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Date Posted: 15:39:12 02/26/03 Wed
Author: the dark spitter aka vocab supreme
Author Host/IP: kala2.k12.hi.us / 165.248.247.132
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the dark spitter presents... diabolical formations.... peep this...

the worlds final pulse//
the worlds final breath//
nastradamus will havoc life and bring horrorful death//
surges of unwill testiments are writtin in text//
the devils outcome of creation of sin and mess//
his trick and trades twist the entrials out of order in the chest//
his grasps grips with holds similar to apacolypse when he rotates ya neck//
satins right hand man//
the devils advocate//
hell shows dark realms of devious ways that destroy the creation of man//
the creation of human will parish in piles of ash//
he doesent care of the juviniles he's bashed//
the devils horrorcore diabolical plans rip a hole in many acres of lands//
his powers slice through the earths crust and heated stratum//
the dark spitter fufills these rhymes leaving the weak batterd//
someone once told me that heavin is what you live in and hell is what you go through//
my time on earth has brung pain to my spirit like death from a 22//
intelligence layerd upon this topic as I bring forth diabolical subjects and devious rules//
watch as the devils spirit lingers in ya presense and uses ya brain as a puppet to use you like a number 2 pencil and mennipulate you//

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Ummm.....I felt parts in this.....the overall layout of the rhyme isn't that much of an "attention-getter"....I'm not knockin' your rhyme at all, I'm just stating the facts from my perspective....In my PERSONAL opinion, whenever it comes down to rhyming about the devil...be sure to bring a different aspect out....Everyone may not believe that a "Devil" exist, but a lot do...Some just don't know the many disguises he can utilize....keep up and stay up... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 16:21:21 02/26/03 Wed
hmm.. where you saying YOUR the devils advocate? -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 16:28:18 02/26/03 Wed
Shutt up Heks...critique the rhyme....review it from diff aspects... (NT) -- OV@KIL.....feel ya duhn.....I agree with heks about layout..but it's more than that, 17:26:36 02/26/03 Wed
Diabolical formations (ruined) -- Lil Lucky, 17:44:10 02/26/03 Wed
Diabolical formations (ruined) -- Lil Lucky, 17:45:58 02/26/03 Wed

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