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Subject: Lancepaw or Tangle!

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Whiteye
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Date Posted: 20:01:54 07/11/03 Fri

Do the stories we post have to be Redwall fanfic? Because I'm writing a story that has an elf in it...And I wanted to see what people think. Is it alright to post it here?

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I dunno about Lancepaw, but I think the stories should be about anything! Where else could we post non-Redwall fantasy stories? (NT) Aiden Etil Ferriff 00:52:33 07/12/03 Sat

Ya, I guess you're right, but I might as well wait for their reply. They're the Fort owners. (NT) -- Whiteye, 01:46:17 07/12/03 Sat

((As a fort Elder I'll tell you what I think...from what I've seen you can post anything at all...because, after all, fort beasts wouldn't always just write about themselves. Go ahead and post it up)) (NT) Cori Curbob 12:47:30 07/13/03 Sun

K, thanks Cori! Look in for part of first chapter -- Whiteye, 18:05:17 07/13/03 Sun

Any good? (NT) -- Whiteye, 17:39:29 07/14/03 Mon

((Ooh, I like it! Keep going!)) (NT) Cori Curbob 11:15:45 07/15/03 Tue

Glad you like it, Cori! (sorry I cant post more right now, my brother is hogging the computer on which I have my book...He's obbsessed w/ the Sims game he gave me lol) (NT) -- Whiteye, 14:21:12 07/15/03 Tue

((LOL, my brother is obsessed with my copy as well, not to mention his brand new Star Wars Galaxies. *rolls eyes* Fortunately he gets up reeeeeal late...)) (NT) Cori Curbob 11:20:07 07/16/03 Wed

((LOL! Well, he's eating right now and I've gotten dressed and am ready for the day, so I have my computer back! For a while, anyways.)) Look in for last part of 1st chapter -- Whiteye, 13:59:07 07/16/03 Wed

2nd and 3rd chapters inside! -- Whiteye, 15:58:21 07/19/03 Sat

I like the story concept, except for the religon added into it. (NT) Wraith 00:48:38 07/20/03 Sun

**shrugs** Sorry, I was just posting here to ask y'all what you thought of the book I'm writing, so I'm not really trying to fit it to everyones needs. It's a Christian book, y' see. But I'm glad you like the rest of it! Next chapter inside -- Whiteye, 13:48:24 07/20/03 Sun

good so far seems like a mix between Lotr and the heritige of Shannara series (NT) Wraith 17:39:25 07/20/03 Sun

I love LOTR, never read Heratige of Shannara...I need to write more! Eeeee!! **runs off to write more** (NT) -- Whiteye, 14:03:14 07/22/03 Tue

Cool story.Though all that different languege stuff is confusing.Something tells I'll be no good in Spanish. (NT) Jordan the Wanderer 23:17:49 07/22/03 Tue

Lol thanks! The language is Elvish...that's 'cause she's an elf...so she speaks Elvish...Because all Elves speak that...Ug! I need to stop while I'm ahead! (NT) -- Whiteye, 23:47:52 07/22/03 Tue

I hate it when I do that!Ya start hitting yourself in the head after awhile. (NT) Jordan the Wanderer 09:13:34 07/23/03 Wed

My connection between your story and the heritage of shannara was the land of time in your story is very similar to an area where a magicla king lives(he lives in another dimension and enters the normal one at will to help people who further his causes and to defend his rivere in the normal world.) (NT) Wraith 23:17:10 07/23/03 Wed

I see...I still havent written more! (I've been busy this week) (NT) -- Whiteye, 14:02:04 07/24/03 Thu

YES! I wrote part of the next chapter. Inside -- Whiteye, 01:13:48 07/27/03 Sun

"Cool as soon as you are done with this story, I'm going to put it on my palm so I can read it when ever! so keep going!" (NT) -- PennyOhare, 02:45:16 07/27/03 Sun

lol thanks! (NT) -- Whiteye, 18:42:52 07/27/03 Sun

Welcome! -- Penny, 06:39:11 07/28/03 Mon

I wrote a little more...Inside -- Whiteye, 20:36:30 07/28/03 Mon

Very interesting! (NT) -- PennyOhare, 02:14:31 07/31/03 Thu

Thats really good. I like it keep going!!!! (NT) Freeda 07:46:39 07/29/03 Tue

Thanks! **rushes to Wod documents to write more** (NT) -- Whiteye, 15:18:13 07/29/03 Tue

Word* sorry! (NT) -- Whiteye, 20:48:27 07/29/03 Tue

Next part inside! -- Whiteye, 22:21:23 07/31/03 Thu

If it really stinks that much I'll stop. (NT) -- Whiteye, 19:22:26 08/01/03 Fri

No please keep going its getting interesting! I want to know if she will ever get out and and add... Dont stop! please go on I'm enjoying it. and if you have any time maybe you could read my story, my mother BreezeOhare is reading it right now! and Whiteye I love your story! (NT) -- PennyOhare, 02:22:51 08/02/03 Sat

