<font color=red>PRE-WRITTEN...<font color=beige>when you got 2 hr and 45 min classes....you tend to do things to keep your sanity...i been writing and this shit been coming out...here's a bit more length -- The Lounge Of Lyricism 2003

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Date Posted: 22:38:57 02/04/03 Tue
Author: Vision...Thrice Optics Abzent Minded of O.M.N.I.
Author Host/IP: spider-wk012.proxy.aol.com / 205.188.198.152
Subject: PRE-WRITTEN...when you got 2 hr and 45 min classes....you tend to do things to keep your sanity...i been writing and this shit been coming out...here's a bit more length

deep thought, sought for charisma my plots rot
within, dark abyss, heartless bliss upon mental block
cognitive blockage, suspended mindstate stuck in a blind stage
rage buils and boils down tormoil found shortly after
adjacent facin backwards towards the ground, life divorce me faster
caught in an undertoe of thoughts trapped and locked
sailors knot around the contents unwanted conscience
conscious to selective views elude the slyest detective and muse
elected and cued or hould i say perfected and brewed
for the inevitable trained for several encounters
local or federal but for worse or for better though
yet the clever grow wiser, intelligent for a wider
horizen of kings rising quicker tan screams of lightening
despite the despising, slanderous writing, dispicable coniving
im invincible when i dispense scripted prints or reciting
by and by see, i might be that of a warrior type breed
score your knife inside me and a see if a pint bleeds
but still i breath, i live, i see, my quill writes and still succeeds
keep enemies peace to see if they will show their teeth
but snarl or not and quarl or lack there of
you will neer be able to extract my love

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Man, I'm not sure exactly what your talking about, but I like it. "Undertow" is a good word. I'm going to steal that. Peace. (NT) -- Blueprint, 22:58:38 02/04/03 Tue
this was tight.. and longer.. lol.. keep it up man! (NT) -- Pathologist "The Catalyst of ELOHEIM!", 23:14:53 02/04/03 Tue
Tight joint I likes...aye you know they starting open mic at the Y on I think 111th ...gotta ask Ov@ to be sure but yeah every friday....holla atcha boi if you going...so you can see how G3N@$yD3 really gets down (NT) -- Lyrikil..of..G3N@$yD3, 01:23:24 02/05/03 Wed
not certain what it is you're saying either, but I rolled with it anyhow and it was nice ! The word connection was dope and it complemented the flow powerfully...nicest sounding flow I've read here for a while...Nice post. Peace (NT) -- ΜικΜαQ:TheΣxpressionist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 08:28:00 02/05/03 Wed
yo...nice shit Vis....gotta agree...i have no clue what it was really about...hahaha....but i was likin it for sure....flow was smooth as hell, nice balanced use of multi's, nice line connection like Mik said, excellent word usage...and nice way of flippin lines and switchin up rhyme scheme...i always like to see it when people remember to pay attention to those factors too.....keep this shit comin, peace! (NT)
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J£:The®ealist of Κa†a¢lÿzm, 10:21:56 02/05/03 Wed
- thanks for the replies...this was one of those posts that i was just lettin my thoughts go, but i couldnt necessarily put em in words EVERYONE could understand......but i understand it perfectly cause it came from me....sometimes it be like that (NT) -- Vis, 14:44:50 02/05/03 Wed

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