<font color=red>NEW POST!!<font color=330099>......somethin i wrote out real quick this mornin.....<font color=white>"Yin and Yang"<font color=330099>.......any critique or feedback welcome......Enjoy! -- The Lounge Of Lyricism 2003

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Date Posted: 17:01:53 03/07/03 Fri
Author: J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm
Author Host/IP: 13-pool2.ras10.tnnas.alerondial.net / 206.148.181.13
Subject: NEW POST!!......somethin i wrote out real quick this mornin....."Yin and Yang".......any critique or feedback welcome......Enjoy!

hypocrit citizens...i'm sittin here listenin to impotent whisperin
christian men mentionin their faith in God's luv for his people
yet they're judgin their equals, cuz of somethin so evil as the stereotypes that they're stenciled in
how long til we get to when....ALL men, are better defined
by their efforts in life, not the pigment of their skin nor their perception of style
i question the trials, that our forefathers shinnied through
the many dues, that their struggles demand for the blood on their hands
yet the brotherhood of all man, disband, all of these plans simply to bid adieu...
to any progress of social relations i just hope for the day when any caucasion
is placed down on the Same level, as yellow black, brown and any other race of this nation
i pace in impatience as patients, are turned away from the clinics
cuz government funds are runnin insurance gimics...denyin the needs
of society's sheep, and the wealthy stay healthy cuz their pockets are lined wit the cheese
while lines of our seeds, stand in line for the cheese and the food, stamps and WIC
which proves that this land is sick, we can't even provide for the fams that exist
and the blasphemous writs, of the Constitution promise to us a place of equality
yet such blatant atrocity embodies the comradery of the way that we oughta be
it's so hard to see....all this hate, and pain, and the figuritive rain
that falls on the sands of time to swish it away...i just wish for the day
when we ARE fairly compared but i don't dare to get my hopes too high cuz of the yin and yang
meanin NO wrong?!..then NO right...to truly cherish the light you must experience night.

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This had some nice concepts the flow was a bit patch but it was still heat ......hey check mah post up top....cus I havea problem with your first 2 lines hahaha....nah its all love....PeAcE (NT) -- Eternal Student, 18:19:12 03/07/03 Fri
Homie i dont get the concept, but i think you got a lot of things do say... that ned to be heard... the flow was nice tough -- MARYTREMCEE, 19:37:09 03/07/03 Fri
i like tha shit! (NT) -- Darknodin, 22:29:03 03/07/03 Fri
truthfully i thought the concept was the weakest thing about this post...everything else, vocab, flow, etc was on point...but the whole race card and society card have been used more than punches involving the word "come/cum"...the post was well written, complex, just think you shud find some newer subject matter... (NT) -- XitiZeN, 01:58:43 03/08/03 Sat

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