Ok, whew! I'm glad someone still likes it! Next part inside -- Whiteye, 02:41:38 08/02/03 Sat

Hmmmm, interusting.... please keep going Whiteye! (NT) -- PennyOhare, 05:41:20 08/02/03 Sat

Aahhh!!! Don't stop there Whiteye! Oh the suspense!!!!!!! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 21:43:24 08/11/03 Mon

Keep writing Whiteye!!!!! (NT) Freeda 16:19:46 08/02/03 Sat

I'll write as much as I can! **winks** OOC: I'm going to Shyla's house in about 15 minutes, so I may not have time to write today. But I promise I will keep it up! As the great Brian Jacques says, 'As long as you keep reading, I will keep writing!' (NT) -- Whiteye, 18:10:23 08/02/03 Sat

Okay! have fun.... (NT) -- Pennyohare, 05:14:27 08/03/03 Sun

Sorry don't have much time to come on anymore. your story can be anything u like as long as it sticks to decency rules. (NT) Tangle 10:00:56 08/03/03 Sun

< Font color=Purple> Write Write Write!!!!!! < Font color=Purple> (NT) Freeda 14:50:23 08/03/03 Sun

Huh!! I hate it when that dosen't work. Ah well....... (NT) Freeda 14:52:02 08/03/03 Sun

Thanks, everyone! Inside for next part! -- Whiteye, 16:14:10 08/03/03 Sun

**Gasp** Keep going!!!!!!! (NT) Freeda 17:35:29 08/03/03 Sun

Yay! I'm so glad you like it! I'll go write right now! I'm telling it to another friend of mine, so I'd better hurry so I can satisfy y'all! (Grrrr that post time limit!) (NT) -- Whiteye, 18:00:28 08/03/03 Sun

Im so sorry I havent been posting, but my parents have been restricting my internet time lately. Inside! -- Whiteye, 23:06:59 08/08/03 Fri

Gosh...does it really stink that much? I'll stop then. (NT) -- Whiteye, 18:19:02 08/10/03 Sun

Noooo!!!! Whiteye keep going!!! Pleeasse??? OOC: One quick question, which elvish language are ye usin'? Quenya or Sindarin? (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 21:51:19 08/11/03 Mon

Thanks! Ok I'll write somemore! OOC: Mainly Quenya, a little of my own as well. (NT) -- Whiteye, 22:42:58 08/11/03 Mon

Please do Whiteye! It's a great story. OOC: I see...I was wonderin' about that. Do you speak it fluently? (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 02:33:00 08/12/03 Tue

Ok! Thanks, Tacroy! OOC: Yeah. I dont speak in fluently, but enough to get by. I use a dictionary now and then. And you? (NT) -- Whiteye, 22:39:06 08/12/03 Tue

OOC: Same here, though I don't know Quenya, only Sindarin. I'm working on congegating the verbs, but it's really challenging. (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 23:22:18 08/12/03 Tue

OOC: Boy do I ever know what you mean...Its a tough language, but I love it! (NT) -- Whiteye, 23:58:04 08/12/03 Tue

OK Im sorry that this has to be so short, but I dont have much time. Here ya go -- Whiteye, 00:05:50 08/13/03 Wed

wow....so suspensful! It's great!!! For a second there, I thought Jeniva was dead! I was like, "Nooo!!!! Not Jeniva!!!!!!!" Then, when I found out that she lived, I breathed a sigh of relief. :) OOC: It is a hard language to learn, but it's very rewarding. Do you have the Red Book? It helped me a lot. (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 01:36:18 08/13/03 Wed

**grins** You like it? Great! You're extremely talented with your stories as well! Yeah, I liked Jeniva (and was going to make her dead, but as you will find out later, she's the last surviving changer in the Land.) OOC: No I don't, but if you recommend it I'll see what I can find (NT) -- Whiteye, 19:29:59 08/13/03 Wed

OOC: yeah, it helps a lot with congegating the verbs and it gives you a list of nouns with their elvish translations. BIC: Thanks for the compliment, but I find that you're work is ten times better than mine :) That's good with Jeniva....I like her a lot! Keep writing!!! KEEP WRITING!!!!! (NT) -- Your humble admirer, Tacroy Bladefire, 01:58:22 08/14/03 Thu

OOC: Kewl I'll have to check it out! Oh, by the way, IRL I'm blushing at your compliments BIC: Oh come on! My writing isn't THAT good. Yeah Jeniva is really neat. WAIT! I just got an idea for my story...**mischevious grin** Well, no time to write right now, but I will keep it up! (NT) -- Whiteye, 14:11:31 08/14/03 Thu

Oh yes, your writing is wonderful! Look how many people think so!!! Yeah!!!!!! KEEP IT UP! KEEP IT UP! (NT) -- Your friend, Tacroy Bladefire, 19:03:40 08/14/03 Thu

