (NT) -- 犖榦z. m螴戭禩暻犖, 23:28:55 02/01/03 Sat
i think it flowed well all the way through..felt the content more in the gray area, umm....kinda wish the lines were a lil longer, but it work...drop some them audios shorty, how's the chilren (NT) -- Vision, 00:17:16 02/02/03 Sun
you need practice , elevate. (NT) -- nemisis, 07:55:32 02/02/03 Sun
lINES WERE SHORT DIG A LIL DEEPER AND PUT MORE STRUCTURE AND YOULL GET IT, CONTENT WAS REAL NICE THOUGH, I RECOMMEND YOU KEEP SPITTING TOO. DONT WORRY BOUT NEMISIS HES WACK ANYWAYS (NT) -- PAT D.A.W.G, 16:17:38 02/02/03 Sun
I didnt understande half of that, I like how it flowed, I can't even inagine writin like that (NT) -- CMOPAIN, 17:15:34 02/02/03 Sun
Repost-MikeDawg-Not Screwed - Welcome to Austin -- MikeDawg, 13:26:08 02/02/03 Sun
OK.........listening............thats better phew....I thought you were playing.....man that tripped me right out....that last one.........OK........this is aiight..........for a freestyle.........its good to just release some flows sometimes.....thats cool.....keep elevating and spitting......PeAcE (NT) -- Eternal Student (UK), 15:00:15 02/02/03 Sun
Having troubles downloading PEACE (NT) -- PAT D.A.W.G, 16:13:48 02/02/03 Sun
REPOST OF A CLASSIC......"The Last Words Of A Martyr: Polycarp's Speaking"....Warning: h � k �-A-linguistics, Intensive Rhetoric, Phantasmagorical Imagery, Church History, And Originality May Cause Mind-Stops...BE ADVISED BEFORE ENTERING... -- h � k �-A-g � �/|_ A \/ � � h....aka tH� � l e � h � |� e � � � ㄍ J�, 14:46:22 01/31/03 Fri
I really liked the top part that was tight. In the bottom part a few lines caught my eye but I didn't follow a lot of it. By that I mean I was lost. (NT) -- 腤嶠l:The√疄薃η嫫ψ of Κa�a▍�zm, 16:58:41 01/31/03 Fri
Classic?? nah.. Wordplay nice as usual.. i cant usually get into your content.. too left-field for me.. bring it back down to earth.. Ooh, you should repost the collabo me and you did, shit was tiiight.. but like more than a year old heh.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 18:18:52 01/31/03 Fri
I didn't catch a lot of either and it wasn't because I didn't understand it like usual, I actually did understand that some of it was total gibberish ...some lines like the one about "Rome" and the "sparrow" that was a 'throw away' line to me along with others ...however the word connection was sick and the multis were nice even though some resulted in simplicity like "bitch ass" and "kick back" and "Nero" and "Zero"...Overall it was a good read but some was blah..content = very nice Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 12:20:47 02/01/03 Sat
Ummm....I was putting the martyrdom of Saint Polycarp in the form of a story......there's no "gibberish" in this at all......thanks for scanning through lines and trying to reply..... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 13:28:15 02/01/03 Sat
Some lines were pretty nice but couldnt follow too well man. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 16:06:45 02/02/03 Sun
MikeDawg - ((Audio)) Welcome to Austin -- MikeDawg, 23:22:43 02/01/03 Sat
sry... cant peep audios right now (NT) -- 犖榦z. m螴戭禩暻犖, 23:40:12 02/01/03 Sat
this CANT be you.....but maybe, who knows.....dont really like screwed music anyway (NT) -- Vision, 00:10:47 02/02/03 Sun
you know.. i think u would sound better without the screwed effects... do a normal audio... peace (NT) -- guTTy, 02:58:31 02/02/03 Sun
this is comical.......you slowed your voice down.......sorry I aint feeling (NT) -- Eternal Student (UK), 14:55:45 02/02/03 Sun
my life -- KaRma, 21:38:35 02/01/03 Sat
Some stuff I wrote earlier, flipped a few lines I have used before to improve. No real theme or topic, just what came out at the time -- 腤嶠l:The√疄薃η嫫ψ of Κa�a▍�zm, 16:51:02 01/31/03 Fri
