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Date Posted: 13:30:16 02/27/03 Thu
Author: the dark spitter
Author Host/IP: kala2.k12.hi.us / 165.248.247.132
Subject: just a free written I wrote... to sharpen skills... peep and critisize

battle wise infantry/
the infanmy/
stays solid and still in me/
lyricaly/
batter emcees in degrees physically/
the being/
will enter a infinite dead state/
empyricaly/
rule the underground in a devious reign/
superipor pain/
interior maintains/
with leaking stians of contaminated blood/
collabrated vets spittenlike m-16 guns/
emcees run/
when the spitters presense stuns/
essents of nuns/
and catholic people leaves the lung numb/
never irritate my style/
with equnilence of beautiful flow of river like the nile/
by standing in spoiled piles/
buring the worlds identididy in a crumpled file/
buck wild/
with every miles I run times by 8/
times fate/
times the way I spit included with who I portray/
enslay/
those who ever oppose me/
encloseime/
in chambers with the dark that was to ever infinity/

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Replies:

not bad -- Begotten child, 14:59:16 02/27/03 Thu
Great free -- Lil' Lucky, 16:45:45 02/27/03 Thu
This was aiight...2 things thou...1..this is a keystyle not a freestyle...you don't write freestyle...2. a M-16 is a rifle not a gun..big difference...like I said this was aiight.. (NT) -- Lyrikil of G3n@$yD3, 18:47:46 02/27/03 Thu
naw man this was pretty dope man.. keep spitttin' peace! -- ELaSTiCs "The Loose canon of ELOHEIM!", 20:22:11 02/27/03 Thu
Not bad, i liked the first few bars but u said it was just ta sharpen up so stay up big manPEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 20:58:37 02/27/03 Thu
I was expecting a little more in terms of your lines cause this was pretty slim. It seems like you were writing something to spit outload. It was cool but short thats all. Peace (NT) -- ßråil:The√ísíóηárψ of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 23:54:22 02/27/03 Thu
fag -- c-dawg, 15:11:07 02/28/03 Fri

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