**blushes** Awwww you're so nice, Tacroy! I'll write right now! Inside (Tacroy this part you will love) -- Whiteye, 20:01:25 08/14/03 Thu

BIC: Whiteye! You're so nice! I'm speechless.....Thank you! Thank you so much Whiteye! THANK YOU!!!!! You are such an excellent writer, it is an honor to have one of your characters named after me.....Thank you so much (NT) -- Your speechless, breathless, and extremely happy friend who waits eargerly for the next part, Tacroy Bladefire, 20:30:43 08/14/03 Thu

**grins** I'm the one who's nice? Well I'm glad you're pleased. I am honored that I have such a persistent reader! I really am flattered by all of your compliments, and so I will write more! I hope you like the future for Tacroy which you will find out later **mischevious grin** Inside (Oh BTW, is your name pronounced Tack-roy or Tase-roy or what?) -- Whiteye, 01:04:23 08/15/03 Fri

Heeeheee!! I burst out laughing when I read this. Whiteye, you have a wonderful gift because it takes quite a lot to make me laugh just as I did when I read this. heeheee....*Wipes away tears of mirth* This is excellent! MORE!!!!! OOC: It's Tack-roy, you got it right on first try! Really, Whiteye, I'm very honored that you named a character after me. Once again. Thank you and really, I was laughing very, very hard. (NT) -- Your fan, Tacroy Bladefire, 01:12:19 08/15/03 Fri

(WOW! We're on at the same time!) BIC: Really? You liked it? Thanks so much! It feels great to have a fan. I'll write right away! OOC: Really, it was no problem. It was the least I could do for you (NT) -- Whiteye, 01:15:21 08/15/03 Fri

OOC: BTW, do you have AIM? If so, I could talk to you there (NT) -- Whiteye, 01:19:45 08/15/03 Fri

OOC: Well I have to go now, but I promise I will get more up soon! Tomorrow I should be able to. (NT) -- Whiteye, 01:25:41 08/15/03 Fri

YEAH! TOMMAROW!!!! MORE TOMMAROW!!!! Keep it up Whiteye, your story is awsome! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 04:39:53 08/15/03 Fri

Inside for next! (You are so sweet, Tacroy) -- Whiteye, 15:11:59 08/15/03 Fri

Oh NOOOOO!!!! Not the Galen!!!!!!!! Oh the suspense Whiteye!!!!! I froze too when they heard the hoofbeats!! Keep going please!!! I beg of you, oh fabulous writer, indulge your humble fan with more! (NT) -- The suspense is killing me, master storyteller, please write more, your friend who wishes he could write as well as you, Tacroy Bladefire, 17:45:49 08/15/03 Fri

**laughs** Awwwwww you're so so sweet, Tacroy! You can definatelly write as well as I can, if not better, so dont worry about it. Lol I promise to get more up soon, but I g2g. Thanks for the comments! (NT) -- The extremely pleased and blushing Whiteye, 21:08:39 08/15/03 Fri

Now you're the one who's making me blush! You can write far better than I ever can/will and both you and I know it. It is an excellent story and I eargerly wait for more!!!! (NT) -- Blushing, Tacroy Bladefire, 23:46:02 08/15/03 Fri

Oh, Tacroy! **grins shyly** Do you have AIM? That way I could talk to you about some idea's I had...If you do, my AIM s/n is WhiteyeDobieLuvr (NT) -- Whiteye, 15:39:52 08/16/03 Sat

*shakes is head sadly* No, I don't have AIM....Unfortunately not.... (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 17:44:34 08/16/03 Sat

**juts out her lower lip** Awwww...Well you can download it free from AIM.com...oh well. Anyways, I need to get more story up, dont I! (NT) -- Whiteye, 23:47:20 08/17/03 Sun

I'll try to download it, but my computer's acting up so I don't know if I'll be succesful. And yes! You do need to write more! MORE!!!!! Heehee! I've been waiting on the edge of my seat for the next part!!!! Please, MORE!!!!! (NT) -- Your fan, Tacroy Bladefire, 01:02:23 08/18/03 Mon

**laughs** I'll see what I can do, oh good and faithful fan. Maybe later today (NT) -- Whiteye, 19:49:52 08/18/03 Mon

ok! Next inside (didnt I promise I would get some up today?) -- Whiteye, 23:26:16 08/18/03 Mon

How could that bore me, Queen of Writers? That was excellent! But now, once again, I'm left waiting on the edge of my seat in anxiety! And once again, I beg you, Write MORE!!!! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 23:37:59 08/18/03 Mon

**laughs** Well I hope I'm not using too cheesy action. I will write soon! Hey, anyone know how to move the messages over? (NT) -- Whiteye, 01:42:29 08/19/03 Tue

