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LET ME PUT IT LIKE THIS....... -- droop, 21:33:28 02/26/03 Wed
- Is this your first rhyme ever written? I'll base my reply on your answer... (NT) -- INTOX, 22:02:29 02/26/03 Wed
- not my steez, but do you, stay up..peace (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 22:02:46 02/26/03 Wed
- let me put it like this...your fukin horrible..go build a house with toothpicks or something..these rhymes are fukin horrible..i could sound iller saying my shyt backwards...and wat da fuk u doin sayin some shyt bout a condom name on swords post? like he stupid or something?..ur fukin name is DROOP...wtf?!?....yea..u really are "shit"..pat dawgs friends gave u dat nickname when u took a shyt on urself or something?? (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Wheelchair kids could still droop on u.., 22:09:54 02/26/03 Wed
- I think I'll keep my comments to myself about this..ummm..what ever it is (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 22:37:46 02/26/03 Wed
- What you need to do is put in some work with the pen and paper. Forget about guns you don't have and crimes you'll never commit. (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 22:53:47 02/26/03 Wed
- Droopy DLAS what's the difference..and HAHAHAHAHAHHA @ this rhyme.. Im sure 50 cent would be ashamed that you bought his album.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 01:49:01 02/27/03 Thu
- No way man, rhymes like this dont mix wit hip hop like 2 dicks, elevate in the lab son PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G., 21:06:13 02/27/03 Thu
Perfected ASSULTS winding winds cycling lifts global in SENSE, 6 men gist- 144,000 ascend marrow behind- angelic at times I sign the TRUTH, documented for the YOUTH.. I angle the TROOPS roots strong timberland BOOTS tied to the words of this poem peep the SONG! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 16:20:37 02/26/03 Wed
I almost had it....but lost it...JUST PLAYIN'.....You used slant-rhyme and other schemes in this post.....I enjoy it when you do that!!!....Keep this up....and....stay up..... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 16:33:36 02/26/03 Wed
Peace be unto you to god......whoaa ness (NT) -- OV@KIL...Yo long time no peep...as since before ya my fav lounge reppa...very vivid with thoughts...very deep in thought...Very Ill...Ht ya boy a Ovakil2k..on yahoo..holla, 17:16:22 02/26/03 Wed
Nice wordplay and vocab, I liked the POE referance and the 5 bars below that allot, the other parts were dope too NICE. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 18:19:04 02/26/03 Wed
P.E.A.C.E....G.O.D...This was tight...although everytime I read your work I can't help but wonder where do you get your weed from ...One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 19:41:57 02/26/03 Wed
paththologist... your word usage in ya rhyme was amazing... the vocab was one of my favorites... maybe in the future I can do a ill ass colab with ya... peace (NT) -- The dark spitter, 12:53:36 02/27/03 Thu
so its like that fam??.....lol...just kiddin man,..heard you were up at the HEAT battle last tuesday...I was up in Pontiac at the O Type show.....once again man...HOLLA at ya boy.....(wordy48214@yahoo.com)...peace (NT) -- WORDS, 16:49:34 02/27/03 Thu
(((AUDIO))) "VALKYRIE" REpost, yeah, but thoroughly slept on.... I think its my best yet... -- ===||Swords--->, 19:30:58 02/26/03 Wed
got to peep this early today from the original post..my bad for not replying...kinda da same shyt again..hard to hear anything ..lol..had to put headphones on and shyt..the beat was pretty coo...not something i'd spit 2 but yea lol..lyrics were nice as usual..u mos def put emotion when u spit..guess i needa work on dat myself cuz i dont bwha..anywayz..nice post as usual u ass sketch artist.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I..Do Wheel Chair Kids Just lower their head and move in a fire? ..like they suppose to drop and roll??.., 19:59:12 02/26/03 Wed
main loop? like a used condom...lol...... (NT) -- droopy bitch, who you think?!, 21:46:50 02/26/03 Wed
cannot peep audios at this time (NT) -- Essence...........AM, 22:05:33 02/26/03 Wed
I recognize that lil theme in the backround of the beat, I can't place it though. Nevermind I remember it was Real Live Shit..........anyway your vocals were a lot clearer than some of the ones I've heard from you. Lyricallly yor delivery was sound. This was nice overall.....peace (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 22:58:55 02/26/03 Wed
swords this bullshit is making me board your putting me to sleep (NT) -- Dlaster, 15:07:53 02/27/03 Thu
Fuck, fuck!!!! what about skills tired of getting slammed life aint always perfect and I'am trying ta get it staright keystyle ta ease my chest.PEACE -- Pat D.AW.G, 18:06:51 02/26/03 Wed
I liked the beginning.. HAd soem nice expression of feelings, flow was aight.. different.. BUT, startin shit wiht INTOX is not good for your health.. just warning ya.. (NT) -- ===||Swords-->, 19:34:14 02/26/03 Wed
this wasnt dat bad til u started dissing intox..its like u were rhyming the way u do...den went into a lame as fuk battle spit to someone who is like a thousand times better den u..should have just posted like two seperate things..not like mix a diss with a reg. verse feel me??..so yea..hopefully intox ignores this or ur gonna be embarrassed again.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I..Imagine a wheelchair kid intoxicated...just rollin around in circles.., 20:09:51 02/26/03 Wed
sorry... I don't battle illiterates. And change your name. Adding "Dawg" to your first name doesn't make you real. (NT) -- INTOX, 20:52:39 02/26/03 Wed
this was OKAY...BUT...it wasnt much of a battle stance and it sounded like it was a generic "insert name here" verse...your friends called you "DAWG?" pretty original...people have called me dawg, man, dude, guy, kid, homey, bro, g, buddy, pal,..but i wouldnt call them "nicknames" and what exactly is an "amplified word" is that when you lOWER cASE tHE fIRST leTTER and cAPITALIZE tHE rEST D.A.W.G? do an audio... (NT) -- INTROVERT -abzent minded-, 21:35:41 02/26/03 Wed
damn, ive been gone but yo you elevated your shit big time. well done (NT) -- da mad hermit, 21:45:40 02/26/03 Wed
Sword your rhymes are about as sharp as the end of my dick reading your shit makes me sick. DAWG way out west is where Knight and DLAR dominate reading your shit is going to make us incriminate your lyrics with those of sword as reading your guys shit is making us sick. (NT) -- White Knight, 22:14:15 02/26/03 Wed
This was aiight...could've been better..The part where you dissed Intox started out funny to me ..but then got boring...I'm not a big fan of Intox's posts but from what I have read of his and what I've read of yours I agree with everyone else..you are not ready...aand sorry but I also agree with them on the name but hey do you (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 22:22:59 02/26/03 Wed
Well I thought the rhyme itself was alright. Had some nice one liners in there and shit. As far as the Tox thing goes well you gotta learn to walk before you run, I'll leave it at that. Peace (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 09:41:04 02/27/03 Thu
straight -- Lil Jay, 12:49:25 02/27/03 Thu
This site is mean but it needs some real MCs -- dlaster, 00:30:15 02/26/03 Wed