Very up to date with the U.N. line.......very nice, well-structured......You spelled "connotation" wrong though....HAHAHA, just playin'....Keep this up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 17:27:19 01/31/03 Fri
Dope shit for real.. didnt like that maternity ward part tho.. rest was tight tho..flow getting better.. peace.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 18:12:36 01/31/03 Fri
always nice readin ya stuff Brail...this was put together pretty nice...nice display of multi's in places...flow was smooth in here...nice word usage..yea liked the UN line...nice shit here...glad to see ya still reppin...hopefully i'll be droppin some more soon...been in a bad writer's block slump lately...but i should be back round shortly....stay up sonn, peace! (NT) -- J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 03:22:05 02/01/03 Sat
Flow was nice, I can see you've been onto that !...nice post here, I liked the "Yeah he got some potential,,," line shit made me laugh, nice read, Stay up Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 12:01:32 02/01/03 Sat
....YO..ONCE AGAIN THE DECORATED VETERAN DISPLAYS HIS WAR SKILLS POETICALLY..IN THIS LITTLE PEICE ENTITLED..."BLOOD DIRT" -- <<*****>>-----*---筥儼---灱RTH----*---<<*****>>, 14:32:12 01/30/03 Thu
erm... dunno, i kinda got the feelin you could do better cause ive seen better from you, dont let ya standards slip. peace dawg! (NT) -- nemisis, 14:42:12 01/30/03 Thu
naw, this shit was tight..forrealz..i was feeling the creativity and the flow was dope...keep dropping the illus shit...peace (NT) -- Essence....AM, 15:56:16 01/30/03 Thu
Up until the last few lines this was dope... (NT) -- Lyrikil...G3N@$yD3....The official sponsor of 211 for winos, 18:44:56 01/30/03 Thu
Wasnt feeling the red as much as the rest, but the rest was sick, like old lounge shit.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 03:10:15 01/31/03 Fri
This had me very attentive until the first line in the "yellow verse".....Nice way of conveying unconscious thoughts....Keep this up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 12:08:43 01/31/03 Fri
Damn...thats how a vet does it...really nice...it's good to come back and see this Blak...all three stances were nice ...'thats my radiant mega-ton- blast,, ask who ate- the- dust -last// about the impact..of my pull out the gauge and bust ass...'- Nice...the flow was really precise... (NT) -- FLaTLyNe, 09:41:27 02/01/03 Sat
(((AUDIO)))"THIS WEEK'S SPECIAL" Good ol Swords-excalibur-caliber storytelling..Peep it while it's still hot! -- ===||Swords--->, 03:17:27 01/31/03 Fri
Yo the second beat is straight fire, flow blends with this beat very nicely. The third part is pretty nice too. I had already listened this morning but didn't reply. Keep doin what you doin (NT) -- 腤嶠l:The√疄薃η嫫ψ of Κa�a▍�zm, 17:20:13 01/31/03 Fri
All right lounge, been elevating a lill bit, searchiing for that level yall..Just soem thoughts.... PEACE -- Pat D.A.W.G, 04:38:37 01/31/03 Fri
Keep on elevating........You have grown in YOUR lyricism......a little.....What's this "level" that you're trying to reach anyway?..... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�......, 11:48:16 01/31/03 Fri
nice spit, lyrically well written, had a nice poetic feel throughout!1 (NT) -- slick vic low, 13:21:20 01/31/03 Fri
Your lyrics seem to be coming along nicer as time passes. I encourage you to keep doin it man. Peace (NT) -- 腤嶠l:The√疄薃η嫫ψ of Κa�a▍�zm, 17:15:17 01/31/03 Fri
ALL NEW POST........FORGET TRYING TO REACH "LEVELS"......These Are Two Poems That Reflect A Certain Mood That I'm In....Yes, It's Abstruse...As Usual....Warning: h � k �-A-linguistics, Hebraisms, Intrinsic Metaphors, Connotated-Terminology, General References, And Originality May Cause Mind-Stops...BE ADVISED BEFORE ENTERING............ -- h � k �-A-g � �/|_ A \/ � � h....aka tH� � l e � h � |� e � � � ㄍ J�, 13:48:56 01/31/03 Fri