Cheesy? No way!!!!! My writing uses cheesy action! Yours is above and beyond cheesy. It's more along the lines of...fabulous, wonderful, exciting, suspensful. And yes, anyone who could move this over,it would be greatly appreciated, because I haven't a clue how to do it! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 02:16:03 08/19/03 Tue

Well I'm glad you enjoy it! Let me try something. I hope this works (NT) -- Whiteye, 13:21:49 08/19/03 Tue

Did it work? .......I don't think so. Grrr, I really don't like it when this board does this. (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 19:15:47 08/19/03 Tue

Grrrrrrr me too! I know it's not much (at ALL) , but here's the next part -- Whiteye, 20:11:37 08/19/03 Tue

Yeah!!! Go Ferriff!!!! YEAH!!!!!!! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 20:40:56 08/19/03 Tue

OH MY GOSH!!!! THAT ROX SO BAD!!!! I've been busy wid my site and other stuff, so I haven't been able to read stuff here, but I had some time FINALLY so I came here and saw you were writing something so.. But man, thix rox! It kicks butt! Your so talented Whiteye! I was reading the story as fast as I could cause I wanted to know what happened SO bad! Keep on writing! (NT) -- Shade, 05:06:28 08/27/03 Wed

hey whiteye!! Great story! You'vegot a really good talent for writing y'know!(hey...I told u that b 4! I can remember things good again! yessssssssssssssssssss!!!) (NT) Evaleen 19:12:29 08/20/03 Wed

oh yea, I'm sorry I wasn't on to die from anxiety to read the rest with the others!! (NT) Evaleen 20:58:22 08/20/03 Wed

I agree with Evaleen. You have a definate talent! KEEP GOING!!!!!!! Please, continue! (NT) -- Your fan, Tacroy Bladefire, 23:10:20 08/20/03 Wed

(thnx for moving it over Ev!) **grins and blushes** Awwww y'all are just saying that!!! I'll try to write more soon, but hold on, got to go write down some Scripture verses for my friends! ** runs off quickly** (NT) -- Whiteye, 23:44:34 08/20/03 Wed

"MORE!" ;) ;) ;) lol. OOC: sry I haven't posted in a while I've busy :P (NT) Shyla 23:52:17 08/20/03 Wed

We're not just sayin' that Whiteye!!! I think I speak for everyone who posted when I say, we really, really, really, really, like your story!!!!!!!! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 01:05:44 08/21/03 Thu

**wrings her slender hands IRL** Welllll...ok I'm glad y'all like it then. I will write soon! **sits nervously down, hoping to make them laugh with her attempts at humor.** (NT) -- Whiteye, and as Tacroy dubbed her, hopeful Queen of Writers, 01:21:25 08/21/03 Thu

Heehee...Please do write soon Whiteye, Queen of Writers, speaker of elvish language, and wonderful friend. (NT) -- One of your biggest fans, Tacroy Bladefire, 19:46:12 08/21/03 Thu

**grins** Awwwww you're making me blush! You are truly a 'kallo'. (Quenya...means nobleman) Oh yes! There was something I wanted to give you...**rumages through a haversack and finaly find it. She hands him a URL**http://www.dragons-inn.org/Ifreann/eng_elf.html Enjoy! (NT) -- Whiteye, 21:12:55 08/21/03 Thu

*gasps* wow! Wot an awesome sight! Incredible! WOW!!!! Truely, Whiteye, you are a "turinqui" (is that Queyna? It means Queen...) of all Writers. (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 23:01:26 08/21/03 Thu

**grins** I like it too! Anyway, Ive written more, but not enough to post right now. (NT) -- Whiteye, 15:40:50 08/22/03 Fri

PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!! ANY LITTLE BIT WOULD BE GOOD!!!!!! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 20:04:05 08/22/03 Fri

**laughs** ok, ok! Inside -- Whiteye, 21:00:27 08/22/03 Fri

Heehee! YEAH!!! You wrote! Yeah! It was excellent! Yeah! YEAH! YEAH! YEAH! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 02:35:53 08/23/03 Sat

**laughs** Glad you enjoy it! Next part will be up soon (NT) -- Whiteye, 15:09:29 08/23/03 Sat

HURRY UP AND WRITE IIIITTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!!AHHHHHHHHHHHH**Is banging head on a redwall book irl**Hurry hurry hurry hurry hurry!!! **Clapping hands and biting fingernail at the same time(that kinda hurts.....)** (NT) EVALEEN THE DIENG OF ANTICIPATION 21:09:45 08/23/03 Sat

AYE!!! I AGREE!!!!! WRITE MORE!!!!! AND SOOOOOOOONNNNN!!!!!! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 22:46:14 08/23/03 Sat

**falls out of her comp chair giggling** Oh y'all! I have typers cramp...I may just have to shut down the story all together...**evil grin** (NT) -- Whiteye, 17:54:24 08/24/03 Sun

