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Date Posted: 22:54:01 05/11/04 Tue
Author: CCS
Subject: the review curdles
In reply to: CCS 's message, "the review thickens" on 01:23:08 05/07/04 Fri

Still a few sketches to go... gotta go toss my laundry in the dryer. I now this is much belated, but better late than never. Snoop reviews forthcoming.

update - too many poor bush jokes. Can we not make him the punchline to everything? When a porn industry commentary leads to Bush you need to sit back and say, "Is it really that funny anymore?" The three stooges worked because all of them would hit each other. The hits were spread around to different targets, and they would get hit in various locales. It was funny. On the other hand, America's Funniest Home Videos just showed people getting hit in the crotch in similar ways time and time again. It wasn't funny. I'd like to take this moment to point out that a joke using an "Asked to comment..." style punchline should not end in a non-sequitur catchphrase. Watch: This week, Arnold Schwarzeneggar passed a resolution on California schooling. Asked to comment, the governator said, "Hasta la vista, baby." Ok, hopefully everyone sees why this makes no sense, and doesn't qualify as an actual punchline or joke. Someone here or there might laugh at a funny accent I put in, but it's just not a joke. There's no twist or laugh other than you expected my punchline to have something to do with my setup and it didn't. As for the commentaries, I just don't see why Jay-C is supposed to be funny. I guess some people like edgy stuff, but this pedophilia shtick is too much, especially since it almost seems to be endorsed by Tina and Jimmy as written. Spike TV is not about pedophiles, it's about full-grown women with large breasts. The Berry and Romijn commentary was as dispensible as most WU walk-on celebrities. Wow, I sound really bitter, I think I'll refrain from reviewing WU in the future if I find myself sounding this way.

fudge - this sketch is suffering from an overwhelming amount of "cute." The opening dialogue is filled with cotton candy phrases such as "blindy mcblindy" and "mister grouchy pants." This kind of opposes your core conflict, which is the daughter wanting to be able to do more adult things in terms of work rather than run a lemonade stand. Having her talk like a five year old to her dad just devolves the character. I think Jessie's dialogue is better when she's a tad caustic. Friend 3 also seems like a peppy kindergartener. Putting bodily fluids into lemonade has been done and done; I think you would have been better off sticking with the above conflict than attempting the gross outs because as written, it's just to cutesy for gross outs. I see you have an Adult Jessie and Boss listed in the credits, though not in the sketch. That probably means you had a better ending up your sleeve than the one you tacked - you should have gone with it I think. All in all, there was a good conflict set up with her father, but this got tossed aside as the rest was written to appeal to elementary school students. Possible All That material.

the jimmy fallon - heh, I got distracted halfway through by a song I know that actually includes the lyric "I can smell your armpits." Anyway, much as the concept of a sketch depicting teen girls lusting for the jimmy fallon chills me to the bone, this sketch was still well written with strong characterizations. I liked what you did with the characters, and the curveballs thrown at the end were very strong. I could carp on word choice here and there, and the devil's in the details, but this definitely stands as a funny, cohesive piece.

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the review just plain smells funny -- CCS, 16:33:40 05/13/04 Thu