LOL ok sailor.. This sure is a battlefield when some ass-soldiers come posting bullshit.. Who gives a fuck if you're in New Zealand.. Does that make you better? Did go platinum in the "Koala" market? Here, have some pop rocks and soda.. itll make you feel better.. (NT) -- ===||Swords---> count to 10 and breatttthhheee.., 02:46:01 02/26/03 Wed
whut tha hell is this????? new zealand "invading" the lounge???? (NT) -- Darknodin..., 09:51:13 02/26/03 Wed
your ignorance is aw inspiring (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:19:00 02/26/03 Wed
Why waste a thread running ya mouth, do it in a post jackass (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 18:25:53 02/26/03 Wed
''Stark Love'' PEEP just a verse i wrote to this girl i've been kickin it with. Let me know what yall think. -- starks 9the mouth of madness), 14:54:22 02/26/03 Wed
very nice piece... very emotional... "a softer side to a jagged edge" dope line man (NT) -- dark spitter, 15:11:37 02/26/03 Wed
I totaly feel it -- Lil Lucky, 15:31:01 02/26/03 Wed
word.. don't fall to deep though.. pain comes from love.. peace! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 16:34:55 02/26/03 Wed
This reminded me of my old posts from 2001 where I had a couple of posts dedicated Alicia Keys and Angelle Brooks...HAHAHAHA.....but this was nice....keep Love in check though.....Keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 16:45:19 02/26/03 Wed
Yah, i agree wit PATH, there is allot of pain wit love. I feel this yo, i love love joints, cant point out 1 thing but I will say that there is nothing in here i didn't like. (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 18:23:01 02/26/03 Wed
the dark spitter presents... diabolical formations.... peep this... -- the dark spitter aka vocab supreme, 15:39:12 02/26/03 Wed
Ummm.....I felt parts in this.....the overall layout of the rhyme isn't that much of an "attention-getter"....I'm not knockin' your rhyme at all, I'm just stating the facts from my perspective....In my PERSONAL opinion, whenever it comes down to rhyming about the devil...be sure to bring a different aspect out....Everyone may not believe that a "Devil" exist, but a lot do...Some just don't know the many disguises he can utilize....keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 16:21:21 02/26/03 Wed
hmm.. where you saying YOUR the devils advocate? -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 16:28:18 02/26/03 Wed
Shutt up Heks...critique the rhyme....review it from diff aspects... (NT) -- OV@KIL.....feel ya duhn.....I agree with heks about layout..but it's more than that, 17:26:36 02/26/03 Wed
Diabolical formations (ruined) -- Lil Lucky, 17:44:10 02/26/03 Wed
Diabolical formations (ruined) -- Lil Lucky, 17:45:58 02/26/03 Wed
Life 1 -- Lil Lucky, 15:26:16 02/26/03 Wed
Yall dont have to say, i messed it up bad -- Lil Lucky, 15:32:45 02/26/03 Wed
Yeah, listen to Path.....You'll elevate in time....just make sure that you tell yourself to "Bring my ideas to the table cloaked under the arms of originality!"....Then you'll see improvement....Keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 16:39:08 02/26/03 Wed
Agree ...just be ya-self..regardless off others thoughts...yet take critical info into mind...peace (NT) -- OV@.....one Hunn'ed, 17:33:57 02/26/03 Wed
The Present..... -- Darknodin!, 09:40:04 02/26/03 Wed
War is a tool of the devil, those who feel it's grips as in themselves are condemned to its folly. keep writting, peace! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:13:13 02/26/03 Wed
yo flow was kinda mixed up in places. not feeling your content on dissin canadians. which i happen to be. although i live in massachusetts i got fam up there. peace (NT) -- starks, 12:47:03 02/26/03 Wed
allright piece... typical war stuff I here every time... (NT) -- the dark spitter aka vocab supreme, 15:19:51 02/26/03 Wed
Where is it that I can go to find peace? I need to release these feelings of grief, Jehovah please hold your Witness, until the suns burn out. Give me guidence when I'm in the mist of the drought, show me your love.. remove the fear from my heart, LOVE AS I LOVE YOU AND NEVER LEAVE ME STRANDED IN THE DARK! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:09:09 02/26/03 Wed
this had alot of creative figurative speech in it. almost heard you speaking first person. hard to catch a flow to it if there really was meant to be one. but proper thoughts. peace (NT) -- starks, 11:53:02 02/26/03 Wed
ayo path... this piece was the most spritually gifted rhymes I ever seen from the lounge ever... peeps might think this dident have flow but I'm sure the blood of christ flows withen us... keep droppin (NT) -- the dark spitter aka vocab supreme, 15:16:15 02/26/03 Wed
**Walkin Wheel Chair Man Is Back For A Quick Drop**..DAMN..THE LOUNGE SEEMS DEAD LIKE WARCHILD'S FANBASE..ANYWAYZ,PEEP NEW AUDIO FOOLS..PEEP WAT I WROTE UP TOP OF LINKS BEFORE YOU PEEP&REPLY..LYRICS INSIDE FOR THOSE WHO HAVE LIKE 14.4 K PC'S AND CANT PEEP AUDIOS... -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Makin Speeches For Wheel Chair Associations To Make Dem "Stand Up" for Themselves.., 12:53:54 02/25/03 Tue
ahhh damn... this beat is dopeness...your vocals are kinda loud... overshadows beat a lil bit.... not bad tho... like the saddam line... an improvement definetly.... stay droppin (NT) -- GuTTy, 15:08:53 02/25/03 Tue
gutty ur a fukkin ass fireman, did u read the top critique on flow and delivery....so...ur delivery was late so i want my pizza for free, and ur flow was cement kid! stay pouring!! naw on the really realz ur delivery is much improved and ur flow as well...ur hitting the beat way more nicely than u use to....so yeah stay on the up and upperz and tell me how i can get an application so i can be one of ur abzent minded colleagues...what do i gotta do to be in?...sacrifice a family member?..tell gutty hes a fukkin clown?..hey gutty..."youre a fukkin ass raping clown" haha uno.. (NT) -- 7 Bolivares (venezuelan currency), 15:32:58 02/25/03 Tue
nice ass beat...i think i woulda liked to murder this...like i said on aim i when i read it i didnt know how you were going to flow it or how it would sound...but you pulled it off pretty well...flow is getting better, you're riding the beat better than you have before....and quality doesnt really sound as bad as you say...sounds pretty good on this comp, just vocals a little loud thats all...good drop yo (NT) -- Vision, 15:35:31 02/25/03 Tue
Damn I like this beat....lyrics nice...work on delivery...make it flow better...even if you gotta rewrite the whole thing...you need to be more hype with lyrics like yours...I can't talk I can't get hyped for shit with out a live audience or a real studio...you have improved like vision said...keep working on it (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 16:22:14 02/25/03 Tue
Well you want honesty so peep inside...let me break it down to you... -- Flymizess * 1st Lady of O.M.N.I. -- The Accent of Tundra and Camelions', 17:30:26 02/25/03 Tue
beat is mad tight, u allways pick sick beats....ya delivery is mad improved....u have too many run on sentences which makes the flow a lil off at soem points....this is much improved yo....flow was good..but like i said, it fell off sometimes....lyrics was sick as usual....if u spit wit a lil more emotion it would be even nicer....good drop (NT) -- ��`�...��`�ialec� of A.M.��`�...��`�, 12:22:51 02/26/03 Wed