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!! *Drops onto his knees and clasping, his hands, begs* NOOOOOOO!!! PLEASE!!!!!!! I BEG OF THEE!!!!!!!!!!!! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 18:13:09 08/24/03 Sun

((Ooops. That was supposed to read, *clasping his PAWS* Oh well. (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 18:19:59 08/24/03 Sun

((Oh well I said comp chair u can say hands **grins**)) **thinks** Hmmm...should I? Should I not. **tosses up her hands** How can I resist! It shall go on. (NT) -- Whiteye, 19:45:04 08/24/03 Sun

Yes!!!! YEAH!!! I don't even know how you could think of stopping such a wonderful story! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 20:48:03 08/24/03 Sun

Lol!!! Well I better get writing, eh? (NT) -- Whiteye, 22:08:32 08/25/03 Mon

Yes you better!!!!!! Otherwise I might go crazy from anticipation!!!!!!!!!! lol (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 01:01:34 08/26/03 Tue

**Slapping head(IRL)** HURRY HURRY HURRY HURRY!!!!!!! (NT) Evaleen 01:52:27 08/26/03 Tue

AHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!1 write more write more write more!!!!! its such a good story!! your such a good writer!!!! i wish i could write like that!!!! (NT) Scout 06:01:26 08/26/03 Tue

**grins** So many fans, so many ideas, so little time. ** S-l-o-w-l-y begins to c-r-e-e-p over to her typing desk. (NT) -- Whiteye who is extremely happy and in teasing mood right now, 20:27:54 08/26/03 Tue

Ooohhh!!! If I could, I'd push you over to the desk, sit you down, and let you up again until you wrote a bunch!!!!! (NT) -- Tacroy the Eager, 03:27:11 08/27/03 Wed

**grins** Well sorry, Im going to be gone for a week. Be back next thursday, please keep this post up! (NT) -- Whiteye, 19:18:00 08/27/03 Wed

Noooooo!!!! Whiteye! You can't go!!!!!! NOOOOOOOO!!!!!!! (NT) -- Tacroy the sad, 03:12:23 08/28/03 Thu

You have talent, Whiteye. I've been enjoying this story. Do you have any tips on writing? I want to be an author. (NT) Jadestar Iceblade 12:10:10 08/31/03 Sun

Oh, I forgot to mention. I think it's really cool that you're posting a Christian story here. I'm a Christian too. (NT) Jadestar Iceblade 12:32:37 08/31/03 Sun

Keepin' this up for you whiteye, like I promised. :) (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 19:14:59 09/06/03 Sat

**smiles weakly, IRL her face pale and drawn** Thanks, Jadestar! I'm glad to have a fellow Christian here. My tip of the day right now is to always describe about what you are typing, and try to keep the reader interested. Whoops...Scuse me...Hold on a second...** Runs to the bathroom and violently coughs and blows her nose.** Sorry...I'm sick...Or else I'd write more...I wont be on a lot until I'm better. Thanks Tacroy, continue to do so, please. (NT) -- Whiteye, 23:43:11 09/06/03 Sat

Aaww!!! Poor you! I'm sorry that you're sick Whiteye, I know what it feels like to have a really nasty cold....Well, I'm missing you and your writings a whole lot, and of course I shall keep this post up...I hope you feel better soon. (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 00:51:53 09/07/03 Sun

**smiles vaguely** Thanks Tacroy. I'll see what I can do...IRL I'm having a coughing fit so I gotta get my water... (NT) -- Whiteye, 21:04:55 09/07/03 Sun

I have more, but my computer is going funky, so I'll post it later (NT) -- Whiteye, 00:48:08 09/10/03 Wed

Please, hurry! PLEASE!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!!!PPPPPPPLLLLLLLLEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSEEEE!!! (NT) -- Tacroy the Desperate, 03:00:39 09/11/03 Thu

**laughs** I'll try it right now. Inside! (I wrote a lot to make up for lost time, but sorry for slight repeatings at the beginning, its a little hard to keep track) -- Whiteye, 21:30:00 09/11/03 Thu

Whiteye, that was wonderful! And the song! And! And! Well, everything was perfect! Wow! Wow! WOW!!! *Laughs* It was sooo good. I'm glad you're writing again, Queen of Writers. (NT) -- Tacroy (Swiftwind) Bladefire *heehee, you even put my last name. :)*, 06:44:15 09/12/03 Fri

**grins widely** Thanks, Tacroy! I'm so glad you like it. Yes, I have given you a middle name, and I used your last name. Twas the least I could do for my most enthusiastic fan! I'll try to write more, but at the moment Im about to leave for Mexican food (mmmmmmmmm :D) (NT) -- Whiteye, 23:39:34 09/12/03 Fri

Mmmm..mexican food....Thanks for the name and using me as a char in your story. I'm sooo deeply honored, words cannot express it. I wish time really did fly, so that I could reead the next part of your story. (NT) -- Your delighted, exhilarated fan who wishes he could write as well as you., 03:17:15 09/13/03 Sat