These are also my verses for the upcoming five-man collabo from Lyrikil........ (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 15:50:26 01/31/03 Fri
Man yo shit is complex but nice all together nice post. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 16:25:56 01/31/03 Fri
Nice to see something new from you. The first sonnet was blazing, word connection was crazy as usual. The second one didn't flow as well as the first in my opinion, but I liked the Vietcong line. Peace! (NT) -- 腤嶠l:The√疄薃η嫫ψ of Κa�a▍�zm, 17:05:56 01/31/03 Fri
Just got off work tied as hell, but still can't sleep ...Quick key...Hope ya'll find this entertaining ..Dlusional and War should...I know your watching.... -- Lyrikil..of..G3N@$yD3..........I gotta dip out I'll be back to reply, 07:19:59 01/25/03 Sat
lol @ "pretend soap" haha..a good read and it will be interesting to peep the replies to this...I think you said what you wanted to here...good stuff and funny too. Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 09:37:00 01/25/03 Sat
haha, don't know the other guy, but this was funny.. -- Watt$on formerly from Vocab's Official, 12:07:38 01/25/03 Sat
I GOT LOST -- GoNzO, 12:31:11 01/25/03 Sat
??????? Maybe im not deep enough...but i dont get it (NT) -- Tactics, 12:49:11 01/25/03 Sat
wanna see u n Dlusional have a text battle lol da lounge has been dead da last couple of days..would be cool to have a battle...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe...da Robitussin fiend, 14:41:00 01/25/03 Sat
Lyrikilled -- Venum, 14:45:47 01/25/03 Sat
lol@those who dont get it....anyway, i thought it was aight....a couple funny lines.....but yo, Dlusional said he wont be on for a minute so dont bitch about him responding.....and he's not going to respond cause he thinks this was real wack and not worth a response.....stay up though (NT) -- Vision, 16:45:27 01/25/03 Sat
flow is REAL nice..can tell it would sound good in audio. lyrix up to par ..make it into one and ill def peep good post 1ne (NT) -- Lucian0, 13:43:54 01/26/03 Sun
Okay, now I see what goes on in the Lounge while I'm gone......"Narrator"?...... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 15:01:18 01/31/03 Fri
!!!!!!! ATTENTION LOUNGE NIGGAZ ITZ AUDIO TIME!!!!!!..SORRY IVE BEEN GONE FOR SO LONG WITHOUT DROPPIN SOMETHIN...A LIL SOMETHIN FOR YALL NIGGAZ RIGHT HERE....PEEP..."INFECTIOUS METHOD".....!!!!!!!(text included) -- <<*****>>-----*---筥儼---灱RTH----*---<<*****>>, 00:51:48 01/30/03 Thu
I don't know man, knda simple maybe I need ta hear the audio, Some words were alright though keep spittn. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 03:20:27 01/30/03 Thu
Ur mic sounds like some shti from windows 95.... horrible quality, is this ur first audio?... aigh umm.... ur voice seems forced i dunno u shoulda kept a constant flow.. like when u started.. u kno u started a lil fast.. dem u stopped... n went all slow.. dat didn't sounded dat rite.... i dunno maybe is just me.... loose da adlibs.. other than that this was nice.. i like da beat...didn't really liked da chorus.. it was like dat r.a.k.i.m ... I just think u should keep a constant flow.. u'll sound dope.... 1 (NT) -- psych, 04:51:10 01/30/03 Thu
I read the lyrics.....this was okay....it would probably sound better in audio....Then again, this sort of reminded of listening to college radio a little too much.....Not saying this was wack or anything of that nature....just my honest opinion....Keep up and stay up.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 14:56:07 01/31/03 Fri
just a quick spit , about school n hospitals so peep and be honest when yall reply -- nemisis, 15:00:28 01/30/03 Thu
If this really happened sorry bout your luck, reminded me of "Brain Damage " too much elevate PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 15:07:41 01/30/03 Thu