What up lounge been falling off a lil keystyle to the K.I.M -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:33:03 02/25/03 Tue
it wasn't a freestyle u don't write freestyles what I was saying was I expect high tech intellect 4 my freestyles (NT) -- dlaster, 21:15:03 02/25/03 Tue
after your first album?? have you even dropped AN audio yet, let alone MANY audios, which most albums list as their key ingredients? Other than that... your rhymes have all been used before, as has your topic. Speaking of your topic, that little paragraph you wrote on top confirmed my beliefs on lots of ... well, I'll just stop there. Peep inside for some feedback on lines... -- INTOX, 22:12:42 02/25/03 Tue
dont piss me off bitch -- dlaster, 22:13:29 02/25/03 Tue
yo son i honestly don't see anything wrong with this shit. i actually thought this flowed aiight. some ups and downs but yo son keep your head up. shit ain't over till it's over and it's only over when you say it is . stay up peace (NT) -- STARKS (the mouth of madnes), 23:08:20 02/25/03 Tue
This was aight.. but LMAOOOOO @ INTOX.. Damn, kid, he's about to kill himself (so he says) and you just cut him down.. Dont you know this is where he comes to make friends? (NT) -- ===||Swords---> LOL aitn that hard to make friends.. hit up your local YMCA or something.. Join the swim team.. haha.., 02:52:33 02/26/03 Wed
I Liked it... (it's tha first actual verse i read today... it feels good...) (NT) -- Darknodin, 09:57:58 02/26/03 Wed
titanium pens bend.. that line was pretty dope all in all not bad.. pretty tight! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:23:49 02/26/03 Wed
Main Loop Presents: Attack of the 50 ft. Beats pt. 3: "Jekyll and Hyde" -- ===||Swords--->, 02:42:53 02/26/03 Wed
Hardcore shit! yea!.... i lprefer the melody at the beginning (NT) -- Darknodin, 09:45:42 02/26/03 Wed
well the beat is HOT, good job on that.. hey what do you use to make your audio's track wise and vocal wise? get at me! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 11:15:57 02/26/03 Wed
Two new audios ...The Joint and J.F.A. -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 15:48:58 02/25/03 Tue
listened to the joint before you posted this....your flow is getting better but it still needs a bit of work....like parts was just ehhh, and you need a lil more emotion unless you just one them laid back time a spittas (NT) -- Vision, 15:54:20 02/25/03 Tue
ok i dont mean 2 hate but WTF was dat beat on da J.F.A. joint? lmfaooo!.wow.sounded like some shit from the movie "breakin" .like some 1985 beat ..wanted 2 get out my neon orange pants&do some pop and lock routines or something lolol..ur voice didnt go wit dat at all even though lyrics were pretty coo..wtf r u sayin in the beginnin of the other one?..vocals sound super low.lyrics were like decent..i dont know.not my style so its like kinda wrong in me in some ways for me to critique u know? but keep doin u though ..no hate.just being real..hope u understand the difference.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL.Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Is Christopher Reeves a Bum for Sittin Down All Day?, 16:06:05 02/25/03 Tue
Peep Inside yo... -- Flymizess * 1st Lady of O.M.N.I. -- The Accent of Tundra and Camelions', 17:09:02 02/25/03 Tue
can't peep from here but i'll definitely hit it up at home peace (NT) -- starks, 17:41:40 02/25/03 Tue
yo that first beats from BoneThugs right''Take me Home'' or some shit. that was cool yo. your flows almost perfect. there were a couple off moments but overall both dope posts. (NT) -- STARKS (the mouth of madness), 18:16:42 02/25/03 Tue
AYO!! 49 Cent!!! Stop deepthroating the mic on that first joint so I can understand you... all I could make out was "when I enter the room... something something something Temple of Doom". That, and the occasionaly "dont fuck with me"... "I kill people"....."mmmm... 64 slices of American cheese". That the only mic you have? (NT) -- INTOX, 22:27:12 02/25/03 Tue
that was coo... wasn't diggin the beats that much..except tha JFA thing! (NT) -- Darknodin, 10:15:47 02/26/03 Wed
Some sick shit (biting is forbiden) -- Dlaster aka the Fugitive from New Zealand, 16:24:16 02/25/03 Tue
This is your boss speaking what are you doing I pay you to work not go on some half pie web sites -- SIR, 17:12:44 02/25/03 Tue
This is your boss speaking what are you doing I pay you to work not go on some half pie web sites -- SIR, 17:12:46 02/25/03 Tue
not bad. had some repetativeness to it but overall a decent post keep showing. peace one! (NT) -- starks, 17:28:55 02/25/03 Tue
This was....so-so....not knockin' your post or anything remotely related to that....I just wasn't "moved" by your use of end-rhyme with this post....I liked the post below better.....Keep up and stay up though.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 17:32:05 02/25/03 Tue
Uhm...well...I flowed this to a beat and it actually sounds good. The only thing though is that you called yourself "synthetic"....filler word I guess cuz in your title you said "bitin is forbidden"....then you came back and said you rhyme "authentic" ...I mean pick one already. Other than that..I like this post, just need to branch a bit on word selection....keep postin yo...Peace (NT) -- Flymizess * 1st Lady of O.M.N.I. -- The Accent of Tundra and Camelions', 18:50:11 02/25/03 Tue
The flow was there but I didn't like the way u connected words, i could understand if it was a true freestyle, some content was nice though keep up peace (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:42:53 02/25/03 Tue
LOL i think that youre not as ill as you think.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 02:55:13 02/26/03 Wed
that was ok... but uhmm... you've got some anger in you (this is about your replies)... you need professional help guy... (NT) -- Darknodin is Comin, 10:09:39 02/26/03 Wed
''infinite rhyme patterns'' just some quick shit i enlisted with the help of my quick wit. -- starks (the mouth of fuckin madness), 17:38:02 02/25/03 Tue
Nice word connections kid, flow was fluid too...I mean what more can I say? I like what I like....keep up the good work. You into doing audio? Think this would sound nice if you did. Aiight....until next post....Peace (NT) -- Flymizess * 1st Lady of O.M.N.I. -- The Accent of Tundra and Camelions', 18:43:23 02/25/03 Tue
the word play really stood out here... solid all the way through. i liked how you came strong from the first bar, all the way to last one... nice (NT) -- ACHRILIDIES, 19:10:35 02/25/03 Tue
Allot of nice wordplay in here yo, flowed well, i really dig bars 3 and 4 (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:36:58 02/25/03 Tue
Yo this was dope.. nice lyrics and flow.. good shit.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 02:54:07 02/26/03 Wed
WOOOOO... nice nice nice shit dawg! (NT) -- Darknodin, 10:05:15 02/26/03 Wed
weal -- safe side, 22:54:13 02/25/03 Tue
Im your biggest challenge -- dlaster from New Zealand, 00:19:24 02/26/03 Wed
HAHA.. Look at this bi-polar emcee here.. Talkin bout "ima take yall to war" then goes LOVE ALWAYS.. make up your mind fool.. How about you battle koala boy up there.. he'll meet you behind the big eucalyptus tree after hes done playing Froto from LOTR...I like yall.. makes putting in my 3 replies so easy.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 02:49:06 02/26/03 Wed