**laughs** Really, it's no problem at all. I wish time flew as well, so I could see how my story ends. Inside for a sneak preview of an idea I have -- Whiteye, 15:42:16 09/13/03 Sat

I love it!!! That's really, really, smart! That's awesome!!!! KEEP GOING!! (NT) -- Tacroy the Eager, 17:46:43 09/13/03 Sat

**smiles** Im glad you like it so much! Im typing...Im typing... (NT) -- Whiteye, 19:01:39 09/13/03 Sat

GO! GO! Move those fingers faster! One, two. One, two. (NT) -- Tacroy the Eager, 20:24:00 09/13/03 Sat

Eeeeee I'm trying! **feels like she's in bootcamp** Im still recovering from my cold (and Shroudy {my bro} has caught it), so I don't have that much time to work! (NT) -- Whiteye, 18:58:31 09/14/03 Sun

*Grins guiltily* That's Ok...Take your time, I didn't mean to rush you. I hope you and your brother feel better soon. (NT) -- Tacroy Swiftwind Bladefire, 20:45:32 09/14/03 Sun

**smiles** Thanks, Tacroy! I'll try to work, I hope maybe someday my story can be published :) It's probably not good enough, though. :( (NT) -- Whiteye, 21:52:27 09/14/03 Sun

Hey! Never say that Whiteye! I'll wager that it will be!!! It's certainly good enough!!!! I'd buy a copy of it, though I don't now if the opinion of a novice writer actually matters. ;) (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 22:30:45 09/14/03 Sun

**grins** (hey we're on at the same time! You really need AIM) I hope it can be published...I hope it's good enough! Lol, Im glad I have a few supporters...(a great site where Im a leader: www.geocities.com/totalyr2) (NT) -- Whiteye, 22:53:07 09/14/03 Sun

(I know I need AIM...*wistful sigh*) I'm sure you'll publish it one day....KEEP GOING PLEASE! PLEASE! (NT) -- Tacroy Fanfire, 01:22:36 09/15/03 Mon

(Yeah you do...Its free at www.AIM.com, and you dont have to have AOL to download it) Im glad you think so, Tacroy! I will as soon as I can, promise. (NT) -- Whiteye, 16:24:27 09/15/03 Mon

(I know, but my parent's forbid me to download anything...*sighs*) Your promise is good enough for me, Queen of Writers. (NT) -- Tacroy Swiftwind Bladefire, 04:40:41 09/16/03 Tue

Hi Whiteye I'm finally back on the boards, looks like you have developed a writing repotuare that rivals Dakkan's. Also looks like you wrote quite a bit that I need to catch up on, I tell you what I think of it in a few days. (NT) -- Wraith, 05:25:33 09/16/03 Tue

(Awww...Maybe you could say you would just be talking to me?) Lol thanks, Im glad. And thank YOU, Wraith! I'm not so sure I rival Dakkan yet...And yes, I've been a busy bee lately. Thanks for the info! (NT) -- Whiteye, 15:05:24 09/16/03 Tue
Your idea of the story is really good so far, but the different parts lack a definitive flow from one to the next. Your on the right track though, keep up the good work I want to find out what happens next. (NT) -- Wraith the literary critic, 06:18:39 09/17/03 Wed

Keep Writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (NT) Freeda 18:34:45 09/16/03 Tue

OOC: Thanks for moving this over! BIC: **grins** I will I will I will!!! I'll try to write as fast as I can... (NT) -- Whiteye, 01:14:43 09/17/03 Wed

Yeah! Keep writing! Your fans and friends are behind you all the way! (NT) -- Tacroy Swiftwind Bladefire, 06:40:02 09/17/03 Wed

**hugs all her supporters** Thanks, y'all! I'm sorry I havent been writing too much lately :( (NT) -- Whiteye, 13:45:32 09/17/03 Wed

If look over to the right if the post you can read my comments on your writing, good so far... (NT) -- Wraith, 16:10:48 09/17/03 Wed

Im not trying for a definative flow, Wraith ;-) I'm just trying to present the story line and get it going. Each part usually takes place either somewhere else or a little forward into the future. (NT) -- Whiteye, 23:39:40 09/17/03 Wed

And I think you're doing a great job of it!!! KEEP GOING! (NT) -- Tacroy Swiftwind Bladefire, 03:09:41 09/18/03 Thu

**bows** Thankee kindly, Tacroy! ( I choreographed a song I wrote :D Arent you proud of me) (NT) -- Whiteye, 00:31:12 09/19/03 Fri

Ouch, the critic was beaten by author's creative liscense (NT) -- Wraith, 01:20:38 09/19/03 Fri

Heehee....nice job with the dance whiteye....what song is it to? (NT) -- Tacroy Swiftwind Bladefire, 03:46:24 09/19/03 Fri