haha...you writing on how you get picked on...haha..naw, this was cool, just shot them next time, save yourself some anguish...pz (NT) -- Essence....AM, 15:50:52 01/30/03 Thu
Damn...Something like that happened to me when I was 16......We mobbed them for a week straight afterwards..but hey I still feel ya..nice rhyme...Keep building...One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil...G3N@$yD3....The official sponsor of 211 for winos, 18:35:38 01/30/03 Thu
Rhymes were a bit on the basic side, but you got your point across.. did this really happen? (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 03:07:47 01/31/03 Fri
I liked it.....it seemed to be well-structured throughout.....Whether or not this is based on an actual experience, it seemed decent...Keep this up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 14:51:58 01/31/03 Fri
All right just chill with this piece here man!!! -- Pat DA.W.G., 03:15:54 01/30/03 Thu
YES LET US KEEP TRUE HIP HOP ALIVE!!!!!..nice shit yo... (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~ UP VERY LATE WITH A SEVERE CASE OF STREP THROAT, 03:22:59 01/30/03 Thu
Nice...all of a sudden gettin deeper...like Yu-gi-oh's voice. HAHA...ahem...Elevation more than noted from this piece. (NT) -- SleepAH!, 04:45:12 01/30/03 Thu
nice flow on this one , good lyrics too i liked this one alot (NT) -- nemisis, 14:35:58 01/30/03 Thu
this was tight,,you elevating man..keep on...nice flow and content on this piece...stay up...peace (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 16:17:19 01/30/03 Thu
This was damn good......even though you're caught up between being a "straightforward and semi-abstract" emcee like Common...Keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 14:32:30 01/31/03 Fri
THE LOUNGE OF LYRICISM RIGHT?�Well I𠍿 expanding my horizons in lyricism, beyond plain ole rhymes�this is a poem I wrote the morning after I performed some poetry at an Open Mic at this little club�I call this piece, 𨧻 listen� this doesn㦙 rhyme at all, but I hope the content and the actual essence of the piece will grab you�***PEEP WITH OPENMINDEDNESS AND PACED LIKE IF YOU WERE TO HEAR IT�DON塬 SPEED READ�SLOWLY CONSUME THE MESSAGE�.ALL CRITIQUE IS APPRECIATED*** -- N.a.K.I.X.e.M. of Abzent Minded Ink of O.M.N.I., 12:24:05 01/27/03 Mon
this was dope... started off a little bit weak, but you made your point with the "extreme degree of racism" shit... then you started off graphic as FUCK on the second part... almost stopped reading... but i'm glad i kept on... shit was powerful... good work man. pz (NT) -- INTOX, 12:45:12 01/27/03 Mon
this was fuking dope man..i could almost hear you speaking it while i read it...this is some def-poetry ish at its best..i could picture you on stage speaking this very hyped....very nice display of poetical essence by ya..stay up and keep shining...peace (NT) -- Essence....AM, 12:52:43 01/27/03 Mon
astounding work...amazing display of talent in poetics, graphic and yet beautiful in its own right, very good work, seriously one of those type things that, unlike alot of rhymes, gets under your skin and sticks with you, almost giving you the chills....or maybe thats just the flu i got talking...very outstanding piece Nax... (NT) -- XitiZeN, 13:00:53 01/27/03 Mon
fuck this was deep!!!! (NT) -- rusty, 14:24:52 01/27/03 Mon
very nice...more on the inside if you care, just some shit off my chest inspired by your post -- Vision...Thrice Optics of Abzent Minded and O.M.N.I., 16:05:32 01/27/03 Mon
hmmm.. I thought this was real.. dope aint the word.. neither is nice or ill.. it was deeply real.. vivid with a harsh feel.. the end was a nice twist.. well thought out.. props on your thoughts in here.. stay up! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 18:28:47 01/27/03 Mon