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!! -- Darknodin.., 09:49:01 02/26/03 Wed
the dark spitter presents... "scatterd thoughts"... just some piece I wrote a while back... peep this! -- the dark spitter, 13:10:11 02/25/03 Tue
Some parts was nice others I didnt really like you getting better...keep working on it (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 16:08:18 02/25/03 Tue
yo this looks familiar in rhyme skeme. hmmmmmmm. not bad stay up. (NT) -- starks, 17:35:04 02/25/03 Tue
Some parts were nice others I wasnt feeling. bars 11,12,13 were really nice (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:58:33 02/25/03 Tue
JUst sum shit yall need to peep -- In$aiN, 14:33:47 02/25/03 Tue
too short...actually its good dat its short cuz this wasnt too impressive..more middle school rhymes."jump a sucka like a matress"..wtf is dat?..elevate ..shit was simplistic and just like..wack??... (NT) -- D-luSioNaL Abzent Minded/O.M.N.i...Just Bought Christopher Reeves Some New Wheels..(for the wheelchair..not a new car), 14:45:37 02/25/03 Tue
I don't know which one I disliked more this or the one above...you really need to practice... (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 15:56:16 02/25/03 Tue
Jump a sucka like a matress, makes no since unless u wanted say jumping on emcees like a matress maybe I dont know man elevate or find a new outlet (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:53:01 02/25/03 Tue
Short poem But reall ass lyrics -- In$aiN, 14:40:28 02/25/03 Tue
the only thing REAL about this..is how you REALLY need to elevate haha..way too short..mispelling everywhere..and for something like this..u gotta write more and be more descriptive so we could get a feel/understanding on what you tryin to say..its like you leave readers hanging..anywayz..keep elevatin.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.i...Let My Wheel Chair People Roll.., 14:50:48 02/25/03 Tue
HUH??????This was too short...too simple...at least try to put forth an effort (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 15:53:34 02/25/03 Tue
WHAT, THIS WAS NOT AS REAL AS U WERE SAYING AND ITS FUCKING SHORT AS HELL. IF U WANT TA BE A LYRICIST I SUGGEST U HIT THE LAB (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:50:24 02/25/03 Tue
Hey this may be the first time it really don't rhyme, but hey I'm just telling my last story.. goodnight! -- Warpath "The scorned soul of ELOHEIM!", 19:27:13 02/24/03 Mon
WTF...be going on in your head..G.O.D...I don't know if this is a spit, a story, or a poem but I like it..One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil, 19:54:56 02/24/03 Mon
i dig ya shit fo-real loc! to explain for those illiterate asses, those bars my man jus produced are called "sicc made" a mans mind can only take so much.UNTIL HE SNAPS!!!! (NT) -- droop(tha prodicle son), 21:37:29 02/24/03 Mon
Ill shit black....I kept gettin a vivid image of each line as I kept readin, stay up (NT) -- Novakane, 16:18:30 02/25/03 Tue
I'm glad I read this......How's everything going on at home?....I know you miss your son....but you know where he is now......Keep that emotive-complex up....Still have problems with the "misses"?....Anyways, the rhyme scheme was mixed between a broken-rhyme scheme and a slant (or half) rhyme scheme...Looked very interesting though.....I guess I'm one that's aware of what's going on because of the e-mails from a couple of weeks ago.....still, keep that emotive-complex up....and stay up.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�....You know.....the other half of Hy�-o-tHet�cal/|_ u m i n a r � � �....right?....HAHAHA..., 17:10:45 02/25/03 Tue
foul word connections like curse words in cursive, observe this whether or not you believe you view a subversive blah blah and some more blah -- Vision...Thrice Optics of Abzent Minded of O.M.N.I., 10:39:51 02/25/03 Tue
btw, happy birthday to me (NT) -- ., 10:45:41 02/25/03 Tue
This was ill...and happy birthday ..21 right? you hitting the 50 tonite?? ....hit me one my email ...I want to holla atcha bout something...oh yeah scroll down and check the audio you gotta use the link inside the post cause it's not on the page above (NT) -- Lyrikil, 11:02:09 02/25/03 Tue
longer den ur usual short post..caught me off guard lol..nice drop...good lines..good flow..drop more often though fuka..lol.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Wat Would You Give A Wheel Chair Person On Der Bday??, 11:24:53 02/25/03 Tue
This was pretty good. Had a nice way of associating words with an unbalenced flow (NT) -- Spector, 12:25:58 02/25/03 Tue
umm...a good bday present..a new pair of timbs..at least ill know it was a good investvent and theyll take care of them.. (NT) -- 8 coconuts (gotta be used as money somewhere), 15:42:26 02/25/03 Tue
Downward Spiral -- Spector, 12:22:22 02/25/03 Tue
pretty nice piece but it was too short... make it longer and stay up (NT) -- the dark spitter, 12:43:18 02/25/03 Tue
this wasnt too bad..nice lines..it could be a lil longer but its tight the way it is..keep doin you though..pretty nice drop right here yo...piece kid.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Do Wheel Chair People Get On Roller Coasterz? Or They Cant Cuz Dey Aint Tall Enough?, 12:59:52 02/25/03 Tue
spector?..isnt he a mortal combat character?..haha ur gay (NT) -- 3 Dollars, 15:36:33 02/25/03 Tue
keystyle -- profaci_aka_kazz_tha_untouchable, 23:25:40 02/24/03 Mon
Man im sick of kids thinking they get hated on cuz they white.. Most everyone in here is white.. Umm i wont read more cuz its in paragraph form.. Fix that and repost.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 02:56:39 02/25/03 Tue
keep it up -- black 4 poun, 10:34:12 02/25/03 Tue
post in bars...keep workin at it...all your best lines are mad cliche (NT) -- Vision, 10:55:58 02/25/03 Tue
Slug, vest, chest, I heard it all before sorry not feelin it (NT) -- Spector, 12:30:19 02/25/03 Tue
ummm... to simple... elevate this or you wont survive in here (NT) -- the dark spitter, 12:46:01 02/25/03 Tue
Thats weak they don't hate you cause your white they hate you cause you suck -- dlaster, 15:12:02 02/25/03 Tue
Last shit ima do befor i go. gunna try to get a deal. ha! if i don't i'll come back here check it out -- Serial, 19:44:18 02/24/03 Mon
You need alot of work......One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil, 19:51:00 02/24/03 Mon
THE START WAS OFF.. KINDA WORDED BORING. (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:52:21 02/24/03 Mon
U SUCK -- DLASTER, 20:26:03 02/24/03 Mon
my niggaz right.......you succ fat donkey kong dicc (NT) -- droop, 21:28:08 02/24/03 Mon
U SUCK -- In$aiN, 14:43:56 02/25/03 Tue
SOME REAL SHIT (took 1 hour to write Quite tight) -- DLASTER AKA THE FUGITIVE from New Zealand, 21:52:41 02/24/03 Mon
cool -- white Knight, 22:52:19 02/24/03 Mon
tight bars, keep elevatin, paaaaaaazzzzzeee (NT) -- profaci_aka_kazz_tha_untouchable, 23:27:37 02/24/03 Mon
This was kinda nice.. You're honest to yourself, i really like that.. Stay on that path, and just work up your skills.. Im also glad to see you're willing to put some time and effort into it.. No one gets better without that... (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 02:59:02 02/25/03 Tue
nice -- black 4 poun, 10:37:55 02/25/03 Tue
nice -- black 4 poun, 10:40:24 02/25/03 Tue
swords pretty much summed it up, not much i can say....keep writin though (NT) -- Vision, 10:59:02 02/25/03 Tue
