**SOME REAL LYRICAL SHYT NOT NO FAKE THUG SHIT DATS BEEN POSTED HERE LATELY..**PLEASE ONLY CRITIQUE FLOW,LYRICS,&DELIVERY.I KNOW MY MIC IS WACK & MY SOUNDCARD IS BLAH..JUST LOOKING 4 CRITIQUES ON WHAT I MENTIONED..SINCE DATS SOMETHING I COULD CONTROL ON MY OWN...ENTITLED.."MENTAL VISIONS"..LYRICS INCLUDED INSIDE...KINDA RUSHED THIS FOR SOME REASON..WANTED TO WORK ON OTHER BEATS ALREADY LOL -- The Lounge Of Lyricism 2003

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Date Posted: 16:05:01 02/28/03 Fri
Author: D-luSIoNaL..Abzent Minded/O.M.N.I...Fast and the Furious 3 will be based on wheelchair races..
Author Host/IP: cache-dh03.proxy.aol.com / 205.188.208.167
Subject: **SOME REAL LYRICAL SHYT NOT NO FAKE THUG SHIT DATS BEEN POSTED HERE LATELY..**PLEASE ONLY CRITIQUE FLOW,LYRICS,&DELIVERY.I KNOW MY MIC IS WACK & MY SOUNDCARD IS BLAH..JUST LOOKING 4 CRITIQUES ON WHAT I MENTIONED..SINCE DATS SOMETHING I COULD CONTROL ON MY OWN...ENTITLED.."MENTAL VISIONS"..LYRICS INCLUDED INSIDE...KINDA RUSHED THIS FOR SOME REASON..WANTED TO WORK ON OTHER BEATS ALREADY LOL

Beat Produced By:Noviss "Cold Front(East Coast Streets)
www.mp3.com/noviss

Lo Fi:
http://reeves.dmusic.com/music/stream/lofi/48618

Hi Fi:
http://reeves.dmusic.com/music/stream/hifi/48618

Lyrics:

closing my eyes,the sky is where i reach my demise,
pride inclines as each day i seem to grow wise.
streetfighter type,reality seperates truth from hype,
a lyrical soldier without any stripes.
many all-nighters fighting off the ghostwriters,
never turned to drugs to make the pain seem lighter.
prayin with backgrounds with preachers recitin,
broadning my horizons,
staying away from viruses and violence.
protecting yourself with armor,death has no honor,
buses out in israel filled with suicide bombers.
kids are too shy hiding talent,killers become addics,
scared and they hide weapons under a matress
where some youngsters are from if found wit a gun,
they better run and never turn out to have a loose tongue.
some of us throw more fits then ron artest,
the stress,
often leads to anger on your chest.
millions spent on war equipment made for killin,
terrorits acts represent religion,please god forgive 'em!
teach 'em a lesson?,politicians have odd expressions,
on how man's weapons take lives in just seconds.
more war on streets then in the middle east,
robbing stores to eat,
foster kids and real parents never seem to meet,
thats why to me,a life unanswered seems so unique,
that i could fukin hardly speak
giving sight to the blind,knowledge came with time,
blessed to never have seen one of my friends flatline.
born into series of questions,nearly two decades of blessin,
the essence of my possessions makes my heart spin.
mentals are double of einsteins IQ status,
often abandoned,more fear then terrorist acts causing havoc

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no offense... but this was horrible... never in a million years would this shit get any CEOs attention... I hope you intend on starting ya own record company and new form of music... probably named cRap... horrible (NT) -- Morbid Armor, 16:35:12 02/28/03 Fri
This computer won't allow me access...but from what I read in the lyrics...I would've enjoyed the accompaniment of a beat to it.....Keep this up.....Coming from me, your content seems somewhat "deep".....Don't take offense to that...I'm just stating my opinion....click the name for the e-mail you've been in want of lately.....Keep this up and stay up.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�......Do you have the new "Murs" album yet?......, 16:51:42 02/28/03 Fri
Forgive my stupidity.......now click.... (NT) -- h � k �/|_ A \/�, 17:20:31 02/28/03 Fri
ill wordplay and style is hype, feeling the flow and content alot, not bad work at all!1 (NT) -- slick vic low a.k.a. the lyrical leviathan, 20:00:07 02/28/03 Fri
BEAT was sick man.. lyrics was dope man.. the flow was kinda slow starting in energy.. topic was dope fit the beat well.. kinda sound like a Young sunset with a knowledge base-strickly for the purpose.. I enjoyed this.. what audio program did you use.. my cool-edit was a trail version.. so I can't make audios till I get a new program any ideas? "ONE! GET AT ME!" (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 21:03:52 02/28/03 Fri
Nice approach, my audio is on the fritz but this is just real wit the content. The intro was real nice wit the first bars. PEACE (NT) -- Pat D.A.W.G, 21:21:08 02/28/03 Fri
Flow is much improved.. Still a few lines here and there that you gotta rush.. Some of the syllables arent as clear as others.. Lyrics were nice.. Beat was ill.. nice selection.. not much else to say.. Good improvement.. (NT) -- ===||Swords--->, 00:12:13 03/01/03 Sat
This was a pretty tight audio...when you compare this to your first, MUCH improvement on the flow...I think you still have to pronounce some words better, but other than that...I just think you've elevated overall...I like the instrumental...some smooth shit...and you rode it pretty well...but what am I to say???..lol...can't wait for the new shit...keep on gradually improving and you'll prove to be up there real quick...dope shit..peace (NT) -- WHYMSICKAL, 01:11:51 03/01/03 Sat
YOUR FUCKIN DUMB -- A.K., 16:03:12 03/01/03 Sat

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