First part of something i hope to make into an audio soon. PEEP.........It's Called ''Mind Wanderer'' -- The Lounge Of Lyricism 2003

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Date Posted: 11:50:11 01/26/03 Sun
Author: Starks (the mind drifter) aka the mouth of madness
Author Host/IP: NoHost / 64.80.25.62
Subject: First part of something i hope to make into an audio soon. PEEP.........It's Called ''Mind Wanderer''

found cold and alone on the side of a deserted highway
started off on the right path hit an oil slick and slid sideways
with a fist full of soil pissed you�ve just witnessed my blind rage
a metaphor for how i�m caught up in this highly addictive rhyme craze
verbal imagery forged to be the epitomy of what hiphop lives to be
the blood in my veins pumps electricity to my brains main facility
where my mind works overtime producing fire spit capabilities
wired to a hybrid motor envisioning predated soliloquies
i was a normal kid once now i conduct experimental literature
born in the lost city of atlantis brandishing clearer mental pictures
wandering around aimlessly with a convoy of spiritual temple drifters
word intoxication in the form of lyrics more feared than your simple liquors
one sip split�s the oxygen cells in the brain and locks them in
the heart emit�s the beat for the ultimate battle between self you gatta win
i was taught one who cannot control his own thoughts will forever be lost
tossed between a realm of reality where insanity is like a stream crossed
wet feet on the other side yet the current could�nt take you
you�ve been blessed with another rhyme so pay homage and be thankful

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this was cool...the vocab was nice and I like the content but you say it's gonna be an audio and some of the lines look a lil long y'know ? like I don't see them fitting into the flow as much as others...but on paper it's nice... short but a real good read...peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 12:18:20 01/26/03 Sun
i liked reading this, though some lines i think just didnt flow but keep it up -- rusty, 12:45:30 01/26/03 Sun
I thought this was cool...if you'll be able to serve these long lines well in audio, then that is what's commendable...El-p has done it, but that's a different story...to ME, I've seen more glorification of your rhyming ability than mere mind staggering quotes which interests us more...but I won't hold you to that...good luck with the audio.. (NT) -- WHYMSICKAL, 19:00:08 01/26/03 Sun
this was aight...flow was cool, but ya lines was mad long had to read em faster than what they sounded to make em fit....well maybe thats just my flow, it might work for you...content was enjoyable enough, it kept my attention, good drop (NT) -- Vision, 16:17:50 01/27/03 Mon
Vision hit it on the nail.. I agree! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 19:18:55 01/27/03 Mon

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