This is alright, good to see you spent your time on your work. stay up! (NT) -- Spector, 12:33:45 02/25/03 Tue
this was just my kind of drop... no flaws in my perspective... nice piece (NT) -- the dark spitter, 12:49:38 02/25/03 Tue
Main Loop Presents: Attack of the 50 ft. Beats - pt. 2 "Astronaut Hell" -- ===||Swords--->, 02:55:02 02/25/03 Tue
Is this beat up for grabs????? Cause I'm working on another audio today should be finished by this after noon if I get a beat soon (NT) -- Lyrikil, 08:59:09 02/25/03 Tue
how can u almost be done with an audio if u looking for a beat?? lmaoo..gonna do a warchild and record ur voice and throw the beat over it? (NT) -- D-luSioNaL...Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Wonder How You Would Pronounce WheelChair backwards..., 09:26:42 02/25/03 Tue
naH MAN...i DIDN'T SAY i WAS ALMOST DONE.....I said I'm working on a new one..and if I find the right beat ..it'll be done by this after noon... (NT) -- Lyrikil, 09:45:03 02/25/03 Tue
beat was pretty nice..kinda like smooth and mellow..some shyt to chilly chill 2 lol..not something i would use...but nonetheless..its pretty nice..no offense lyrikil..but this doesnt sound like something u should use..doesnt match up wit ur voice and style..watch u say something stupid for me being HONEST..cuz remember..u dont beef with anyone who gives u criticism right?..now dat i think of it..this is like some beat from like the original shaft soundtrack lolol.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Is There Any WheelChairs On Ebay??, 09:31:02 02/25/03 Tue
Actually...All I was gonna say is thanks for the tip and I'll take it into consideration...cause you might be right...and why is it you feel you have to be an ass all the time??? (NT) -- Lyrikil, 09:48:55 02/25/03 Tue
i just say wat i feel..not TRYIN to be an ass...i say wats on my mind..dont like holding things in i guess..i guess its up to the person on how to take it... (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Why do Wheelchair People Wear SHoes?, 10:10:01 02/25/03 Tue
peep -- Lyrikil...sorry for cluttering up you post Swords, 10:30:24 02/25/03 Tue
yea this kinda tight...dont think i would use either, but it sound like something similar shit pharcyde's been on (NT) -- Vision, 10:49:41 02/25/03 Tue
Sorry I can't hear it, computer must be fucked up (NT) -- Spector, 12:28:01 02/25/03 Tue
New Audio.....Link inside.....Peep and Critique....One Hun'ed -- Lyrikil, 19:48:27 02/24/03 Mon
SORRY CAN'T PEEP AUDIO'S MY EARS IS PLUGGED DO TO A DOWNER! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:54:07 02/24/03 Mon
didnt work kid.....and probably wont even BE in the city till friday because of classes...and that just visiting this female on pulaski....Oooo "K town" (NT) -- Vis......FIX THAT LINK....whats ya email again?, 11:15:25 02/25/03 Tue
The link works...I just went to it....hahha K-town...if you see twista fat ass ask him what happened to psycodrama....lol...it's lyrikil@hotmail.com (NT) -- Lyrikil, 11:18:30 02/25/03 Tue
tried to open it in windows media.....cause thats all there is on this comp and it said invalid file.....iono......what DID happen to psychodrama...they was tight (NT) -- Vision, 11:31:13 02/25/03 Tue
I have no idea ...last I heard was when young buck and Syde.went to suave house Twista got mad and dissed them...I'm bout to put it on the sound click link above...give me bout five minutes...wassup with a collab since I can do audios now(for a limited time only..lol). (NT) -- Lyrikil, 11:38:06 02/25/03 Tue
ITS......................whateva (NT) -- Vis, 11:39:35 02/25/03 Tue
it's up there.... (NT) -- Lyrikil, 11:46:57 02/25/03 Tue
A OLDEN VENT.. SPACE TRIPS SENT FROM OPTICAL TENTS, PATHOLOGIST FLEE THE MOMENT AND LEAVE THE GIST OF DOMINANCE IN MEANS OF TEXT, FLEX THIS PRINT AND TIP THE WAITERS AND DODGE THE DEBATORS, CROSS THE TABLES AND LEAVE SCRATCHES ON THE LOOSE FADER! -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:50:31 02/24/03 Mon
your shaolin is very strong but channel your massacre on someone or something! thats how i think you could do tha damn thang--ghost (NT) -- droop a.k.a mossburg a.k.a the profit (leavin tri-athletes exhausted), 21:26:07 02/24/03 Mon
wasn't feelin it..flow wuz nice but wasn't feelin it (NT) -- profaci_aka_kazz_tha_untouchable, 23:34:41 02/24/03 Mon
HAHA.. This was dope.. Very nice... flow was wierd in the beginning but i caught it later.. Some good battle shit.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 03:04:42 02/25/03 Tue
i agree wit swords.couldnt catch a flow in the beginning but den i picked it up..some dope lines...a few of dem had me rollin 2 haha...nice shyt as usual.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I..How Come No Shaolin Movies Had Wheel Chair Fighters??, 09:39:27 02/25/03 Tue
yo good shit for real...this one of the very few times i caught the flow all the way through except onnnnnnn..um....one or two lines...the mushrooms line had me like, damn, its like that? liked the archetype line and how it ran into the next...there are a couple lines in here you could have reworded, like that second line sound to me like it coulda been worded better than what it was....but i still got the idea (NT) -- Vision, 11:24:33 02/25/03 Tue
PEEP THIS I NEED FEED BACK -- black 4 poun, 10:46:27 02/25/03 Tue
droopyloc poke ya hoes throat wit magnum coats!!! -- aka,mossburg, 21:21:01 02/24/03 Mon
flow was real nice.. dope drop man! (NT) -- Warpath "The scorned soul of ELOHEIM!", 21:47:41 02/24/03 Mon
nice try -- White Knight, 22:02:32 02/24/03 Mon
Loved it...U got flow playa...keep tha shit up... (NT) -- profaci_aka_kazz_tha_untouchable, 23:31:09 02/24/03 Mon
Hmm i dunno u got potential i guess.. I still aint feeing the drugs n thugs thing on the net... (NT) -- ===||Swords-->, 03:00:50 02/25/03 Tue
keep it up -- black 4 poun, 10:44:35 02/25/03 Tue
3 min freestyle (peep) -- 4 poun, 11:35:41 02/24/03 Mon
yo...u are so amazingly wack..kid why bother posting this..and twice for that matter..a 3 min freestyle on gun clapping bullshiiiiiet lmao..yo ur wack kid...go run off a cliff and scream "i wanna be a toys r us kid" on the way down..hahah fukkin beecho.. (NT) -- ull never fukkin guess..and u dont wanna fukkin know...buhahaha, 13:11:03 02/24/03 Mon
hahahahahahahahahahh..i know who u r ..hahahaha..holy shyt...cant believe ur back bwhahahaah (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.i..Just Bough Christopher Reeves WheelChair on Ebay, 13:15:10 02/24/03 Mon
i stopped reading when you spelled KNEE..."nee"..:shakes head::...another person who needs a new hobby..go play basketball at ur local boyz and girls club or something.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Waitin For Christopher Reeves To Throw First Pitch At A Baseball Game.., 15:24:40 02/24/03 Mon
i stopped reading after he spelled "pound" wrong in his name which is after a form of european currency. what a true fukkin ass clown..yo get a triple double for me at that club to dawg.. (NT) -- 3 yin..or whatever chinese money is called, 15:31:35 02/24/03 Mon
This is ridiculous....you need to stop watching so much TV!!!....No matter what advice someone gives you...keep doing you....I could tell you to try out different sets of rhyme schemes, rhyme patterns, word usage, wordplay....WORD PLACEMENT....all sorts of different directions to take when it comes to lyricism...BUT DO YOU....THAT'S ALL YOU NEED TO KNOW...Keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�.....the nerve of you kids...., 16:11:16 02/24/03 Mon
