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Date Posted: 22:12:42 02/25/03 Tue
Author: INTOX
Author Host/IP: host127-179.student.udel.edu / 128.175.127.179
Subject: after your first album?? have you even dropped AN audio yet, let alone MANY audios, which most albums list as their key ingredients? Other than that... your rhymes have all been used before, as has your topic. Speaking of your topic, that little paragraph you wrote on top confirmed my beliefs on lots of ... well, I'll just stop there. Peep inside for some feedback on lines...
In reply to: Pat D.A.W.G 's message, "What up lounge been falling off a lil keystyle to the K.I.M" on 20:33:03 02/25/03 Tue

nouns and verbs stretch and extend so my words will reach.

will reach what? also, if you're going for imagery with the "stretch and extend"... here's a tip: have a point. (see? wordplay without even trying)

You won't catch me running wit the rest of these hip hop nerds/

Ok, hold up, hold up, hold up... let me tell you WHY we won't catch you running with any of those "hip hop nerds"... better yet, I'll let you tell yourself... it's because you have "NO FRIENDS TA KICK IT WITH"

cats making bounce hits for the honey but the taste is sour.

Tell that to Ludacris. You may have to scream it at him as he drives by you at 200 mph in his Lamborghini, with a big ass smile, getting dome from a dime. He's not complaining, while you stand at a traffic light selling flowers to stopped cars.

42 percent is weak and false rhyme schemes that we think is neat/

hahahaha... "Yo, so-and-so, that rhyme you just spit wasn't just dope... that shit was NEAT! NEAT-O! WOO!"

sending minds off cliffs to a colorful soulful abyss.

Ummmmm... huh?

running away from my fate ta elevate the times we chase.

don't worry about elevating the times you chase, whatever the fuck that means... focus on elevating your SKILLS! You're just... you're not good.

Now THAT'S feedback, motherfucker.

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  • dont piss me off bitch -- dlaster, 22:13:29 02/25/03 Tue




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