**laughs** Don't worry, Wraith. You'll pinpoint me somewhere! And Tacroy, it was to Hadha's song, believe it or not (NT) -- Whiteye, 01:07:50 09/20/03 Sat

Really? Wow! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 02:03:57 09/20/03 Sat
Yes...I shall have to find something to pinpoint,**looks deppressed and frustrated**, but your one victory is do disa pointing (NT) -- Wraith, 02:59:01 09/20/03 Sat

**laughs again, feeling very happy** Thanks, Tacroy! And cheer up, Wraith, I'm not perfect, you'll find something over my one victory! (NT) -- Whiteye, 16:57:05 09/20/03 Sat

Hey, Ive written somemore, but its not that much. Do you want it? (NT) -- Whiteye, 00:47:58 09/23/03 Tue

YES!!! YES!!!! YYYYEEEEESSSS!!!!! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 05:40:34 09/23/03 Tue

**grins** But it's only a few sentances, are you sure? I'll try and write more, but I skinned my elbow the other day and it's a little harder to type (NT) -- Whiteye, 15:03:48 09/23/03 Tue

Yes!!! please?! (NT) -- Guess who?, 03:53:15 09/24/03 Wed

Inside for the next part! (I'm guessing either Tacroy or Evaleen! Or Shyla...Hmm...) -- Whiteye, 13:41:42 09/24/03 Wed

Kep Writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Don't hold me in suspense!!!!!!!!!! (NT) Freeda 13:54:11 09/24/03 Wed

**grins** You really think its good? (NT) -- Whiteye, 21:51:17 09/24/03 Wed

Yes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It's fab!!! (NT) Freeda 19:00:41 09/25/03 Thu

**grins** Thanks! You don't think it's boring?!?!?!? I think it's awfully...horrible. I mean, it has pretty much no plot, its pretty boring...Predictable ** starts to get depressed** (NT) -- Whiteye, 20:52:43 09/25/03 Thu

Unfortunatly I have to agree with you ther whiteye, it doesn't have much of a plot, (score one fo the critic were now tied), But don't get depressed and give up on writing, sure you can come up with something. (NT) -- Wraith, 21:06:31 09/25/03 Thu

Maybe it doesn't have a plot YET, but knowing you, it will and when you have it, it will be wonderful!! PLEASE don't stop!!!!! PLease? (NT) -- Tacroy Swiftwind Bladefire, 03:39:39 09/26/03 Fri

**smiles half heartedly** (NT) -- Whiteye, 00:11:55 09/27/03 Sat

Cummon Whiteye!? Please don't give up....For me? (NT) -- Tacroy Swifwind Bladefire, 18:28:36 09/27/03 Sat

The only way to improve upon something is to try, come on you can continue this story and link all together, you just have to try. (NT) Wraith 19:52:49 09/27/03 Sat

Please keep writing, Whiteye, it's excellent. (NT) Jadestar Iceblade 20:27:56 09/27/03 Sat

**shrugs** Maybe... (NT) -- Whiteye, 00:08:09 09/28/03 Sun

PPPPPPPLEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEE???!!!!!!! (NT) -- Tacroy the Sad, 20:55:12 09/28/03 Sun

**sighs** I dunno (NT) -- Whiteye the suddenly exhausted, 21:44:48 09/28/03 Sun

Come on Whiteeye, you can do it, If you don't tacroy is going to flood the fourm with tears;( (NT) -- Wraith, 23:50:00 09/28/03 Sun

You bet!!!! Ready? WAAAHHHHAAAA?! Please Whiteye!! PLEASE!!! WAAHAHAHA!!!!!!!! *Takes a deep breath, ready to plunge into more tears* (NT) -- Tacroy the Wailer :), 01:24:46 09/29/03 Mon

**sighs** I don't know yet, Im considering. (NT) -- Whiteye, 01:55:37 09/30/03 Tue

*Makes a sad face and walks slowly over to a far corner, where he sits dejectedly* (NT) -- Tacroy the sad, 05:34:22 09/30/03 Tue

**grins brightly** YAY! Everything's working out again and I'm not depressed anymore. (I finally found my lost newspaper articles **yay**) Sorry for any repeatation, I'm still slightly confused as to where I left off. -- Whiteye, 19:55:45 10/03/03 Fri

*Tacroy runs over grinning and leaping for joy* YEAH! WHITEYE WROTE MORE!!! (NT) -- Tacroy the HAPPY, 03:43:28 10/04/03 Sat

Keep going Whiteye!!!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE (NT) ?????? Guess 12:47:52 10/04/03 Sat

**smiles** Ok, ok, I wrote a bit more inside. (yay I published my newspaper articles! Im happy today) -- Whiteye, 15:14:00 10/04/03 Sat