hmm you either need to practice alot or you need to wait until real inspiriation hits you (did you force this or did it just come to you) (NT) -- nemesis, 16:32:29 02/24/03 Mon
LMAO @ you two.. Fuckin hilarious.. Who is he anyway? Kilwa? (NT) -- ===||Swords---->, 17:44:10 02/24/03 Mon
kilwa?!?!?!??!!??....hmmmm....maybe maybe not...i doubt hes prolly surfing or recording reruns for his new show doogie howser 3d, which should hit IMAX theatres real soon, well i dun wanna be wasting thread so ima shit on this crak head again, yo ur wack...haha (NT) -- Ted Debiasee (the money man, however the fuk u spell his name) cmon 4 lb lets form a crew me and you, whadda ya say beecho? we can jack "AM" be like "yo we ABZENT MONEY", 07:52:44 02/25/03 Tue
(((AUDIO))) Brand New! "VALKYRIE" Did this today.. I think its my best yet... -- ===||Swords--->, 17:39:01 02/24/03 Mon
i dont know if its ur mic or my speakers..but u sound weird lol..its like i cant understand most of the things u say unless i put headphones on or like put my ear next to the speakers and shyt lol..i cant critique this right now..i'll hit u up later on aim and let ya know wat i thought of it..gonna have to peep this later cuz i couldnt understand most of it .. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...can Wheelchair Kids Own bikes??, 18:34:16 02/24/03 Mon
It might be you.. Cuz i played this through my bro's $300 speakers and it sounded like i mixed the vocals too loud.. I thought my pronunciation was pretty good on this one though.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 23:04:13 02/24/03 Mon
my ears are cut off as of late sorry! (NT) -- Warpath "The scorned soul of ELOHEIM!", 19:33:18 02/24/03 Mon
Damn ...can I get one of these beats...lol..flow kinda reminds me of Kwali Talib mixed with ...Damn I cant even think of the cats name ...but this was ILL....This is bout the best Audio I've seen in the lounge in a while...One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil, 20:06:36 02/24/03 Mon
AN ALL-NEW POST........SEE IF YOU CAN FIND THE RHYME SCHEME...."One Man's Spirit" Part 4....Warning: h � k �-A-linguistics, Intrinsic Metaphors, And Hebraisms May Cause Mind-Stops...BE ADVISED BEFORE ENTERING... -- h � k �-A-g � �/|_ A \/ � � h...aka tH� � l e � h �� |� e � � � �| J�, 17:46:09 02/24/03 Mon
once again..sounds cool..just have fukin clue wat i read..how about rhyming from like the year 2003 rather den like 1637 A.D. and shyt lol..very few times have i understood ur post....its like gibberish but with ur wordplay it seems dope to read..just cant get no understanding of it..it makes me wonder wat type of beats u would use for this if u made this into audio..have some like zelda beats or something lol...keep doin u though yo.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL...Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Was there wheelchairs back in 1637 A.D.??, 18:39:15 02/24/03 Mon
u have like aim or yahoo messanger or something so u could explain ur shyt to me sometimes? lol.so i dont feel so lost..and i did read ur shyt even though the times of my reply to u and swords are close..i actually read urs first and then peeped swords..anywayz..let me know if u have aim or yahoo messenger..peace.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I..#1 Fan of Wheel Chair Rock Climbing.., 18:44:44 02/24/03 Mon
I AM separated from the generated hatred...............damn, peep! -- Warpath "The scorned soul of ELOHEIM!", 19:31:28 02/24/03 Mon
miss-quote.. my bad peep! -- Warpath, 19:40:15 02/24/03 Mon
I agree with Dlusional...your good with the word play but...it's like alot of the words you use aren't supposed to be used like that...and some of those words I'm not even sure the exist but I could be wrong but basically ..I dunno...I just don't be feeling it...keep doing you if it works for you..One Hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil, 20:01:00 02/24/03 Mon
Battle of the Boards -- F.I.A.B - Damien, 14:16:14 02/24/03 Mon
Battle of the Boards -- F.I.A.B - Damien, 14:24:33 02/24/03 Mon
Revamped even?.......My vote goes to "MyStA-ReE"....for that one line about syphillis....... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 15:49:35 02/24/03 Mon
ok good i dunno who i think won though but still good (NT) -- nemesis, 16:25:25 02/24/03 Mon
ok good i dunno who i think won though but still good (NT) -- nemesis, 16:26:42 02/24/03 Mon
Vote = Mysta - Rae (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 17:41:59 02/24/03 Mon
Mysta-Rae! (NT) -- Warpath "The scorned soul of ELOHEIM!", 19:36:02 02/24/03 Mon
i am kacc -- droop, 00:24:20 02/24/03 Mon
This was nice flow (NT) -- Young Aviator, 00:31:59 02/24/03 Mon
DAS TIGHT...BUT ILL STILL DROP BOMBS ON YA -- R.U.C, 04:47:03 02/24/03 Mon
this was honestly like some middle school rap shit..very weak shit..fuk was dat bout u droppin so many tracks people nickname u roller coaster? lmaooooo..wow dat was sad..change ur rap name..change ur style..change ur life..do something else wit it..cuz right now..ur a failure ... (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded.O.M.N.i...Replyin To This Sittin On A Wheel Chair..., 15:37:20 02/24/03 Mon
HAHA.. You are Kacc...caca...just cheesy.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 17:50:04 02/24/03 Mon
FO ENY OF YALL WEAK MC'S TO EN-V.....HAHAHAHA -- R.U.C.......YA THINK ITS TO SHORT SUC ON DEES...ITS SPOS TA BE, 04:38:39 02/24/03 Mon
umm...fuck outta here...ur wak...(NT) -- DiAtRiBe..feels sorry for u, 05:01:18 02/24/03 Mon
u r wack...ur a gay azz rapper...go design some drapes or something...take up a new hobby...try and get a fish drunk or something..ur wack..please stop TRYIN to be an emcee...damn back up dancer for richard simmon tapes.. (NT) -- D-luSioNaL Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Rollz With WheelChair Thugz..., 13:12:13 02/24/03 Mon
puahahahahahahahahahah -- eliooooooot, 15:05:30 02/24/03 Mon
U SUCK GIVE UP -- DLASTER, 15:24:17 02/24/03 Mon
Ummm....it's better to bring something original to the table...instead of disrespecting the art of lyricism with frangible concepts of subtle end-rhyme.....Try focusing on what you're actually trying to get across...make sure it's in a way that presents it differently than anyone else....Keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...� �� Hy�-�-tH�t�ca|/|_ u m i n a r i e �.....Hey Path, where are you?, 16:17:59 02/24/03 Mon
LMAO.. He rhymed "back" liek 3 times.. in a verse that was only like 10 lines long.. lol.. Better finish that plumbing school application.. (NT) -- ====||Swords--->, 17:47:20 02/24/03 Mon
3 min freestyle (peep) -- 4 poun, 11:35:40 02/24/03 Mon
why'd u post it twice? still whack dawg (NT) -- nemesis, 16:37:19 02/24/03 Mon
Nothin Nice Just Stupid Flow.... -- Young Aviator, 00:28:00 02/24/03 Mon
AAAAAAAA...YEA WHAT EVA B...U GOT FLOW -- R.U.C, 04:43:22 02/24/03 Mon
HOW THE FUCK YOU GOAN STEAL EMINEMS RHYMES, THAT IS THE WEAKEST SHIT YOU CAN DO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (NT) -- dip, 11:38:41 02/24/03 Mon
wow..this fool so wack..he couldnt put up his own wack rhymes..so he put someone else's...u could tell he peeps ohhla.com every once in a while...go stick ur foot in a toilet u ass inspector... (NT) -- D-luSioNaL...Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Leader of Wheel Chair Crime Prevention Unit.., 15:30:38 02/24/03 Mon