This first stanza was wack because you obviously don't know the reason behind "extreme degrees of racism".....the second stanza was good...wasn't really graphic at all....and the third stanza was the best to me, stood out more.....Pretty nice....you just need to stop watching too much TV and pick up a few books....read on Marcus Garvey and Malcolm X....then you'll understand the standpoint from which I'M coming from..... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�....., 12:17:06 01/31/03 Fri
ILL lil keystyle.....just dropping some thoughts.....PEACE~ -- Essence...Abzent Minded..., 15:44:06 01/30/03 Thu
"pen play never stalls when I scribed this embedded etiquette"...this line did it for me ...Good shit...this thou "I submarine like a ham sandwich " ...please don't say that again..lol...One Hun'ed. (NT) -- Lyrikil....G3N@$yD3.....The official sponsors of marijuana for tikes....., 18:28:02 01/30/03 Thu
DOPE! schem was ill.. much more focused than usual.. just let the words flow on this one, and man did they flow.. nice lyrics except for, ya know, that one line.. (NT) -- ===||Swords-->, 03:05:47 01/31/03 Fri
DOPE ASS SPIT!! Very nice lyrics on this it flowed like the ocean kid PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 04:48:05 01/31/03 Fri
"im the Moses of hip hop cause of how I just make way"....<<<<<<..No you're not!!!!....This was good though....Keep on keystyling.....stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 12:04:51 01/31/03 Fri
Keyed Mentalz Collab...edysan3g..."..dEEZE nICCUH'S dONE sNAPPED....lITERAL____lIKE bi-pOLAR CAT'S WHO TAKE lITHIUM IN lOW INTERVALS" -- G3n@$yDe...One Hun'ed, 18:46:31 01/30/03 Thu
Yea this shit defiantly was hott.... Both had nice multi's and vocab..... keep postin, i enjoy reading this kinda shit....overall: 9/10 (NT) -- Thakin, 19:21:40 01/30/03 Thu
This was def. a tight read.. Nice lyrics kept me interested.. the main point of a text post.. good work. (NT) -- ===||Swords-->, 03:03:16 01/31/03 Fri
Not bat at all! Lyriics were ood in allot of places keep posting!! PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 04:44:06 01/31/03 Fri
Now that you have multi-syllabic structure down packed......try the next level......okay?.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 12:00:58 01/31/03 Fri
Repost...That Seven Man Collab that I mentioned below... -- Emcees in order of appearance: Lyrikil of G3N@$yD3, Swords of ENEMIES, Iron Monk of ENEMIES, Gutty of Absent Minded, Pathologist of Eloheim, Dlusional Of O.M.N.I, and Versatyle of Absent Minded�, 01:19:49 01/24/03 Fri
let me guess..u wanted people to be like "yea..d-lusional's was the worse"..lmaoooooooooooooooooo...u got me rollin on this...thanx for the laugh... (NT) -- LANOISUL-D.....i spelled my name backwards..i'm cool like you now.., 01:25:11 01/24/03 Fri
ohhhhh the longevity of this...illness knuckleheadz...show these niggaz how it should be done...!!!!! yeah..this is "too hard to understand" for jiggy ass niggaz..fuck em ..aint our fault we be smarter hahahaha...yall done it with this shit...peeez out!! (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:44:56 01/24/03 Fri
I remember this one. Shit like this should show yall what happens when people put heads together. Why don't you two battle, and at least get something artistic out of it? Yall both got more talent than the majority of people here. Put it to good use. (NT) -- §leepý: The ∑pic of Κa†a¢lÿzm...oh...and what happened to the DISS THREADS? Those were funny shit., 05:08:28 01/24/03 Fri
I'm glad you decided to leave out MY VERSE..........FUCKIN' IDIOT!!!! (NT) -- h � k �-A-g � �/|_ A \/ � � h�......., 17:48:06 01/30/03 Thu
FORMS OF A WASTED YOUTH! -- Warpath "The scorned soul of ELOHEIM!", 19:00:35 01/27/03 Mon
SIK...this was fresh, just what i needed to peep after a hard days work...nice drop..glad to see you 'round again...pz (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 01:04:17 01/28/03 Tue
