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Date Posted: 01:24:06 12/04/05 Sun
Author: Patrick
Subject: Re: REVIEWS: Dane Cook 12/03/05
In reply to: Patrick Lonergan 's message, "REVIEWS: Dane Cook 12/03/05" on 10:35:27 12/03/05 Sat

Well, I thought I'd contribute some input as well, since I jotted down a few notes while going through all the material the past two days. Good material overall, I'd say head-to-head with the real show.

McDonald's
Theatre of the absurd as McDonald's tries to meet the needs of 21st Century citizens with such innovations as an indoor pool, squash tournaments and live entertainment. Excellent ante-upping straight to the end.

Monologue
I haven't previously seen Cook's routine (though he was hilarious in the real monologue), so it's hard to judge this one for accuracy. But not bad, the one-liners were well-done for the limited subject matter.

Weather Channel
Now that hurricane season is over, I weep at the thought of having to find alternate means of comedy inspiration. I'm with Jim that the Dennis the Menace section was unneeded, though I found that meteorologists were especially annoying this season with all their "clever" pop references for the hurricanes. Oops, and looks I forgot about lovely Rita, "sitting on a sofa with a sister or two."

Midnight Rambler
Nice debut piece from a new writer. Giving a would-be serial killer a hard time was a great premise. Great dialogue flow, the orgasm joke was unexpected but a nice zing.

Bad Judge of Character
Good exchanges between Dane and the clerk, as an innocent night's intentions snowball out of control. The court/jail sequence was a little rushed, with no lines for Darrell as the inmate, but I loved the surprise twists throughout. This one sentence stands out as a little awkward: "The DVD was not returned not rewinded!" Maybe it's just a tongue-twister.

Cramped Quarters
Interesting concept, and the physical comedy angle works, this would be a great one to watch on television. Another debut writer with some good ideas.

Shokakrotch
There's lot of great one-liners here, but it's incredibly lengthy for a commercial parody. Since it covers the topic of motivation from two different authority figure points-of-view, maybe it should be split as two halves and made into a recurring piece throughout the show (ie. cheapkids.net, Green & Fazio, etc.), as well as tightening the dialogue by saying more with less.

Weekend Update
We really laid one on this week, I thought this was our best WU of the season and a lot better than the tripe on the real show (well, in fairness, their commentaries were good). WU dropped the ball not joking about the 1,000th execution or the face transplant, so kudos to our guys for putting those together instead of worrying about Britney's visit to a psychic (WTF?) P.S. to J.P.: The "Girls Gone Ape" graphic was worth the price of admission alone!

Asexual Guy
Okay, but I would have nixed the "tune in next week" closer since it was too short to be noticed.

Steve
The idea is good, but could be sharpened. Side effects of Steve was a great touch.

Grammy
I liked that Billy and Grammy were in the mall at 4am, and he would have rather been anywhere else, but I had my hopes up for a finale with the off-screen gang members.

Frontier Timber
Whoo! Another lengthy (epic?) commercial parody. Great line alert: "If your husband gave a crap about 'ambience', he would have married your nephew Kevin instead of you." Great idea could easily adapt in sketch form.

Jury Duty 2
Why is George Bush suddenly the star of so many movie previews on SNY? It needs more examples of comedy. For instance, this descriptive passage: "(Fade to a montage of President Bush and his crazy antics)" What are the crazy antics? Don't make us imagine them for ourselves, describe some actual crazy antics: Bush does the Electric Boogaloo on the judge's desk, or Bush mimicks Three Stooges "Disorder in the Court" sequence. Don't just give us the paint-by-numbers version, but actually fill in the colors so we can see your vision.

Hilltop Gang
This one reads well and seems like it would truly come alive in an on-stage performance with its wild characters practically bursting through the screen.

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