Re: Fanfiction Theatre: The Passion of the Christ -- Saturday Night You Bull Sessions

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Date Posted: 07:32:35 05/06/04 Thu
Author: Jim Bevan
Subject: Re: Fanfiction Theatre: The Passion of the Christ
In reply to: Hillary 's message, "Fanfiction Theatre: The Passion of the Christ" on 18:49:05 05/03/04 Mon

Pretty good stuff, but here are a few recommendations. First, eliminate the whole "theater" format, no introdution or host, it's kind of lengthy and deters from the humor. Second, in the scene where Mary's hand flies to her mouth, maybe instead of crap she could say something lesser like "crud" or "dang", then apologize for her language and that she was "swearing like a Gomorrahn", or something of that nature. Third, when God is speaking to Mary from the sky, he asks her to remember the night at the club, yet she's still at the club that night. You need to do a segueway to perhaps a week later or something of that nature, when Mary's at her home. Also, unmarried woman's outfit doesn't seem to have a proper effect, try "batchelorette's outfit". Finally, if you remove the host (just my suggestion), perhaps you could end it back at the Judean Jive with God telling the bartender how he convinced Mary to keep the baby, then take it off from there. Anyway, these are just my ideas, it's some good stuff.

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