WHAT THE FUCK YAL NIGGAZ SLEEPIN ON THIS FOR!!!?? I HATE THE FACT THAILL ASS POSTS LIKE THIS GET SLEPT ON BY A BUNH OF NO TALENT NUTLICKING BASTARDS SUCH AS THE ONES ON THIS SITE...THIS WAS PURE FUCKING ILLNESS....!!!! (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 10:42:17 01/30/03 Thu
Attention Attention Calling All Wack Ass Amateurs Beat Off To That Smut Mag of Yours With Your Own Blood Repost... was slept on -- G R O T E S Q U, 13:46:55 01/29/03 Wed
i liked this spit (even though a repost) still feelin it aswell i normally forget a bout rhymes in about 20 mins but this onw stuck wimme for sum reason....................... (NT) -- nemisis, 14:45:20 01/29/03 Wed
This was cool for a battle spit. Had some nice multis. Some parts you just threw to much in one line though. Overall it was pretty good. For future refernce, you my want to wait a lil longer than a day to repost, and I'm pretty sure it was Aretha who sang respect. peace (NT) -- 腤嶠l:The√疄薃η嫫ψ of Κa�a▍�zm, 15:29:27 01/29/03 Wed
yo... this post right here was nicly done... ill multi's and dope structure... keep postin! (NT) -- the dark spitter a.k.a SuPrEmE VOcaB, 16:24:59 01/29/03 Wed
since when is "wack"italian for kill..."wack" is a "mafia" term for kill..people in italy dont be sayin im gonna wack you!....the first line was ass in my opinion..the rest of it was okay not that ill but it had its moments all in all it was a good peice...so peace (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:35:18 01/30/03 Thu
Nice and decent for a battle flow lost me very little but was a dope spit in all. Oh it was Aretha Frankling dawg its cool though PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 03:51:12 01/30/03 Thu
Key-style for the masses.. welcome the God back.. peace lounge! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 18:59:17 01/28/03 Tue
WoW now this was a dope ass key, content was ill, structured with muscle, damn, to many ill lines to bring to attention, well worth the optic splatter, keep on (NT) -- Grotesque, 19:10:47 01/28/03 Tue
wow this is long and red and i'm high so i don't know if I can really read it but i peeped it i know, i cheated but please don't feel decieted i'm not conceited just deleted...pz from archie and Edith... (NT) -- Peter Lynch...make some more money if your so hungry..., 23:04:37 01/28/03 Tue
This was a nice ass key. I found some parts a lil hard to follow though. Think it would be real hot in audio. Keep doin what you do (NT) -- 腤嶠l:The√疄薃η嫫ψ of Κa�a▍�zm, 15:49:30 01/29/03 Wed
ayo... this post is kinda like a wu-tang/ killarmy 1997 style... very dope ish here... like how ya started off.... peace (NT) -- the dark spitter, 16:30:06 01/29/03 Wed
what up PATH????....still droppin that shit thats waaay over niggaz headz i see!...coo ...glad to see you still around..peace ! (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:40:58 01/30/03 Thu
Hot piece yo, sound better in audio got lost here and there Nice though PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G., 03:47:41 01/30/03 Thu
Just a lil bit of a song I'm writing about my relationship with Herb , Just lookin for some feedback -- 腤嶠l:The√疄薃η嫫ψ of Κa�a▍�zm, 13:34:00 01/28/03 Tue
I remember when Aesop was talkin about weed in that collab I did in my first weeks here. I forget. I think me, J and Lyrikil were in that shit, too. (note: if any of yall find that post, lemme know) Anyways, I think this was flipped a -little- better. Keep it up. (NT) -- Sleepy D'Wulf, the EPIC of KATACLYZM, 13:46:53 01/28/03 Tue
word i'm feeling this.i to have married the tree's.i started at about thirteen and smoked everday since. it's been 10 long forgetful years.peace (NT) -- starks, 15:32:07 01/28/03 Tue
WoW that shit was ill, content was tight, flowed a river, I loved the lines from twice as mean to the Van Gogh, shit was crazy, keep on (NT) -- Grotesque, 16:21:49 01/28/03 Tue