I hope Em burnt "his" rhymes when he wrote this.....HAHAHA.....Hey, it's not THAT hard to bring something new to your mind and showcasing the "mental work" to us....try it....Keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 16:22:18 02/24/03 Mon
My Question for God. "Will I ever be able to afford a decent car?" No Blueprint, I'm sorry...... -- Blueprint, 18:19:03 02/23/03 Sun
Yo this shit was tight. nice beat an everything. good rhymes didn't seem simple and shit man... it was just good keep it up -- Serial, 18:58:04 02/23/03 Sun
fuk u talkin bout "nice beat" ..there was no beat..u OBVIOUSLY didnt peep dis..go back to watching ur favorite show dat u rhyme over the theme song.."home and gardens" hahaha (NT) -- D-luSioNaL...Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I....Wheelchair Families Love Casino's cuz they always get to "roll", 15:55:27 02/24/03 Mon
yo this was iight...pretty decend in most parts....yo stay up (NT) -- NOFLOW...to battle is to battle, but to Rap is to SING..., 19:30:51 02/23/03 Sun
lmfaoooooooo@ur title..u just admitted ur broke lololol..out of all the questions to ask god..u ask him if u could finally afford a decent car..pawn ur pc or somethin for a down payment on a better car ..hahaha..sorry yo..just the wrong thing to put ... (NT) -- D-luSioNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Pawned My Bike To Get A New Wheel Chair.., 15:49:22 02/24/03 Mon
ILL-LITERATE NIGAS.. Straight imaginary, constant flow, True depth of Nonsense Fiction, to the pits of insanity tittled "ART OF MAGICAL WAR" feedback aint finished -- Noflow The un-finished, 19:48:08 02/23/03 Sun
okay????? -- droop, 21:33:08 02/23/03 Sun
yo this was weird..? it was good but the subject got me confused... keep rollin -- Serial, 21:40:06 02/23/03 Sun
Nice flow i like it (NT) -- Young Aviator, 00:40:13 02/24/03 Mon
TIGHT SONG B....FLOW IS DEF -- R.U.C, 04:49:40 02/24/03 Mon
i bet $20 dat u watched lord of the rings b4 writin this lol...this shyt was crazy...couldn't put it all together but it was definitely dope...sick multi's everywhere...i like how u use ur words...nice imagery in this...dunno y u put a chorus in it..?..fuk puttin it in verses...just make it one long ass verse...keep it up yo...1ne (NT) -- DiAtRiBe.., 05:07:55 02/24/03 Mon
Alright lets see if this shits "wack" -- Serial, 18:33:43 02/23/03 Sun
U R WACKED -- DLASTER, 18:44:35 02/23/03 Sun
LOL, that was hilarious. "so you left her thinking you'd be a good dad, couple years later your son's calling you a fag", Ahhh, I'm still dyin'. Anything that makes me laugh gets the stamp of approval. It would have been cool if you coupled up that Chevron line though ("handgun" is alright but you could probably do better). and that "believe it then I should do it" line sounds a lot like Eminem. (NT) -- Blueprint, 18:45:24 02/23/03 Sun
you trying to pull a EMINEM a kid whos dad left and gets famous and calls him a fag..bwahhaah (NT) -- NOFLOW..guess whos back...and here to stay...half this lounge...is real gay, 19:28:16 02/23/03 Sun
damn white boy!! -- droop, 21:29:00 02/23/03 Sun
U SUCK -- DLASTER, 22:24:55 02/23/03 Sun
it does sound like mnm stuff but it was funny!!! stay up (NT) -- Young Aviator, 00:35:31 02/24/03 Mon
YUK DOWN TO THE DUMPS WITH DAT YO!!! BOOOOTHIS MAN...BOOOOOOOOO (NT) -- R.U.C, 04:53:56 02/24/03 Mon
New comer -- Candy Co the Kidd, 23:04:04 02/23/03 Sun
CHEcK MY NEW AUDIO OUT. a small file. takes less than 5 mins to dl -- N'finite, 16:38:32 02/22/03 Sat
noT BAD SON, FLOW WAS FRESH AND CONTENET WAS NICE FROM WHAT PARTS i COULD HEAR, SOUND WAS IFF AT POINTS BE MORE COHERRANT WHEN U SPEAK OR MAYBE IT WAS THE PLAYBACK DISTORTED THIS WAS STRAIGHT KEEP WORKING IT SON peace (NT) -- PAt D.A.W.G, 19:38:40 02/22/03 Sat
First off, I don't think they were "hating" on the beat...they were simply telling you their opinion(I would say it's the truth)...IMO, I think you could put a little more enthusiasm into your delivery...hey, maybe it's just me...but it sounds like you're falling asleep in certain parts of the audio..if that's your steez, then do you...I just couldn't really get into it...keep on working at it...peace (NT) -- WHYMSICKAL, 23:03:21 02/22/03 Sat
link doesn't work... get a Soundclick account or somethin... and don't bitch about me not liking your beats... i'm not gonna give you props for making your own if they sound shit... not many artists make their own beats these days anyway... learn to accept critique and you'll elevate faster... (NT) -- Versetyle of Abzent Minded, 07:41:07 02/23/03 Sun
couldn't get this to come up. oh well. i'll try later and by the way why the fuck you gonna post some shit and ask people what they think then get upset when they critique it. keep your shit to yourself if you feel that subconcious. people are not gonna a (NT) -- starks, 11:29:06 02/23/03 Sun
fixed for peeps it dont work for -- N'finite, 21:27:06 02/23/03 Sun
Dem Feelings Left for Awhile and now I'm Back This shyt is real to me! -- Young Aviator, 17:41:55 02/23/03 Sun
This shows promise, would of liked it to be longer, "self" doesn't rhyme with "left". Good post, flow was on, and you stayed on track. Peace. (NT) -- Blueprint, 18:04:10 02/23/03 Sun
yea all around decent...but ya attitude and scheme was felt..but lyrics were iigh..keep postin one (NT) -- Noflow...BACK RECLAIM HIS THROWN.., 19:33:31 02/23/03 Sun
that shit is on point -- droop, 21:20:06 02/23/03 Sun
okay...im reloaded!!!!! -- droopy loco, 16:14:45 02/23/03 Sun
i don't know man has anybody ever told you your gangster styles played out. try being more creative.Concepts are key to extend the creative process and oh yeah reply to three or be deleted. Peace stay up (NT) -- starks, 16:32:27 02/23/03 Sun
I liked the flow, that line with "dump slugs" was cool. Think starks is right though- that mad at the world, down to kill anyone - gangster shit is wearing thin at this point. I don't think your going to say anything that hasn't been said before. If that's what your all about though, Good luck. (NT) -- Blueprint, 17:40:35 02/23/03 Sun
This shyt was ill -- Young Aviator, 17:46:41 02/23/03 Sun
it was IIGHT..BUT NIGAS IM BACK! (NT) -- NoFLOW infested with words to literally SPIT LYRICS, 19:35:55 02/23/03 Sun
The Nibiru Theory........( the answers lie within).........PEEP The creation of mankind and it's extinction in the same frame of mind!. -- Starks (the mouth of madness), 16:13:26 02/23/03 Sun
In the beginning - are you talking about Atlantis or somekind of Alien race that spawned humanity. They have said the next big natural disaster will come from a landslide in Europe that will send a 200 meter Tsunami towards the coast of North America. Anyways, there were some cool names in this piece, you should write something about just a couple of those people- to explain who they are. That'd be interesting. (NT) -- Blueprint, 17:46:42 02/23/03 Sun
Its was cool some of the parts in this post was tight for real!!! (NT) -- Young Aviator, 17:50:23 02/23/03 Sun
Its was cool some of the parts in this post was tight for real!!! (NT) -- Young Aviator, 17:51:30 02/23/03 Sun
Ha back again check it out -- Serial, 18:14:16 02/20/03 Thu
This was wack (NT) -- Maimus, 18:18:40 02/20/03 Thu
yea i agree....wack...try to think a little more..u didnt put much thought to this did u? (NT) -- styliztik,,,aka,,quote, 20:27:41 02/20/03 Thu
