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Date Posted: 17:59:06 02/02/03 Sun
Author: GoNzO
Author Host/IP: ACACD0ED.ipt.aol.com / 172.172.208.237
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Flow bout the "earth" my 3rd post

EARTH----by: GoNzO a.k.a. Kris Garcia
The world can be a harsh place to try to survive/
Women getting raped and the lil babies don�t grow up and thrive/
Were the young die and the elderly see their kin go under the earth/
Where careless teenagers have abortions to prevent birth/
A place where gangsters kill innocent bystanders/
Where Living in the slums is just another standard, of living/
A place were a way to gain success is sinning/
Committing crimes just to get something on the table/
A place where racism exist and nationality is just another label/
A place where bombs and guns are part of every day news/
A place where violence is a way to get amuse/
Where wars always break out just because of nationalism/
A place where the word �nigger� is a sign of racism/
A place where pain is some people�s only inspiration/
A place where priest fall for sexy hores and fall for the temptation/
This world has nempho�s of sex at the age of eleven/
This world is the middle passage for hell and heaven/

Now...
Is the devil winning in this world we call home/
Are we as people going through all this pain all alone?/
Where towers that show mightiness fall down and crumble/
Where people make fun of retardiness just cuz they handicapped and mumble/
Where people throw themselves out of buildings and commit suicide/
Where half of the people in prison is in there for homicide/
The earth is a place of life but also a place of death/
This place where your born into and u die hear with your last breath/
A place where emotion can make a good person turn into a killer/
A place where millionaires can come out of the street from being a drug dealer/
A place where hustling and scamming is a natural born instinct/
Will this place ever unite as one and become nsync/
Or is our race of the human doomed to become extinct?/
Cuz I�m hanging on a piece of thread that I call reality/
Stress on my brain, am I feeling insanity?/
Going crazy cuz people are confusing/
Seem like people enjoy destruction, seems to them amusing/
As life goes on people think they safe but that�s just because they are ignorant and impudent/
I wish the world would change cuz I�m sick of this predicament/

See even though im only 16 I really do understand. My thoughts about the earth, are viewd as if im a mature man.

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pretty decent post... got kinda annoying with the repetition but I understand that was your intention... I read the first portion word for word but browsed through the later.... keep building.. overall.. a 6.5 outta 10... peace (NT) -- MORBID ARMOR, 01:42:22 02/03/03 Mon
ha....this was simple n concise...u said ur points, kept ur flow and wouldve been able to put this to beat....nice... (NT) -- styliztik...aka...quote, 04:05:50 02/03/03 Mon
nice drop man...liked da flow...good message to it...seems a lil simple but it doesn't take away from it at all i think...put this into audio and you'll be onto something dope...keep it up (NT) -- DiAtRiBe, 04:38:49 02/03/03 Mon
it started out nice and kinda fell off...I lke the simplicity in which your lines connect, it's powerfull because it doesn't decieve...just a few weak lines and obvious ryhmes kinda watered it down to much for me and you might wanna check your flow on the fifith line...keep writing in this style. I like it, Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 11:41:59 02/03/03 Mon
This is good indeed.....I liked this.....Now, this post reminded me of a poetic-feel....Keep this up and stay up.....and continue to learn about the current events circulating our world..... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�...., 15:17:18 02/03/03 Mon

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