pretty dope man.. I seen it done way better.. but still pretty dope.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:20:31 01/28/03 Tue
Pot is a beautiful thing aint it nice yall PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 03:42:45 01/30/03 Thu
A few more rough verses for the song I'm writing. First verse was posted yesterday if you want to check it first. -- 腤嶠l:The√疄薃η嫫ψ of Κa�a▍�zm, 15:21:58 01/29/03 Wed
fuck that was some deep shit and i was feelin it, this is by far the best post ive read by you so far. (NT) -- nemisis, 15:27:32 01/29/03 Wed
nice. for real that'll be a hot track. good luck with the audio. Fire for sure (NT) -- starks, 15:59:21 01/29/03 Wed
ehhh..this wasnt the hottest shit i ever read..but it was str8..some lines were a little too simple..but all in all this was pretty coo..peace (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:05:16 01/30/03 Thu
I like love joints Brail, and this is nice real nice work yo, cant wait till the audio PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 03:34:30 01/30/03 Thu
Underground Nightmare. PEEP -- STARKS (the mouth of madness), 16:07:21 01/29/03 Wed
hmm, i read through this pretty slowly to get the feel of it but some of it i just didnt get like the beginning but the rest was cool not the best ive seen from you but . cool (NT) -- nemisis, 16:22:27 01/29/03 Wed
this was booty...nah im playin it was tight yo..coulda been more in depth.....peace (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 00:59:52 01/30/03 Thu
Beginging lines got me thinkning and I liked allot of the lines in here yo, nice one Starks.PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 03:29:57 01/30/03 Thu
a battle rhyme to lil lucky or lil d i dunno (kinda short though, like lil-luckys penis) -- nemisis, 15:11:11 01/29/03 Wed
Better luck next time (NT) -- 腤嶠l:The√疄薃η嫫ψ of Κa�a▍�zm, 15:24:01 01/29/03 Wed
This was shit..it sucked ...it was horrible..and thats putting it nicley.. (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:23:29 01/30/03 Thu
god DAMN...U SUCK...like...for real...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 01:29:55 01/30/03 Thu
Man, you got a lot work in the lab to do, post when u put more thought into a rhyme Elevate SON!! (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G., 01:53:12 01/30/03 Thu
EMINENTS DANCE .. REAL AUDIO! -- Eminent "The Science of ELOHEIM!", 19:09:49 01/27/03 Mon
you sound like Black Thought kinda.....dont know if you heard that before....the quality was real good considering i had to turn up the volume all the way to hear it....beat is ill i like the pianos...or is that a xylophone, maybe a xitar but i doubt that....probably a guitar...dont know some string instrument cant tell its too low, but i like the mellody, ya flow fit the beat nicely...lyrics intense at parts depending on the emotion....ill audio here, where that joint you did wit words? (NT) -- Vis, 19:36:07 01/27/03 Mon
nice work... sounds like this was done on a cheap mic tho... dope content and flow tho... good work.. peace (NT) -- GuTTy JaCoBz- AM, 21:48:08 01/27/03 Mon
peep -- TOX, 22:49:56 01/27/03 Mon
This beat is real nice.......delivery is ill......... lyrics and vocab both felt.....sounds like a dodgy mic.....but apart from that this is tight....I wanna hear more of this (NT) -- Eternal the Student, 13:11:50 01/28/03 Tue
delivery is dope, mic kinda has that puuhhh sound on some parts, but overall this was real nice...lyrics and beat was ill...nice drop man..good luck on whateva ya do...pz (NT) -- Essence....AM, 14:23:27 01/28/03 Tue
the quality wasnt that bad..i really liked the voice and the flow the lyriks...this is the very first audio i ever heard from you...illness..one (NT) -- ~!~BLAk EARTH~!~, 01:51:27 01/30/03 Thu

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