bACK 2 THE LAB MAN, THINK B4 U SPEAK .....PEACE (NT) -- PAT d.A.w.G., 21:24:59 02/20/03 Thu
Reply to three... (NT) -- Lyrikil..of..G3N@$yD3, 23:27:43 02/20/03 Thu
simple rhymes, rhymed the same words a lot (NT) -- dip, 11:38:29 02/21/03 Fri
you suck -- DLASTER, 17:12:45 02/23/03 Sun
What up lounge...Da AbZtRaKt AsSaSsiN presents: 'Now That I'm Gone'...just keyed this up, dunno if its been done before or not...all feedback is appreciated...enjoy! -- Versetyle Da AbZtRaKt AsSaSiN of Abzent Minded Inc., 17:00:39 02/15/03 Sat
Nice concept.....Whether you took your own life or not in the first line...I don't know, but the idea of being able to look back (and yes, you can when you leave this Earth) was well thought out....Sometimes, it's good to take a break from all the "multisyllabicism" and just let the subconscious speak for you...Keep this up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 17:38:55 02/15/03 Sat
this was dope, kinda reminded me of sixth sense, how he didnt know he was dead, but still lived life, well, the life he thought he was still in...but you flipped it nicely, i enjoyed this..stay up James...peace (NT) -- Essence....Abzent Minded, 19:20:04 02/15/03 Sat
GRIME (NT) -- HYGH, 03:52:57 02/16/03 Sun
DAYM nice real nice (NT) -- GoNzo the 16 year old boy wonder, 11:03:57 02/16/03 Sun
Dat was Hot -- ACE, 12:39:10 02/23/03 Sun
Just peep ...that's all...Just open the DAMN post...Not that post ...this post...that's it just press the button -- Lyrikil..of..G3N@$yD3, 00:30:02 02/22/03 Sat
The 33rd line is supposed to say..."Will cause me to drop more bombs than Gradius, " (NT) -- That's all enjoy, 00:59:21 02/22/03 Sat
This was alright some content was okay but I wasn't feeling the whole thing PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 11:14:40 02/22/03 Sat
nice rhyme scheeme -- N'finite, 17:22:30 02/22/03 Sat
nice post all around. sort of wandered off on this lyrically. word usage was on point. i liked this shit. peace (NT) -- starks, 11:55:55 02/23/03 Sun
Haven't been coming up wit a tight post lately heres a lil somethingkeystyle ta keep my grey matter moving.PEACE -- Pat D.A.W.G, 16:27:17 02/22/03 Sat
shits hot sons -- N'finite, 16:54:57 02/22/03 Sat
there were alot of ups and downs in this one D.A.W.G . but i'm feeling the majority of it for the most part. not your best post. keep it real son. i think your tryin to hard son. just open your mind and let it spill on the keyboard.peace Stay up! (NT) -- starks, 11:51:10 02/23/03 Sun
YOOOOOO... INTROVERT... peep the lyrics for that joint... and send me your verse... this beat is dope as frrrrruck. -- INTOX... anyone who wants to peep this, dont get frustrated if you cant stay with it in the beginning cause by the end your head will spin, 20:52:45 02/21/03 Fri
Holy shit...when is this audio coming in? (NT) -- WHYMSICKAL, 21:34:03 02/21/03 Fri
DAMN this was long as hell...some nice shit in here ...I'm interested in seeing how you gonna flow this...stay up ...one hun'ed (NT) -- Lyrikil..of..G3N@$yD3, 00:37:59 02/22/03 Sat
Ya right, I wasnt really feeling the 2nd and 3rd bars but the rest was pretty ill the end was nice.PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 16:34:56 02/22/03 Sat
just stop replying to this... all of your replies suck. nobody points out any parts that they liked or disliked or goes any deeper than "yeah this was nice. peace" for the most part... probably because you fucks don't even read anyone else's posts... you just need to give three replies so your wack bang bang shoot em up shit won't get deleted... peace to INTRO, SUNSET, Fly, Swordz, Hex, and whoever else ACTUALLY contributes to the creative process....i fart in everyone else's general direction! (NT) -- INTOX, 18:12:23 02/22/03 Sat
I hear what your saying bout people not cotributing to the process, but, you've got it man. The words are there, the message flows, I think your next step is to spit it on audio. I can't say that this or that part needs work. This is your thing. It's really good, take it to the next step, it's ready. "Yea, this was nice, peace." (NT) -- Blueprint, 01:03:20 02/23/03 Sun
"BITCH YOU DID ME SO WRONG, AND I DONT WANT TO GO ON, LIVING WITHOUT YOU!" I swear to GOD the worlds against me!! DAMN IT!!! -- Warpath "The scorned soul of ELOHEIM!", 21:39:05 02/14/03 Fri
REPLY -- C-WALT, 21:55:11 02/14/03 Fri
I dunno man.... I couldn't get into it....couldn't catch the rhyme easy so it sorta stopped me from readin further...kinda devide into the bars and all...cause the format is pretty intimidating....repost it or somethin and I'll try to finish it....peace (NT) -- Nakixem of Abzent Minded Ink of OMNI, 23:10:20 02/14/03 Fri
AYO MAN....get at me ASAP....hit me up at (wordy48214@yahoo.com).....lost your number when I got back from ATL....but I want you to come to one of the Binary shows Im doing.....hit me up man..Im worried about ya fam.....and by the looks of this post things aint goin too good for ya right now....it aint worth it man and I can only imagine how bad you gotta be feelin right now....hit me up..."but dont end up in some sh!t over some hips"...peace (NT) -- WORDSMITH aka FINALE, 16:21:15 02/17/03 Mon
i guess he could change the bar form but then it would lose impact, not gain it...this hard because all the emotion hits at once, rather than being parted out for gradual absorbance...i like the way it's organized, not only does it give that feeling of confusion and anger, chaotic, but it makes you read it more than once to catch the rhyme scheme so you catch more of the meaning in those extra readings...the topic's pretty crazy man...sorry to hear that shyt is such a jumble...can't say that i've been there...good luck (NT) -- Mental ILLness, 14:51:01 02/18/03 Tue
DAMN!!!...Things are going haywire between you and "the woman in your life"....I hope she didn't blame you for what happened close to a week and a half ago....Hey, keep those prayers up and just avoid contact with the heifer until things settle down....E-mail me if things get REALLY crazy.....You hear me???.....Keep up and stay up..... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�.....�� h��-o-thetical/|_uminary, 15:59:23 02/19/03 Wed
I guess I caught the gist of this... I thought I did at first, anyway, then the middle kinda fucked with me... seemed like you started off talking about your girl, then you suddenly flipped it and started talking to the dude she with now or whatever the situation is... then back to her? I still dont know what happened that got you so amped tho... she fucked some other dude, I got that. But she killed your kid? Now I'm lost... (NT) -- INTOX... oh, the rhyme scheme and coherency was hot, too... i never seen you use that type of scheme in text before. pz, 18:19:53 02/22/03 Sat
*****AUDIO!! MY DEBUT! CHECK ME OUT******thanks -- N'finite, 03:19:29 02/22/03 Sat
beat is horrible.. did you make that on your casio dogg?? intro/hook is corny, not feeling it... your flow is decent, needs to be louder tho... overall i dunno, its a starting point... get some better beats of MP3.com and make more tracks... over time you'll improve....peace (NT) -- Versetyle, 13:32:25 02/22/03 Sat
Ehhh, beat needs work lyrics were all right but content needs work PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.AW.G, 16:36:56 02/22/03 Sat

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