MORE! (NT) Freeda 15:12:19 10/06/03 Mon

YAY! MORE! YAY! *leaps for joy* (NT) -- Tacroy Swiftwind Bladefire, 03:52:52 10/08/03 Wed

YAAAAAAAAAAy!!!!!!! writers block has been conquered! (NT) -- Wraith, 05:31:23 10/08/03 Wed

**grins** yay! Fans! (NT) -- Whiteye, 19:01:54 10/08/03 Wed

Inside for a bit! -- Whiteye, 19:33:30 10/08/03 Wed

**smiles sadly** No one likes anymore, huh? Ok... (NT) -- Whiteye, 15:07:08 10/10/03 Fri

'Course we like it still! I've been extreamly busy latley with barley any time to post. I've been gettin ready to lead my Boy Scout troop in a council wide competition (aprox 1000 scouts will be praticipatong and as senior patrol leader I'm supposed to make sure our troop does well.) When I get back on Monday I want to see another entry in your story, keep writting!!!! (NT) -- Wraith, 16:53:50 10/10/03 Fri

**smiles** Ok...maybe (NT) -- Whiteye, 18:35:03 10/10/03 Fri

What do ya mean maybe!!!!!!???? You can't stop!! Not now when it's getting so good...I don't want to have to cry again!!!!! (NT) -- Tacroy Swiftwind Bladefire, 03:32:46 10/11/03 Sat

Wite mowa Whiteye. Pweeeeeeeezeeeeeeee!!!!!!! (NT) Freeda 14:27:29 10/11/03 Sat

Ok, ok, I'll write more tomorrow, see why not now at my Dreamfur post (Im too lazy to type it again). But I'm glad you enjoy my writing! It's nothing, really. I kinda just write what comes to mind! (DARN THAT POST TIME LIMIT) (NT) -- Whiteye, 17:14:11 10/11/03 Sat

OOC: This has nothing to do with your GREAT story Whiteye, but it the only place where I knew you would see this message: Did you forget? we were having a battle? but it's kind of one-sided with only me posting. (NT) Shyla the growing impatient 23:12:32 10/15/03 Wed

**clap clap clap clap** moooooore!! really good good! AHHHHH MORE!!(i really do love that name...Arion. It's so pretty lol ;D ) (NT) Evaleen 21:30:54 10/16/03 Thu

**grins widely** Only you and I understand that joke, Ev! **giggles** Although yes, why do you think I called her Arion? It has a nice ring to it (NT) -- Whiteye, 22:57:59 10/16/03 Thu

yup! Only u and I will unnerstand that joke yup yup yup! (NT) Ev 01:43:43 10/17/03 Fri

Do y'all want more? I will have to go beside myself more now to write this because of tons of advanced stuff in my schoolwork, the newspaper, and having about and hour and a half of free time, (but tomorrow's Saturday, which elliminates one of those, so I'll try) (NT) -- Whiteye, 01:58:05 10/18/03 Sat

OOC: OMG! I forgot to say it yesterday! :O "MORE!" (NT) Shyla 03:47:27 10/18/03 Sat

Quick question, Whiteye: Please don't let this interfere with your wonderful plot, as I am but the humblest of mortals who cannot understand your great designs, but I thought they were being attacked by Hephaestus and now she's becoming a journalist? I don't understand. (NT) Jade da confused 12:40:47 10/19/03 Sun

Lol don't worry, I'm a humble mortal too, and this is hardly a great design, but anyways, the answer to your question: They are getting attacked by Hephaestus (wow you spelled it correctly! I applaude you, not many can), but what's an elf to do while H. is plotting? Sit around and panic? And the Land of Ages is hardly a warrior land, everyone's peaceful and has no idea how to fight, so gathering an army is out of the question. Right now, Arion is going to see if her mysterious articles (mwahaha you'll read them in the next chapter) will get into the paper. (NT) -- Whiteye, 17:57:56 10/19/03 Sun

LET"S HEAR IT!!! COME ON WHITEYE!!!!!! PLEASE!!!!! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 18:49:54 10/19/03 Sun

ok, ok, inside! -- Whiteye, 00:26:12 10/20/03 Mon

Heehee! *Laughs hard* That was wonderful!!!!! MORE! (NT) -- Tacroy Bladefire, 05:46:05 10/20/03 Mon

*smiles* Thanks! I'll write more later today, probably. (NT) -- Whiteye, 17:33:28 10/20/03 Mon

I'll probably start a new post of this story now, it's getting huge (NT) -- Whiteye, 19:18:52 10/22/03 Wed

**Confused by story** (NT) -- Wraith, 17:28:15 10/24/03 Fri

**hurt by comment** (NT) -- Whiteye, 11:38:28 10/25/03 Sat

It's okay, Whiteye, KEEP WRITING! (NT) Jade 14:57:02 10/25/03 Sat

ok, I will :,) When I do write more, I'll make a new post; howzat? (NT) -- Whiteye, 12:48:55 10/26/03 Sun